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 * Introdution:** Hi my name is Hanna my favorite subjects in school are social studies and science. Hobbies of mine are soccer, basketball, and playing the oboe for shool band. I have 2 brothers Jeremy and Gareth . Gareth is 24 he bartends, and jeremy is 8 he plays the same sports as me. My favorite foods are chocolate and anything italian {exspecially fettiucne}. Halloween is my favorite holiday because it's my birthday and because of all the CANDY. There are 2 dogs and 1 cat in my house, the dogs are baset hounds there names are bubba and stella, and the cat'sname is Alie.

**The Secret of Cassie Van Doyle ** On May 13th, in Berlin, Germany Cassie Van Doyle was walking on the damp Berlin streets. She spotted a middle aged, mysterious looking, women; she went over to the women and wanted to know why she was sitting on the streets. The women just stared and gave her an evergreen colored, emerald necklace and said, “Little girl at midnight tonight you feel a sudden shock it is so powerful that you will not be your self. When there is a full moon out you will feel that ever time, but here are instructions do not show any body the necklace if you do the shock will brought to you every night until you hand the necklace off to someone you trust but that’s only if you show any body the necklace.” The lady pushed her to leave but Cassie turned around to know who the woman was, but when Cassie turned she was gone. At home there was a smell of garlic mashed potatoes, smoked honey ham, and fresh baked French bread, with a chocolate cake, it was Cassie’s mother’s birthday and the house maid, Lola, had made the birthday feast. “Cassie your home 2 hours late what took you so long ,” Lola wondered “Now go put on your blue blouse and black skirt with the and white flip-flops now!” “Alright Lola, just don’t tell dad I’m late he will take my cell phone and the new laptop he got for me” Cassie begged “I don’t plan on telling him just go up stairs and wrap the present for your mother” Lola said, “And don’t forget to put up your hair in that bow, the white one.” “Oh no the present, I totally forgot to get her one” Cassie said in her head, “No problem I’ll jus t go to the store and get her a chocolate candy bar with a soda maybe even a small locket I’ll be back in 10 minutes.” As Cassie jumped out her window of her room and ran down Frankfurt Court to Jennings’s Grocery store and went to the candy aisle picked up a Triple Chocó, Root beer, and a small star locket, she then paid for it. Sprinted back down Frankfurt Court up the fire escape ladder got dressed and wrapped the gift. By the time she was done her mother’s friends had already arrived. In the back of her head Cassie kept thinking about the women on the streets and she asked questions like, why did she give the necklace, who was she, and why did she pick me to have, did she have it and she gave it to me, dose she trust me, she can’t trust me she doesn’t even know me. She tried to forget about it but as the present was being passed to Cindy, Cassie’s mother, the doorbell rang Charles; Cassie’s dad got it the person said, “Good evening I’m Giselle I’m here for Cindy Van Doyle’s party”. “Oh yes,” Charles said, “Please do come in”. “Thank you” Giselle said As Giselle made her way in her shoulder length sandy blonde hair covered her face, she has on a purple 3 quarter inch sweater and under it was a pale blue short sleeved blouse with a lace collar, and black dress pants and the most eye popping item she was wearing was a purple amethyst necklace, and her eyes were a very pretty light blue. Cassie got a close look at Giselle her eyes reminded her of the lady on the streets, “But that couldn’t be the lady on the streets had on a green cloak, and if she was on the streets how could she have those clothes but the amethyst necklace was the same exact style and same chain.” Cassie thought It was 11:45pm Cassie was staring at the clock and she shaking. Giselle was still there at their house wondering in the family room staring at clock also, but something was different about Giselle at each hour something about her changed at 9:00 her hair went from sandy blonde to dull blonde and at 10:00 her eyes were a light blue now there an ice blue, and lastly at 11:00 her purple amethyst necklace went to a dull gray. 5 minutes till 12:00 midnight and Cassie was upstairs in bed with her green eyes staring at the window. 3, 2, 1, MIDNIGHT. Cassie lay frozen in her bed with sheets off her body temp was in creasing by minute, her strawberry blonde hair went to a gray and her finger nails grew 2 inches longer and the evergreen emerald necklace tuned black. She immediately got out of bed went down the hall stared into the window and there it was the face of a witch. “What happened to me I’m an old looking but young witch, how did this happen? Cassie wondered, “Giselle she was here to make sure I didn’t show any body the necklace, yea and that means if she gave me the necklace she is a witch to I have to go talk to her now.” **To Be Continued** :
 * By: Hanna Kaufman**

**Questions for Peer Reviewers**
omg hanna i love your story its the best thing i have read you should make it a book - ♥kyli♥♥♥♥♥♥-aka besty (Think in terms of questions you would like to ask the author.)

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?