CI-Jalen

1001 Flat Tales Project

My Name: Jalen DeHerrera. My Age: 13. My Hometown: Pueblo, Colorado. My Hobbies: Basketball, Soccer, Xbox360. My Favorites: Xbox360, Music, Sports. Other things you should know about me: I play the drumset, and Avenged Sevenfold is my favorite band.

 Aaron was going to try out for the school’s basketball team. It was after school he had never tried out before but decided to. All day he was nervous thinking about if he would make the team. At lunch he was so nervous that he didn’t want to eat but then thought that if he didn’t eat he would do badly. Finally the bell rang and school was over Aaron grabbed his things from his locker and went to the locker room. When he got in their he saw his friend Nic in their he asked Nic what he was doing in there and Nic said he was trying out for the team. Knowing that Aaron felt a little better. When he went to the court he saw a bunch of kids that were bigger than him. Even his friend Nic was bigger than him. So finally the coach walked in since they were all standing in a line the coach walked down examining them. Then he blew his whistle and tryouts got started. Aaron was trying out and he didn’t think he was doing bad but he wasn’t doing good. When tryouts were over the coached announced the people who made the team Aaron heard Nic’s name get called but not his. Aaron vowed he would make the team next year. When he was walking down the hall he heard Nic call him, he stopped Nic said "he was sorry he didn’t make the team and that he would help him train to make it next year. So through the school year they would train that’s all they would do. It’s all they played at recess. Finally the day came tryouts. The first tryouts was three point shot all the kids missed one but Aaron made them all. Next was layups everyone made all of them. Then they had a scrimmage. Aaron was a forward and was making baskets but not a lot. The coach said one more minute and Aaron got the ball he dribbled to the three point line shot it and won it for his team. Everyone was happy and he made the basketball team.
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1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?
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2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see // and //hear // and //experience // the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?

Technical Details
1. Punctuation, grammar, word choice.
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The Alien King's Decision
1. On the level of story-telling: if you were the King (or the aliens), would you allow this story-teller to live another day? If no,why not?
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2. Be specific, try not to merely write, " this was good", instead explain what was good about it and why.

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