BF-Anna

Hey, my name is Anna De Tord, not Ana Latsanoovski and I'm from Barcelona,Spain. As you can tell I'm a girl. I don't really like vegetables but I love meat, pasta, some fruit, and other things. I do lots of sports, especially tennis three times a week. I've never traveled very far from Barcelona but I'm planning to go to New York. I have gone to Switzerland lots of times, France, England, and of corse Spain. My parents are the ones that travel a lot. My older brother lives at Switzerland and my other two brothers are here. I love Abercrombie and Fitch and more shops but especially that one. I have lots of dogs, because my dog accidently had children and the other one is pregnant, also accidently.

Story: THE GIRLS DREAM

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At Miami, at Mansion Carter three teenager girls: Katy Smith, Lily Mcarthy, and Shelly Carter were talking about boys: Ray, Ryan, Tony, and Steve. Jo-Jo had gone shopping with her friends: Dalia and Carla. Katy, Lily and Shaelly were enimies with Jo-Jo, Dalia, and Carla. Katy, Lily, and Shelly had packed up everything and got prepared to go to the beach. When they arrived to the beach they saw Ray, Ryan, Tony, Jay, and Steve playing voley ball. The girls really liked Jay. ====== 

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The girls took their shirts of and started playing. Jo-Jo, Dalia, and Carla were already finished shopping and went to the beach with their new roxy and o'niell bathing suits. When they layed their towels they layed down and already started laying down and they started gossiping about Shelly, Katy and Lily because they were with the boys and they also wanted to be with them. ======

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Next day, at the institude Jo-Jo wore cool clothes and the next and the next and the next day. Those days she was even nice to Shelly, at english class they talked, and by magic they went together for one day. They were together that day and the next day and then Katy, Lily, Carla and Dalia were jealous because they were not with their best friends, Shelly and Jo-Jo. They still talked but the other girls still were jealous. All the girls herd that their was a ball on friday so they went really well, they all went well but the best ones were Shelly and Jo-Jo, because they knew that the boys were going to go. Wh ====== Story: THE GIRLS DREAM

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**At Miami, at Mansion Carter three teenager girls: Katy Smith, Lily McCarthy, and Shelly Carter were talking about boys: Ray, Ryan, Tony, and Steve. Jo-Jo had gone shopping with her friends, Dalia and Carla, Katy, Lily, and Shelly were enemies, to Jo-Jo, Dalia, and Carla. Katy, Lily. Shelly had packed up everything and got prepared to go to the beach. When they arrived to the beach they saw Ray, Ryan, Tony, Jay, and Steve playing voley ball. The girls really liked Jay.** ======

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**The girls took their shirts of and started playing. Jo-Jo, Dalia, and Carla were already finished shopping and went to the beach with their new Roxy and O’Neill bathing suits. When they layed their towels out. They layed down and already started lying down and they started gossiping about Shelly, Katy and Lily because they were with the boys and they also wanted to be with them.** ======

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** Next day, at the institude Jo-Jo wore cool clothes and the next and the next and the next day. Those days she was even nice to Shelly, at English class they talked, and by magic they went together for one day. They were together that day and the next day and then Katy, Lily, Carla and Dalia were jealous because they were not with their best friends, Shelly and Jo-Jo. They still talked but the other girls still were jealous. All the girls herd that their was a ball on Friday so they went really well, they all went well but the best ones were Shelly and Jo-Jo, because they knew that the boys were going to go. When they arrived they all saw the boys. ** ======  "Do you want to dance, Shelly", asked Jay.

** "Yeah sure", Jo-Jo said happily. **
Now Jo-Jo was very happily like Shelly. Lily, Katy, Dalia and Carla were know dancing with each other and they were all having fun, that’s what they all wanted they wanted to have fun and that was what they were having. "Shelly do you want to walk at the beach also with Jo-Jo and Steve", Jay commented. "Yeah, why not”, answered Shelly. Now Shelly was very happy, her dream had become true. She didn't know if Jo-Jo new that Steve was going to ask her that question because she was not really exited as her. "Jo-Jo, I want to ask you if you want to go walk at the beach with Jay and Shelly.", asked Steve. "Yeah, sure it's going to be fun.” Jo-Jo responded. Now Shelly could feel that Jo-Jo was been told by Steve if she wanted to go to the beach to walk with her and with Jay. When the ball was done Shelly and Jay were at the school stairs waiting for Jo-Jo and for Steve. When they arrived they headed to the beach. While they were walking they stopped to eat an ice-cream while they walk. "Girls, I have remembered the boys and I are going to go to Hawaii to surf and to be together with you girls and maybe they bring a girl.", said Jay. "Yes", both of the girls shouted. Jay and Steve left the girls at Shelly’s' mansion and they both headed to their houses. Next day, the girls received a message from Jay saying everything about Hawaii. Their was only one week for them to go to Hawaii and all of them were nervous the girls forgot to tell the others about them going to Hawaii. The girls packed a big bag and went to Jays house because their were all the boys because they would wake up and heed to the airport. The next day when the girls woke up all the boys was all ready the girls got ready quickly and they heeded to the airport. When they arrived to the airport they were waiting for the plane and they were 10 hours on a plane. When they arrived to Hawaii they got to the hotel left everything there and went to the beach. The week past quickly and they came back to Miami. When they arrived to Miami the girls were so exited to see their other friends. Next day of school they Shelly and Jo-Jo talked to Lily, Katy, Dalia and Carla but they didn't respond. When Shelly finally got to talk with Katy she asked her what happened and of course Katy responded that they went without saying they were leaving and that she didn't never get her phone calls. When the girls resolved their problem they all talked about it and know at the school instead of being two groups of three there is one group of six.

The End en they arrived they all saw the boys."Do you want to dance, Shelly", asked Jay.now at the school instead of being two groups of three there is one group of six.

The End

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)? 2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed? 3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions? 4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story? 5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?
 * __Georgia:__**
 * **The plot was sort of original. Mean girls was sort of like that, the way at the end the 2 groups become friends.**
 * **Maybe you could have added a bit more tension when the girls get back from Hawaii and their friends aren't talking to them instead of solving it basically straight away.**
 * **We didn't really get to know the characters but I thought they were very life-like. It's very life-like to have different groups of friends.**
 * **The characters are very likable I think.**
 * **You could tell us a bit more about the characters and about what happened in Hawaii.**
 * **Add more tension when the girls come back to Miami and their friends aren't talking to them.**

 use a darker font please but i like the story