BF-Daniela

**//Hi!! My name is Daniela Casta and I live in Barcelona.My birthday is at April 11th. It allready passed. Now I-m 12. I LOVE chocolate! My parents are divorced and in the weekends i go with my mom but on the normal days she works so i have to go with my dad. I would like to go to Australia someday!! I know 3 languages, Catalan, Spanish, and English. I started in BFIS in Nursery so, English is my second language. I have a dog named Doky, and I play everyday after school with him. I LOVE SHOPPING! :D And the city I like the most is New York. I've been in a lot of trips: Argentina, Florida (Orlando).... I would love to go again to the Caribbean. I love my friends here, THEY ARE THE BEST!!! My fav. movie is Titanic, and my favorite book is TWILIGHT. My Best Friend is Catalina. In my school we do a Talent Show Contest and urs? I love ABERCROMBIE & FITCH! Well, bye-bye! Ps: one fact about my friend Gerard, he loves, loves, loves ED HARDY even though he says he doesn't in his page...//**

Here i'm gonna show u my **BEST** friend:

This is my BFF **Catalina Cruañas**. (the one above)


 * MY STORY:**

Phobe and Michelle were in Ms.Loon's class learining how to write Descriptive Paragraphs. The class started little ago so they still had one entire hour. They would meet Toni and William after class, in recess. Ms. Loon was about to write on the boared when suddenly a knief fell out of her sleeve. Everyone paniced. Then she said: "It''s all ok! Yesterday I was cutting some pizza and i didn't know where the knife went and I was looking for it. And ahhh I found it!" No one believed her. Everyone knew she was a little weird. After class Toni, Phobe, Michelle, and William talked about what happened in Michelle's and Phobe's English class. "We have to do something!" said Toni. "Yes, But what?" answered William "We have to go and see her house. Like entering it without her noticing it." said Michelle. "Great idea!!!" yelled the other three. "Ok, let's meet at her house at 11:00 tonight, ok?" asked <span style="background: yellow none repeat scroll 0% 0%; -moz-background-clip: -moz-initial; -moz-background-origin: -moz-initial; -moz-background-inline-policy: -moz-initial;">Phobe. "Ok," answered everyone. At 11:00 William, <span style="background: yellow none repeat scroll 0% 0%; -moz-background-clip: -moz-initial; -moz-background-origin: -moz-initial; -moz-background-inline-policy: -moz-initial;">Phobe, Toni, and Michelle were in front of Ms. Loon's house. They were afraid of what they were going to see inside the house. Silently they came closer to the house. They saw the garage was opened and peeked in. The only thing they saw were plastic bags. William went in and the others followed. <span style="background: yellow none repeat scroll 0% 0%; -moz-background-clip: -moz-initial; -moz-background-origin: -moz-initial; -moz-background-inline-policy: -moz-initial;">Phobe had curiosity what was in the plastic bags so she peeked in. "AHHHHHHHH!" she screamed! Everyone gathered her. "AHHHHHHHHH!" screamed everyone! There was the body of the last director of the school. She disappeared 2 months ago. "We need to get out of here!" said Toni and William at the same time. They all agreed and in 1 minute they were out of the garage. They all went home not knowing what to do.

The next day they met again on the patio. The next class Toni and William had was English. <span style="background: yellow none repeat scroll 0% 0%; -moz-background-clip: -moz-initial; -moz-background-origin: -moz-initial; -moz-background-inline-policy: -moz-initial;">"I don't want to go to her class!" cryed William. "Don't worry I'm with you" joked Toni. The bell rang and everyone headed to their next class. Toni and William sat next to each other. Ms. Loon started talking. No one listened to her, some were laughing, others talking, and <span style="background: yellow none repeat scroll 0% 0%; -moz-background-clip: -moz-initial; -moz-background-origin: -moz-initial; -moz-background-inline-policy: -moz-initial;">otheres starring in horror. She got mad. "Shut up right now!!!" she yelled. But no one listened. They kept talking. Suddenly she got something out of her sleeve. A knife! "Be quite or i'll tare you all into pieces!" everyone <span style="background: yellow none repeat scroll 0% 0%; -moz-background-clip: -moz-initial; -moz-background-origin: -moz-initial; -moz-background-inline-policy: -moz-initial;">freked out. William had his mobile in the class and he quickly called the police. "Excuse me, we have a crazy teacher about to kill us with a <span style="background: yellow none repeat scroll 0% 0%; -moz-background-clip: -moz-initial; -moz-background-origin: -moz-initial; -moz-background-inline-policy: -moz-initial;">knief." he whispered. The policeman said he was coming and he hung up. 30 minutes passed and Ms. Loon was walking around the classroom (with the <span style="background: yellow none repeat scroll 0% 0%; -moz-background-clip: -moz-initial; -moz-background-origin: -moz-initial; -moz-background-inline-policy: -moz-initial;">knief) looking at the children. Finally the police came and arrested her. And all thanks to Michelle, <span style="background: yellow none repeat scroll 0% 0%; -moz-background-clip: -moz-initial; -moz-background-origin: -moz-initial; -moz-background-inline-policy: -moz-initial;">Phobe, William, and Toni.

heey, i love you story, i highlighted the places you have speelingg mistakes. nice job :)

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<span style="color: rgb(128, 0, 128);">1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)? Your story was suspensful but it kinda didn't make sense i t made me think that they were in two places at once. 2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed? It was suspensful and again you should make it so it dosen't seem like they are in two places. 3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions? i think that the main character was kinda realistic but if i was that person i wouldn't go to the teachers house I would just go to the police department. 4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?

Edited By Indigo Hawkesdale P12. <span style="color: rgb(93, 0, 255);">1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)? <span style="color: rgb(0, 0, 128);">I think that your plot is very intereting and exiting to keep reading, maybe you could explain whats happening more clearly because it's kind of like your in two places at once, but I think that it's a very interesting story and very creative. =)

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed? <span style="color: rgb(0, 255, 137);">Yes, I think that the complications are good and very exiting. I think you need to explain whats happening a bit nore though.

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions? <span style="color: rgb(128, 0, 128);">I dont really think the characters are life like, the teacher defently wouldn't have a knife up her sleeve and wouldn't try and kill all the children! lol I think you did a good job of telling who's turn it is to talk.

<span style="color: rgb(93, 0, 255);">4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story? <span style="color: rgb(255, 0, 159);">I would like to hear in the next revision the scenery of the place's your characters are in. 5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author? <span style="color: rgb(0, 255, 137);">The part how the teacher walks into the class and the knife falls out from her sleeve that part doesn't really make sense. And near the end how she randomly pull's out the knife from her sleeve again.

<span style="color: rgb(0, 0, 255);">1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?

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