HA-Trevor

G'day i'm Trevor

age:12 grade:6 birth month:march

fav sport:australian rules football fav subject:P.E fav food:roast beef

Hi this is joe I love P.E. too but i would prefore art or world history. I have trhee sisters. How many do you have?

Whats up im Gerard I like PE and any sport but I love soccer. I like any food as long as it tastes good.

hey this is jackie put up a picture of yourself. i want to see what you look like.(:

ok

MY story

hunting

bag bag go get dog whf whf 24 days laret my dog got shoot by a hunter shoot 10/3/19 bron 10/12/75 how was she shoot well we had to get some cows from the forst. to be continude.

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)? Yes i think it is very original but it is missing some words and description. i think you should try typing more of the story because today we are supposs3ed to tell you if it lives or dies.

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed? More words definetly could have been added and some interesting characters would help the story flow.

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions? No idea 4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story? Yes i think of 2 bags 5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author? The whole thing

Joe

are u gonna write anything???????

is that all your going to right? it's confusing. by the way, what the heck is bag bag?? - jay, or jackie.

umm yah i think you need more. is this just your beggining or something?