Alexis

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 * **Hi, my name is Alexis **
 * Grade:8**
 * Best Holiday: Christmas **
 * Birth Month: November **
 * Career Goals: **
 * Favorite Band(s): **
 * Favorite Food: pasta **
 * Favorite Munchies: choclate chip cookies **
 * Favorite soft drink: peanut colotas **
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 * Pets: none **

Please Copy and Paste your story here hey I'm Sonny. A couple of months ago the begging of the journey of my life has just begin. This is how it all started. So one day i was watching my favorite t.v. show called “how funny how random”! So out of nowhere when i was watching it the producer from the show called and wanted me to be on the show. That day me and my mom had left to go to California. Both me and my mom were so excited to be here. Before i had to go to the show to meet everyone me and my mom explored. We saw so many celebrities and nice stores. We even went shopping at coach, gucci, and channel. my life is kinda like a story being told by someone else. every day at the studio where we shoot the show there is always a conflict every day or every other day.

on the show “How funny How random” there is one girl that is on the show her name is nicole and i read so much about her and she is my role model, i look up to she inspires me. as me and my mom were entering the studio i was so scared that no one was going to like me or something like that. but i was wrong! everyone loved me they all greeted me as soon as i came in. when i got there, there i was nothing like i expected! it was better!! after i meet everyone i realized that Nicole wasn't there. i was so upset. then our producer Bob told me that she was just getting changed and that she would be right out. once he told me that she i couldn't wait to meet her. when she came out she asked Bob who i was. i thought she was joking but apparently not! Bob said well remember how i said that Michelle has left well we found someone else for Michel her name is sonny. then Bob said don’t you remember i sent a picture of her to you? Nicole said no. But when you said that michelle was leaving i thought that no one else was going to fill in for her. well anyway nicole this is our new friend sonny! so there is this other studio right next to us the show is called Niagara falls. they are like our rival we hate them and nicole says that there name should never be said on this set and that they are a deiscrase to us. oh i almost forgot the other cast members names are matt, he is my age 15, and charlie he is also my age 15, and alison who is 13 years old.oh i almost forgot nicole she is also my age 15 too. we are all great friends. ok so remember that studio right next to us. well the other day i was playing this really really cool and one of a kind game and when i was done jake from nigra falls asked if he could borrow it and i said yes! well since i was new i didnt know that we weren’t allowed to let them borrow stuff. so everyone hated me but they all got over it.

Questions for Peer Reviewers

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)? The plot is good, but unoriginal. It is extremely similar to the show "Sonny With A Chance" on Disney Channel. It has the same plot, and even some of the same names for the characters.

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed? There are no major problems that the main character-Sonny faces. She does, however, have her dreams come true, but there are not enough details to show how the characters she meets are feeling. There is tension between Sonny and Nicole which is good, but it could be expanded.

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions? The story does not give much insight about the characters. The characters are likable and enjoyable, but the reader does not know much about them. Using dialogue would help this.

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story? If this story was revised, there would need to be more details. Also, this story was not that creative. The plot is the same as a t.v. show. The reader cannot experience the emotions of the characters, and the scenery could be more descriptive.

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author? The grammar needs to be improved in this story. There are run-on sentences and no capitalization. Also, there is really no plot. The story does not flow well and is too short. Details need to be included to elaborate the plot. || Help · About · Blog · Terms · Privacy · [|**Support**] · [|**Upgrade**]Portions not contributed by visitors are Copyright 2009 Tangient LLC.