HA-Emma

Hello I am Emma here are a few bits of infomation about me. My fav colur is pink and yellow My fav sport is netball Fav lollie is rasberry drops I have 1 brother and two sisters

Mum I don’t feel well do I have to go to school today said milly. Well if you stay home you will have to stay home by yourself ok.

Milly was in her bed when she heard Woof woof woof all of a sudden Millys little Maltese shitzu cross starts barking like he always dose then she sees the pet bugler taking her puppy she jumps out of bed and runs to the door but it was too late he had already gone.

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**Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)? Yes, i think that the plot is oringinal but i think that you need to add way more this story doesnt tell us much about anything.

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed? This story definitely adds suspnse and tension to your story. This story is not satisfying and there really arnt any problems that milly faces

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

I tihnk you should describe milly more.

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story? I did not feel like i could understand the story i didnt feel like i was in it an dit also didnt grasp my attention it is a very goo dbegginging though you seem very creative.

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author? I think that if you add on it would be perfect. **

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)? good stroy u should add way more.

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed? i cant answer this question

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions? cant answer i dont know enough about the story

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?yes i can hear the dog barking it is as if im in the story

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author? needs more words and description.