BF-Zoe+R

Hi, my name is Zoe, I was born in Seattle, Washington, United States, but I live in Barcelona, Spain. I have a dog called Guapo and a cat named Spalding. My pets are both in the U.S, and I miss them a lot. I ride horses every week, and I really wish I had one. I have sholder length blond, curly hair and blue-green-gray eyes. I am also tall. My favorite colors are turquoise, black and pink. My favorite movie is... Twilight but there are so many that I like, and my favorite songs are Potential Breakup Song, Low, Womanizer, Piece of me, and Circus. I have many, many friends all around the world: Alea, Monica, Zoe Sala, Carlota, Merel, isabel, Sofia, Evie, Claire, Maya, Charlotte, Julia, Catalina, Ana, Florence and many, MANY more! I LOVE shopping, and, if I could, I would shop for clothes and accesories ALL the time! I live with my sister and my parents, and currently, I am traveling the world with my family for a whole year! I like traveling, but traveling around the world for a whole year is NOT very fun. I wish I could stay in Barcelona, where I have lived for four years, but I am going back to The U.S soon. Well, that's me! Zoe

Hey i really liked your sotry so i voted for you to conitnue on!!! Good luck and have fun byee!!! =)

ME!!!Me and some of my friends Me and Isabel Zoe Sala (right), Me DEVIL (middle right), Julia devil (middle left), Alea robber (left), Gerard gangster (upper left), Jordi (upper right)

Alice, Selena, and Ashley were all best friends, and all wizards. Alice was a tall, blond, beautiful girl who always got top grades and was the most popular and pretty girl in College. Selena was a curly black haired stylish girl who was not exactly pretty, but still cute,. Ashley, a blond, extremely smart, rich and beautiful girly- girl who had at least sixty different outfits were best friends, and they were all wizards. They couldn't live without each other. All of them had met as very young children, and instantly began to play together. Now they were all inseparable. It seemed like a normal, sunny day in college to the three best friends, but that was the day the three friends broke up. They had argued all night because Ashley had accidentally embraced Alice in front of the whole school, and Selena had laughed at her. That very next day, Alice could be seen storming out the front doors of the school with her bags.

Hi Ashley, how are you? Selena walked gloomily into the dorm and flopped lazily onto her bubble gum pink bed. "Hi Selena, I am just finishing up my work, Replied Ashley in a dull voice. Ash, you are a witch, why do you do your work by hand? What's the point in finishing my work quickly by magic. Now that Alice is gone, what will I do after I've finished, sleep? Ashley snapped. Okay, okay, quiet down, I was just thinking that magic is a waste of time. Selena said as she got up from her bed and walked over to Ashley to observe her work. Selena? Ashley asked looking up into her friend’s eyes. Yeah? Where do you think Alice went? I know you think she went home, but she's been gone for a whole month, but I'm worried about her,'' Ashley said in a small voice. "I've been thinking the same thing. It's not like her to just disappear. I hope she's okay." "Selena?" Ashley continued. "Maybe we should go looking for her. The Alice I know would at least send us an email telling us she's okay. Don't you think she might be in trouble?" "I know," Replied Selena, walking slowly back over to her bed and sinking into the cushions. "I don't know if you'll want to come, but I want to leave school and go looking for her," Ashley whispered. "Ashley, we shouldn't. We have school and what about our other friends?" The two girls stayed up all night arguing about whether or not to go looking for their much missed friend. The next day, when Salena woke up, Ashley and her bags had gone, and the friendship necklace that they had made was lying, broke on the floor. Alice saw a trickle of blood by the window and look out. What she saw made her stomach turn over...

Do you lot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)? The plot is very oringinal. I think that you are doing a very good job. You have been keeping me at the edge of my seat and i can't wait untill you continue your story.! 2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed? The problems that the charters face are very suspencful. They always have enough drama to keep me interested. There really isnt anything that i would change. 3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions? Most of the characters are alike and they do basically the same things also they dislike the same htings. You should change that 4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?  You did a great job of explaining things and giving details i espaecially loved when you told me the color of the girls bed and what it reminded you of, that was great! 5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author? The only suggestian i have for you is that you should make the characters have distinctive personailities like one could be kind and another could be harsh and then the last one could be moody. Other then that i absolutly loved your story! Please continue writing it soon i HAVE to know what happens next!