ISKL+Imran

Introduction Zarif Imran

· Enrique – A hyper active boy · Mr. Doctor – A professional health doctor · Munez – Enrique’s geeky younger brother · Mrs. Ross – Enrique’s rich mom · Present · Starts at Enrique’s and Munez hometown in New Mexico · All around the world Enrique was a 15-year-old boy while his brother was 13;they both got whatever they wanted. In return for their mom’s kindness ,. Their mom only asked Enrique and his brother to fulfill their life without regrets. One day, Munez and Enrique were walking by a park when they suddenly spotted a rather strange looking lizard. Both brothers were curiou s about the creature so they started throwing pebbles onto the lizard. It did not react but the two brothers were still curiou s and as they approached it, the lizard spat black liquid on their eyes thus blinding them, they started screaming and shouting for help but there was no reply. After a few minutes, they started falling unconscious and dozed off. When both brothers woke up, they found themselves on a bed in the hospital. They were thankful that they were able to see again. A doctor and their mom entered the room and the doctor started explaining to them what had happened. To their alarm, they accounted a Gila monster, a very poisonous lizard. The doctor also told them that they both had 35 hours to live. And of course that gave Enrique and Munez a big and scary surprise. After asking for some time to think alone, they both agreed to make full use of their lives. They told their mom, Mrs. Ross, that they wanted to fulfill their lives. Their mom seemed quite happy. Wasting no time they got their money from their college savings, which in total was approximately 70 million dollars. They got their airplane tickets said goodbye to their mom and set off to their journey… When the children got into the cab all of a sudden the cab started to fly and the cab driver turned into an alien creature. The children then screamed and decided that the cab driver was not evil and he would drive them to any planet in the Milky Way Galaxy. They decided they wanted to go to x-zen the planet at the end of the Three Musketeers galaxy. The cab charged long distance fairs for leaving the galaxy and he charged them thirty-five million dollars. While in space there was an alien attack on the planet xenon and the xenonites went extinct.  The next alien attack was scheduled to attack earth in three hours. T hey had to go back to Earth. The cab driver took them back to earth it costs 15 million dollars. There was only one problem, when they went back to Earth they time warped and where 3 and five years old.  They still had 20 million dollars left to buy nuclear bombs but they were too young. But suddenly, everything faded and Munez realized he was dreaming. He remembered that he had 35 hours to live. He and his brothers must fulfill their lives. They did not have time to sleep and dream of aliens an other random things. An hour later, the two brothers began to fear their death; which would be coming soon. Enrique decided to go skydiving but his brother wanted to go into a submarine. They both started yelling and shouting to one another. Eventually they decided to split the money and split up. After breaking up, they went to different places. Enrique used his money to pay for skydiving lessons while Munez went under water in the submarines, he had fun looking at fish he never dreamed of. The brothers had fun but in a different way. A night's rest made them think of their actions. Munez is having fun and wants to have fun by himself. Munez and Enrique were different, Munez liked science and discoveries but Enrique was always dangerous and exciting, but he was the one who missed his older brother. Enrique wanted to join up and have fun together. A day later, Munez got a called from Enrique. Enrique begged Munez to spend the last 18 hours together. However Munez disagreed, he did not want to be bullied anymore by his brother. He hung up the phone, Enrique felt sorry for him. Enrique tried calling him but all he heard was beeps. All he wanted to do was apologize, he tried calling several times but still, all he could hear are beeps. He knew that his brother would never pick up the phone. So instead of calling his brother, he wanted to go and say sorry in person. He started packing his clothes, got ready and got onto the plane and again set off but with a different purpose. To find his brother and say a word that will fulfill his life. After landing on the plane, Munez surprised to see his brother ,Enrique. Together they decided to go to their homeland, Spain. While in Spain, a huge space craft flew right above the boys. The boys suddenly realized that the dream was real. The aliens have come to destroy Earth. Munez and Enrique guessed that this ship is the Mother Ship. The boys were scared. There was a sudden flash of light and once they open they're eyes the aliens took a driller and drilled into they're spleens and intestines. Before the boys knew it, they were dead. The End
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PEER REVIEW (Saint Michael)

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?  I think this plot is original... but it is kinda confusing when you write the dream and then how you write the real life. 2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed? The problems the characters face interest me. i don't really like your ending but otherwise its all good.At the ending there could of been more added. 3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions? The characters are life-like. these characters are likable and enjoyable at the same time. 4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story? They do him my see hear and experience the story. i would like to see what happens to them. 5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author? i think there should be more described on what each of them choose. i think you should add more detail to the characters.