BF-Aina

Hey, My name is Aina !, I'm from Barcelona, Spain. I am 11 years old. My birthday is the 8 of August. My favorite colors are pink, purple (the best!) light green, and red. My favorite animals are dogs and horses. My best friends are Blanca piera, and Catalina Cruañas,Anna De Tord and much more I have a house in paris, new york In brooklyn near to the brooklyn Bridge, the carribean and in girona (near barcelona).... I love (actrices) Selena Gomez (the most) Miley Cyrus,Demi Lovato, Hilary Duff, ashley tisdale, Vannesa Hudgens... My favorite food is fried eggs and rice. //I// Love New york and LA and Texas oohhhh and Hawaii and Las Fijis

My story:

Ana and Caroline prepared a fantastic journey; they prepared to go to shop in New York with Sabrina and Selena. The ticket cost 200 $ each!! Normaly, the cost 500 $ each!! Sabrina and Selena said yes,but there was a problem... PARENTS!! We needed to ask our parents... Caroline asked her mom and she said, " Are you going alone, or with friends?" "With friends mom, I'm 16 years old. Sabrina, Selena and Ana are too." Ana did ask her mom too. Her parents said the same, like the other parents. The good thing is that all the paents let us to GO!!! Selena called Ana. "Hello, Selena what are you doing?" said Ana. " I'm asking if your parents let you to go to New york with us?" "Yes, Caroline and Sabrina also." "Oh perfect; we are going the 2 of July... okey, yu have time because today is 28 of June and you have time to prepared the clothes.." "Okey, I need to go to eat BYE!!" "Bye" 4 days later..... "RING, RING, " The alarm of the clock had ring. Ana, Selena,Caroline and Sabrina had woke up. The 4 girls dressed on their favorite clothe for get ready to go to NYC. The flit went at 10:35 and they got there at 9:45 for get more time for shop. 8 hours later... IN NEW YORK!!!!!!!!!!! the girls where fastinated of the city: buildings,shops,..... "Oh my god we are in NYC, fantastic!!"said one of the teenagers. Ana and some friends of Caroline had an appartement but the teenagers stayed in Ana's appartment. " I sleep here and you guys ..... ammm... you can decide.Sabrina slept in Ana's parent bedroom with Caroline. Ana and Selena slept on Ana's bed room. The next day they went to the central park and that day occur something horrible..I mean horrible....!!!!! Sabrina and Selena DISAPPEARD!! :S. The were walking in an other direction and nearly we went to enter a big museum of dinasours Ana and Selena realized that the other to girls had disappeard!.... TO BE CONTINUED........

Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?

Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?