ISKL+Tobi

**Introduction:**
Include some or all of the following, as well as a link to your blog: first name, what you like to do in and out of school, favourites (food, sport, hobby, TV show, video game, etc.), places visited, future plans, claim to fame. Hi i am Tobi. I am originally from Nigeria but i was born in New York Brooklyn and i lived in Houston Texas for a really long time. i live in Malaysia now, uhm well i watch alot of TV and in American Idol (the show i watch alot of) i hope Adam Lambert well school is Ok especially when we have visitors and get to leave class they are usually authors i dont really want to say much but if you want to you can got to my really reallly really cool blog []

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From the eyewitness.

On that day over 2,998 excluding the 19 hijackers, died the same tragic death and I was the only survivor to witness it.

Location :The world trade center My heart beating so fast that I thought it felt like it was going to pop out this had to be the most important day because if I didn’t get it would have no where else to go due to the economical stage 20 million Americans have lost their jobs since January so I expect a large amount of people. Filling out my sheet and position it in the basket thinking “here I am in the World trade center amazing, well this is where my new career could begin” I hand the form in with confidence and I head for the room where they would explain what they expect if you get the job

She began “ there are 75 of you all only 4 will come out with the job we will be choosing by your choice of words and confidence starting with Alice right then you could see the fright on my face I walk smoothly make sure the vibration from knees didn’t make me trip and I tried to as much eye contact as I can. They said they to check my reasoning so they bring out Test for Lateral Thinking and pulled up a sheet of paper saying R/E/A/D/I/N/G I answered reading between lines they said correct and they asked me another one

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I replied six feet underground and it was also accurate it appeared like I was going to get the job I was doing so well and smoothly then they asked me why do I deserve the job at that moment I was thunderstruck I had no Idea what to say I started to stammer then they started righting on their clip board and I tried not to let fear surpass me I cleared my throat a few times and replied “ well I think no cancel that I know I can help this line of business any way possible and put effort and devotion in whatever I do” they replied “good answer” I stepped out and had to wait outside for an incredible long amount of time the interviewer came out saying “ you all did well we will call any of you to tell you whether or not you got it Goodbye” and then she walked away and we stood up and we walked toward the exit.

I was outside with relief that I have finished the interview I suddenly heard a whoosh and I glanced above and saw airplane pass above my head people behind me whispered, “Are they acting? is it some kind of special effect?” as soon as the plane smashed into the building and I saw bodies flying out of the windows I knew at that second that they weren’t performing. There was a huge blast. I could feel the air shock wave of it, the impact from the explosion threw me out into the air rather than a loud bomb explosion it sounded muffled, heavy, very deep The blast had thrown him down, giving him a concussion the last thing I saw was the tail of the plane fall down on the concrete floor

I woke up and found myself in a hospital with bandages rapped around my head tightly you could actually lay a hand and feel it throbbing

On Tuesday, September 11 2001 8:46a.m – 10:28 a.m over 6,291 got injured. 2,998 (excluding the 19 hijackers, including 24 presumed dead)

**Questions for Peer Reviewers**
(Think in terms of questions you would like to ask the author.)

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)? The plot is very intense but it is very diffucult to understand. 2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed? The character faces interesting intense problems but again it isn't that easy to understand. 3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions? I think you gave a good description of the characters personality but it is not clear what he is trying to do. 4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story? The details are ok, I think they could be a little bit more relevant though. I wonder who is telling the story is it you or is this based on a true story? 5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author? I think it would be a good idea to have a title that grabs the reader or informs the reader about what the story is going to be about. There were quite a few grammer errors where you should have added a extra word or got rid of a word you added unnecassarily, but good job! VV Nicholas

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1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)? The plot is good but I couldn't really understand it. 2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed? The characters face problems but it goes bye too fast. 3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions? The main character could've been described a little more. 4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story? The details are alright. You explain it too fast. 5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author? The grammar in this story needed the most improvement. It was a good story line but you could've expanded more.

VMS Kristi