CI-Antonio

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My Name: Antonio carlo-runnells My Age:13 My Hometown: pueblo, co My Hobbies: football My Favorites: my favorite food is nachos favorite sport, football Other things you should know about me: brown hair 7th grade I want o travel when I get older I like to play many video games but I also like to ride my rip stick.i like fast cars and hope to own a shelby [mustange] when i get older!!!!!

 It is a normal day in Colorado ever since the world has ran out of oil but a little town little just enough to live off of. But there was a mean gang of oil terrorist they would go to towns and steal the little oil they had. But one day the little town of pueblo got a report that the terrorists were moving in their direction but before that the town took precautions and put gates around the towns. Also with heavily armed men around the perimeter. But the town took more precautions due to how many people are in this oil gang there is hundreds of them almost like an army but that’s what the town had been waiting for… a war! The people of pueblo during the mellow night started hearing the roars of the engines of their bikes and their vehicles. Children couldn’t sleep nether did parents wait for an upcoming battle. The town had so little time but so much confidence. The whole town was determined to fight but the people have been studying the ways of these terrorists. But they called themselves the legends. But the time has come they heard the crushing of their walls and cutting of their fences the people hid their children and got their guns and ran outside to protect what’s there’s. the children jumped in freight as gun shots were fired at each other. finally the gun shots ended as fast as they started roars of people screaming went through the town then an awkward silence the children were frightened that the legends won the battle but the parents got their children and held them and held them until they couldn’t breathe then they lived on until they found a different resource instead of oil a non polluting gas and they lived for hundreds of years.  1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)? I think you where creative. I haven't read of any stories that have to do with oil. It is good. 2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed? There isn't that much suspense. You could add someone getting hurt or something to add suspense. I think you could add the material that they used to survive.
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3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions? The characters are life like. Yeah i think they are likable but you could add more details of their lives.

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see // and //hear // and //experience // the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?Yes i can picture the story in my head. You could make it longer and add more details with the war and stuff.

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author? More details and you could make the story longer. - Jenna

Technical Details
1. Punctuation, grammar, word choice.
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The Alien King's Decision
1. On the level of story-telling: if you were the King (or the aliens), would you allow this story-teller to live another day? If no,why not?
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2. Be specific, try not to merely write, " this was good", instead explain what was good about it and why.

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