Tiffani

**//Siblings: 1 little sister //**
 * **//Hi, my name is: Tiffani Amber Adorno // **
 * //Grade: 7th //**
 * //Favorite Holiday: Halloween ( my moms birthday!) // **
 * //Birth Month: November // **
 * //Career Goals: to be famous // **
 * //<span style="color: rgb(46,132,46);">Favorite Munchies: Oreo // **
 * <span style="font-family: Arial,sans-serif;">//<span style="color: rgb(46,132,46);">Favorite soft drink: diet coke // **
 * <span style="font-family: Arial,sans-serif;">//<span style="color: rgb(46,132,46);">Favorite Subject: art, music class // **
 * <span style="font-family: Arial,sans-serif;">//<span style="color: rgb(46,132,46);">Pet Peeve: annoyning people // **
 * <span style="font-family: Arial,sans-serif;">//<span style="color: rgb(46,132,46);">Pets: black cat named halo // **

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//<span style="color: rgb(128,0,128);">MIRRORS

One day when I just turned 18 I was just moving into a collage dorm. My roommate was my best friend Jessica and she was a singer. Everybody loved her, screamed for her it was great. So one day I was waking up and was on my way to the kitchen when I saw a hole in the floor. I walked over to it but the doorbell ran and no body was there and when I turned around the hole in the floor was gone. I ran to the bathroom and washed my face with water because I thought I was going crazy. So I went on with my day and then saw the hole in the floor again. I walked over to it and saw heads sticking out. I screamed and ran outside I stared seeing dead people. I passed out on the floor I was thinking is the world ending am I a legend? I woke up and saw a figure coming out of the wall it was my friend Jessica! I found out that she had died in a car accident 2 days ago. I ran in the house took the car keys and ran to my car. It was clam after a while until I went to the market and came back into the car and saw Jessica ripping her jaw open I was terrified. I ran home packed all my things until Jessica was behind me. But she was in the mirror screaming (with no jaw). I walked over to a mirror and touched it Jessica was trying to pull me in. my reflection was in the mirror Jessica was holding me but no one was holding me on the outside she took a knife and started to cut my neck. But that’s when someone was trying to wake me up someone was telling me Jessica just got into a car accident //<span style="color: rgb(128,0,128);"> //<span style="color: rgb(128,0,128);">I got rip ran to my car and saw Jessica in the back seat smiling at me with blood all over her face //<span style="color: rgb(128,0,128);"> //<span style="color: rgb(128,0,128);">and that was it !!!! // Questions for Peer Reviewers

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)? <span style="color: rgb(0,83,255);">You should be more descriptive (Show not Tell) and I don't really get your story. It doesn't makes sense because she was just your room mate but then suddenly she dead. <span style="color: rgb(119,19,87);"> 2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed? <span style="color: rgb(36,104,235);">I don't think that your story has a climax or a problem. You should explode some of the moments like when you saw the hole. How you felt? That stuff... <span style="color: rgb(119,19,87);"> 3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions? <span style="color: rgb(55,101,230);"> <span style="color: rgb(36,83,219);">It doesn't really make sense because why would your best friend be doing that to you? You should put more description about the character because you didn't really describe anything about her or yourself.

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story? <span style="color: rgb(43,97,238);">You can add more feelings and emotions. Also, you can be more descriptive by using more actions for example: instead of using the word run you can use dash. 5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author? <span style="color: rgb(23,43,232);">I think that you should work on grammars, word choice, and adding more description. For spelling mistakes try reading your story again. Add in more details to make your story more interesting. You can also add in a problem because your story was like a straight line, a problem and a solution should make it go up then down.

<span style="color: rgb(4,0,255);">ISKL Ni

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)? <span style="color: rgb(119,19,87);">I think that your plot was definitely original and totally interesting. I thought it was really freaky though and it actually made me gasp at some parts. I just think that the way your wrapped it up (her waking up from a dream) was a little classicbecause a lot of people use that as their conclusion. 2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed? <span style="color: rgb(119,19,87);"> I definitely think that your story has a problem because the room-mate died and was kind of trying to kill the girl. I didn't really understand the hole part though... The ending wasn't happy though because the girl got in a car crash anyways and that was saddening. 3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

<span style="color: rgb(119,19,87);">The main character is life like because she is just an average teenager who goes to collage. I don't think that the dead person was though, even if it was a dream. I think that maybe you should describe what collage she is in and what the characters look like. 4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

<span style="color: rgb(119,19,87);">I think that you did a good job telling the reader how the main character was scared and everything but maybe you could tell us more about what the character thought about the hole and other things. Your details though were really creepy in a good way. It was a great horror story!

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author? <span style="color: rgb(119,19,87);">Although I really liked your piece, I think that it was really random at some parts and it seemed like it just jumped from one thing to the other. That is basically the only problem I had with it though!

-Riley ISKL

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author? ||