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“Come on lets go to our next class,” I called my friend Lisa. “Ok!’ she replied. We quickly ran to our next class which was art. We pushed opened the door, tiptoed to our table and then sat down quietly. The art teacher was explaining lots of thing and finally after 10 minutes, we were allowed to start drawing. I got two sketch books, one was mine and the other one was Lisa’s. We opened our sketch books and started to draw our first draft. The teacher told us to draw ourselves using mirrors so I held one mirror and started to draw my self. It was hard to draw really well and I was getting annoyed by something but I didn’t know what it was. I turned my head toward my friend Lisa who was tearing out a paper and saying, “This is not right! Ok…No! Why isn’t it working?” I was surprised by that, I never saw her like that. Lisa was my friend so I didn’t say anything even though she was ripping and ripping out papers. After thirty minutes later, the whole table was filled with crumpled papers, I turned, and she was using her last paper from her sketch book. “This is wrong!” she whispered to herself ripping. “I used all my papers! No!” I looked through the all the crumpled papers, I thought she had used it all but in all papers there were clean blank page on the other side of the drawing. I suggested, “Maybe you could have used the back side of the other papers.” She said, “I don’t like to draw on the other side of a drawing.” I asked, “Why didn’t you use that side draw there. You are wasting paper. Wasting is not good!” My friend just said, “But for me it is fine!” I said, a bit angrier then before, “But not for me and others! Right?” The students in the classroom nodded. I shouted, “You know that they kill trees to make paper so you should reuse it! Get it?” My friend Lisa was a bit surprised because I don’t shout at her that much, she knew that I was really mad, “Ok! Fine…I get it. I will use the back side of the paper…” I talked in a normal voice, “Good! And you should use the back side because that drawing is only your first draft.” I smiled at her.

**Questions for Peer Reviewers**
(Think in terms of questions you would like to ask the author.)

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)? Hey Mi Jin! The plot I didn't really get until the middle of the stroy. I think it was about killing trees. Am I right? It was a very powerful plot to.

It was good but kind of hard to understand the point. Was this about being environmentally good? Did this happen in real life? 2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed? I think the promble was that lisa didn't want to use the other side of the paper because she dosen't know that they are made from trees. You got mad at Lisa for throwing out paper and not using the back. It wasn't really exciting because it was about throwing out paper but you did end up solving the problem in the end. 3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions? I think that your characters are real and they exist in real life. Lisa seems hard to work with and sort of stubborn. You seem convincing. 4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story? It was very discriptive about the friend and that art teaccher. I would of like it if you discribe the art room and Lisa's drawing. It was descriptive about you, your friend, and your art teacher. You didn't describe your art room. 5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author? Your stroy could be more clear about the idea. Like why was she wasting the paper. The story could be more clear about why you and your friend were angry.

From Michael VV