BF-Claudia

And this is me. Hi, my name is Claudia. I'm from Barcelona, Spain. Where are you from?** Here in Barcelona it's really warm and I like to go to the beach. Here are five things about me: **1) I do skating classes and I can jump in the air do a whole circle in the air and fall down standing** 5) I love my friends!!!!!! I love horses and I love to horseback-ride well bye **
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 * 2) I love CHOCOLATE**
 * 3) I love CONVERSE**
 *  4) I love animals

 This is my story:  The Chance    “Get out of here!” screamed a man. A bomb just landed in a small town. Jacob’s mom was going crazy; she couldn’t find her younger son or her husband. She went outside and asked every single person she saw, but she got no answer. Everyone went running to where the bomb landed. People said, “A man and a kid are trapped underneath the ruins of the building!” Jacob’s mom ran to the ruins. She dug through the ruins till she found the bodies of her husband and her younger son. Jacob came running to her and said, “Are…are…are they dead?” Jacob asked sadly. Jacob’s mom answered, “Yes they are dead.” “But…but…it can’t be true.” said Jacob. “Yes it is true and if you don’t want to finish like them run, run as fast as you can out of here. Get out of Iraq.” answered firmly Jacob’s mom. Jacob didn’t want to run but he also didn’t want to finish like his dad and brother. So he decided to run. In the middle of the night Jacob was getting close to Al Quwayr. He saw tons of people standing around the town with guns. He was scared. He saw a dog walking around the town. Jacob followed the dog. A guy with a gun said, “Is this dog yours?” “No.” Jacob said. So the police got the dog by the neck and started to walk away with the dog. Jacob ran after the guy and said, “What are you going to do with the dog?” “Well kill it of course. What do you want me to do with it?” “No, you can’t kill it.” said Jacob. “Why can’t I kill it?” said the man. “Because it’s mine.” said Jacob. “You didn’t say that when I asked you.” said the man. “Oh. Before you meant this dog I thought you meant if this was my uncle’s dog.” said Jacob. “Well if it’s yours just keep it. But I don’t want to see it around here anymore.” answered the man. Jacob ran away with the dog. He decided to name it Thunder. They found a bench where they stayed for the night. Next morning Jacob and Thunder started their journey again. It was a hot day. They both walked along the road that would lead them to Al Daiyara. In the middle of the road there was a police. The police was asking for people's passports. Jacob was scared because he didn't have his passport with him. All around there were fences so you couldn't escape. He walked up to the police and started to walk by him. The police said, "Where do you think you're going?". Jacob didn't say anything. "Come here young man." said the police. Jacob stood infront of the police looking at the ground. He had no excuse. No explanation. No nothing. Not even someone to help him. The police said, "If there's no passport, there's no way of crossing, not even escaping. So I wouldn't think of trying anything. Just go to your dad and ask him for a passport." Jacob said, "But...but...my dad is dead." "Oh, sorry. but there's still no way of passing. And if you don't get out of here soon I'll have to lock you in jail." said the police. Jacob said, "But I have nowhere to go .” “I don’t care.” said the police. Jacob walked away and hid behind a cabin that was the jail. At night Jacob woke up and woke up Thunder. He looked around, he saw no one. So he sneaked up to the fence. He looked around again. He saw a kid locked in jail. He went up to him and said, “Do you want me to try and get you out?” “Yes.” said the kid. The keys are in the police’s cabin. Be careful with the guard dog.” “Ok.” said Jacob. Jacob walked quietly to the police’s cabin. He looked through the window, the police was making a sandwich in the kitchen and the keys were hanging on the wall behind the dog. Jacob walked in, the dog was sleeping. He tiptoed to the dogs side suddenly he heard a crash. The police ran outside and called his dog. Jacob took advantage of the situation and grabbed the keys. He hid under the table. When the police and the dog walked in he stayed quiet and tried not to breathe. When the police went back to the kitchen and the dog went back to sleep, Jacob crawled out. He went to the jail door and opened the door the kid came out. “What is your name?” said Jacob. “My name is Michael. What’s yours?” said Michael. “My name is Jacob, and this is Thunder my dog.” said Jacob. Jacob, Michael and Thunder started their journey again. It was a cold night. They walked all the night till they arrived to Al Daiyara. It was a small town full of police. Jacob said, "We should go around the town so they don't put us in jail. jacob and Michael walked slowly behind followed by Thunder. They found a way around the town but you had to pass through the middle of the desert. They started to climb up a steep mountain in the middle of the dessert. They kept on going but were getting really tired. In the middle of the dessert they found a gang of terrorists. The terrorists got closer to Jacob and Michael. They said, "Give me all the money you have or you're dead." "But we don't have any money." said Jacob."We don't believe you. Give us your money or we'll kill him!" The terrorists got Michael by the neck and were pointing a gun at him. Michael was terrified. Jacob was putting his pockets inside out so they would see he had no money. "They don't have anything let them go. They'll die anyway in this desert without food or water." said the terrorists. Jacob and Michael went running away following Thunder. After three days they were still in the desert dying of hunger and thirst. Michael fainted right in the middle. Jacob tried to help him but he couldn't so he sat there with Michael lying on the ground. Two hours later michael was still lying on the ground. Suddenly from the horizon came a man. The man said, "Poor boys. I'll take you to my house." The man was riding a donkey. Michael was put onto the donkey. They all went to the man's house and had something to eat. Since the man had no children, had a lot of space in his house and the boys had nowhere to go. The man decided to adopt the boys and the dog. Jacob, Michael and Thunder lived happily ever after with the man that saved their lives.

THE END interesting story, where does the story take place

The plot is kind of original and i know alot of books that are about this. The plot was original and it was an intense story.
 * Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed? This story definitely adds suspnse and tension to your story. Jayden: it was a great story alot of suspence The story was suspensful I think it could have been longer though so it would of had even more suspense.

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions? Jayden: The charcters were very relateible my favourite was Jacob The characters were realistic because there really is stuff like that happening in the world. 4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story? Jayden: the story couldn't of been much better it could of had more adjectives t hought Your story had great detalis and those details helpded me imagine that i was that person. 5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author? Jayden: Nothing much could be improved ** **I think that the ending needed a little more.**

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?
 * Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?**