BF-Alejandro

Hi! I am Alejandro and I live in Barcelona, Spain but I actually come from Venezuela. I have lived for 6 years in Barcelona and I am eleven years old. I also wonder, do you like soccer? Well, here in Barcelona everyone likes Barça, the soccer team, here except my friend Arel. He supports Bayern Munich and everyone in this school disagrees as you might imagine. In Barcelona, the food is marvelous! Catalunya, a region in Spain has another language apart from Spanish. The Catalan and Spanish food is really good. They have all types of meat, vegetables, and they are all good!!! Also, I would like to add that Spain, at least for me, is a wonderful country. Most of the people are nice and they are always there to help you. Barcelona is a very beautiful city, la Sagrada Familia ("The Sacred Familiy") is one of the most famous buildings here in Barcelona. Going back to soccer, the Camp Nou is Barça's Stadium which is impressing. It is enormous and about 99000 people fit in the stadium. Here, people always like to go there, eventhough the tickets are very expensive for a very good match. There are lots of things to see in Spain. All of the places have wonderful things and everywhere you go, you will have a nice time. The most important cities are: Madrid, Barcelona, Sevilla, Valencia... In Madrid there are mostly museums, in Barcelona there are most places to see but Madrid is the capital, and in Sevilla, it is more like Barcelona there are gardens, nice buildings, bodies of water around, etc. Finally, I would like to say that I am really having a good time in Barcelona, Spain and also in BFIS, the school where I go. It is a marvelous experience to be here!!

I am about 1m 60cm tall and I am 11 years old. I am red haired and have light brown eyes. I have a little brother called Jaime and 2 older sisters. My little brother is 9 years old and my sisters are 28 and 30 years old. I have no pets.

-My birthday is July 22nd. -My favorite sport is soccer though I know how to do over 15 sports. -I love traveling to different places. -My favorite place to be is the mountain on a sunny day. (I'm more picky with the beaches). -I don't have a favorite subject. -I like to be with animals in the middle of nowhere (like horses, cows, sheep...) -I used to live in Venezuela but I came to live to Spain when I was 6 years old. -My favorite country is Spain. -My favorite book genre is action. -My favorite color is blue. -I like ALL types of music (I enjoy it all). -I am always happy and in a good humor (at least in school). -I love sleeping. -My BFFs are Samuel, Gerard, Nacho, and Arel.

This is me (to the right) and my brother (to the left) in Florence, Italy on the 1st of January!!!

__**Trying to Murder the President**__

"WANTED", said the newspapers. Shool wondered who was wanted so he went forward and browsed through the newspapers. He was surprised to see that there was an assassin that is trying to kill a "very important" person. Shool worked with the CIA and loved to solve serious problems. He looked at the time: 3:30 AM! It was time to go to work! He grabbed his gun and his knife and went to the lower floor where the car was. He entered the car, which was a bright red ferrari and drove out of his house like lightning. He got to the CIA building in NYC. He said his code, 002, and entered the building. When he got to his boss' office his boss told him directly, "There is an assassin called Hulanga. He wants to kill someone 'very important'" he told him. "I know don't worry", Shool answered, "What I am supposed to do now?" So his boss stared at him with a you-know-what-to-do face. Shool went to the computer lab and started to do research. He figured out that Hulanga had been once in jail but had escaped in a very intelligent and unknown way. He then answered an important question: He was working in a project as a militar in the government but no one knows who he is because he had changed his passport and nationality to American, but as I said before, no one knew how. Shool was now worried. He didn't know how to solve this case. He had to become a militar in order to catch Hulanga. So he went back to his boss' office and said,"How the heck am I gonna be part of the US military?!" "I can do it for you whenever you want." "Really?" "Yes, you are already part of the military" "What???..."Shool said surprised.

Next day, Shool had to go to work to the military headquarters at Washington D.C. He hated the idea of being a militar but he also knew he was going to get a big prize if he solved this very important case. He started working on something he had no idea but someone came over and told him, "Hey, what's up you are a new one right?" Shool answered: "Yeah I'm working now for the military of the USA." Shool was surprised someone wanted to be his friend so fast but he was also happy he had a friend who could be with him.

One day, he and his new friend, Harry, were sent to New York City to guard the synagogue while the jews were praying. Shool went to the entrance part and Harry went to the other side to go guard. They were told that they had to be there for two hours. About and hour after, the more strange thing happened, a big roar was heard and a yellow ball of fire like the sun in the Sahara Desert was seen. Shool threw himself fastly to the ground and waited till the explosion ended. Harry came and helped him up and said, "Are you ok man!?" Shool sighed and spit blood,"Yeah, I think I'm all right. Thanks!" When all of the smoke was gone, Shool saw all of the fifty military and the jews dead in the floor except them two. Shool was very badly injured and Harry was just a bit. They ran as fast as they could to the nearest subway station. When they entered the subway station another peculiar thing happened, "BOOM!!!" Another explosion. What the heck was happening. It was like if everywhere Harry and Shool went there was an explosion and thousands of people died.

The next day, when they were in the military headquarters in Washington D.C, a very unexpected thing happened though now Shool understood why all the explosions happened, Harry was the assassin. He had killed many people just to warn the president that something was going to happen to him soon. So now Shool knew a couple of things:

1. Harry is the English name for Hulanga in the Nigerian language. 2. Harry was going to kill the president, he was the "very important person".

Now something that Shool had to figure out is that if Hulanga had let himself been caught so easily that meant that the President was in danger. What should he do? Should he go to the White House and be always with the president from dying? Or should he just stay until something happens? Shool started thinking and thought that if he was with the president and something happened he was probably going to die too so maybe the best idea was to find more clues (maybe even force Hulanga to say something). He went to the cell where Hulanga was and tried to make him say something by threatening him and telling him he had to say something or else...or else what? He couldn't say or else he will kill otherwise he will definitely get NO clues. So maybe that wasn't a good idea. So what could he do? Shool started thinking and thinking until he came to the conclusion that he had to risk his life for the president if he wanted to solve this case.

One week after, Shool was sent by the CIA to the White House and had to start searching for any danger. He first went to the most obvious place where he could be assassined, his office. He started searching in the president's office: his desk, on the back of the curtains, even browsed all of the books to see if there was something. Nothing. There was nothing in the office saw what would the second most obvious place be? His bedroom. He started to his bedroom and did exactly the same thing as he did with the office. This time he did find something. He saw a paper clip under his pillow. But it wasn´t an ordinary paper clip it looked bigger, darker in color, and more mechanic. He grabbed the paper cilp and also his object analyzer. The object analyzer was a 25 century tool made that was able to see what an object was made of and his functions. Bip, bip, bip...the analyzer scrutinized carefully the paper clip. After two minutes Shool had all the answers. The paper clip was made of a mixture of iron, gold, silver, and copper and was used to inject. But why would Hulanga want to inject something or the president? Shool went to his room and started thinking. (He couldn't take the paper clip to his room because beside the clip there was a note that said, "Do not move or autodestruction will happen in 1 minute". Maybe Hulanga wanted to inject the pillow explosive chemicals so that while the president was sleeping an explosion happens and the president and the White House don't exist anymore. But he then thought that that wouldn't work because the president would die and he would not benefit Hulanga at all. His head started burning and he was getting desperate. He did tons of research and even called for some help. Nothing. He didn´t come to a reasonable conclusion.

One night, since he couldn't stop thinking about the case, he dreamed about something that seemed very unrealistic, but knowing villains from this time, well it sound totally perfect. He thought that maybe Hulanga wanted to inject the president's head to make him do whatever he wants. He, for sure, injected something so that he could control the president's mind and then control the USA. This sounded perfect! Shool was sure this was what was going on. He woke up and ran to the president's room. This was a bit embarrassing but he opened the door like if it was his own room and woke up the president,"President, president, wake up" He quickly moved the pillow and saw a red light bipping simultaneously. That didn't sound good. That probably meant that the injecting was in process and that the president may be already a bit controlled by Hulanga. The president didn't talk (and it wasn't because he was sleepy). Oh no! He was being controlled by Hulanga. He got a knife and started trying to stab him in his chest. Shool escaped from the White House. He had failed...

Shool began to cry. He knew what he had to do if he wanted the USA and the rest of the world to still be in peace. KILL THE PRESIDENT! He went to the CIA building and went to his boss' office. His boss looked at him with disappointment and then, again, with a you-know-what-to-do face. He went to the White House and found the president. He was now face to face with one of the most important persons in the world who was going to die (had to die). The president, like Shool, grabbed a gun from his belt and pointed at him. BACK! The president (Hulanga) had shot him but had fortunately just hit him on his leg. Shool shot, and since he was more of a professional, he HAD hit him on his head. The president was now lying down on the floor, DEAD.

Now everything was normal again even though Shool was still sad he had failed the case and had to kill the president. But now a new president was elected from the same party, Democratic. Since Shool had killed the president now Hulanga was also dead. And this is how a very smart assassin (who didn't care dying if the president would also be dead) wins his battles and also looses them.

THE END

**Story and Content - Brayden**
1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)? the plot is original. > > 2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed? > > 3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions? the main character was very well developed. All his actions matched how we knew he would be thinking
 * Starting - March 29 (2009):**
 * nice job(:
 * it was a bit original and it was a bit james bondy but other wise it is good.
 * yes it satisfies me - the whole story was suspenseful

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?
 * nothing extra required. very detailed and very easy to see and hear.

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?
 * It was an excellent story. I can't see how you would improve it.