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//__ **A Water Carol** __// In a quaint road in Courtney there lived a very wasteful family, the family was a very nice family but they wasted water a lot! When they have showers it was very long .the reason they waste water is because they thought that water never ran out. One night when the random family was falling asleep, then all of a sudden the room started to twist. Then all was quiet again, and then a ghost appears.

“Why are you here?” whimpered Scrooge

“I’m one of the workers at the water dam” replied the ghost “when the dam gets jammed I fix it,”

Scrooge and the ghost are instantly teleported to the inside of the dam. The ghost starts talking. “This poor man here is me on the day I died.” Scrooge notices a young man climbing down into the turbine. A scream

“If that’s you then what does that have to do with me”

“Because I died to help the dam and you are wasting water like it just appears in your house from nowhere, tonight you will be visited by two ghosts, the ghosts of water past and future. The ghost turns and flies out of the room. Scrooge was lying in bed and the windows flew open and in flew another mist. Scrooge woke to a start as the spirit took scrooge’s hand and he was teleported to the local lake 20 years ago.

“Look at the lake you get your water from 20 years ago it was full, compare this to what your lake looks like now”

“Thought that the lake went down naturally and then that it would go back up again in a couple of years,” croaked scrooge

“No! It doesn’t work that way” squealed the ghost the ghost. Scrooge started to sink backwards.

“Can I just go back to my house?” said scrooge. The ghost and scrooge appear back at his house. “Tonight expect one more ghost more ghost tonight.” The ghost left scrooge “That was weird” said scrooge waiting for the next ghost. Just like last time another swirling mist appeared. This ghost was like the last ghost but a little older.

“I’m the ghost of water of future,” said the ghost

Scrooge you must now stop your water wasting ways if you continue to waste water the earth will lose all its water. Humans will die and plants will wither and like humans, die.” The ghost points to the withering field that was behind their house. “Is that our field behind our house?” asked scrooge

“Isn’t it amazing what happens to a field when it gets no water?” said the ghost

“Don’t you want to have your children live in a green world?”

No. I guess that that would be terrible, but how can I help”

“You can help by getting a water meter” Scrooge Notices that he’s now in his room “Today we’re getting a water meter! Yelled Scrooge. Then the lived happily ever after… Or did they? What I want feedback on is anything that you can see

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1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

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