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 Introduction - Che Hoon and Hyun Woo 

Character: Edward, Kyle, Rory, Kevin, Wil (future Kyle), Mellisa

2098, April 14th at the Baek Do mountain, the extinct legendary animal, the Baek Do Tiger was seen by four 6th grade students. They were surprised to see the legendary animal. The students went to the internet and shared their news with the world, they wrote that they saw a tiger on Baek Do mountain, but nobody believed them. The four students Rory, Kyle, Kevin and Edward decided to return to Baek Do mountain to prove that the legendary tiger really exist. The Journey began with Rory's first step. " Hey what's that beam?" " What's what?" Replied Kyle. "I can see it too, what is it?" Edward and Kevin said. The three students except Kyle who didn't see it, disappeared with an amazing force. Kyle was unconscious and awoke to someone saying. "Are are you okay?". Kyle slowly opened his eyes recognizing that he was in a hospital near by. "We found you at the Baek Do mountain". One lady spoke. She was a tall and had dark brown eyes and long finger nails. "Whats your name?" "Mellisa. What's your name?" "Kyle" he replied shortly. Kyle felt strange, his voice was different and his eyes turned different colors every time he blinked. "You're strange" Kyle said. "It's because your not fully recovered" Mellisa replied. After a few more days Kyle planned to go back to Baek Do mountain. Mellisa followed too. As they reached the the place where Kyle became unconscious there was only black ashes left. Once more, two strange beams appeared. The beam changed strangely and Kyle disappeared. It was a strange place where Kyle fell. But there was one more thing, Kyle felt strange and empty. "Mellisa is not here!" Kyle shouted very loud, "Mellisa!" There was no reply. Nothing was around him but air. Kyle stood their for a while until he noticed he must find his friends and the legendary tiger. Just then, he saw a blue tile on the floor, like one you find in a bathroom. It was 12 by 12 inches. He went over to it, and lifted it up. Under the tile was a vast darkness. Since Kyle has no where else to go, he jumped into it. Just then, he saw his whole life pass him by, literally. He saw pictures and videos of him when he was born and growing up. Suddenly, he was in a silver and gold room, with clouds. The only things in the room were a chair, table, and a book shelf. There was also a man. He was old looking, had bright blue eyes, and a big white beard. Kyle said,"Who are you, where am I, why am I here, where did You come from, why are you..." Just then he stopped. The man was looking straight into Kyles eyes. "What?" Asked Kyle. "My name is Wil.I am here because I traveled here a long time ago. I am old and wise. I can help you on your journey back." "Okay, so help me," Kyle said impatiently. Kyle did not like the situation he was in and wanted to be home again. Wil said,"Okay. Follow me." Kyle followed him to the book shelf. Then, he pulled a book from the book shelf, and it opened. Not the book, the shelf. It was a trap door. Wil led him into a room where the walls were covered with newspaper articles. Kyle asked,"When IS all this? It looks like you have been collecting these for a long time." "I have." Answered Wil. "Where did you get all of these" "The newspaper" "What newspaper. Newspapers are delivered here." "Not exactly." Kyle would have asked what he meant, but he was too mesmerized with all of the pictures and articles on the wall. 'Tiger in Baek Do Mountain?' Kyle saw a article with a golden frame. "What is this?" asked Kyle "Actually" said Wil, "a long time ago me and my three friends spotted the legendary tiger. We talked to the government but nobody believed us. The only thing that came back was an article the said 'Three crazy kids spotted the legendary tiger'. We got angry and tried to find the legendary tiger. And that was when the big event happened, we got hit by the beams, and three of my friends were gone, I got unconscious. I woke up in a hospital near by, a girl name Melissa found me. After I recovered, I went back to the Baek Do mountain to find my friends and the tiger. That was when I saw a beam and landed in this mysterious place. I found my friends but not the tiger, so now I am getting older and older." Kyle was really shocked. He noticed that the story of Wil was exactly the same as his. "The same thing happened to me!" Kyle said." Isn't it weird how Melissa's eyes changed everytime we blinked? Thats it! The legendary tiger was Mellisa! She can change her appearance!" Kyle jumped around. "Kyle?" Three more old people came in from the opened bookshelf. Kyle felt that he noticed them. "Who are they?" said Kyle in confusion. "These are my friends, Edward, Kevin, and Rory, sorry not to tell you earlier, I thought that if I tell you right away you will be shocked" " I //__am__// shocked!... wait, so... you mean this is the future?" "Yes, you figured it out." "Well, how do we get back" "I am not going back. This is my home now. I have to stay here forever,"said Wil. "Are you sure?" "Yes. Now come with me." Kyle followed Wil for what seemed like only five minutes, but they traveled through the whole world. Kyle figured they were going back in time, to the present. It was then when Kyle saw everything that has passed. It was what Will did in the present, the failure of the journey. "You failed.... I failed.... We failed...." Kyle said. "But I cannot give up now, I will find the tiger and make everything back as usual." " That was what I thought in the present" replied Wil. "I am your future, what ever you do you will end up like me Kyle.." "But there is still hope, we still have hope because when I do something different that you have done before the future can change. You can change!" "Maybe that is only your thought, nothing can change" There was complete silence for a minute. "There was one more ME in the further future, right?" " Yeah, I tried to use the same method that you have told me few minutes ago. Everything went fine until the great fight with the tiger..." Once more, there was silence. Then Kyle thought of a good plan. " We only need to fight with the tiger, since you know the way to the tiger!" Said Kyle. " There is only you, me, Rory, Kevin, and Edward, we have no hope. I fought with the tiger like this in the previous time when I was your age.. with the older me and you..." "That's it! lets make an army of me, you and my friends! There will be a older me and you in the future, and in the future there will be an older me and you and in the further.." Wil laughed. He only gave a sign to Kyle to follow. After few minutes of walk they landed in the future. There was a never ending sky scraper. Kyle noticed that it was the house of him. As they walked in there was letters and numbers written. 'year 4052 Kyle, year 4053 Kyle'. "But wait, how can I live this long?" Said Kyle noticing that he will be thousands of years old "Well It is the future when technology developed, the place where you landed was a land of invisible mines... because the U.S successed on receiving the message from the aliens, we made the invisible mine block just in case, so as you can see technology developed massively" explained Wil. "You didn't answer my question" said Kyle "Oh yeah, I forgot about it, so since technology developed average people's knowledge increased and finally the smartest of all, a scientist made a formula that makes people stop growing physically but still grow mentally, in short a formula of IMMORTALITY. The first person who got the chance to receive the formula was me! The rest you will know" So when I open this door..." As Kyle opened the door one old man who looked same as Wil had a future weapon. "In this LIGHT year weapon developed, this will be perfect for the army, I was stupid that I didn't thought of this when I was young" When everyone gathered, raged with fury they started marching as Wil commanded. They hiked over the great volcano, the black valley, and finally they reached the temple of the cats. Wil reminded Kyle that the more of his future dies his life will decrease a lot. Kyle did not listen, all his minds were focused on defeating the legendary tiger. They marched silently and quickly to the temple. There were cats, cats that everyone can see everywhere in the streets. there was also house cats in side of the hallway. And there stood the tiger in the shadow. The tiger turned around. But it was not a tiger, it was something with two feet. "Melissa? I know your the legendary tiger, you just need to send us back" " NO! " the voice did not came from the shadow but behind him!!! "What??" Kyle was confused. His army was gone but one single man with a mask. Behind the mask the mouth moved. "Wil?" Kyle said still in confusion. " You are not that smart that I thought, you knew that the tiger can change its experience." "Wil?" said Kyle once more in disbelief. "I am not Wil, I pretended that I was your future, this ain't the future, it is the deepest part of the mountain where only the tigers can reach" "But why did you bring me here I have nothing to do with all this!" The tiger spoke "people don't treat us well, they think they attack them but it is not us that attack you guys, it is you that kill us for money! For expensive coats! We need protection! We are not attacking we are protecting ourselves. But nobody understand our feelings because we are tigers. We wanted to speak to humans and express our feelings so that they can understand us! So we made this temple, preyed to god and finally they gave us the ability to change our experience. And finally we found the one, a boy named Kyle who actually came inside the mountain, you are the one now that can tell the people about inicent tigers! "Nobody will believe my words, they will say I am crazy. Why won't you just go and tell them by yourself? Nobody will suspect you because you can transform to Human? "God gave us his word that the tiger cannot go outside the deepest part of the mountain instead of getting the ability. Your friend Mellisa isn't real person, it was your imaginary creation that made you come to the deepest part of the mountain without feeling pain. I changed my appearance to not scare you away, please help us. I will try my best. Instead send me home." " I only know the method how to come out, it is you that must go out, you just need to feel FEAR, fear is the main reason why people can't come into here" Kyle received a symbol of the tiger's paw, and the tigers mask broke and disappeared, the cats disappeared too, Kyle felt fear. Once more, the two light came. Where he woke was a museum of the tigers. "Excuse me, you should go out, todays work is over". "Pheww it was a dream." Kyle thought. Not noticing the the symbol of the tiger's paw in his back pocket.

PEER REVIEW (Saint Michael)

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)? It is original. Make the ending a little better I think. 2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed? Different ending i think. 3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions? They are life-like because they did what any normal person would do. 4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story? They help me experience the story in my head. I can follow along easily. 5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author? I think the ending need more work.