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 * Hello my name is Lucas Mayer some activites I like are drawing, playing video games, and just playing with my friends. My favorite food is chicken and dumplings soup ^o^. my favorite T.V. shows are Family Guy, and Lost. my favorite music type is regular rock and heavy rock sometimes hip-hop. that is mostly about me.**=====

** Land of War ** By: Lucas Mayer The Land of war was a great battlefield that in the evil times wars against the Light and the Dark. After the evil times the land was the darks land the people of light were commanded by the people of Dark. The warriors and kings of Light took fortress in the forest of Light which was abandon by the Light ones ages ago. While the villagers under dictation of evil the kings and warriors were miles away hiding they had no one to stop the dictation.

One day working on the field Drakkon was annoyed by the flies, bees the dark guard watching us all work to make no money. Drakkon was a 15 year old boy he was strong long haired and quit tall. Drakkon did not want to be under command (for nobody did) after his day “working” he walked home about a mile from the village he saw a orange redish glow and smoke. he ran toward the village toward the village was attacked by the Dark but then he saw coming down the road warriors. Warriors of light they attacked the Dark warriors in the village then to try to block the way out they started the entrances on fire so no one could ex cape. the Dark and Light fought the Dark ones fled for before them was the Light King.

The warriors were telling the villagers to get on the wagons “Get on the wagons they wont flee for long” when the villagers where on the wagons a few people including me were brought on the wagons with the King. The king walked in a green wagon with a blue flowery design on the sides the horses on it were big, muscular and white horses. I thought we were going on the wagon with the king the wagon we were brought on were smelly and uncomfortable I shouted “where are we going” “back to the kings palace you and all the others will be trained to fight” answered the horse rider “What I am not a warrior im a worker of a farm I cannot fight” I blurted the horse rider gave no answer. After a few days we were at the forest where the palace was. We where took out of the wagons and we followed the king. as we arrived at the palace I stopped and looked at the beauty of the woods and the palace. The palace was tall and made of ancient stone the ancient stone was strong, the door was big and tall made of two big slates of a grey stone with the same design as the one on the wagon. “walk inside we haven’t much time I walked in the king was sitting on his throne a little tune playing in the back round I felt a glint of hope in this palace. Ding ding ding rang a bell the king rang. “listen all of the ones brought from the village you have bin brought here to be trained” said the king. “trained to be a warrior of Light. I picked you all because I seeked a Great warrior in side of. one of you out of 10 will be the great warrior of the light and lead us to victory against the dark when we make battle in the Land of War”. After a couple hours of exploring the castle it was time for the feast I heard a ding ding ding not by the king but by the bells on top of the tower a maid led us to the hall of feasting. There was cooks and butlers preparing the last of the food on the table my mouth was watering because back home all we had for each meal was a bun and maby a little bit of steak on lucky of days. The king sitting on the throne said "Sit please enjoy yourself while you can for tomorrow you start your training". To Be Contineud...

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