Lora

**Grade:8th ** **Best Holiday: christmas ** **Birth Month: september ** **Career Goals: something with fashion ** **Favorite Band(s): jonas brothers, dear and the headlights, bloc party....(ect.) ** **Pets: hamster :) **  Feel free to upload your podcast or a picture if you like.
 * Hi, my name is: Lora **

Lilly- 19 years old. lives in small town called Largeville ironic…I know. Well anyway her and her friend Sammy have been together forever. She could name everyone in her town if she tried (there were only 129 people). Her graduating class had 47 students and she could name them all as well. Lives with her parents and has no siblings. She lives in a small town but has always dreamed of being a big city girl. She loves to design clothes and has an internship this summer in NYC at a fashion magazine. Now that she is 20 she will soon move to the city.

Sammy- 19 years old. Kind and outspoken. Wants to stay in Largeville and raise a family there. Upset that Lilly is leaving. Going to Largeville community college. Lives with her mom, dad, 2 sisters, and 3 brothers. Her youngest sibling,3 year old Charlie, has downs syndrome. He struggles in every thong he does so Sammy always has to be home to take care of him while her parents are at work.

Jess- 19 years old. Boy down the street. Best friends wit Sammy and Lilly. Lilly doesn’t know yet but she loves him. He is suave and was an unpopular nerd in school but now that they’ve graduated, he has to fight girls off with a stick. Has had a crush on Lilly for 16 years but pretends to love his girlfriend. Lives with his parents and one younger brother who is 13.

“Good morning!”

said my parents, just as they had every morning for the past 19 years as they served me breakfast, but today was very different then days past.

“today’s the big day pookie!”

said my dad. “Pookie” I thought to myself. When is he gonna stop calling me that? “what time are u leaving?” asked my mom.

“eleven“ I said. Today I goes to my new apartment in the city. All by myself where my parents can’t embarrass me by calling me pookie. Don’t get me wrong, I love my parents with all my heart but sometimes they are just so….ugh!

“well its 10:30 now are you all packed and ready to go”?

said my mom.

“yeah” I said as I went to my room and got my phone. I dialed Sammy, my best friend for as long as I cam remember. She lives two blocks down. As son as she picks up, we both scream!

“oh my god!”said sammy

“I can’t believe today is the day!”.

“I know!” I said.

“I am so exited! i can’t believe how quick this year went!”

and then I stared to cry.

“im really gonna miss you Sam and my parents, and Jess, and this town”

“you’re gonna be just fine…I promise“ said sammy.

“okay…I guess…”

and then with a sudden positive change of tone, I said:

“but I should be exited. Its my time to shine so look out New York City cuz here I come!”

“That’s the spirit!” said Sammy.

So I hung up and got really exited. I put the phone into my suitcase to take to NYC.

“Time to go Lilly!” Yelled my mom.

“coming” I sighed

Dear Diary,

The car ride to NYC was awkward because I had no idea what to talk about as my last conversation still living with my parents. We eventually got into a discussion about the design of the new apartment. When we got there, my parents helped carry the bags up and stayed the night with me in the apartment. The next day, we went out for breakfast and then they went home. For a while I felt lonely, not being used to living alone, but that feeling soon changed to anxiety when I realized that tomorrow was my first day at the new job at the fashion magazine and I had no idea what to wear. I ended up going shopping. I bought a semi loose button up collared pink silk blouse tucked into a black pencil skirt with black peep toe pumps. I laid out my outfit for the next day on the chair in my room when I got home, then I ate a canned chicken noodle soup, showered and went to bet. My alarm went off at 6:00am the next morning and I got ready and left for work at 6:45. I arrived into my boss’s office at 7:01am, one minute late, but my boss didn’t notice. She is really nice. So after my orientation, I went to my office and sat down. I started to write my first article on what to wear on your first day on the job. I also made the layout to the page nice and pretty and had it handed in by 5:45pm. I leave at 6:00pm. The next few weeks were just as successful. I met a boy who worked at the local diner. His name is Steve. We started dating a few days after we met. We have a lot in common but I don’t think what we have will last forever. Its really great for now though. I call my parents just about every day to fill them in and thy say they are so proud of me and right now, i’m really happy.

Write ya later,

Lilly <33=

Questions for Peer Reviewers

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?