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Introductions
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Story
The Healthy Dream by Casey and Kate

Bethany was sitting at her kitchen table deciding whether to have a banana or junk food. She figured the banana would take too long to peel and the bag of chips would just open;she was starving, so she went with the bag of chips. Little did she know, that making these wrong decisions with food could effect her health.

When Bethany went to bed that night, she had the weirdest dream, but in Bethany's mind, she believed  that it was real life! This is how the dream went...brace your self.

It all started out in a field of green. Out of the sky appeared something with a cape. It was in the distance so Bethany couldn't see very well because she didn't have her glasses on. The 'something' started to walk toward her but she figured it was a human with a cape. It was a with long brown hair, and she wore an elastic suit. In the center of the suit, it had two letter H's right next to each other. “I wonder what that stands for.", thought Bethany, “She must be a super hero or something like that?” “Hello Bethany! I'm Double H! Also known as, Healthy Hero!”, said the . “Wow”, said Bethany, “I did not know that there was a super hero for being healthy!” “Well there is!”, said Healthy Hero, “I'm here to show you what it means to eat a healthy diet and do exercise, let's get started!” “ Sure thing!”, said Bethany.

They walked and walked for miles chatting about healthy eating habits. When they finally reached their destination, Healthy Hero said that she had a surprise for Bethany. She couldn't wait. Bethany thought that the surprise might be candy, cake, or maybe even ice cream! Boy, was she wrong!

Bethany and Double H walked into a huge building. It was very dark inside. Bethany heard a weird noise. “Did you hear that?!”, said Bethany. Before Double H could answer, a huge flash of lights and music turned on! All Bethany could see was a humongous pyramid with a gigantic cover over it. Next to it was a stage with colorful lights flashing all around...Bethany couldn't believe her eyes.

It was a talking food pyramid! It had dancing vegetables, fruits, meat, dairy, grains, and a bottle of oil! They were all singing the same song too! The song went something like this... “Cause we're H.E.A.L.T.H.Y, cause we're healthy for you, healthy for me, we're healthy for everyone yesir ey! We taste great, on your plate, as veggies, fruits, grains, dairy, meat, beans, and lastly, OIL!” “Wow that was really gre ...”, said Bethany. “If you keep a healthy diet and balance us out, you will live a healthy life, NO DOUBT!” “I guess they weren't done!”, said Bethany. Double H and Bethany clapped as loud as they could. Then everything shut down in a millisecond. Bethany said, “I guess they don't give encores!”

Bethany and Double H walked out of the large building. They walked back to the field of green and while they were walking, they talked about exercising. They talked about not exercising too much and about balancing out exercise and healthy eating habits to stay in shape and fit.

In the field of green, large winds blew from afar. They started to come closer and closer until the wind was in front of their eyes. It looked like a huge tornado! All of a sudden, a black hole appeared in the ground. Bethany jumped thinking that Double H would follow, but she didn't and Bethany got sucked into the black hole where everything in her mind and around her went blank.

Bethany woke up to find that she was on the floor of her room. “Did I fall off the bed?”, she said to herself. “Double H, where are you?”, she cried out loud. Her mom ran into the room, and said, “What's the matter?” “I'm looking for Double H!”, said Bethany. “I think you were just having a bad dream.”, said her mom. “But it was so real! I learned about healthy eating and exercise! And there were these singing food things!” “Bethany, you were in your bed the whole night!” “ But mom!”, she said. “Bethany, go get yourself something to eat, and get ready for school.”, said her mom. Bethany walked into the kitchen and decided to have something to eat. Instead of having a sugary bowl of cereal, she decided to have an egg and an apple, with a glass of milk. Bethany had learned her lesson about healthy eating, and exercise and was now going to always make the right decisions about food.

PEER REVIEW

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?
 * I think the plot is Double H coming to talk to Bethany and they are learning how to eat right. Yes. I would try to put more action into the story.**

__No do not think it is original I feel as if i have seen it in Health class. I think More action should be included in the Story it is a bit boring.__
2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed? __No there is no suspence. no there is not much of a problem. Yes You could add more complication.__ 3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?
 * No, No, yes. You could add something saying about a super villain and they tried to get away with it.**
 * They have regular life that is just like ours. Yes, Yes you do.**

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story? 5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author? PEER REVIEW (group two)
 * Yes they do. I would add some suspense to the story to make it more interesting.**
 * The part when she fell off of the bed. I would like to see a better problem in the story.**

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?

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