CI-Orion

1001 Flat Tales Project

My Name: Orion Martinez My Age: 13 My Hometown: Pueblo My Hobbies: Street Racing, working on cars, playing video games, skate boarding My Favorites: Other things you should know about me: I like to listen to my mp3 all the time and listen to heavy metal and working on cars

On a dark night three black Honda s2000’s with red neon race along a highway avoiding cars and racing under semi’s. The three pulled up along a semi and stole it. The next morning a gray Nissan 350z owned by Brian shifted into gear and took off in the stadium parking lot. As he hit 180 miles per hour his car slid out and almost fell off a cliff. He pulled out of the lot to go to Torreto’s. As he walked up to the counter Mia said ”tuna on white?” Brian said “I don’t know. How is it?” Mia said “same as always.” Brian looked through a magazine as Mia brought him the sandwich. Then a maroon BMW m3, a green Mitsubishi EVO, and a white Volkswagen golf GTI pulled up. Brian said “see you tomorrow Mia.” She said “see you later.” Brian walked to his blue ford f-150 and left. That same night Brian pulled up to a street race wait. A man walked up to Brian and said “ this your ride?” Brian said “ I’m standing next to it.” The man introduced himself as hector. Hector said “ what you running under there?” Brian smiled. Hector said “here they come.” A crew of street racers pulled up. The lead driver stepped out of a orange Nissan Silvia. It was Domonick he said “hector.” Hector came and two other street racers came with him. Hector said “how are we doing this?” “two grand each.” said Domonick. Hector said “alright lets go.” “Hold on.” Brian said “I don’t have the cash but I do have the pink slip to my car.” Domonick said “alright lets go.” The four racers pulled up to the line but as they were going to start cops showed up. Everyone went in different directions the cops mainly went after the racers. Brian followed Domonick into a busy intersection as the cops followed they smashed into the traffic. Domonick and Brian went to a long street. Domonick said “I am going for it on green.” Brian raced along Domonick for 4 miles until Domonick smashed into a semi and flipped. Brian ran to Domonick’s car and pulled him out. Domonick said “I didn’t see that coming.”
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1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)? Very original.
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2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed? there is alot of pressure to win, very interesting.

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions? Yes, street racers are in normal life.

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see // and //hear // and //experience // the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story? This story had alot of dialogue, there could have been more details and a longer story.

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author? Make the story longer

~Damon~

Technical Details
1. Punctuation, grammar, word choice.
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The Alien King's Decision
1. On the level of story-telling: if you were the King (or the aliens), would you allow this story-teller to live another day? If no,why not?
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2. Be specific, try not to merely write, " this was good", instead explain what was good about it and why.

3. Nominate "Hall of Fame" stories. 