SO-Mikayla+D.

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=Introduction My name is Mikayla, but you can call me Kayla. My favorite subject in school would have to be Math. Out of school I go on lots of vacations like Jellystone, Wisconsin Dells and Flordia. My favorite food is Pizza, my favorite sport is vollyball and soccor. My favorite tv show is extreme makeover. My favorite hobby is shopping and babysitting and when I get older I want to be a petiatrition. (kid doctor.) =

The Best Day Turned Into the Worst By: Mikayla Dokkestul About a half a year ago my brother Brad moved to Winona to hopefully figure out his career, he was thinking about going into criminal justice and that would led him to be a police officer or something like it. One night my brother got to go to a homecoming in Winona. That night I had gotten to have my little cousin, Madysen spend the night at my house. My parents had my dad’s parents over for dinner because it was my grandpa’s birthday and we wanted to celebrate with him and wish him a happy birthday. So Madysen and I were in my room playing and listening to music, my parents and grandparents where in the kitchen playing a game called Dominoes. When I heard the phone ring I didn’t think anything of it. I just thought to myself that it was a normal call and my parents would get it. After the phone call my mom runs around the house like I’ve never scene her before. In my moms eyes I could tell that she worried, nervous, mad, shocked and didn’t have a clue what she was suppose to do. Well she tells my dad that something bad has happened to Brad we don’t know if he’s going to live or not we don’t really know what happened either but he has bleeding inside his brain and he has been in the hospital for about twenty minutes. He was flown in a helicopter to a hospital called Saint Mary’s for special care. My dad quick went on Map Quest to figure out directions to Saint Mary’s hospital. My mom went to pack a bag because she didn’t know if she was just going to be there for a little bit or if she was going to be there for like three days she didn’t know at all. My dad told my mom to go so my dad could stay with Madysen, my little brother and I. My dad told her good luck and we would try to come down as soon as possible. So my mom left, my mom had a very long drive not only was it about three hours to drive but she also had the thought that any second something worse could happen to Brad. Finally my mom got there she got inside the hospital, and then she went to the front desk to ask what room he was in 233 on the second level. My mom went in the elevator and got upstairs to Brads room. When she was stopped by a doctor the doctor asked my mom, “could you please go wait in the waiting room because we our right now giving Brad an x-ray.” So my mom went into the waiting room when she walked in she saw Beccy, Brad’s girlfriend. When she was talking to my mom, Beccy told my mom that she had talked to Brad and he was at homecoming and hung up with Brad at about 2:40am and by 2:50am Brad was in the hospital. The hospital called Beccy to tell her what had happened. Beccy said that, “she had rushed right over to see Brad and she has been here ever since.” After Beccy told my Mom all that she knew about Brad the Doctor came in and told them that they could come back into the room because Brad was done with his x-ray. When they got in there my mom gave Brad a big hug. The Doctor than began to tell my mom and Beccy about Brad’s x-ray he said, “Brad has two breaks in his leg, a crack in his spine and of course the bleeding in the brain.” The doctor also said, “Brad is going to need to have a lot of rest and he will need to wear a cast for a while and use crutches when he is walking around. We don’t know when he will be able to drive again because everyone heals differently.” After the Doctor left my mom tried to ask Brad what happened they figured out from the doctors that he got jumped witch means that he got beat up by someone else. All Brad said was that, “he was walking with his friends and than he woke up in a hospital bed and he didn’t even know why he was here.” So that means that when he was walking with his friends someone came up behind him a knocked him over and that gave him a concussion. After, they knocked him over than they kicked him, and smashed his head against the concrete. Since Brad got knocked out that means that he didn’t know who did that to him. If they were to find out who did it they would be in prison and they would have to pay for all of his medical bill like his medicine, cast, crutches, his rooms in the hospital and the helicopter to transfer him over to the hospital. The same people that did that to Brad also did that to two other guys that very same day but Brad had gotten it the worst. Finally my dad, Madysen, my little brother and I arrived at the hospital and went up to his room 233 on the second level. When we got up there I thought that Brad had looked the worst he had ever looked before but the doctors said that, “he looked really good compared to when he first go into the hospital.” When I got there I started to cry and Brad asked me why I was crying I told him that I didn’t know why. But maybe deep down I did know why maybe it was that the whole time I worried about him and always had that thought that he could die and it just felt good to know that he was going to be okay. After all that my cousin Brittany and my Aunt, Janice all went to Target to buy him a new pair of pajama pants to wear when he was there. Than when we got back I had to leave because I had school in the morning and my dad had work in the morning so we left I said my last goodbyes. On the ride home I heard this really sad song on the radio that reminded me of Brad. Than when I got home I went to bed in the morning I went to school and when I got home Brad was there I rushed in the house to give him a big hug and I told him that I was so lucky to have a brother like him and I’m so glad that he’s still alive.

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1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

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4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story? I think that your story is awesome and kind of sad!! Laura 5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author? From Shania: Nicee story kay's! TTYL!!!!!! Ur bffl Shania