DM-Brendan+U

Grade: 8** **Siblings: Two Sisters** Favorite Sports: Hockey, Soccer Hobbies:Biking, Skiing, hanging with friends. Favorite TV show: Family Guy, watching Hockey Games Feel free to upload your podcast or a picture if you like.
 * Hi, my name is Brendan U[[image:flag_2.jpg width="306" height="225"]]
 * Best Holiday: Christmas **
 * Birth Month: April **
 * Career Goals: video game programer,multimedia designer **
 * Favorite Band(s): Avenged Seven Fold, Rob Zombie, Metallica, Disturbed **
 * Favorite Food: Pizza **
 * Favorite Munchies: all dressed chips **
 * Favorite soft drink: sprite **
 * Favorite Subject: science **
 * Pet Peeve: People Repeating things too many times. **
 * Pets: Dog **

yes there is mistakes i will fix later




 * //The boy who did everything//**

===As Trevor and his parents are at the hospital they are all in shock as they are told that Trevor's cancer is spreading too fast and theres nothing they can do to slow it down, or make it stop. This means Trevor has two weeks before he dies.===

===It was hard to accept the fact that he would leave the earth forever in two weeks, so he had to do something that he would be remembered for. Trevor talked with his parents and they decided to go to Las Vegas for a little while.===

===Once in Las Vegas Trevor Knew that he had to do as much as he possibly could and first on his list was skydiving. Trevor had always wanted to know what it would be like to fly and this was his chance. 3400 feet in the air the green light came on which signaled that this was his destination as he moved his goggles into place he dove out of the plane, and witnessed something he would never forget.===

===Trevor landed exactley in the place he was supposed too and quickly his father ran up to him. As his father came Trevor's heart was pounding and he could feel the adrenaline pumping through his system. His father asked him if he was ok, Trevor smiled and Said "One down, nineteen more to go.===

===next on the list was a famous attraction not for the faint of heart overall it was a simple task, you had to take a motorcycle hit a jump off the side of the Grand Canyon, and as you plumet to the ground below you pull your parachute. As Trevor suited up pulled on his parachute, and reved up the bike he got ready to do something that rarely people do but he had only one week and five days to accomplish the inevitable. Trevor sped off on the motorcylce heading towards the jump that would send him into the heart of The Grand Canyon. Trevor hits the jump and freefalls for 500 feet then pulls his chute. Trevor is now gliding through the sky looking at the sun thinking about his life. Before he knows it his feet are on the ground and he is heading back to the Hotel for a good nights rest. In the silence of night he whispers " Two down, eighteen more to go."===

===The next week and a half Trevor accomplishes everything imaginable he rides in a hot air balloon, swims with sharks, wins a pie eating contest, becomes the first person to do a backflip on a scooter, and many many more crazy mind boggling things he was a true hero in his familys eyes. Unfortunatly Trevor only accomplished nineteen out of the twenty things on his list. He was an incredible boy who never let anything get to him even when death was staring him in the face, he never gave up. His determination fueled his drive to stay alive just a little while more.===

===Back where he was born in Indiana, his family arranged his funeral, all his family and friends were to partake in the service. As the casket was lifted into the ground and covered with soil. people left in silence with tissues in hand. Until all that was left was a lone tombstone with the name Trevor Doughty on it, and underneath the name it read The Boy Who Did Everything.===


 * //FIN//**



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5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?