SO-Shane+H.

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 * Introduction:** i like to play sports, drawing is another one of my favorite hobbies. although its hard to think of somthing to draw. I might not be the best drawer but i still like to draw.

** Hunting ** “I’m going out to the woods.” (No one replies.) “Hay, I’m going to the woods.” (Nobody answers) so he angrily stomped up the stairs. He nearly busted down the door. “Couldn’t you here me?” “Yes, I just didn’t want to say any thing back to you.” “Why not?” “Because I didn’t feel like it.” “Well see you later.” So he drove to the woods. “Wait up.” But her dad was already gone. So she decided to call him on his cell phone noticing that he never brings his cell phone when hunting. But the wood wasn’t n to far down the road. So she jumped on her bike and left the house carrying a tag to shoot a deer. But unfortunately she doesn’t know where exactly in the woods he located. So she got off her bike and parked it near the road in the woods. And walked around the woods to search for her father. “There you are.” She said excitedly when her dad nearly jumped to the next branch hitting his head on it. “Sorry about that.” “It’s ok.” “I brought you your tag for a deer.” Thank you dear, now you go home.” “All right then.” So she walked back to her bike and hoped on. So as she was going home she was mumbling a song in her head distracted from the road. She hit a bump causing her to fall off her bike fell in a hole. And crawled out of the hole into a whole different dimension. So she goes back into the hole and comes back out. Wondering how that happened. As soon as she got back on the bike she heard her brother running out of the house. And overheard what her brother saying “I’m getting a paid more money today!” “In your face sister.” “Getting paid for what?” “I did your chores.” What! I’m supposed to get paid for my chores, but wait you did my chores already so I don’t have anything to do.” “And besides dad will think that you did your work and I did mine. “Too late I already called him and told.” “You don’t even know his number.” “I do now.” “I hate you” she said with an idea. “Oh well.” “Hay look hear he comes now.” So she went to her room to prove that she did her work. By doing that she remembered that she had herself recorded doing, Even though it was from a different time that she did her chores. When her dad got back in the house, she said to her dad that she did all of her chores and asked her dad who do you believe me, or him? To be continued…
 * By: Shane Heath **

**Questions for Peer Reviewers**
(Think in terms of questions you would like to ask the author.)

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?