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**Hi, my name is Alex Grade: 8 ** Favorite soft drink: Coka Cola **   Hello My name is Alexander but you can call me Alex. Some things that I like to do in my spare time is practicing my guitar, performing in plays, drawing, and sometimes reading, my favorite book is "Twilight ". I am fourteen years old I like to think of myself of a theatre loving wacko because I'm a theatre loving wacko. I also think I'm a pretty good artist, I just love to draw in my spare time. Plus I'm into traveling, ive been to Quebec, Ontario, Cuba, Austria, California, and next year I'm going to Europe with my parents that is going to be sooooooooooooooo cool. I first starting traveling when I joined C.I.S.V (Childrens International Summer Villages) and international peace orginisation.
 * Best Holiday: Christmas **
 * Birth Month: June **
 * Career Goals: Costume designer **
 * Favorite Band(s): Hedley, Simple Plan **
 * Favorite Food: <span style="color: rgb(41, 199, 35);">Ribs **
 * <span style="font-family: Arial,sans-serif;">Favorite Munchies: <span style="color: rgb(41, 199, 35);">Chips **
 * <span style="font-family: Arial,sans-serif;">Favorite TV show: Bleach
 * <span style="font-family: Arial,sans-serif;">Favorite Subject: Art **
 * <span style="font-family: Arial,sans-serif;">Pet Peeve: know it alls **

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** __A kidnapped Alien__ ** It was another beautiful day here in my hometown of Fredericton, New Brunswick. There was a cool breeze in the air this morning as I awaited the school bus like every other weekday morning. Everything seemed normal as I sat down on the comfy bus seat humming some of my favorite songs.

I believe it is about time that I introduced myself. My name is Jake Ryan. I am the third tallest in my class in school. I go to Devon Middle school were I have a “A+” average. I have good friends and have a bit of a crush on the new girl Ally Newborn.

Ally is the kind of girl that keeps to herself she hasn’t really opened up to anybody in our class. She has been invited to people’s houses but she has always declined the offers.

Anyway, I got the bus and walked down the paved road in front of the school were the teachers parked there cars. As I walked through the doors I saw Ally headed for homeroom I decided to follow her there. She sat down at her desk. I calmly walked over to talk to when the bell rang and my best friend Joey Wheeler jolted in and gave me a noogie.

Joey is kind of the class clown everyone loves it when he makes jokes. That is except for the teachers of course. He is short with red hair and freckles all over his face.

Anyway I then walked over to my seat to await the morning announcements. . It looked out the window when I saw it. An enormous air craft was hovering out over the field in front of the school.

As I turned to classmates I noticed an empty seat, it was Ally’s. Fearing for her safety I dashed out of room to find her and Joey followed me. I saw her running in the gym as I chased after her I was shocked. Standing in the gym has Ally but circling her were these strange and terrifying aliens.

I stood there paralyzed. As I stood there Ally pulled out some kind of gun it definitely not from Canada. When she pulled the trigger a laser shot out from the gun. I then dashed to help her put I was no match for the Aliens. One stopped me as I ran and pushed me back without even laying a finger on me, like telepathy, the power to move things with your mind. Meanwhile Abby had already shot three of the five aliens. As she went for the forth one Joey came out of nowhere and jump on the aliens back. Tipical Joey always trying to be the her. Abby tried to find an opening but the fifth alien took her by surprise. He, or she I couldn't tell what gender it was, used some sort of force feild device to trap her. It then used some sort of device and a beam of light burst right through the gym sealing carrying Ally to a huge ship, possibly the mothership. I then jump in the beam after Ally I looked down and noticed that the other aliens were following me up through the beam and joey laying unconcious on the ground. As I entered the craft I closed my eyes hoping fir the best. I realized I stopped moving I opened my eyes and I was amazed.

It was a huge high tech wonderland. It was a science fiction geek's dream come true. In all the exitement I had forgot that the aliens were coming up the beam. I ran as fast as I could to get away but other aliens on the ship cornord me and through me in the ships prison. Lucky for me they threw in the same cell as Abby. As I went to talk to she changed. Not out of her clothes but into an alien but different than the other aliens. She still looked human but with green skin and blue hair. She also had a huge horn on her forehead. She than explained that she was an alien princess, her real name was Kelindal and that these aliens invaded their homeland to conquer it as one of their's. She managed to escape in a special pod that sent her to earth were she used an alien device to make her look human. She also informed me the "Unierversal Enforcers" an alien police orginizasion was on the way to take down the alien ship. Before I could even process my thoughts the door leading down here exploded and one the evil aliens grabed us and took to the upper level of the ship.

When we were brought up a huge battle was raging between the evil aliens and the alien police Ally was talking about. I both releved and terrified. The alien was headed for two large door my best guess was it was the air lock. But before he could press the button an alien officer punched the alien and took us to his ship. Finally we were safe he told Ally that unfortunatly her planet was destroyed by the Aliens luckily the police got all of the people to safety. Plus Ally would stay with me on earth until they settled on a new planet. = **The End** =

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1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?