SG_Gabriel+D.


hello! my name is Gabriel De la torre I´m 13 years old, I study in Saint George school I have a sister named Camila De la torre, we are from Lima-Peru. In my free time I like to play soccer with my friends and also dofus (a computer game).My favourite food is "cerviche". bye put an opinion of my story.

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__DOFUS__ In Incarnam, a land for adventures that floats in the air, there is a defensor of nature, his name was Krex, he was a sadida, Krex liked to kill Jalatos that are like little ships and to crossed all Ankama in a dragoonturkey but in the world of the twelve races there was not peace, a warrior named Dark Blad wanted to obtain the six dofus (dragoons eggs) with which you could obtain all the power of the world... Luckly, he was defated by Krex but his accomplice, who was an alquimist, made a potion with which he could return him to life but it would delay 200 years to work and in that time no one would ever remember him again. Even though he drank it. 200 years later Dark Blad returned to life and started killing all the people looking for the Dofus but they were destroyed by Krex in order to Dark Blad never get them. He started fighting with him, Dark Blad used concentration and made much damage to Krex, but Krex used his spell Zarza and debilitate him. Suddenly, Dark Blab used his powerful spell ... Ire yopuka!! and killed Krex but an Osamodas (an invocator) used spiritual bow with which Krex returned to life and the Osamodas summoned a red dragoon. He and Krex killed Dark Blad and all Amakna was in peace for many years.  =====

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