SO-Brittany+A.

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 * [[image:back_of_these_cheeks_are_loaded.jpg width="249" height="293"]] (Me when I was 1 or 2)[[image:everybody.jpg width="553" height="437" align="left"]] (Me, my brother, and cousins on my moms side of the family) **=====

Hi I am Brittany Jeanne Anderson. My faverite color is lime green and I have a little brother named Blaine. I have no pets. My family is very big I have over 35 cousins and thats alot. thanks for your time and go ahead and read my story "Sami's Escape from jail" bye.

Sami’s Escape from jail By: Brittany Anderson I am Polly Anderson in this story this is my second mystery story the first story was very deadly but this will be way more than that.  And here is the story of Sami’s escape from jail. One day I was walking along in Peru and I heard a very loud scream. Then I heard a loud Sponge bob laugh.  I ran to see what happened around into the ally and saw my sister Tessa lying there dead on the ground I sat next to her crying I garbed my cell phone and called 911 the police came right away and took her to the hospital. I told the detective to find out who killed my sister “I will get right to it Polly! And I want you to know that Sami has broken out of jail last night we shown it on the news and newspaper. So I want you to watch out. Stay with your family in case any thing else happens. Call me if something happens here is my phone number 835 9715 bye and I am very sorry about your lost one” I said thank you Detective Matt” and left the crime scene and I went home to tell my mother Jennifer. When I got home my mom was on the floor with my other sister leanna was dead. So I called the hospital again and said my other sister leanna is dead.  I told my mom to pack up and get ready to leave were leaving to night to go to Aunt Lisa and Uncle Doug’s house. I called to tell them and they said that’s fine. Then I called Detective Matt.  Matt told to me leave town till we find that maniac friend of yours. So I went back home and said ready mom and Megan let’s go to the airport we got in the car and it seemed like someone was following us then we got on the plane and it still feels like someone’s watching us. The Plane took off and were flying in mid air. And so I look in the way back to see if there were someone watching me and my family.  I only saw was an old granny sleeping and she was snoring loudly with her hair net in and she smelled like rotten cat pee and two kids watching a the movie I Love Lucy and a woman listening to what I think is rock she almost jumped out of her chair because she was dancing to much and one old person with a fake gray mustache reading the news paper that on the front said The Killer of Marry Jane and Tyler Swift Broke out of jail last night//. I turned a round and I was shocked who I saw that was reading it. It was Sami! I was so shocked that I saw her the killer.//  I got up and went to the bathroom and she saw me go by.  <span style="color: #800080; font-family: 'Times New Roman', Times, serif;">Then I got to the bathroom and tried to call detective matt but I for got you don’t get connection on the airplane. I came out and saw she was gone I ran up to mom and <span style="color: #800080; font-family: 'Times New Roman', Times, serif; mso-spacerun: yes; msospacerun: yes;"> <span style="color: #800080; font-family: 'Times New Roman', Times, serif;">Megan and there she was trying to kill mom in a silent and slow way. <span style="color: #800080; font-family: 'Times New Roman', Times, serif; mso-spacerun: yes; msospacerun: yes;"> <span style="color: #800080; font-family: 'Times New Roman', Times, serif;">A a a a hi Sami “hi Polly she said very scared” as she was letting go of mom. <span style="color: #800080; font-family: 'Times New Roman', Times, serif; mso-spacerun: yes; msospacerun: yes;"> <span style="color: #800080; font-family: 'Times New Roman', Times, serif;">“Sami lets go back to your seat and talk”. <span style="color: #800080; font-family: 'Times New Roman', Times, serif; mso-spacerun: yes; msospacerun: yes;"> <span style="color: #800080; font-family: 'Times New Roman', Times, serif;">What are you doing on this plane Sami? <span style="color: #800080; font-family: 'Times New Roman', Times, serif; mso-spacerun: yes; msospacerun: yes;"> <span style="color: #800080; font-family: 'Times New Roman', Times, serif;">“Trying to kill you and your family.” Why Sami why? <span style="color: #800080; font-family: 'Times New Roman', Times, serif; mso-spacerun: yes; msospacerun: yes;"> <span style="color: #800080; font-family: 'Times New Roman', Times, serif;">“Well all the evil things you have done to me.” What evil things did I do to you? <span style="color: #800080; font-family: 'Times New Roman', Times, serif; mso-spacerun: yes; msospacerun: yes;"> <span style="color: #800080; font-family: 'Times New Roman', Times, serif;">“You don’t know!” <span style="color: #800080; font-family: 'Times New Roman', Times, serif; mso-spacerun: yes; msospacerun: yes;"> <span style="color: #800080; font-family: 'Times New Roman', Times, serif;">No “well you stole my boy friend, and you didn’t like my family which that hearts really hearts” well I am sorry but please stop trying to kill my family! “No <span style="color: #800080; font-family: 'Times New Roman', Times, serif; mso-spacerun: yes; msospacerun: yes;"> <span style="color: #800080; font-family: 'Times New Roman', Times, serif;">why should I? <span style="color: #800080; font-family: 'Times New Roman', Times, serif; mso-spacerun: yes; msospacerun: yes;"> <span style="color: #800080; font-family: 'Times New Roman', Times, serif;">You will be the last one that dies I want you to see all of your family members die right in front of you” I went back to my seat and said are you okay mama she said “yes honey I am fine but are you okay” I answered quietly no mama I am not I am scared she says she’s going to kill every one slowly and quietly Wright in front of me I dot want that to happen. “Its not going to happen baby I promise”. I just sat there staring off in to space. Finally we got of the plane and we saw my aunt and uncle and my two cousins Logan and Shayla <span style="color: #800080; font-family: 'Times New Roman', Times, serif; mso-spacerun: yes; msospacerun: yes;"> <span style="color: #800080; font-family: 'Times New Roman', Times, serif;">we went to there house and we lost Sami in the air port some where and one good thing is she never knew where my aunt and uncle lived but I was scared if she found where they live. <span style="color: #800080; font-family: 'Times New Roman', Times, serif; mso-spacerun: yes; msospacerun: yes;"> <span style="color: #800080; font-family: 'Times New Roman', Times, serif;">I’ll call the detective and tell them Sami followed us all the way to New Jersey I called him and answered this is detective matt how can I help you. <span style="color: #800080; font-family: 'Times New Roman', Times, serif; mso-spacerun: yes; msospacerun: yes;"> <span style="color: #800080; font-family: 'Times New Roman', Times, serif;">I said detective Matt this is Polly oh hi did you see her in Peru he asked me. Oh yes she was on the plane I went to the bathroom and it seemed when I cam back she was trying to kill my mom on the plane slowly and quietly. <span style="color: #800080; font-family: 'Times New Roman', Times, serif; mso-spacerun: yes; msospacerun: yes;"> <span style="color: #800080; font-family: 'Times New Roman', Times, serif;">“Well did she kill her” “no I said in a sarcastic tone” then suddenly I herd aloud girl scream then a loud Sponge bob laugh then I said on the phone she’s here hurry come to New Jersey I hafe to go he told me to be careful I will call you then I hung up the phone when I ran it the other room I said let go of my cousin Logan suddenly my uncle Doug said drop the knife my aunt Lisa was in the kitchen with Shayla making supper my aunt wet to say supper ready pecking out the door and she saw Sami she quickly went back and told shayla to hide. <span style="color: #800080; font-family: 'Times New Roman', Times, serif; mso-spacerun: yes; msospacerun: yes;"> <span style="color: #800080; font-family: 'Times New Roman', Times, serif;">Lisa sneaked into the living room through the other door and took a knife Doug and I saw her then she stabbed Cattie. Then Cattie fell to the ground saying some words “why Polly why” “because you were a bad person and I love my family” then detective Matt arrived at my aunt and uncle’s house as my aunt Lisa was crying holding Shayla and Logan <span style="color: #800080; font-family: 'Times New Roman', Times, serif; mso-spacerun: yes; msospacerun: yes;"> <span style="color: #800080; font-family: 'Times New Roman', Times, serif;">in her arms. They took Cattie away to and on her way out she was still living she said I will get you and your family and I told her you would never ever get us told us that we did good catching her and I guess killing her. <span style="color: #800080; font-family: 'Times New Roman', Times, serif; mso-spacerun: yes; msospacerun: yes;"> <span style="color: #800080; font-family: 'Times New Roman', Times, serif;">Detective asked us if she hurt any of us we all said no but she was holding Logan in her arms having a knife to his throat. <span style="color: #800080; font-family: 'Times New Roman', Times, serif; mso-spacerun: yes; msospacerun: yes;"> <span style="color: #800080; font-family: 'Times New Roman', Times, serif;">“And saying she was going to kill every one in the world I told detective matt.” <span style="color: #800080; font-family: 'Times New Roman', Times, serif; mso-spacerun: yes; msospacerun: yes;"> <span style="color: #800080; font-family: 'Times New Roman', Times, serif;"> Then he tock me inside and said you will be safe as long as you don’t stay in New York. Because that is where she will be held and its are best security in the whole United States of America and then I said I will move down to Florida where it is very busy and please let me know if she gets out right away. Well good bye and thank you for your help we will start to pack up we are going to live in Florida so pack up your things and let’s get out of here. We packed up my aunts and uncles stuff and then we went back to Peru and packed are stuff then we looked in the news paper and I and Shayla stared looking for houses in Florida in the news paper as Doug and Logan looked for houses in Florida on the computer. We found one of those mansions in Florida and we moved in as quickly as we could. I and Shayla and Megan shared a bedroom and Blaine and Logan shared a bedroom Doug and Lisa got there own bedroom and my mom Jennifer got her own bedroom then we were all happy and everyone got a good job. <span style="color: #800080; font-family: 'Times New Roman', Times, serif; mso-spacerun: yes; msospacerun: yes;"> <span style="color: #800080; font-family: 'Times New Roman', Times, serif;"> Lisa got a secretary job, Doug got a teacher job, and my mom gets to be a manager at a race track, Logan, Polly, Shayla, Blaine, Megan all got jobs at the mall and they work great with great wages. <span style="color: #800080; font-family: 'Times New Roman', Times, serif; mso-spacerun: yes; msospacerun: yes;"> <span style="color: #800080; font-family: 'Times New Roman', Times, serif;"> One day I got a phone call and it was Sami from the police station it was her having be try to bail her out of jail I said no I was the one that put you into jail why should I bail you out she stared to say I wont try to kill your family anymore I told you no and that is final you need to stay in jail four at least 30 years. 10 years later I went visit Sami she still wanted to kill but when I got ready to leave the police man stopped me they told me Sami was going to get hung by her neck or feet on June 15 which is tomorrow I said I will be there for the funeral then he said we are going to berry Sami in a car because she is turning sixteen I said that is a good idea. <span style="color: #800080; font-family: 'Times New Roman', Times, serif; mso-spacerun: yes; msospacerun: yes;"> <span style="color: #800080; font-family: 'Times New Roman', Times, serif;">The next day I went to the funeral and some kids that knew her were playing around and almost fell into the deep, deep hole then I walked over by Sami and she was getting ready to get hung then she was ready they pulled the lever to have the go away and then her last sentience was I will haunt you in your dreams and then she passed away. They picked up her body gently and put her in the car she always wanted which is a gray 3 ton doge Dakota truck <span style="color: #800080; font-family: 'Times New Roman', Times, serif; mso-spacerun: yes; msospacerun: yes;"> <span style="color: #800080; font-family: 'Times New Roman', Times, serif;">then they dropped the truck in the hole. A week later her grave that she wanted it said Samantha Wojcik born on June 15 1997 died on June 15 2013 be cause of trying to murder a family

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**Questions for Peer Reviewers**
(Think in terms of questions you would like to ask the author.)

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)? The plot is very original, but is very fantasy. I suggest that he write more actual facts.(Marcelo A.)

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

The story has much suspense, be more real because you can not kill a person in public places.(Marcelo A.)

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

Does not describe the characters, the detective is like the character more real.(Marcelo A.)

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story? I would like the author describes the physical characteristics of Sami.(Marcelo A.) 5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author? As a story of suspense, the author should describe the characters and the environment where it develops.(Marcelo A.)