Robert

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 * Hi, my name is Rob fiorelli **
 * Grade: 8th**
 * Best Holiday: April Fools **
 * Birth Month: August **
 * Career Goals: become a broadcaster for a major leauge baseball team **
 * Favorite Band(s): bring me the horizon **
 * Favorite Food: pizza **
 * Favorite Munchies: french fries **
 * Favorite soft drink: i don't drink soda **
 * Favorite Subject: social studies **
 * Pet Peeve: when people talk about you badly and they never even met you **
 * Pets: dog named belle **

Please Copy and Paste your story here Selena Gomez- the prettiest and most hottest girl in the town is the stories hero. Selena was very quiet until she decided to be the hero, with the help of nobody. When she hears about the framing of Mr. Burns, she burst into action to crack the case and prove it was really…….

Mr. Burns- A retired racecar legend was the one who was framed the most. During his young age, he was the most feared racer in the country. He won 18 Indianapolis 800’s, a harder race then the Indianapolis 500. At the end of his career, he had major trouble with diabetes and was forced to retire. He then joined a group that worked with NASA to help them launch space shuttles. He then quit before they organization found out that about his corrupt business with the mob. After he quit working with NASA he was known as a bad person around town now that he was dealing with the mob. He changed his name to Mr. Buns to hide his identity. People that knew him before still know he is the bad Mr. Burns, like Selena, Rob, and Father Lewis. He is going through the roughest times now that he is framed for the murder of Jouis Strudwick

Jouis Strudwick – Owner of the coupon making business Jouis lives to his nickname “Bad Luck” a lot. Whatever he touches gets destroyed!!!!!!! You don’t want to be around this guy. Maybe his reputation led up to his unfortunate murder. Hmmmmmmmmmmm.

Rob- Once known for his impossible survive during World War Two, people think of him today as an idiot!!! Corruption and idiocy has ruined this guy’s award for aggressiveness during the war. People say that he was untouchable and that no one could shoot him down. He shot down 87 planes and was an ace for the U.S. during the WWII. When he left, he became a grocery cashier. He then was caught for stealing grocery items. He then blamed his wrong doings on his grandma who is 93 years old. The cops sentenced her to 50 years in jail, even though she died the first hour she was in there. People around town found out that he blamed his grandma, and became the most idiotic butthead in the town. People think he did the murder cause he is a notorious poop eater.

Narolyn Manson- im not gonna describe this guy……………..jk jk hes not the real one………….Narolyn first had the name of Marolyn, but he found out that there was another guy named Marolyn Manson who wasn’t too nice……so he changeeed his name to Narolyn…..a quiet kid who is very intelligent dosent like too show his expressions a lot. He wears black a lot and has an ear piece. People frame him to be a victim of murder because he was with jouis at the time he died.

Jason Piselli- owns the local candy store. Has interesting attraction in little kids. Every time a little boy walks into the store, Jason uses his famous line…..want some candies…..I have some in the back especially for you…….. the stupid children would believe him and go with him. Things are unknown wat goes bac there, but the kids come out scarred for life.

Supporting Character: Rabbi Waldo, Don Luis- the don of the city, and the local hobo who rob hates.

The scene of the murder: One day, Narolyn and Jouis, were walking towards the local temple in the town of Studville. Narolyn asked Jouis, why do we need to go to the temple again, we just prayed an hour ago. Jouis replied “you know that my dad wanted me to pray 100 times a day. Now that he is dead and left his bussines with me, I need to live on his reputation.” Rabbi Waldo walked in and greeted the young adults. “Hello boys.” Said the Rabbi. Suddenly, the huge chandelier swung and nailed the Rabbi in his face. When he woke up from being knocked out, he found Jouis dead on the temple floor

Where Mr. Burns was at the time: “Ayyyy Burnsy” said Don Luis as he greeted Mr. Burns. “ Hey how are ya” he replied. “How about u and me go get a Hamburg ?” said Burns. “id love to” replied Don. Burns and Don walked into town looking for a good burger joint. Suddenly, when they were chowing down on their greasy sandwiches, they heard a huge bang, like something fell in the nearby temple. “what the heck was that” said Don. “ I don’t know” said Burns, “Lets take a look”. The two men walked towards the temple. When they were about 2 feet away from the temple, they heard a loud scream. “ It sounded like JOUIS!!!!!” screamed Don. The two men ran into the temple where they found Rabbi Waldo on the floor, a broken chandelier, and Jouis, weary and dizzy on the floor, with Narolyn rite next to him sobbing. “You deviled boy!!!!!!!!” screamed Burns. He ran to Narolyn and immediately stared to choke him. As Burns was choking him in the temple, he heard a loud thump under his foot. Then Mr. Burns ran outside with Carolyn’s neck in his grip. When the cops pulled up, the arrested Mr. Burns for the assault of Narolyn. Don never went in the temple until after Burns got arrested. When he walked in, he saw Jouis dead on the floor with Rob on his side. As rob slipped something in his pocket, he laughed saying “This never gets old”. Don went to the police HQ and said that Rob killed Jouis.

Where Rob was at the time: “Ull never catch me coppers!!!!!!!!” screamed Rob. He was on top of the local grocery store running form the cops. “Please step down from the building Rob, don’t let me do this again. We’ve been through this many times.” “Neverrrrrr” said rob. One reason why he was in the war was his ability to jump of long distances. He jumped from building to building, until the cops were far enough away. Rob escaped again. “Yay me!” said rob. He started jumping up and down(NOTE HE WAS ON TOP OF THE TEMPLE). After a long time of jumping up and down, he heard a crash like something just fell from the ceiling. “Oh shoot” said rob. “I better go and check on hat happened down their”. When he got down their, he saw a fat man run with a boy in his hands. He also saw a boy on the floor breathing heaviliy along with rabbi waldo on the floor as well. “ Beter stay out of this” says rob. As soon as he turned away, he heard more breathing and hicuping at a rapid pace. Then, he heard a Blaugh. It was nice and short too. When Rob turned around, he saw the boy dead. When he walked to him, he examined him, but saw nothing suspicious. Then, his phone wrang. His quagmire ringtone played. He started to laugh, and as he slipped his phone in his pocket, he said “This never gets old”. When he looked towards the door way, he saw Don luis. The next place rob was was in the police station.

Where Narolyn at the time: as we know, Narolyn was with Jouis when he met his death. When they went to the church, the chandelier fell onto the rabbi. Heres what happened from there…………………”Oh goodness” screamed Jouis. “Rabbi Waldo is knocked unconscious!!! What will we ever do!!!!” Narolyn had a smirk on his face……. “I will never pray with you again!!!!!!!!” screamed Narolynn. All of the sudden, with all his strength, Narolyn punched Jouis in the face. Jouis screamed very loudly. Jouis was on the floor mildly knocked out. “O no, what have I done!!!!!!!!” screamed Narolyn. He bent down to him on his side. At the doorway, he say Mr. Burns and Don. All of the sudden, Burns ran inside and started to choke Narolyn. As Mr. Burns was inside, chocking Narolyn, he saw Rob at the back entrance doorway saying, “I’ll just say out of this”. When Mr. Burns ran outside with Narolynn in his grip, he got arrested for the assault of Narolyn, but not the murder of Jouis.

Where Jason was at the time: Jason was at his candy store, where he was just having a normal day of selling his fine candy. Rob is on his most wanted list from the store. He knows that rob hates the local hobo. Jason and the hobo have a connection. Whenever rob walks to the store, he calls up the hobo to scare rob off. Since rob was coming near the store, Jason called the hobo. The hobo lives under the temple. When he called he hobo, he saw rob turn away. Jason didn’t need the hobo anymore. Later, he saw Mr. Burns run out with Narolynn in his hands. He saw him get arrested. The cops came around later and took out Jouis ‘s corps. A long time after that, he saw his hobo walk out. “What happened?” asked Jason. “I don’t know.” Said the hobo. “All I know is that when I woke up, I hit my head on the floor board. It sounded like someone was choking somebody under a person who was dying……….but what are the chances of that?” “Ha ha your right” says Jason.

How it went down: when jouis died, mr. burns foot was on his neck. The force of the hobos head on the back of his neck mad a big thump. Jouis couldn’t handle the pain, and died from being hit so hard.

Questions for Peer Reviewers

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?