SO-Sam+P.

**Introduction:**
Hi my name is Sam Prissel. I play a ton of sports soccer is my favorite as well as baseball. I am very friendly. I like to go see new movies at the movie theater when I have time off. I like many kinds of foods like toccos, steak, butter noodles and any other kind of pasta. I also love to cook. I know that might seem a little weird but I do I love to cook. I will sit and watch my mom and my step mom make delicious meals. And the next time we have that same dinner they will let me cook. I have many dreams in life when I grow up i would like to become one of the folowing: carpender, docter, vet, soccer player, teacher, a chef, or a colomnest. I love to be out side the only reason I am in side during the day is because of school, and homework.

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The Team with A Dream By Sam Prissel Beeeeeeeeeeeeeep right after the first beep on my alarm clock I am up and ready for a big day well actually two big days. You see I am on a traveling soccer team called the Chippewa Valley Strikers. And this year I actually think we have a chance to go to state because I am on a new team this year and with new kids and we have this awesome goalie. And plus this team won’t interfere with baseball. “Sam are you up yet”, said Mom. “Yes I am. Why would you think I would still be sleeping, this is the day of my first soccer tornement of the year?”, I said. Sorry you know how you get on the weekends. I have pancakes down here and they are getting cold”, said Mom. My mom can get really impatient with me which is okay because she usually doesn’t ever really get mad and that is the same with my whole family. One thing that stinks is that my parents are divorced. So every other day I have to switch houses and it gets really confusing. On the way to Blaine Minnesota for the Swans World Cup I had my iPod on and listing to music while on the laptop I was watching videos from YouTube. And my mom was reading while my stepdad was driving and well, my brother, he was sleeping in the morning and I don’t think I told you this but my brother is also on my team this year because we needed another kid on the team. But actually he is pretty good. “Time to shine”, said my mom. “Go get them”, said my step dad (Joe) “Hey there’s our team mom please say you didn’t forget my other jersey. If you did I will be so mad”, said Ben That is my brother he can have really bad sportsmen ship because if I am even playing a video game with him and I am winning he will freak out and shut the game system off even though I am not done. “No I did not forget your shirt and plus I usually don’t forget any thing”. “Well maybe sometimes”. “Hi Carter so who do we play first I hope it’s not the Black Hawks they are really good and I would hate to lose our first game. “No were not going to play the Black Hawks at first were going to play Woodberry and so that will be a pretty even match”. “Not were going to whip them but if we do win all of our games we might be able to play a team from another country”, Carter said. (Goalie) “Sweet I was hoping to start off with an easer team because it will warm us up for the harder teams but you never know Woodberry could come out strong. “Games in about thirty minuets so lets go warm up we will start with two on three keep away”, says Mr. Thiel. “Come on that’s just going to wear us out before we even get to play. Can’t we start with juggling so we will still have energy for the game?” Matt said. “No it won’t it will warm you up for the game so you don’t break an ankle”, said Mr. Thiel. “Hey there’s dad and Jenny (step mom) I didn’t know if they were going to make it because I thought Jenny had to work”, I said. “She did have to work but she asked if she could go in really early so that she could come to this tournament”, Ben said. “Ok, now you go over and start warming up or you will break and ankle. And you don’t want to be out the rest of the season now, do you? So chop chop," said Joe. Instead of starting with three on two keep away we were just shooting on Carter making sure that he was on top of his game. Carter is like a Kangaroo soccer goalie. But coach Thiel on the other hand is a rock not even thinking about giving up. Well our whole team is like a rock; not ready to give up. Now it was time to get in line and show the ref our shin guards and our cleats. The next thing you know, we are out on the field and our hearts are pounding and we hear the whistle and we are all running up the field with the wind blowing in our hair and the ball bouncing off our feet. Matt asked me to pass to him so I do and we are swerving down the field and then you here all of your team mates chanting "goal" and you have your shirt above your head acting like you are an air plane. The rest of the game went pretty steady and the score ended up being two to one. And after that game the whole team went to Arby's and I got a beef sandwich with the curly fries and Mountain Dew for a drink. Once we got back to the soccer fields we watched the last part of another game it was the Black Hawks and Eau Claire. The Black Hawks won. “Ok let’s start warming up”, Mr. Thiel said. “Don’t forget to do your ankle twists so your ankles are loose," my dad said. We did the same thing we did last time, we just shot on Carter and warmed him up and then we did three on two keep away. We are playing the Wisconsin Rapids. Then we lined up to show the ref our shin guards and cleats. Then once again we are on the field our hearts pounding and I here the whistle and we are off. I call for the ball when Kyle has it. So he passes it to me and I kick it up in front of the goal and my brother is there and he heads it in. And once again we are acting like air planes and huddling around my brother. I had know idea my brother could do that. That one header caught every ones attention. Everyone's parents were clapping, even the other team. During that game we made two more goals. One was by me and the other one was Matt made, so it went pretty good. During the time we had to our next game we just sat around and played while watching other games. Before we came back to our last game we were smart enough to grab sandwiches incase one of us got hungry, which I did. I had a peanut butter and jelly. I wasn’t the greatest because the crust really dry and the peanut butter stuck to your throaght and I drank all of my water for the next game. In our next game we are playing the Black Hawks. They are really good. While I was eating my sandwich, Kyle was begging his mom to go get food. And the other players were playing keep away from the fourth graders which would be my brother and Brandon. He is really small, not to be mean though. Once I finished my sandwich, I help out the two little ones and we dominated at keep away after that. “Come on team lets go warm up for the last game of the day”, said Mr. Thiel. “Now remember,” “I know, the ankle twist dad," I said. For the last time of the day, we lined up and showed the ref our shin guards and cleats. And for the last time of the day were up on the field, our hearts pounding, and then the whistle. Were off running down the field, and I had the ball. I could hear the ball bouncing off my feet and our cleats kicking through the grass. I kick it to Kyle, who kicks it into the goal. I couldn’t believe it! We scored on the Black Hawks right at the start of the game! It usually takes us to the second half before we score on them. It was a harder game, but we won. The score was two to one and that was the first time we have beat that team. To celebrate we all went to Champs and I got one of the biggest burgers there, which of course, I did not finish because I also had a lot of fries, and a Mountain Dew to wash everything down. Then we went to the hotel. It wasn’t just any old hotel. It had a water park with huge slides. I couldn’t wait to jump into that water and go down those slides. So my brother and I raced up to our room for the first time and once we got there we were surprised with a big fifty inch flat screen with a kitchen. I had no clue that we could get this nice of rooms. “This is the best soccer tournament I have been to in my whole life, with the water park, the room with the kitchen, and the fifty inch TV!” I said. But Ben and I didn’t care about any thing except for the water park and so I raced into the bathroom and got my swimming suit on. Then once we got down there Kyle was waiting for us. “Cannon ball!” Kyle yells. Then Ben jumps in right behind him while I am racing up to the slide. In the door comes Matt and Coach Thiel. After them it's Carter and his parents. Carter also brings a water proof foot ball. While we are swimming my mom asks us what kind of pizza we wanted. Even though we already ate, we were all hungry again. When the pizza guy came, we all rushed out of the water and grabbed a towel the towel was actually really soft. And the pizza was awesome. I had cheese. Then we played in the pool for a little longer then the whole team left and went to bed. I woke early the next morning because our first game was and 9:00 and I had to get up early enough were I would have time to go get breakfast. I could smell the breakfast table from the second floor. I had a waffle with warm syrup and a couple donuts with orange juice. When I got back up to the room I got my soccer stuff on right away. Then we left for the soccer fields. Once we got there we started warming up. This game, we were playing the Eau Claire team. They are pretty good. Then we lined up for the ref and then once again we were out on the field, our hearts pounding, and we hear the whistle. This time we didn’t get the ball to start, they did, but that didn’t mater because our awesome goalie, Carter, blocks it and punts the ball up field to me. Matt is up even farther so I pass it up to him. It is just him and the goalie. So he kicks a corner shot, and it goes in. And for the first time today our shirts are above our heads, and we are acting like air planes. Once the got the ball back up to our side, they shot, but our awesome goalie blocked it. The he punted the ball up to my brother and he trapped the ball with his legs. Ben started to go up the field with the ball, when a kid from the other team smashed into him like a massive train hitting an undersized, out of form, Ford car. I raced over to him to see if he was okay. “My leg, ow!” Ben yells, "ow my leg." Ben sat out the rest of the half he put ice on his leg right away. But by the time the first half was over he was up and stretching his leg to get back into the game. The other kid that hit Ben had to sit out the rest of the game because that hit was intentional We won that game 2-4 it wasn’t easy let my tell you that that team has came around since the last time I played them. Carter thought the game was easy though because he was in the goal the first half and he didn’t get shot on that much. The next game we are going to play will be ST. Paul they are pretty good but there players are smaller. By the time we started warming up my brother said his leg was a lot better. “Maybe will go 6 and 0 if you guys keep up your good team work”, Coach Thiel said. “I am really proud of you guys” “Me too”, Dave yelled out. Dave is Kyle’s dad he is the one that put the whole team together because when I was with Eau Claire United I had to skip a whole lot of baseball games to make it to soccer. So Dave put this team together so that baseball and soccer wouldn’t inter fear. When we started warming up I realized that I was really tired and that I would have to take a nap between this game and the next. When the ref came over I noticed that he was really tired and crabby. We had him earlier as a ref but he didn’t look as tired. Once we got on the field I didn’t seem so excited I felt exhausted like all the energy was drained out of me. Coach had me start in defense I knew that this was going to be and easier game. And it was but not as easy as thought they started out hard but they got tired right away. Well so did I but it was still fun but now I can lay in the grass and take a nap. Once I laid down and closed my eyes I fell asleep right away. But when I got up there was a surprise waiting for me. We were going to play the Brazil team for the champion ship game. Now I was jumping up and down screaming my head off this was such an honor to get to play against team from another country. I wasn’t tired any more because I took a nap and after that I two mountain dews with two burgers. Then we started to warm up early because we needed to play good against this team. We couldn’t take any chances. Then the ref came over and checked our cleats and our shin guards. We ran out on the field but this time it was my turn to sit out firs but coach said he will get me in. I wasn’t so bad watching from the side lines. The other team scored on us right a way. After about two minutes of the game I got put in I started out in defense but once I got in I knew I wouldn’t be sitting out again unless I needed to. It was 1-0 still at the end of the first half. Now I will be able to play mid or striker. When the second half started I was up the field Kyle past me the ball and I tried to maneuver threw the other team but the ball was stolen away. And now I have to sprint back and help the defense because I was midfield. They scored again and that is how the game ended 2-0.  Even though we lost we were still good sports about it. And our whole team got to go to McDonalds I got the southern stiled chicken sandwich. This was the best tournament ever.

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