ISKL+Sophia

** Introduction:**
Include some or all of the following, as well as a link to your blog: first name, what you like to do in and out of school, favourites (food, sport, hobby, TV show, video game, etc.), places visited, future plans, claim to fame.  Hello my name is Sophia i was born in Malaysia but I lived in Mexico for about 1 year and my mom is from Mexico. What I like to do in school is hang out with my friends and study when i'm out of school i like to hang out with my family and just hang out in the mall. My favorite food is souffle that my mom does, my favorite sport would be badminton or swimming. My favorite tv show would be American Idol, America's Next Top Model and Britain's Next Top Model and sometimes I like to watch Oprah Winfrey show, I don't really have a favorite video game because i don't like video games. The places I visited is Mexico and the U.S, my future plans is to become a fasion designer or be a doctor. I feel that i do really well in painting because it is my favorite hobby to do since I was five years old.

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 * Once upon a time there was a girl name Sarah and she never do her homework. One day in school Sarah went to humanities and guess what she forgot to bring her homework and she hopes that she doesn´t get in trouble with her teacher name Mr.McQueen because he expects that everyone did the homework. So he went by desk one by one and so far everyone seems to have done their homework but when it got on sarah´s table she had to say no because she needs to be honest. When class finished Mr.McQueen said to Sarah to stay for awhile and said to her ¨ What can we do with you to ask you to do your homework if not your grades are going down and I know you don´t want that.¨ ¨ Well maybe I can come in after school and get some help.¨ said Sarah ¨ I think that´s a good idea for you to do your homework in my class,¨ said Mr.McQueen. So Sarah agree that she could come in after school to get her homework done and get her grade up to an A so after a few months past Sarah finally got her grade in humanities an A and her parents are proud of her and she´s proud of herself**=====

**Questions for Peer Reviewers**
(Think in terms of questions you would like to ask the author.)

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)? I think it was very original. One thing you might consider would be a little bit more explanitory. What is Sarah feeling and what emotions does she have. 2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed? Like I said before, try to carry explain more to carry it on and build tension when he is coming to collect the home work. 3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions? Consider giving a little bit more background about Sarah. Her family, her friends, what does she like to do, does she have a pesky little brother. I don't know! Be creative with it! Have fun! 4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?

By: VM Michael 1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)? The plot of the story is very original. Maybe if you put a special twist or more details to make the story seem more lively.

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed? Yes there is enough suspense, especially when the teacher wanted all the kids to do their homework. It is a good climax although the detail that said that Sarah does not do her homework made the fact that she did not do her homework a little boring. 3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions? Sarah and Mr. McQueen are very life like and likable. There was not a lot of description or dialogue, but I get a good sense from the actions of the characters.

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story? I would like to see less details about the characters and a little bit more excitement and tension.

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author? The climax, or part when Mr. McQueen sees that Sarah did not do her homework. All I have to say is to put more details and emphasis on your story.