SO-Marissa+M.

**Introduction**
My name is Marissa Moore I have 1 brother and 1 sister and they are like a devil that I will never forget. I like to be in school because I learn new things everyday. My favorite things to do out side of school are sleep in and, and go out of town on an weekend. When it is a weekday I like to do homework to get good grades. My favorote sports are volleyball,and basketball because when I started school my coach for volleyball was very nice and evertime we won a game we got to have a party or go out and eat. Basketball was very wierd because my coach was Mrs.Grams from my other school she was the best coach ever!!!!!! For some reason I think I act wierd but my friends think Iam hyper all the time.That is all about me!!!!!!!!!!

Little Miss Perfect By: Marissa Moore Millions of stars surround the beauty of a girl named Sally. Sally has long dark brown hair. She always wanted to be in a beauty pageant but her mom would not let her be in one because she has her own her own TV Show the show was called ‘Sally and her Best Friends. Sally made a degree in a beauty pageant if only her mom let her be in one. Sally went to mall and told all of her friends that her mom wouldn’t let her go to the pagent. The popular girls walked towards them and acted like they were “Little Miss Perfect” because they are rich and buy expensive things. Countless hours passed and they just went shopping like they had millions of dollars. They went into the photo booth and took outrages pictures. Some of them didn’t turn out. They all went home and sally got really great news her mom told her that she can be in a pageant if she only knew the limits of on beauty. Sally’s heart sunk she made a really devastated face… 5 seconds later she ran up to her room and she had little party she called up her friends on 3-way and asked them if they wanted to have a sleepover they all said yes but penny said no because she was sick and they all raced over Brooke, Ashley, Jerri, and sally all had cell phones and they stayed up for a long time and prank called people. They all made to much noise and Sally’s mom made the settle down and watch movies instead. The next morning sally had to get up early and order clothes and practice the interview for the pageant. All of Sally’s friends had to leave. It was Sunday morning and sally and her mom had to get ready for the mall and get new outfits for the pageant. “Mom thanks for taking your time to put me in a beauty pageant this year” “No problem but it is a lot of work you know that right?” When they got home sally and her mom had to get ready to pack sally was really excited to go away for the weekend but she was nerves to get far away from her nightmare brother Brandon is the not the same age as sally. Sally is 13 years old and Brandon is 15-years-old. When Brandon heard that sally was leaving for the weekend he was really happy. Brandon and his dad went out for pizza, Fun America, and gone to the movies. “Hey dad is you glad that the girls are gone?” “Yes I’m so happy to get away from your mother.” After they the left the movie store Brandon and his dad went home to watch the movies one of the funny movies were “Norbit” they laughed really loud their neighbors could hear them. So they went to sleep and enjoyed the night without the girls. When the girls were on the way to the mall went to eat out but sally was sleeping so her mom Jennifer had to order for her. The next morning they got to their hotel to unpack and practice for her interview but her mom gave her a break and took her swimming. Sally made a new friend her name was jenny. They stayed in the same hotel but jenny got really sick so her mom took her home and tried to make her better but Jennifer came over and brought jenny some of her homemade tea. So sally and her mom Jennifer gave jenny the tea and went back to their room and went to sleep for the BIG day. The next morning sally had to get her hair and make-up done and her lesson before the whole show started. Sally had to get up really early like it was time for school but it was just for heer t.v show. To be continuted...

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