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= SMS Group 3=

Introductions
Meet Owen Meet Richard

Story
The Boy Who Saved the Beavers

Once upon a time...

There was a little boy named Jimmy. He was short, fat, and very shy. One day Jimmy was walking and the mayor of the town Centrinopolus came running up to him flailing his arms and yelling. Jimmy tried to calm him down so he could tell him the problem. The mayor said that the town's river that is filled with beavers are getting their necks caught in soda six-pack plastic things. Jimmy then went on a hunt to find who was throwing the six-pack plastic things in the river. Jimmy traveled up river only to find the family Larynskies. Dun Dun Dun. Jimmy went and knocked on the door of the Larynskies. There are four Larynskies who are all are soda holics and drank about ten sodas a day each. He suggested that they recycle the soda plastic instead of throwing them in the river. After hearing this idea about “recycling” the Larynskies got exasperated and kicked Jimmy out of their mobile home and onto the hard dirt ground. Jimmy screamed some mean things at the Larynskies which got them mad and they started chasing him. Jimmy ran and ran until he couldn't run anymore. Finally they stopped chasing him and went back to their mobile home to drink their sodas. Jimmy decided to go back to the mobile home and spy on the Larynskies in the bushes. Five minutes later the Larynskies came out with a crate full of soda plastic and dumped it in the river. After seeing that, Jimmy ran back to the beavers, sat down, and tried to think of a plan to stop the soda plastic from getting to the beavers. He thought of one almost instantly. He was going to set up a net in the river that will catch all the soda plastic and prevent it from getting to the beavers. Jimmy went to the police station to tell the cops what has been happening. The police proceeded to the Larynskies and told them that they either had to stop drinking soda or pay a two million dollar fine for littering and endangerment of animals. Since the Larynskies couldn't pay the fine and they obviously weren't going to give up soda they were put in jail.

THE END

PS: the Larynskies stopped drinking soda since it wasn't allowed in jail. PSS: Jimmy saved the beavers and since he was overweight already he gave all the soda to the beavers. PSSS: beavers like soda PSSSS: Jimmy lived a happy and overweight life after becoming a soda-holic and drinking lots of soda.

THE END (again) or is it?

TWO WEEKS LATER...

The Larynskies got bored sitting around in jail so they took their bed sheets and made a big rope which they used to climb out their window. Unfortunately they lowered themselves right in front of a few cops eating doughnuts and drinking coffee, who took them back inside and into a super protective jail cell.

THE END (for real this time)

By: Owen, Richard

PEER REVIEW

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)? 2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed? 3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions? 4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story? 5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author? PEER REVIEW (group 2) 1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)? 2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed? 3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions? 4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story? 5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?
 * It is good enough but you should add a little more scenes to it.**
 * The story has enough problems but it needs more suspense.The ending is confusing so you need to make it more clear.**
 * The characters are life like but you need to put dialogue in it**. **You need some more characteristics for your character.**
 * I don't really experience this story. You need to put some more action and dialogue.**
 * The rising action needs improvement. There needs more excitement that will grab the reader.**
 * It is a good plot but they should have put more description in it.**
 * The story needs a little more suspense. And I really do not get the ending.**
 * The characters are kind of life like but it needs more dialogue.**
 * You should have put more action in the story so I could feel like I am in the stroy.**

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