ISKL+Tom,+Conor

Introduction About Conor and TomCharacters: King: Aurthur Mage: Merlin Will (Evil futuristic dude) Green Arrow and Night Wing (Betrayers of The king) Blue Bowman and Robin (Helpers of The King)

Once ago there was a time were where magic and fantasy was real. There was a power mage called Merlin he was the kings most trusted Subject he lived alone in the forest. The king was called Aurthur. He was a generous kind man. One day there was a huge storm and a portal was opened. Everyone was scared and suddenly a man walked out and he had a vicious Bengal Tiger. The man spread fear to the whole kingdom. The some guards ran over to arrest him but his tiger scared them away. He walked into the castle and went into the throne room and said "Crown me as king or there will be blood tonight." Everyone refused and so the man stormed out and put up camp just at the castle walls and yelled "I WILL BE BACKED TOMORROW AND IF YOU REFUSE AGAIN I WILL KILL EVERYONE IN SIGHT FOR WILLIAM ALWAYS GETS WHAT HE WANTS! "

So Will prepared for war. He walked around and found a little house in the forest and he smashed down the door and screamed "GET OUT OF THIS HOUSE OR MY TIGER WILL RIP YOU TO SHREDS." The house belonged to Merlin but the house was old and Merlin was going to make a new one so he gave it to him but first he put a curse on it. The curse was that the man could never leave the kingdom. So Merlin went into the castle and went to the king and asked if he could help fight the man. For Merlin had seen the future and new that the man would come to his house and steal it. The moon raised rose and all of the kings' soldiers prepared for battle. But Will just sat in the house and got all his weapons ready because he knew it would not be an easy fight.( you should say merlin has powers)

The kings' men and Will went to the battle field and prepared to fight. As the king let out his final wishes and asked the gods to allow them to win. A new portal was opened and out came Merlin and two warriors an arrow man named Green Arrow and a dark knight named Night Wing. Merlin brought these men back to fight by their side but they betrayed Merlin and joined Will. The war went on. Will, Green Arrow and Night Wing used many strange future weapons but the kings' army fought a brave battle. As the war raged the kings' army was slowly dropping. Merlin tried all his magic but none of it worked. It was up to Merlin to create an animal to kill the tiger so the kings' men could at least get within 10 meters of the enemy.

Merlin could not think of a beast strong enough to kill a tiger. But then it came to him not an animal his time period but from the prehistoric age. With all his magic powers he summoned a vicious Utar Raptor. It stomped out the castle gates and sprinted at the tiger. The tiger ran away into the portal and the Dino was about to get threw but the portal closed. So the Dino ran at Will, Green Arrow and Night Wing. Green Arrow shot arrows at him and he slowed down then Will shot a bullet right in its heart and it fell to the ground and they acted like nothing happened. But something went wrong and every time the Dino dies a bigger stronger one comes and it is angrier.

Soon Will, Night Wing, and Green Arrow began to retreat. Will finally took greater action and threw a grenade at the portal and along with it went a missile from Green Arrow. Night Wing finding it necessary threw knock out gas and Ultra-V bombs into the portal as well. The portal closed and the dinos vanished. The war raged on. Aurthur called Merlin and got him to find two others who could aid in the war. Merlin disappeared and once again a portal was opened but now a new archer named Blue Bowman and a dark night named Robin. The difference now was the fact that these warriors that Merlin summoned where not only enemies in their own time but they were also brothers. All of a sudden Robin lunged at Night Wing. Blue Bowman did the same thing to Green Arrow. It was brother wars. Merlin had done right bring these heroes but caused war within a war. PEER REVIEW (Saint Michael)

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)? Yes because it doesn't have real characters like that are in movies or books and no the story was good!!!!!

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed? Yes they add a lot of suspense and yes the climax satisfies us...

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions? the characters are life like because we used to have kings but not with the marlin part ... yes all of the ones listed....

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story? yes they make you feel like you are there.

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author? you don't need any improvements..