SO-Ellie+P.

Hello peoples, my name is Ellie, I go to **South Middle School** (no duh) and I am in grade 6. My favorite subjects are Lunch and Art. My favorite color is **purple** and i like Cheddar Jalapeño Cheetos, Chucks Taylors, Charlie the Unicorn and music. (almost anything but country or disney channel pop, i like Paramore and F.O.B. alot) My favorite sodas are **Mountain Dew** and ** Cherry ** **Vanilla** ** Dr. Pepper **. I have a pet mouse named Pepsi and a basset hound named Nina.
 * Introduction:**

“Tomas, time for dinner!” “Coming mom!” Tomas yelled as he scampered down the old, worn down stairs. “Ew, what is //that//?” Tomas exclaimed. “It’s a cheeseburger” his mom said. “Well it doesn’t look much like a burger” “You know, I spent a lot of time making that!” “K, mom I’m eating it.” “Well good.” So just as (almost) always Tomas had to eat his mother’s horrible, inedible food. But a few days later he hatched an idea. “Hey mom, what if you put something like, I don’t know tomatoes on the meat and other stuff you make for dinner, I think it would make them better, n-not that there not good. Because they are.” “What!? Tomato doesn’t go on meat, everyone knows that!” his mom laughed at “Well who said that?” over the next few days Tomas collected tomatoes and salt and put them all in the blender. He gave the red sauce to his mom and tried to get her just to try it. She refused. “Tomas did you use all of our tomatoes for that insane idea of yours?” “It’s not insane, just try it.” “No, Tomas that looks like barf.” His mom said as she walked away. “I’ll eat it!” Tomas yelled back hoping she would her him. Tomas didn’t give up, he tried many other people to try it, all of them thought it was gross and ignored him. A few months later Tomas teacher handed out a flier for a meatloaf cook-off at the park; this was his chance to get //someone// to try his recipe. All he needed was to get a parent signature. “Mom!” said Tomas. “I need you to sign something for school!” “Well what is it? A cook-off, are you sure?” “Yeah mom.” “Is this just so you can get one of the judges to try that disgusting red sauce of yours?” “No, of course not!” Tomas lied. The next day Tomas ran to school as fast as he possibly could so he could give Mrs. Martin his cook-off sheet. “I have the cook-off form!” Tomas as he ran into the bright orange classroom. “I got the form!” “Okay then, please go put it in the basket over there.” Tomas ran over to the basket but ended up tripping on a broken blue pen just as all of the popular people walked in the classroom. “Like look at that loser over there, he like tripped on that stupid pen.” Tomas looked up in horror to see the most popular kids in school staring and laughing at him. “Lets get out of her before all of his unpopular-ness like rubs off on us” They all said in unison as they walked away laughing. At home Tomas started to work on his meatloaf recipe, then he realized he can’t make meatloaf; at all. So he asked his mom to help him. She wrote down her recipe and Tomas made hers. “Ew! This is gross, but it will have to due, the contest is tomorrow.” He put his tomato sauce on it and ran to the park for the contest. When the judge came by he looked at Tomas meatloaf funny. “Why is it red?” said the judge. “It’s a long story.” The judge tried the tomato covered meatloaf and said, “this is the best meatloaf I have ever tasted! The only good meatloaf I have had, it tastes more like tomato than anything.” “I know, it’s the red sauce on top, I call it ketchup.” “Why ketchup? Oh whatever, this ketchup stuff is amazing.’ So Tomas one the contest and started to sell ketchup, it became one of the nations most popular condiments and known all around the world.

Questions for Peer Reviewers
(Think in ter ms of questions you would like to ask the author.)

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?