Tyler

**Siblings: Brother**
 * **Hi, my name is Tyler **
 * Grade: 8th**
 * Best Holiday: Halloween **
 * Birth Month: May **
 * Career Goals: **
 * Favorite Band(s): **
 * Favorite Food: Steak **
 * Favorite Munchies: **
 * Favorite soft drink: Pepsi **
 * Favorite Subject: Math **
 * Pet Peeve: Cat **
 * Pets: Ferret, Dog **

One day Harry Cheese was going to school, a 13-year-old kid that is obsessed with cheese. He was with his exchange student Jeff who does not like Harry that much because he thinks he is to crazy about cheese and his house is really dirty. They were about to go into the door but it was locked. They were looking around the school with a weird look on there face. Harry Cheese said “I wonder where everyone is we’re not to early are we?” “No” Jeff said. They were at the back window when they saw a mysterious figure walking down into the science room. They were opening the window to see what was going on when it flung open and they were forced in. It was very dark and they could hardly see anything other than a green glow on the path that the figure was walking on. Neither Harry nor Jeff wanted to go to see what it was so we went back out the window and walked home as if nothing happened. “Maybe it was just a bad dream,” Jeff thought.

The next day came and Harry woke up, Jeff woke up a couple minutes later. The sun was rising and they were getting ready to go to school. It was 7:25 so they started to walk out. When they got to the school there was still no one there, so this time they went inside to investigate. The front door was open this time to they both walked inside. It was still dark and they could hardly see anything. The hallway was full of some sort of green/red slime. They did not pay attention to it and they just kept walking. There was one light on in the science room where they saw the mysterious figure yesterday. The light was flashing on and off and it gave them an eerie feeling. There was a thing standing in the middle of the room.

We were walking towards it when our feet got stuck to the ground and the thing turned around…it was an alien. He was staring at me. He said, “What are you doing here.” They were to scared to say anything. But Harry Cheese said, “We were just looking around.” The alien got taken up in a beam then before they knew it they were in that same beam of light. They were sucked into the U.F.O. They were both scared and a second later everyone was gone except them. They were strapped in a chair and there was a knife in front of them, they thought they were going to get dissected so they started to freak out. They then thought that they could get the knife and cut them out of the chair. Harry picked up the knife and then cut them both out. They then heard footsteps so they walked over to behind the closest wall… the alien saw that the chairs were empty and screamed as hard as hard as he can and Harry and Jeff’s ears almost popped.

They got so scared they started running for there life. They found a room with a bunch of clones of the same alien they saw before. They knew they were going to take over the earth. They said to each other, “We have to figure out how to stop this.” They looked around the room and they found a self-destruct switch but it was locked by a handprint. They then knew that they had to get the alien to put his hand on the switch somehow. They set up a trap and then waited for the alien to walk by. The alien walked by and he got caught in a rope, which got pulled to the ceiling. He knew he was stuck. They took his hand and put it onto the switch. The self-destruct timer started counting down from five minutes and thirty seconds. They ran found the teleported they got sucked in by and took it back to the ground. Seconds later the U.F.O. exploded and it was raining pieces of ship. The clones were destroyed and they saved the day. They went home went to sleep and then everything was back to normal the next day.

Questions for Peer Reviewers

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?  **__Tyler- notes by __** **__Jordan __**<span style="font-size: 14pt; color: #0070c0; line-height: 115%; font-family: 'Century Gothic','sans-serif';"> <span style="font-family: 'Century Gothic','sans-serif';"> **<span style="font-family: 'Century Gothic','sans-serif'; mso-bidi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-bidi-theme-font: minor-bidi;">Starting - March 29 (2009): **<span style="font-family: 'Century Gothic','sans-serif';"> 1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)? <span style="font-size: 14pt; color: #0070c0; line-height: 115%; font-family: 'Century Gothic','sans-serif';">The story was very original and I never heard anything like it before. It is Interesting and creative. Try to put more detail into it especially at the end. <span style="font-family: 'Century Gothic','sans-serif';">

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed? <span style="font-size: 14pt; color: #0070c0; line-height: 115%; font-family: 'Century Gothic','sans-serif';">You don’t have much suspense in your story because I think it ends to fast you need to put more detail into it. You could add more information on the U.F.O. or about the aliens at the end. <span style="font-family: 'Century Gothic','sans-serif';">

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions? <span style="font-size: 14pt; color: #0070c0; line-height: 115%; font-family: 'Century Gothic','sans-serif';">The characters are likeable but you need a little more detail on both of them. <span style="font-family: 'Century Gothic','sans-serif';">

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //<span style="font-family: 'Century Gothic','sans-serif'; mso-bidi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-bidi-theme-font: minor-bidi;">see // and //<span style="font-family: 'Century Gothic','sans-serif'; mso-bidi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-bidi-theme-font: minor-bidi;">hear // and //<span style="font-family: 'Century Gothic','sans-serif'; mso-bidi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-bidi-theme-font: minor-bidi;">experience // the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story? <span style="font-size: 14pt; color: #0070c0; line-height: 115%; font-family: 'Century Gothic','sans-serif';">The revisions I would like to see in the next story are, what did the aliens look like, how big was the U.F.O., how did the set up the trap to catch the alien, there are many things you could do with this story. <span style="font-family: 'Century Gothic','sans-serif';">

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author? <span style="font-size: 14pt; color: #0070c0; line-height: 115%; font-family: 'Century Gothic','sans-serif'; mso-fareast-font-family: Calibri; mso-bidi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-bidi-theme-font: minor-bidi; mso-fareast-theme-font: minor-latin; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-fareast-language: EN-US; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA;">The part of the story that need s the most improvement is when they escape the chairs until they get the alien to press the button. ||