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 * [[image:IMAG0031.JPG width="105" height="83"]]Introduction:** ALOHA ! my name is morgan! i am an only child but have a dog named buddy who acts like my little bro. i like to play volleyball with my mom and football with my dad outside of school. my favorite food is strawberries and chocolate. my favorite sport is volleyball. my favorite hobby is playing with my friends in my neighborhood. my favorite TV show is CSI. i like playing my WII in my basement. i've been to florida, boston, las vegas, iowa, georgia, and chicago. i plan to be either an interior designer or a fashion designer. i used to live in minnesota for almost 12 years. i just moved to eau claire at the end of august. =====

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** The Trouble in Cincinnati ** By: Morgan Muehlbauer

Freddy was eating a hot dog in a nice park. The park had a magnificent marble fountain, a small playground where the children can play, and you can smell the freshly cut grass.  While Freddy was relaxing, he heard a cry for help….  This was a remarkable day that no one will ever forget.  It was a sunny August day when you would think nothing bad could happen.  Well you’re wrong.  But it a good thing our towns heroes were there to help.  There was Fantastic Freddy, who can run at super sonic speed and he can fly.  Lizzie Lizard, she turn into a //gianormous// lizard and attack villains.  Zackaray and he can shoot rays from his eyes.  Elastic Emma, she is able to stretch around villains. <span style="font-family: 'Comic Sans MS'; mso-spacerun: yes; msobidifontfamily: 'Courier New'; msospacerun: yes;"> Our heroes rushed right down to the crime to find that they have been set up by the evil villains. <span style="font-family: 'Comic Sans MS'; mso-spacerun: yes; msobidifontfamily: 'Courier New'; msospacerun: yes;"> Their names were Mischievous Monica, she’s very mischievous. <span style="font-family: 'Comic Sans MS'; mso-spacerun: yes; msobidifontfamily: 'Courier New'; msospacerun: yes;"> Shleby Webby she can shoot webs from her hands to trap super heroes. <span style="font-family: 'Comic Sans MS'; mso-spacerun: yes; msobidifontfamily: 'Courier New'; msospacerun: yes;"> Elmer Glue, he sticks the super heroes to the ground with super sticky glue. <span style="font-family: 'Comic Sans MS'; mso-tab-count: 1; msobidifontfamily: 'Courier New'; msotabcount: 1;"> When Fantastic Freddy, Lizzie Lizard, and Zackaray found out that they were tricked they were mad! <span style="font-family: 'Comic Sans MS'; mso-spacerun: yes; msobidifontfamily: 'Courier New'; msospacerun: yes;"> The villains and heroes began to fight and it was getting ugly. <span style="font-family: 'Comic Sans MS'; mso-spacerun: yes; msobidifontfamily: 'Courier New'; msospacerun: yes;"> First Fantastic Freddy tried to run around Mischievous Monica to make her dizzy, but Morgan was very mischievous and she tripped Freddy and he fell big time! <span style="font-family: 'Comic Sans MS'; mso-spacerun: yes; msobidifontfamily: 'Courier New'; msospacerun: yes;"> Second Lizzie Lizard and Shleby Webby fought. <span style="font-family: 'Comic Sans MS'; mso-spacerun: yes; msobidifontfamily: 'Courier New'; msospacerun: yes;"> When they fought it felt like thunder shook the ground because Lizzie Lizard fell hard, because Shleby Webby trapped Lizzie Lizard in her super sticky webs. <span style="font-family: 'Comic Sans MS'; mso-spacerun: yes; msobidifontfamily: 'Courier New'; msospacerun: yes;"> Then came the fight of Zackaray and Elmer Glue. <span style="font-family: 'Comic Sans MS'; mso-spacerun: yes; msobidifontfamily: 'Courier New'; msospacerun: yes;"> And things got a little hot and sticky. <span style="font-family: 'Comic Sans MS'; mso-spacerun: yes; msobidifontfamily: 'Courier New'; msospacerun: yes;"> You know because hot rays and sticky glue//.// <span style="font-family: 'Comic Sans MS'; mso-spacerun: yes; msobidifontfamily: 'Courier New'; msospacerun: yes;"> Well like I said it got hot and sticky, because Elmer Glue shot glue at Zackaray. <span style="font-family: 'Comic Sans MS'; mso-spacerun: yes; msobidifontfamily: 'Courier New'; msospacerun: yes;"> When that happened Zackaray shot his laser rays at Elmer Glue, but it was too late Zackaray got glued! <span style="font-family: 'Comic Sans MS'; mso-spacerun: yes; msobidifontfamily: 'Courier New'; msospacerun: yes;"> <span style="font-family: 'Comic Sans MS'; mso-tab-count: 1; msobidifontfamily: 'Courier New'; msotabcount: 1;"> In the end the villains and superheroes didn’t know really why they were fighting and they made up, and went out for some yummy ice cream cones.

**Questions for Peer Reviewers**
(Think in terms of questions you would like to ask the author.)

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?


 * * I think that the story is original but is confusing. **

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?


 * *In my opinion the superheroes and the villains were fighting for nothing, so the story were better if the author think a why the were fighting. **

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

<span style="color: #e246c4; font-family: Tahoma, Geneva, sans-serif;">***the characters dont look like a human because they have power and I dont like the characters because the were boring.**

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

<span style="color: #e449d0; font-family: Tahoma, Geneva, sans-serif;">***They dont teach me nothing.. In the next story I would like to read something more real-**

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author<span style="color: #de21b7; font-family: Tahoma, Geneva, sans-serif;">**? <span style="color: #e335d3; font-family: Tahoma, Geneva, sans-serif;"> *that in her story realize that why they are fighting**