SO-Faythe+F.

**Introduction:**
Hey. I'm Faythe. Outside of school, I like to...go camping, swim, and watch TV. In shcool I like to go to choir class. My favorite food is Cici's macaroni and cheese pizza, cinnamon rolls, and their apple pie pizza. My favorite sport is volleyball, hobby is reading the Twilight series or watching the Twilight movie. My favorite TV show is a tie with Rock of Love Bus With Bret Micheals, Viva La Bam, and Bam's Unholy Union. My favorite video game is Dark Alliance: Baulders Gate, favorite book is New Moon because it's really romantic in the begining. Places that I've visited are Tennessee, Kentucky, Missouri, and Wisconsin Dells. My future plans are to become a nurse and have a big, beautiful house.

**Trip to Hawaii**
 * By: Faythe Friedl **

Mom is making us go to Hawaii. I know you’re probably thinking that I’m weird and all not being excited about going to such a place but I’m from Alaska, one of the coldest places on earth, and I’m used to the cold so I don’t at all want to go to a warm place. “Cathy, do you have all your stuff packed for next month?” Mom asked. “WHAT!? WE’RE STAYING IN HAWAII FOR A MONTH?!” “What like it’s going to kill you to stay somewhere warm and tropical?” “Yes, as a matter of fact, it will,” I said sounding more annoyed than ever. I only like going away to warm places if I’m with my guy friends or gal friends but I doubt that mom’s going to let me bring any friends. “Did you want to bring any one else just to make your trip more comforting for you so you don’t have to be around me and your brother?” “Wow, I thought you would never let me bring any one with but I don’t think I can just pull them out of school for a month.” “Well, obviously we’re going to have to talk to their parents or guardians about it.” “But what if no one can come?” I said. “What if?” Mom asked. “Then I’m not going. If no one else can come, I’m not going.” “Too bad,” Mom told me. So after that I called my best friend, Sabrina and begged her to come with us to Hawaii. She said she has to ask her parents if skip school for a month and if they said yes she said she would think about it. //BRRRRRRRRRRRING!! BRRRRRRRRRR!! BRRRRRING!!// “Hello?” I asked. “Hey, it’s Sabrina with my decision.” “Yeah, what is it?” I asked. “It’s a…YES!!!” Cathy went shopping with Sabrina to get new clothes and new swimming suits. When they went back to Cathy’s house, they saw Sabrina’s parents in Cathy’s driveway. “What are you guys doing here?” asked Sabrina nervously. “Sabrina…” Jeff started. “Honey, how do we tell her this,” he later told Regina, his wife. “Sabrina, your mom and I are going with to Hawaii.” “WHAT!! I was expecting to get away from my own parents for a month.” “Sweetie, I know you’re excited that we’re coming but you don’t have to make up a lie to make us feel bad so we don’t have to go.” Jeff stated. Sabrina and her parents went back to their house to back up and my parents and I did the same. About half an hour later Sabrina and I met each other at the curb that separates our driveways. “Hey, I just wanted to ask you if you wanted to ride with me in my car or if you wanted to go with your mom and brother,” Sabrina asked me, sound ready to break down into tears. “Ummm…I think I’ll go with my mom and brother because I would think that they would want me to ride with the, and besides I get hungry really easily and we have treats in your van so I will travel with them. Do you have a cell phone?” I asked. “Yeah, do you want my number?” Sabrina replied. “Yeah, what is it?” “555-220-2323,” she told me. “OK…and …got it. Okay here’s mine. 555-123-9110.” I told her back. After we got into our separate vehicles, I couldn’t resist, I had to text her right away. Right after I texted her “Hey, how’s it going?”, I looked to the right of me to see her window going down and I immediately rolled mine down as well. “Really Cathy, already?” Sabrina said chortling but sounding kind of annoyed as well. I told her the truth, “sorry, I couldn’t resist”, I shouted back to her also giggling a little. As we got to the airport, we put all you luggage on that luggage thing and boarded the plane. ** About 5 Thousand Miles Later… ** “About time we have arrived. Oh I’m soo excited. This is the moment I’ve been waiting for,” I said in a cool and relaxed way, and realizing I don’t have school for the next month. “Mom, what are we going to get for Dad?” “Nothing.” She said. “Mom, isn’t that quite rude?” “Yeah, so?” “Huh.” “Honey, your father is coming on Tuesday.” Of course I was confused about Mom’s words a minuet ago, but I was also both happy and mad. Happy because Mom wasn’t serious and mad because I would have both of my parents calling me at all times if I was away from them for an hour asking me where I am. “Hello? Oh, hey what’s up?” Mom said talking to dad I assumed. Mom hung up the phone after about five minuets. “You’re Dad said he wants to take a cruise back to California, if that’s okay with you?” “Oh of course it is!!” I said more excited than ever. “Wait, can Sabrina and her parents come also?” “I don’t know.” “Oh we would love to go with,” Regina said excited as well. “Mom…please?” I begged. “…fine.” Mom said in a positive attitude.

** To Be Continued… **

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