Michelle

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 * **Hi, my name is Michelle **
 * Grade: 8th**
 * Best Holiday: holidays where we dont hav school **
 * Birth Month: August but some people say its in May...you dont understand =) **
 * Career Goals: Make enough money to life a normal life style **
 * Favorite Band(s): Paramore, we the kings, all american rejects, the cab, adele, boys like girls, etc. **
 * Favorite Food: mexican and italtian **
 * Favorite Munchies: cheese sticks?? **
 * Favorite soft drink: SUNKIST!!! (fanta is wannabe sunkist) **
 * Favorite Subject: social studies?? **
 * Pet Peeve: miley cyrus and jonas brothers(but mostly miley cyrus) **
 * Pets: well....i HAD 5 fishes **

WHEN ONE DOOR CLOSES ANOTHER DOOR OPENS By: Michelle Chan Just another Monday, getting out of bed and going to work, Sam Oceans never expected that anything out of the ordinary would happen. Beep. Beep. Beep. The alarm clock rang and Sam slowly dragged herself out of bed and went to start her normal routine in the morning. She went to the kitchen to make her normal small de-caff coffee with no milk then went to take a shower.

* * * She came out of the shower and put on her favorite black pantsuit she laid out for herself the night before. She went to the kitchen to grab her Monday cup of coffee and newspaper and went out to her balcony to look over central park. Sam sat there for exactly thirty minutes then went back inside to get her jacket and suitcase than left. In the car, Sam started to listen to her usual radio station, Z100. “…Now, for another phone tap…” Sam shut up off the radio, got out of the car and entered the building. “Hello Erica, how are you today? You seem a little tired” “I’m fine, just another night out with the girls, and you?” “Oh I’m fine as usual, thanks for asking” Sam smiled, and walked away thinking to herself, is she really fine, she says that everyday but does she really feel fine? She ignored her thoughts and sat down at her desk. //Ring. Ring. Ring.// “Good morning Mr. Baldwin” “Mornin’ Sam, I would like to see you I my office in 5 minutes” “May I ask why Mr. Baldwin?” “I’ll talk to you in private…5 minutes?” “Yes sir” “Perfect” Sam hung up the phone still wondering what the phone call was about. She got up slowly, walked to the door, fixed her dress, and went in. As she went into the room, Mr. Baldwin was sitting on her desk just getting off the phone. “Hello Mr. Baldwin, you wanted to see me” “I always want to see you //miss// Oceans…” “That’s nice Mr. Baldwin, did you want something?” “Yes, I did could you come closer, I wanted to show you something” At that moment she knew something was wrong but she didn’t believe it, he was her boss. She walked up slowly then all of sudden her boss forces a kiss onto her. She pulls herself away with all her power and gasps for air trying to understand what just happened, she looks around, not knowing what to do. “Mr. Baldwin, What the //hell// are you doing?” “Nothing, that’s what you’re going to tell everyone, //nothing//. You are going to tell everyone that I called you in here to talk about the next project got it?” He started walking closer and closer as Sam backed up against the door. She didn’t know what to do. //Slap!// She slapped him right across the face making Mr. Baldwin fall to the ground. Sam gasped not knowing what came over her and kneeled to the ground almost ready to apologize. “That’s it Sam, pack up your stuff and get the //hell// out, you’re fired. I want you out in at least two minutes and if you’re not out, I’ll send security after you!” She ran out of there as quickly as possible, crying and crying. Sam grabbed all her belongings and left. As she was running down the stairs, she tripped and fell with her belongings right after her. She didn’t have the energy to get up so she just sat there crying and crying. “Sam, what happened? Are you o…okay?” Erica asked, kneeling to the ground next to her. She was crying so hard she couldn’t answer. “Come on I’ll take you home.” She helped her up and carried her stuff to her car.

* * * She helped her out of the car and carried her stuff into the apartment. “Thanks Erica, you’ve been a great help.” She said trying to control herself from crying. They stood there awkwardly not knowing what to do, its been a while since she’s been around people except in the office where she had no choice but to communicate with others… “Oh yeah anytime, so were you like fired?” she asked signaling towards the boxes of post-its and pens. “Uhm…yeah kinda…” “Really?! I was joking, why were you fired you were one of our best workers and you’ve only been here for a few months.” Sam started sobbing again and fell to the ground. “Oh! I’m so sorry I didn’t mean to make you cry again.” “No…I…it’s…” she tried to say without letting her tears out, “it’s not you or what you said, I just…” “It’s okay Sam, you can tell me, I wont tell anyone. Was it something Mr. Baldwin said when he was firing you?” She started thinking about what Mr. Baldwin had said and she couldn’t handle it anymore, she fell to the ground and started crying again. Erica got on the ground and tried to comfort her. Erica didn’t mean to offend her in anyway, but as she thought about it…she knew something was wrong and Sam had to get fired for a good reason, it sure wasn’t because she was a bad worker…”Sam, what did he say to you?” Sam couldn’t say anything but Erica knew exactly what she wanted but couldn’t say. She started thinking back to her old job and her old boss, remembering what he did and how she got fired as well. How she came home crying and didn’t do anything because she was afraid that something even worse could happen. Erica got up right away and called the police, “Hello officer, I would like to report a crime.” “Okay Miss, what was…” Sam sat here trying to her herself back from tears, watching Erica talk to the officer on the phone. She thought about this morning when she told Erica that she was fine, but truthfully she wasn’t really fine. She had no friends, cared only for her work, and hasn’t spoken to her family since the day she moved into the apartment two years ago. But now she has a friend and she doesn’t have a job that was holding her down and not letting her visit her family. Now Sam is much happier and things could only get better from here.

Questions for Peer Reviewers

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?

Michelle.  Editor: Wendlin 1.  <span style="color: rgb(0, 128, 0); font-family: Calibri;">The plot was original. It stayed on topic and kept me reading. I have no comments on the plot of your story 2. <span style="color: rgb(0, 128, 0); font: normal normal normal 7pt/normal 'Times New Roman';"> <span style="color: rgb(0, 128, 0); font-family: Calibri;">You described the character very well. She faces a very well described problems. The end of the story should have described what happened to her instead of just ending in the parking lot. 3. <span style="color: rgb(0, 128, 0); font: normal normal normal 7pt/normal 'Times New Roman';"> <span style="color: rgb(0, 128, 0); font-family: Calibri;">Your character is a likable character. I get a good since that she has through a lot of stuff and the character Erika helps her end it. Her own actions show that she is shy and scared to stand up for herself. 4. <span style="color: rgb(0, 128, 0); font: normal normal normal 7pt/normal 'Times New Roman';"> <span style="color: rgb(0, 128, 0); font-family: Calibri;">I believe that the imagery and detail was very good. Some things to make the meeting with her boss better are that if you described how he looked and how the office looked it could build up some sort of tension before the harassment started. 5. <span style="color: rgb(0, 128, 0); font: normal normal normal 7pt/normal 'Times New Roman';"> <span style="color: rgb(0, 128, 0); font-family: Calibri;">The area of the story that needs the most improvement is the conclusion. Me as a reader wants to know how she ended up.

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

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