Joshua

**Siblings:2 brows**
 * **Hi, my name is joshua **
 * Grade:7th**
 * Best Holiday: christmas **
 * Birth Month:october **
 * Career Goals:break dance **
 * Favorite move(s): rollmodel **
 * Favorite Food: bacon **
 * Favorite Munchies: cookies **
 * Favorite soft drink:warte **
 * Favorite Subject: gym **
 * Pet Peeve:home work **
 * Pets: dogs and cats **

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The main characters in this story is Joshua ,Mike Jess, and Tiffany and this story is about 4 friends going in a hunted house. We all went in to the house and a ghost came and tuck Tiffani and Jess a way .And Joshua and Mike have to find them so one we try to find them we run all around the hunted house and we run in a mirror and one we ran into the mirror it and we had .saw them but we did not catch them .And there are zombies every were so Joshua and mike grabbed the to bats and hit them and one zombie had bit Joshua and I trend in to one. But I was stele good so one we fond them we ran out the house and went home one we went home we hade told owe mom a bout it but thay would not belive us so we tock them with us to show them so one thay came to luck at it AND THEN THAY BELIVE US SO ONE THAY BELIVE THAY HAD TUCK US OUT FOE ICE CREM AND WE ALL LIVEED HAPPYLEY EVER AFTER. THE END

Questions for Peer Reviewers

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

The plot was not really original and not that creative. My suggestions are why does the ghost come out and take Tiffani and Jess away. Is it a vengeful ghost does it hate the children in the story for some reason? Please explain more. How were you still good did you plan a method to evade from the zombies? Did you manage to save Tiffani and Jess because you just wrote about them then stopped. So basically write more so people who read your stories can understand what the message is.

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

I think you should add more there was not a lot of tension and I don't really understand the climax. The ending was the mum took them out for ice cream. Why did the mother take them out for ice cream? I don't understand.

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

I don't understand the characters because you didn't write much about them.

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story? There wasn't alot of detail. I coulden't experience the story. I would like to see more detail in the story.

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author? You have to explain more. You just wrote the story quickly with no detail and explanation. I would suggest you plan out your story because you just wrote then wrote.

ISKL Sarah B

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author? ||

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