ISKL+Nick

**Introduction:**
Include some or all of the following, as well as a link to your blog: first name, what you like to do in and out of school, favorites (food, sport, hobby, TV show, video game, etc.), places visited, future plans, claim to fame.

Hey my name is nick I love playing soccer and riding on my wave board. I also love to go surfing but since kl is in the middle of the country there are no oceans nearby. My absolute favorite TV Show is.............SOUTHPARK!!!!! My favorite food is probably the Spicy chicken that they serve for lunch at school. ITS AMAZING!!!! I enjoy going to theme parks and watching movies with my friends. I enjoy going paintballing and playing GUITAR HERO WITH MY BEST FRIEND (Alistair)

**Paste your story here:**
 The Sun Bear The plane had just arrived and I was ready to rest my tiered head. I quickly passed through customs and immigration. So I called for a cab and it pulled up and I got in. “I’m going to the tropical hotel.” I said and he replied with a loud grunt. I laid my weary he against the smooth leather seat and slowly drifted off to sleep. I awoke to the loud noise of the engine. By looks of outside we were almost at my destination. I’m a reporter from The Herald Sun am dim doing an article on the Malaysian sun bear. The car slowly shuttered to a halt so I got out took my luggage and paid the man. As The cab drove away behind it trailed a cloud of dust. I turned away and looked at what appeared to be a shabby house. I walked through the doorway and there was a large desk and a man sitting behind it he was a strong and large man behind the desk on the wall directly behind him there were numerous animal heads hanging on the wall underneath them were a name engraved in it read “Charlie Jones, Champion Marksman” I walked up to the front desk and said “I would like room please” He looked up and handed me a key “Room 7” he said I walked down a narrow hall way until I reached the room. I inserted the key into the keyhole and walked into the room. I opened my bag and shuffled through it and pulled out a camera and a note pad and a pen. I walked up to the receptionist and told him that I was booked for a jungle tour. He stood up and said “Charlie Jones at your service. Meet me at the jeep outside in two minutes” And I saw him open a large closet behind the desk and pull out a rifle he then reached into his pocket and pulled out a magazine of bullets and walked outside to the car. “What’s that for” I questioned “Just so I can get more trophies on my wall” I stared at him and He laughed. So I got into the passenger seat of the jeep and he pressed his foot down on the gas. Thirty five minutes later we arrived at a place where the rainforest seemed a lot denser than before, then a few other jeeps pulled up and he said “This is the wildlife tour we will be hiking to the Mystic waterfall the hike is about an hour. Let’s go!” He shouted And He started walking in to the deep jungle. The other 7 people followed. On our way to the jungle I took photos and noticed many beautiful creatures. Some were deadly, others harmless about 45 minutes later we pulled into a clearing and in front of us was a large river flowing strongly, its water, crystal clear and suddenly he started taking of his boots and said “go on we don’t have all day” so well all jumped into the water. While we were hiking back to the meeting point suddenly the tour guide, Charlie crouched on his knees commanding the group to silence. He raised his rifle. Then I realised what the man was aiming At There was a large bear sitting on the ground almost human like. It turned around and on its chest was a golden half sun. The birth mark of the sun bear, suddenly he cocked the gun and took aim Just as he was about to fire. I yelled “stop!” everyone stared at me. He looked enraged. “That animal has a life too! It breathes and lives on food and water just like us!” “DO I LOOK LIKE I CARE” “Suddenly one of the tourists intervened and “Stop!” You are under arrest by federal law act 1773 states That No Man Can harm a sun bear. You’re coming with me. Later Charlie Jones was arrested and sent to prison for 17 years for legal poaching.The police later then discovered a worldwide network of poachers. All of them were jailed

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