Joe+C

**Siblings: Juliana and Michael Monroig, Ali Competiello** Feel free to upload your podcast or a picture if you like.
 * **Hi, my name is Joey C **
 * Grade: 8th**
 * Best Holiday: Christmas **
 * Birth Month: May 27, 1995 **
 * Career Goals: To be a baseball player and to help my dad in the store **
 * Favorite Band(s): Journey, Avenge Sevenfold, Rod Stewart, The Who etc. **
 * Favorite Food: Italian Food **
 * Favorite Munchies: Cereal **
 * Favorite soft drink: Ginger Ale **
 * Favorite Subject: Social Studies **
 * Pet Peeve: Going to family parties **
 * Pets: Me **

Joey Competiello Ms. Cronk Period I March 18, 2009

**__The Greatest Story Ever__**

Fredrick Streeter, an average man with a dream to be accomplished. Fredrick is a man who is 25 years old. He thinks that he is an old man, but isn’t. Fredrick lives in Yakety Yak Paradise. Fredrick is the prince because his father is the king. His father made the village and made his own restaurant FGC, or Fredrick’s General’s Chicken. Fredrick has never met his pen pal Dungbar Canhorn Eisensteinburgher. Fredrick went to his dad’s restaurant, over there, sitting at the table was Dungbar, proposing to his girlfriend Twinkle Toes. Fred waited. Then he went to see Dungbar. He said to Dungbar, “ Do you know how I am.” Dungbar said, “ No.” Fredrick said, “ My name is Fredrick Streeter.” Dungbar was astonished. Dungbar happily said, “ I can’t believe that I am seeing you in real life, not just on a computer.” Fredrick said, “ I know, is this just amazing.” Twinkle says, “ Hi Fred.“ Fredrick say’s, “ Hi, Twinkle.” Fredrick goes to the counter and gets a quarter pound of Grilled General’s Chicken. He sits down at the table were Dungbar is and they eat together. Fredrick had to go because he has a baseball game tomorrow. While running to the door Fredrick says, “ Bye.” Twinkle and Dungbar at the same time say, “ Goodbye.” Fredrick went home to get his baseball gear ready. He went to his bed and went to sleep. Fredrick woke up the next morning. He starts to get ready for his baseball game. He leaves his house and goes to his Mercedes-Benz McLaren and drives off. Before going to his game, he picks up his flaming hot girlfriend Jessica Alba to take her to his game. Fredrick is on the New York Yankees and is a shortstop. He is a switch hitter and is fourth in the line up. He is playing against the Colorado Rockies. They are playing at the new Yankee Stadium. The game starts at 10:30 am. The game went on and ended at 12:30 pm. The Yankees won by one point. The score was 7 to 6. In the bottom of the ninth, Fredrick hits the game winning solo homerun. Fredrick and Jessica went to lunch at Panera Bread outside of the Bronx. They sat down and ate. They were done eating and went to his house. They started to talk about getting engaged and talk about if they should spend their life together. Fredrick started to get astonished and they started to kiss. After that Jessica had to go home because her mom is sick. Fredrick drove her home and went back home. Two tears passed and they have been engaged. Fredrick takes her to a wonderful restaurant called, The Harvest on the Hudson. They ate outside on the deck. They were done eating, and then Fredrick takes out a ring and proposes to her. Jessica says, “Yes.” Fredrick is glad and they start to kiss. Fredrick and Jessica went to Jessica’s house and they closed the door. It is morning; Fredrick went home for another game. It was at the Mets Stadium against the Mets. Fredrick and the Yankees won by 5. The score was 10 to 5. Fredrick goes home and went to his dad’s restaurant. He slept over at his grandma’s house for about 5 months. It was 5 month’s and Jessica and Fredrick have there wedding in 2 days. Everything is ready and set for May 27, 2142. May 27 comes up and they have there wedding. They get married and live in a huge mansion in Long Beach Island. They start their life has being a loving couple.

Questions for Peer Reviewers

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)? This story is creative. You should add more details in the story to make it better. 2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?The characters are well develop and there names are funny too. 3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions? The characters are life like because of the dialogue is what a person would say to express his/her feelings. 4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?I wolud like the story to be longer because of what happened to fredrick and Jessica. 5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?He should put more details. Matt Bisesto

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author? ||