SG_Diego+C.

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//Hi my name is Diego and I am in 8th grade. I am 12 years old. I am in Saint George school. I like to play soccer, play videogames and I like animals.My favorite game is Dofus. I don`t like to play basketball.I have only one sister of 19 years old. I live in Lima, Peru. I have traveled to Los Angeles three years ago. I like to play my Nintendo Wii and my Play station 2.My birthday is the 27th of June.I hope you like my story. XD// =====

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__**Midnight**__ //Once upon a time there was a kid named Franco. He was fourteen years old. He had two brothers named //  //Sebastian and a baby named Daniel. One day their parents went to a night club and Franco and //  //Sebastian stayed at home. They played "hide and seek”. Franco hid in the park. Sebastian thought //  //that Franco was in the house. After 45 minutes, Sebastian heard a noise in the kitchen. //  =====

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 //- Sebastian: "Franco, are you there??? //  " //He heard a noise upstairs. Then he saw that the door was opened. Franco wasn't in the house because //  //he was hiding outside with his dog named Fido. // //Fido was barking because somebody or something was upstairs making noises. Sebastian found Franco because // <span style="font-size: 13pt; color: rgb(0,0,128); line-height: 115%;"> //<span style="color: rgb(0,0,128);">Fido was barking. And Sebastian said: // <span style="font-size: 13pt; color: rgb(0,0,128); line-height: 115%;"> =====

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<span style="color: rgb(0,0,128);"> //<span style="color: rgb(0,0,128);">- Sebastian: "Yes, but our mum and dad say that we can't go outside at night..., and why were you // <span style="font-size: 13pt; color: rgb(0,0,128); line-height: 115%;"> //<span style="color: rgb(0,0,128);">making noises upstairs? // <span style="font-size: 13pt; color: rgb(0,0,128); line-height: 115%;">" =====

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<span style="font-size: 13pt; color: rgb(0,0,128); line-height: 115%;"> //<span style="color: rgb(0,0,128);">- Franco: "I didn't make any noise". // <span style="font-size: 13pt; color: rgb(0,0,128); line-height: 115%;"> =====

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<span style="font-size: 13pt; color: rgb(0,0,128); line-height: 115%;"> //<span style="color: rgb(0,0,128);">- Sebastian: "Ok, but you didn't close the door!!! // <span style="font-size: 13pt; color: rgb(0,0,128); line-height: 115%;">" //<span style="color: rgb(0,0,128);">They heard somebody shouting upstairs. Daniel was shouting. // <span style="font-size: 13pt; color: rgb(0,0,128); line-height: 115%;"> //<span style="color: rgb(0,0,128);">Sebastian was a coward and ran outside. // <span style="font-size: 13pt; color: rgb(0,0,128); line-height: 115%;"> =====

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<span style="font-size: 13pt; color: rgb(0,0,128); line-height: 115%;"> //<span style="color: rgb(0,0,128);">- Sebastian: "Ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh!!!!!!!! // <span style="font-size: 13pt; color: rgb(0,0,128); line-height: 115%;"> " //<span style="color: rgb(0,0,128);">Franco found a knife in the kitchen and he called 911. // <span style="font-size: 13pt; color: rgb(0,0,128); line-height: 115%;"> =====

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<span style="font-size: 13pt; color: rgb(0,0,128); line-height: 115%;"> //<span style="color: rgb(0,0,128);">- Franco: "Hello, a robber is in my house and........ . Hello, hello..." - the telephone was dead... // <span style="font-size: 13pt; color: rgb(0,0,128); line-height: 115%;"> //<span style="color: rgb(0,0,128);">- Robber: "Ha ha, I cut the telephone line // <span style="font-size: 13pt; color: rgb(0,0,128); line-height: 115%;">" =====

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//<span style="color: rgb(0,0,128);">It was 11 o'clock and nobody was there. // <span style="font-size: 13pt; color: rgb(0,0,128); line-height: 115%;"> //<span style="color: rgb(0,0,128);">Sebastian returned with a machine gun and two friends named Santiago and Alonso. // <span style="font-size: 13pt; color: rgb(0,0,128); line-height: 115%;"> //<span style="color: rgb(0,0,128);">Franco hid in the bathroom. // //<span style="color: rgb(0,0,128);">The robber broke the bathroom's door. // <span style="font-size: 13pt; color: rgb(0,0,128); line-height: 115%;"> =====

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<span style="font-size: 13pt; color: rgb(0,0,128); line-height: 115%;"> //<span style="color: rgb(0,0,128);">- Robber: "Don't move or I'll kill you." // //<span style="color: rgb(0,0,128);">"BOOM" // <span style="font-size: 13pt; color: rgb(0,0,128); line-height: 115%;"> //<span style="color: rgb(0,0,128);">The gun made a noise. // <span style="font-size: 13pt; color: rgb(0,0,128); line-height: 115%;"> //<span style="color: rgb(0,0,128);">Sebastian killed the robber and Daniel. // =====

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<span style="color: rgb(0,0,128);"> <span style="font-size: 13pt; color: rgb(0,0,128); line-height: 115%;"> //<span style="color: rgb(0,0,128);">- Sebastian: "Oh, no I killed Daniel by accident! // <span style="font-size: 13pt; color: rgb(0,0,128); line-height: 115%;">" //<span style="color: rgb(0,0,128);">It was 12 o'clock and an earthquake hit. Santiago was very coward and he killed himself with his gun. // <span style="font-size: 13pt; color: rgb(0,0,128); line-height: 115%;"> //<span style="color: rgb(0,0,128);">Alonso went to Daniel's room and somebody attacked him. // <span style="font-size: 13pt; color: rgb(0,0,128); line-height: 115%;"> //<span style="color: rgb(0,0,128);">The house broke in two parts because of the earthquake and Alonso fell down. He died because he fell in a tree near to the house. // <span style="font-size: 13pt; color: rgb(0,0,128); line-height: 115%;"> //<span style="color: rgb(0,0,128);">Sebastian heard another noise in Daniel's room. // <span style="font-size: 13pt; color: rgb(0,0,128); line-height: 115%;"> //<span style="color: rgb(0,0,128);">The robber attacked him and kidnapped him. // <span style="font-size: 13pt; color: rgb(0,0,128); line-height: 115%;"> //<span style="color: rgb(0,0,128);">- Franco: "No, my brother was kidnapped // <span style="font-size: 13pt; color: rgb(0,0,128); line-height: 115%;">" //<span style="color: rgb(0,0,128);">He chased the robber. It was 12:00:55. // <span style="font-size: 13pt; color: rgb(0,0,128); line-height: 115%;"> =====

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<span style="font-size: 13pt; color: rgb(0,0,128); line-height: 115%;"> //<span style="color: rgb(0,0,128);">- Robber: "The earthquake never ends!!!" // <span style="font-size: 13pt; color: rgb(0,0,128); line-height: 115%;"> //<span style="color: rgb(0,0,128);">Fido was running too. // <span style="font-size: 13pt; color: rgb(0,0,128); line-height: 115%;"> =====

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<span style="font-size: 13pt; color: rgb(0,0,128); line-height: 115%;"> //<span style="color: rgb(0,0,128);">- Fido: "ARRRRRRR... // <span style="font-size: 13pt; color: rgb(0,0,128); line-height: 115%;"> " //<span style="color: rgb(0,0,128);">Fido bit the robber's leg. The robber was caught by the police. // <span style="font-size: 13pt; color: rgb(0,0,128); line-height: 115%;"> //<span style="color: rgb(0,0,128);">It was 12:01 and the earthquake stopped. // <span style="font-size: 13pt; color: rgb(0,0,128); line-height: 115%;"> //<span style="color: rgb(0,0,128);">Finally, Franco saved Sebastian, but were they already saved? They discovered that the robbers were their // <span style="font-size: 13pt; color: rgb(0,0,128); line-height: 115%;"> //<span style="color: rgb(0,0,128);">parents and nobody knew why they wanted to kill them. To be continued... // =====

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<span style="font-size: 13pt; color: rgb(0,0,128); line-height: 115%;"> //<span style="color: rgb(0,0,128);">Diego //  <span style="font-size: 13pt; color: rgb(0,0,128); line-height: 115%;"> <span style="font-size: 13pt; line-height: 115%; font-family: Arial, sans-serif;">//<span style="color: rgb(0,0,128);">Chinchay. XD //  =====

**<span style="color: rgb(43,173,20);">__Questions for Peer Reviewers__ **
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