SO-Zach+J.

**Introduction:**
My name is Zack Janas. I play football, baseball, and kickball. I play the clarinet for my school instrument. My favorite food is any kind of mexican, but mostly Tacos. I enjoy playing sports with my friends. If i could choose what i want to be when i grow up, i would choose a Professional football player.

**When Trolls Attack** By Zack Janas It was a cold, windy spring day, I was really tired. My friends, Patrick, Brent, Grant, and peter and I were outside playing in the backyard. When we threw the ball in the air, the wind was so strong; it would take the ball in a different direction so it was really hard to fallow the ball in the wind. We all got tired then went inside for cheese pizza and soda. When we were all done eating and drinking we went back outside and we played basketball. Hoping that the strong winds wouldn’t take the basketball in different directions, but it still did. We were all so mad because of the wind, it was like some one with a powerful mouth would blow then the ball would miss, but I don’t think that could happen. We were playing basketball and then out of know were, it became sunny. How could it become sunny in like less then ten seconds, when it was windy and cloudy, really? I ran inside to tell my mom, “Mom, did you see out side, it’s like sunny, and before it was cloudy and windy but then mister sun came out and shined up the day!” My friends came in they told my mom the same thing I yelled to her. She started to freak out. She turned on the weather channel. It read, “Breaking News!” we all huddled around the television. “There has been a storm that is traveling ferociously over the state of Wisconsin.” The television lady said. But my friends and I said that we don’t care what kind of weather there is, we want to play kickball. We went out side and we got a kickball, got cones, put on our shoes and went in the sunny weather. Patrick said, “Hey you guys, come look at this, it looks like a fire was her.” And Patrick was correct; it was a big burn mark in the grass. “You’re right Patrick; it is a burn in the grass.” I said. It looks like someone blew up a silent bomb. We looked up at the sky, it was dark, it looked like a circle, and there is a green circle in the middle of it. We went directly under it. The green light was flashing down at the grass, we backed up. There was a weird When it reached the ground, it stood still. I threw a stick at it, it started to move. We all were shocked. We were all whispering to each other saying, “Someone say something to it.” Know one wanted to but we pretty much had to. So Grant said he would say something. “Hello, why are you here?” Grant said. The troll seemed to be afraid of grant. The troll moved back, it started talking in a robot voice. It sounded like it said, “You are not what want.” The circular object in the sky had opened up again. It was green in the middle and a green ray reached down to the ground. It picked up the troll and brought him in the shuttle object again. The shuttle flew of into the sky and went into space. My friends and I were all saying, “Wow!” I didn’t know what to do, we wanted to go take a nap, and well it’s a good thing I was already taking a nap.

**Questions for Peer Reviewers**
(Think in terms of questions you would like to ask the author.)

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?