SO-Monica+H.

**Introduction:**
Hi my name is Monica i have a pet, a dog, Maizy and she is a standard poodle. i am a soccer player i play in the best leage. i love my friends to the moon & back jk! ha ha i am into books and love waffles. Obessed with shopping! i also love animails and getting my nails done. i have a brother named Micheal! he has fire red hair... ew right! Purple is my favorite color along with coffe color cauze i just luve coffe! i also *LOVE* <3 <3 hearts! he he... hope you like my story ha not!

** LOL ** ** By Monica Hart ** “I am a sad excuse for a superhero, see I am not bat man, super man, or some big shot super that relaxes at their beach-side homes all day, no I am just Marshall,” Marshall thought fiercely to himself, “ I have no parents, or family, but I do have one relation, Sophia my fiancée.” Sophia is a superhero too, she is a big name, and she is the Hulk. She looks much different and better then the original hulk, her dad. You might have thought Hulk is a guy, well aren’t you a sexist. //She// is the hulk, with an extra power, she can (if in the need to) shoot Fresco out of her pinkies for reasons unknown. “Hi sweetheart,” Sophia texted from her slick blackberry, only the popular supers got them and I had yet to become one. “Hey darling,” I texted back from my cheap prepaid; I could replace it with a blackberry but it would feel wrong. I don’t know why Sophia wants to be with me, ever since the rain of the super heroes or as we like to call ourselves the supers, only big named supers were supposed to marry other big named supers. And here Sophia is going to take my hand! “Honey, Marshall when are you going to tell the superior supers,” she asked me. What sweet Sophia spoke of is Marshall super powers, you see when you are born your parents bring you into labs for testing. The scientist test for super blood and if you’re positive they train you to become a better super. My parents had died and my older sisters took care of me. I never was taken in for the tests. Soon I figured out I was special and was a super. I don’t know why but I never ever told anyone, until her birthday, even though we are immortal 10 years earlier… “Oh, hi Marshall,” she shouted threw the pouring Louisiana rain. “Hiya, do you go here?” he pointed to the Crest mount high school. “Well, I guess, I just started today… well more like two days ago, I have been really busy.” “Too busy to come to dinner tonight,” he asked in his best flirty voice. Marshall knew he was cute very cute and he could have any girl at the school. “ Yeah, actually //way// too busy for that .” “ What could be more important than chilling with me?” “My house,” she stated simply, “is dirty and I need to clean it tonight.” “I will bring dinner and clean it with you,” I replied. “No, you will not… I already have another date,” she lied. “Don’t lie, I am coming,” I said. “If you come, than I guess, I will have to be there,” she supposed. “What time?” I wondered out loud. “Six,” she yelled as she drove away in her sharp mini cooper. “Okay,” I said.

// … Flash forward 5 years! // That night she fell for me as I for her. I told her my secret and she told me hers, we tested our powers and have had the time of our lives ever since. We are in love!!!! LOL. Today was the day I would show the people who I really was. Press conference, today, 2:30, at the mayor’s office. That is the entire note read, and it was written in Sophia’s Best writing. Will be there I thought to myself, and I was. I told everyone about myself, how I could read everyone’s mind and fly to the moon and back in the record time 4 minutes. I was taken in for testing and didn’t come home till 10:00, past my bed time!

// Flash forward 5 years…. // The people call me “the comet.” My cover name is Marshall (and supers don’t have last names). My wife, Sophia, and I have two children, Bruce and Linda; you might now know them as Batman and super woman. Hulk was passed on two our last child who died at the mere age of 6 month’s. Hulk was developed again in a family friend’s child, funny Sophia babysits for them. LOL I got what I want in life, but with all my money and happiness you guys know I will never sit at my beach side home all day, no we have a an island of the Bahamas. Oh and my kids never got tested, trained, or changed by any mad scientist. Good life right? Yeah, LOL!

**Questions for Peer Reviewers**
(Think in terms of questions you would like to ask the author.)

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?
 * Yes, one suggestion is to explain more how the place where the story takes place is.

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed? Yes I think they could added that then they could have what they want like an island in the bahamas.

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions? I like how you created the characters because you made them like if you where them.

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story? What happened if they finally have what they think is good life.

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author? I think the first part.