SO-Emily+J.

Introduction:
Hi, my name is Emily. I love to skateboard. I take karate lessons. There are 13 belts i am on the 4th one in the winter my favorite things to do is snowboard and then go inside and drink some hot chocolate. And I love the Green Bay Packers. This is just a little bit about me.

**X Cheese ** **By: Emily Jackson **
It was 11:59 pm 1 minute till midnight and it was 75° degrees outside at the football field in Eau Claire, Wisconsin. The football game just got over. When all of a sudden a loud screech came from under the bleachers. I went down there to see what all the commotion was about. There were 3 people standing down there; Kelly, Alyssa, and Melanie. Someone killed Garrett Lyons the city police officer. I wasn’t sure who had killed him but I knew it had to have been 1 of those 3 if not all of them. I had called the best investigator from Mississippi. Her name was Jackie Xiong. She had worked with a lot of other murder cases before. She had looked up the three names; Kelly was an ex immoral now she’s a student at Memorial High School, Alyssa bratty head cheerleader, and last but not least Melanie captain of the geek squad. Jackie said, “Hay y’all.” Jackie said, “Just because Kelly was an ex immoral doesn’t mean she did it.” I said,”Yeah she could have been in the wrong place at the wrong time, but then again she could have done it.” Jackie was questioning all of the girls. Jakie had figured out how Garrett died… Garrett died from blue cheese. To Be Continued…

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