Damon

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 * **My name is Damon Piselli **
 * Grade:8th**
 * Best Holiday: 4th of July **
 * Birth Month:August **
 * Career Goals: Boarder Patrol Officer.... **
 * Favorite Band(s): Eminem **
 * Favorite Food: Fried Chicken **
 * Favorite Munchies: 79 cent burritos at taco bell **
 * Favorite soft drink: Kool aid and orange soda **
 * Favorite Subject: AMERICAN History **
 * Pet Peeve: illegal immigrants and pet hair **
 * Pets: I hate pets. There hair annoys me. **

One day Jason Strudwick was walking down the street. He saw blue and Mito. Mito was crossing the street to where Blue was. Riff Raff suddenly jumped from the sky and landed on Mito and was obviously hurt. Jason was trying to keep his cool. So blue came in and called his fellow crip members. They came in a blue colored pick up truck. They saw mito and riff raff on the ground. They beat them with a wrench. They left and went back to there hide out. Jason went over and he light there bodies on fire, which also covered up the crime. A good sermitan Schuyler called the police and said there was 2 men who were burned and beaten to death. Jason after the crime just walked around the sidewalk waiting for one of his homies to come pick him up in downtown Mt. Vernon. He realized his home boy had Selena Gomez. They put her in a local dumpster. Later they Jasons apartment and realized it had been robbed. His 52 magnum was stolen and also his mattress. Jason and his homeboy got pissed off. They then went to a bar and met blue and his fellow friends. Jason and Blue got connected. Blue wanted to change his life so he asked them if they should go to a place where they can get help. Jason got annoyed and said he wanted to kill Bush first. Blue and Jason stood for a while discussing. Jason finally agreed they needed serious help. So Mr Eisenstein was to go too. Mr Eisenstein would help people who are crazy and want to change there lives. Blue and Jason have no money and need money so they can get help. They went and mugged an old women in the park. They only got 10 bucks. They were disappointed and Jason asked blue if he wanted to go to Texas where George Bushes ranch is. Blue has no idea that George Bush lives in Texas. Jason said they were going there to hustle. They needed some plane tickets. Jason remembered that he saw Selena Gomez with plane tickets. They went back to the dumpster. Jason found Selena un-contious with a man named Robert Fiorelli who was also un-contious. He picked up rob and threw him in the middle of the street. He then ran back picked up Selena, got the tickets, and carried her to a residential area. He put her infront of Pope Oliveras house. He then drove off, met with Blue and they went to LaGurdia airport where they had a 9’oclock flight. On the plane Jason sneaked many weapons and drugs he had hidden. A man father Capron dropped his coffee all over Jason by accident. Jason got pissed off and Picked up father Capron and Locked him in the bathroom. The whole plane was dead silent. They arrived in Texas around 10 central time. They checked into a local motel. Blue went to sleep when they got there. Jason went out and robbed a gun store and stole a m4a1 automatic rifle and a glock15 and many loads of ammunition. He ran 5 miles to bushes home where he saw two gaurds. He pistol whipped them and they were out cold. He walked up to there bedroom and opened the lights. They both awoke. Jason shot Bush 3 times in the chest. Barbra Bush called for gaurds but they were out cold. He ran back and on his way he saw his boy Tony Poppins beating on a short big headed man named Emmet Gaffney. Gaffney is a buissness man who who wouldn’t let poppins cross the street. He passed by Poppins and went back to the hotel. It was around 3am by then. The next morning came. Blue and Jason went to a pool hall and hustled. They made $5000, which was enough to get help. They mugged an old women and stole her plane tickets back to too New York. On the plane Blue and Jason stole all the fried chicken on the plane. Jason got mad that there was no sauce. They arrived back to Mt. Vernon. They went to Dr. Eisenstein and it would cost them 4000 bucks to talk to him. They agreed and proceeded through the room. There was Dr. Eienstein, and old rich man who attends his local temple and likes to go to barmitzffas. He talked to Blue and Jason and they explained their problems. He told them to go to a mental and drug rehab in North Dakota. They agreed, it would cost $300 each. So they still had $400 for plane tickets. They bought tickets for a flight that same night. North Dakota was cold and not much populated. They rehab was located in Fargo, right where they landed. They got a taxi ride to the rehab and ran out not paying. Jason didn’t like the people inside the rehab. Jason had a temptation to go on a killing spree. Blue calmed him down. Blue and Jason had to go to Dr. Mica Grenchensteininburgher a psycaiatrist. Mica gave Jason a dirty look. Jason pulled out his glock15 and shot him in the eye balls twice and chest once. Blue said “Yooo why you do that”. Jason turned around and grabbed the doc’ s laptop and hit him with it. Blue tried throwing heroine needles at him but they all missed. Jason pulled out his glock15 again and shot Blue. Some how Poppins came out of the cabinet and took his remmington shot gun, went in the lobby and shot randomly. He killed everyone. He then went outside and hung them on the pine trees. He then met up inside with Jason. They did there handshake and stole a Honda civic. The cops were chasing them on the highway. Tony put his shotgun out the window and shot 15 times. All 15 shots were perfect. They persuited and ditched the car. They stole a garbage truck. Tony said there may be a few people inside. Jason pushed the lever and heard alotta screaming. There was one last cop. Jason breaked immedietly and the cop cop flew through the window. 2 years later Jason and Tony stole a dumptruck with lawnmores and people in the bed. The Mowers turned on and ran over the day labors. The cops were chasing them down the L.A freeway. They got away again.

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Questions for Peer Reviewers Orion 1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)? the plot is alright its interesting. 2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed? the problems are real life problems i like it. 3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions? the characters are life like but not original. 4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story? the imagery is no doubt fantastic but you need more detail. 5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author? the main area of improvement is the characters use your own.

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author? ||