ISKL+Rory,+Elliot

Introduction about Rory and Elliot


 * ===characters: mad scientist, wife, son,dog everyone in NYC mad scientist: Robert Apple Juice Wife: Jessica Juice Son: Matt Orange Juice ===
 * ===setting: science lab, NYC, Pakistan ===
 * ===time frame: present time ===
 * ===Plot: ===
 * 1) ===mad scientist is trying to turn his wife and son into meatballs when something goes wrong ===


=== It's a cold winter day, when scientist Robert Juice came up with his idea that would get him millions of dollars. This mad scientist will attempt to turn a human being into a meatball. Yes, a meatball. You can see how mad this scientist is! He's so mad, he is willing to use his family to test his experiment. His son, Matt Juice, is an average boy who has average grades in an average school. The scientist's wife, Jessica Juice, is an average mother that doesn't work and spends her time sweeping the floors of the lovely apartment they own on the top floor of the Empire State Building. As Robert Juice went to the store to collect his materials, he founds a magic lamp on the ground. He wished for his materials, but nothing happened. Depressed he goes and buys the materials. When he gets to his lab, situated on 5th avenue(one of the most popular streets in New York), he finds double the material on his desk. Without wasting time, Robert starts to build his machine that will create his fortune. ===


=== After a whole day of working with metal, it was finally time to put his machine at work. He asked his wife and son to come over to his science lab. He lied to them by saying that he was just going to show them around his science lab. When they arrived, he forced them to enter the machine. When he started the machine, it made a horrible rumbling sound that cried over the screams of his family. Suddenly, a bright, golden, blinding light flashed through the whole room. Then nothing. Silence. Robert then opened the door of the machine and he did it. There in the door were two giant meatballs. Robert went outside to breathe in fresh air when he realized that his neighbor next door who was also a scientist had turned into a meatball. Rushing outside, he realized that everybody had turned into a meatball!. As he ran back into his lab, he looked at his machine. There were two things he did wrong. One, he set the machine for whole earth to turn into a meatball not objects in the machine and two, he set the power on maximum. Now he only had 24 hours before all the people on earth were turned into giant meatballs. The mad scientist is very hungry, so he decides to eat one of the nice juicy meatballs. He decides to devour the other mad scientist, who is his only competition. After his meal he decides to go to his office and find his partner in Pakistan. He heads out to the airport to go to Pakistan, but he finds out everybody is a meatball. The streets are completely clean and the airport is empty. He only sees giant balls of meat sitting there. As he thinks about what he was going to do, he realizes that he could fly helicopters. He had lost his license because of a few minor crashes,but nobody was here, so he was free to go. He ran up to the runway and jumped into a helicopter and started flying. ===


=== After an hour of flying over the dark blue Atlantic Ocean he realizes that he does not know how to get to Pakistan. As he looked at his map an annoying beeping noise. He looks at his gas meter,and it is empty. Now he has no idea where he is going and he is out of gas. What was he going to do? Luckily, out of the corner of his eye, he noticed a little island with long beaches. He decided to do a crash landing on one of the beaches. He flew down on the beach going 200 miles per hour. He crashed on the beach creating a huge explosion. He scrambled out of the helicopter. As he looked around the island a huge, juicy, BBQ meatball from Memphis came rolling out of the trees. When he see the big meatball it starts to chase him around the island. He figures out that this meatball has somehow been turned into a meatball but can still talk and think like a regular person. While he is trying to ask what the meatball's name it ran him over. Then the meatball turns around and is coming at Robert. He is trying to get but he cant because of the BBQ sauce. While the meatball is rolling at him at 100 mph, Robert is trying to figure out what to do he finally gets out of the BBQ sauce and runs to his helicopter. When he gets to the helicopter he is trying to find his fork in his briefcase but just as he gets it out the meatball is coming at him and again runs him over. The helicopter is now in bigger flames than it was before and the meatball is on fire to! At least Robert isn't on fire. The meatball is screaming and then finally turns to ash. Robert is thankful but he really needed the meatballs name. ===


=== After an hour of flying over the dark blue Atlantic Ocean he realizes that he does not know how to get to Pakistan. As he looked at his map **he hears an annoying beeping noise. He looks at his gas meter, and it is empty. Now he has no idea where he is going and he is out of gas. What was he going to do? Luckily, out of the corner of his eye, he noticed a little island with long beaches. He decided to do a crash landing on one of the beaches. He flew down on the beach going 200 miles per hour. He crashed on the beach creating a huge explosion. He scrambled out of the helicopter. As he looked around the island a huge, juicy, BBQ meatball from Memphis came rolling out of the trees. **=== ===**When he see the big meatball it starts to chase him around the island. He figures out that this meatball has somehow been tur ned into a meatball but can still talk and think like a regular person. While he is trying to ask what the meatball's name it ran him over. Then the meatball turns around and is coming at Robert. He is trying to get but he cant because of the BBQ sauce. While the meatball is rolling at him at 100 mph, Robert is trying to figure out what to do he finally gets out of the BBQ sauce and runs to his helicopter. When he gets to the helicopter he is trying to find his fork in his briefcase but just as he gets it out the meatball is coming at him and again runs him over. The helicopter is now in bigger flames than it was before and the meatball is on fire too! At least Robert isn't on fire.The meatball did not flinch or move at all. The scientist is stunned and then noticed that the meatball was burning to ashes and threw the fork on the ground. Robert is thankful but he really needed the meatballs name.**===


===Robert comes upon a village of Pakistan people. He doesn't know he is in Pakistan. He finds his partner's hut but a Pakistan warrior challenges Robert to a dual and the only way to get his partner is to kill the warrior. They have to use wooden poles to knock each other out. The first one to get knocked out loses. The fight begins and the warrior is in the shade so you cannoot see what it is. Out of the shade the meatball lunges at Robert at full speed.===

PEER REVIEW (Saint Michael)

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)? <span style="color: rgb(0, 255, 0);">The plot was formed well. We liked it. It was pretty funny. You should end it a little better because it just ends with him on the island. You also go back and forth with the tenses you use.

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed? <span style="color: rgb(0, 255, 0);"> <span style="color: rgb(0, 255, 0);"> Robert was a pretty mad scientist, and we thought it was pretty suspenseful. You have to try to think of a climax because it doesn't really have one. And like before, the resolution needs a little work.

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions? <span style="color: rgb(0, 255, 0);">We thought that the scientist and mother were pretty lifelike, and so was the son. We knew plenty aut the characters. Good characterization!

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story? <span style="color: rgb(0, 255, 0);">We were able to imagine the characters and meatballs. We'd like to see a little more action though.

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author? The resolution needs more. No more suggestions really. It was good.