Iskl+Fabian

Hello every body. I'm Fabian. My age is somewhere between 0 to 100. I am from a country in the to 2/3 of the world. I am using a mac computer that belongs to my school. I watch the Simpsons and Freinds. I am learning french as a third language. To be updated later....

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The eco fight ( A story of A boy who changed history) Thursday, October five, 2009
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I looked around the classroom, every single person in this room was responsible for George’s death. Nobody even seemed to care. The lights are on even though we have gigantic windows and we just had a talk about using wrong fuels. They are just sitting there staring at MR. Octonian talking about William Shakespeare’s sonnet 7. I looked out the window to see children who had been let out early walking towards the busses. Busses are supposed to be ok but they are not. They let out as much pollution as a car it’s just the size of 5 cars. It doesn’t help earth like some think, it destroys it at a slower pace. If everyone had used electricity cars George wouldn’t be dead. Still nobody even tried. Someone might try for a week but then just go back to normal. It’s everyone’s fault that George died because of air pollution. “You may now leave kids”. Mr. Octonian turned back to his laptop and everyone left including me. I stuffed my things into my bag and got ready to go to the busses. Peter came up and asked me if I wanted to go bowling. He was also my friend and I said yes like I always do.

As we chose bowling alley Peter asked what homework Mr. Octonian had given us. He always forgot and asked me later. I told him how we had to write a sonnet. Peter dropped his bowling ball and said “I suck at writing poems. I gave him some ideas of what to write about and then then rolled the ball down the alley, STRIKE. It was Peter’s turn after that and he got a spare. As I chose a ball I thought about George. I rolled the ball and it thudded into the gutter. I turned to Peter and told him that I didn’t feel well. I left at once.

At home I curled up in a ball and cried. Bowling was so much more fun when George. He always helped me in school and we always did stuff together. At some point after dinner I decided to stop global warming because it makes air pollution and air pollution killed George. It was a Thursday so I did the homework due tomorrow and went to bed.

Friday, October 6, 2009

At school Peter asked me if I felt better. I replied that I felt good I just got a little bit sick yesterday. We started talking about a soccer match a few days ago. Russia against China. It ended 4-2 to Russia and one of the coolest goals ever was scored. It was 91 minutes into the game and the Russian goal keeper caught the ball and shot at once. The Chinese goal keeper was inspecting some beetles on the grass and only noticed the ball when it brushed his scalp. Class started then and I went for math.

When I came home from school I brain stormed what to do to stop global warming. Since there was an assembly next week I could ask if there was any room for me show a powerpoint about global warming which I could do over the weekend. I called the ms office and asked if there was any room for my presentation. They said that they had half and hour they didn’t know what to do with so it would be great if I could do it. The assembly would be on Monday. 2 and a half days to make the presentation. Better get started.

Monday, October 9, 2009

My presentation is about to begin. It is 10 slides long at tells the worst possible outcomes of global warming and how to fight global warming. The principle, Mr. Tahmera told the audience that I was going to global warming presentation and I walked on to the stage. Everybody clapped as I signaled the tech booth that I was ready.

At the end I asked if there were any questions. Everybody stared at me for 5 seconds before one kid raised up his arm. I looked at him and said “yes” “Is it true that earth will almost be an inhabitable desert that only the most northern areas will survive in 50 to 100 years?” asked the kid “Yes it’s true, The only places that people will be able to live in are, Canada, Scandinavia, Parts of Greenland, Iceland, Northern Russia and a tiny part of Antarctica.” I assured him Another kid shouted out “Who cares I’ll be dead by then” I responded quickly because I knew someone would say that “ But it is highly possible that most of us in this room will get children. They will have to live through it. Do you want your children telling their children that everyone is stuffed together in one part of the world because their grandpa didn’t care?” Everyone turned silent “I would also like to inform everyone that im starting a club that will be working to make are school run on earth friendly energy. It costs 10 ringitt a week to be part of it. All the money goes to making the school eco friendly. When we completed our school we will go and help other schools. We will also accept donations. Come to school on Saturday if you want to join the club”

Saturday, October 14, 2009

¾ of the school came and are now all part of the club. Some are just giving 10 ringitt a week while others are more involved.

3 years later…

3 schools in KL are now running on eco friendly energy’s and the organization that helped do this now bas 4,000 people in it. It is rapidly growing. Their goal is to make KL a more eco friendly city in the next 20 years. Many organizations similar to this one are popping up all across the world.

Fabian Erikson April 2009

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