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I think Introduction  There are two 16 years old who are siblings their names are Anne and John. Anne and John live with their mom because the dad is on an expedition in Alaska who sends post cards two times a week. Anyways they have one thing in common which is that they have the biggest dreams and beliefs that anyone has ever had because they believe in dragons a mythical creature. When they were young they dug around the back yard to see if there were any dragon bones or corps. But there was one dragon in particular that they knew was real because of intense research. This dragon guarded a magnificent ancient Chinese treasure which was lost forever during an ancient war. The treasure was inside the dragon but Anne and John weren’t interested in that. For they were interested in the dragon whose name was Drake a mythical creature who is believed to be found in China in a small town called Wong Zhen Zhou Village in the highest point of a cave on top of a mountain, that they would have to find either by a map or by thinking deep and maybe asking a villager, only if they believed in this mystical creature, the dragon. Soon Anne and John are going to find out they aren’t the only ones looking for this dragon because there are three treasure hunters heavily armed and their names are Bob, Jake, and Frank looking for this treasure and to do so they have to kill the dragon. But Anne and John and the three treasure hunters have only one week to find the dragon, before it finds a new resting place, and if it finds a new resting place the dragon and the treasure would be lost forever .The week started on a Saturday morning. John and Anne woke up around 8 o'clock to go look for the dragon. They toke a AK-47,three shotguns, and a magic ward. They went to the mountains, to look for the dragon. It was about a five mile walk from there house. It was a very long walk so when they arrived, they were very tired. The mountain was very old and had a lot of deep holes. They did not really know what the dragon looked like, so they just keep look for any type of dragon they saw. From what they have heard from the hunters, the dragon was blue and purple. It also had red fire and blew out his mouth. Then after we were about to take our step the cave started to shake and the mountain broke and we saw the huge dragon. The shake made us fall to the ground and our weapons broke even the magic wand slipped out from our back pack and broke into little tiny pieces the dragon rose and circled around us then it blew fire and we dodged it with all our stamina and as we arose we saw that it had left. It was now circling our city and the citizens were out of their home screaming with fear, for it was breathing red-hot fire out of its mouth. So Anne said, “I guess we have to catch it in the sky”. “Luckily we have those hang gliders that uncle Sean gave us for our birthdays” suggested John. So they rush back to their house and ran up to the attic and took out the hand gliders, and climbed up to the roof, they jumped off and flew high with all their might, luckily the wind started to pick up and they were carried high and they were on the Dragons tail. Luckily before the wand broke Anne wished that she had the ability to speak with dragons. Anne tried the wish out “hello, hello testing, testing, one, two, three. The dragon heard Anne saying hello. The dragon then said, "What do you want." Anne said, " There are three treasure hunters looking for you and they have many weapons." Then the dragon said, "Well, tell them to come find me and kill me if they will." He blow fire out him mouth. then they went to the hunters and said to them to stop this madness and they agreed and went to the dragon and told them what happened and the dragon was happy. 

PEER REVIEW (Saint Michael)

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)? I think the plot is good, the plot is a very good one but the end leaves you wondering. 2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed? You need more action and a better ening

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions? I like the characters but you need to describe them better the characters are very life like...but not the dragon.

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?

Mostly the ending needs more work