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Introductions
Meet Bridget Meet Kirsten

In which several animals save the world.
The opossum was digging through the garbage when she heard the humans talking about the trash destroying the planet on TV. There was going to be another ice age and there was they could do about it! “Oh no, oh no, oh dear dear dear!” Flower the opossum exclaimed. “I must tell Faline and Oak right away!” Faline and Oak were Flower's friends in the forest. Flower's friend Faline was a young doe who was very calm and levelheaded. Flower's other friend was Oak, a young male fox who could be short-tempered but was very clever and loved to tease. Flower herself was an opposum who was loyal as could be to her friends and very compasionate and caring. Flower ran as fast as she could to find her friends. When she finally did, Faline was grazing as deers do, and Oak was drinking from a stream, as foxes get thirsty. “Oh no, oh no, oh dear oh dear! There's an ice age coming! What will we do?” “We should visit the all-knowing wolf Nava! He will know what to do!” suggested Faline excitedly. She had always wanted to meet him. “Yes! A splendid idea!” Chimed in Oak in his somewhat gravely voice. So off they went to see the wolf. It took three days and three nights to finally find him. The wolf was very wise and knew exactly what to do. “You must travel to Puerto Rico to Jared the Imp. But take care; Jared is very sneaky and evil.” Nava instructed. The next day they sneaked onto a boat to Puerto Rico. It was very dark and filled with spooky wooden boxes. The long journey took a week. When they finally got there, they didn't know where to go! On the beach, they found a cattle egret. “Where do we find Jared the imp?” asked Faline. “To find Jared, you must go up the mountain. Take the goat trail. Jared lives in the first cave on the right.” The egret replied. “Thank-you” responded Flower. So off they went to the mountain. They climbed the goat to the top and came to the cave. “Is anyone other than me having second thoughts?” asked Faline. “Aw, come on. Not afraid of an itty-bitty cave, are ya?” asked Oak. “Um, nooooo.......” answered Faline. So in they went. They went deep into the dark, dripping cave. Suddenly, they heard high-pitched maniacal laughter. “Who has come to visit Jared in his lowly cave?” “Flower, Oak, and Faline from the Appalachian Mountains.” squeaked Flower. “ Well, what do you want, I'm very busy eating mushrooms,” Replied Jared. “There's going to be an ice age and we need help!” answered Oak “Well, do you want there to be no ice age? Well now you have global-warming instead!” He cackled. Then he was gone. “Oh no, what will we do now?” fretted Flower. “ I once heard of a magical dragon in Asia. Maybe he can help us!” responded Faline." I've heard that the dragon, Mu-shu is a very, unique, mystical, creature." “Alright, let's go!” said Oak. “Not so fast!” said Jared from somewhere in the cave, “I want this whole 'global warming' thing to happen. Let's see how well you handle rabid bunnies!” They all ran for it because at that moment, rabid bunnies ran out of the cave to attack them! “Oh no! Get back to the dock!” cried Faline. They ran as fast as they could to sneak onto the boat headed toward Asia. They scrambled onto the boat and realized the bunnies were still stuck on the beach! “Hurray!” they all cried. The boat to Asia took 3 weeks without stopping. When they finally got there, they didn't know where to go! “Let's ask that panda over there!” said Faline. “OK,” said Flower. They ran over to ask. “Where can we find the mystical dragon?” asked Oak. “You mean Mu-shu? He lives in the shrine on the other side of the city,” the panda replied. “Thank-you very much!” squeaked Flower. They could feel the heat rising already! They ran as fast as they could to meet Mu-shu. When the got to the shrine it was small, but had a lot of details and artwork written on the walls. In the back sitting on a stone pedestal was Mu-shu. Suddenly, it moved and spoke in a deep majestic voice, slowly and dliberatly. “Who has come to see Mu-shu the dragon?” he inquired. “Flower, Oak, and Faline. We need your help!” Oak then continued to tell the rest of the story. “The imp made global warming and we don't know what to do and we need your help!” “Very well,” said the dragon, “Return to your home. When you arrive everything will be as it should be.” “YAY!” they cried. They all lived happily ever after.

By Bridget and Kirsten

PEER REVIEW

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)? 2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed? 3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions? 4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story? 5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?
 * The plot is very original, it is a very interesting story. **
 * I believe that the characters conflicts and complications are suitable enough for the story. I believe that you have a good enough complication and you do not need to change it. **
 * I think that the characters are a little flat. You should maybe make the characters a little more life like. **
 * Yes the details for the story were extraordinarily vivid. **
 * I would say that the only part of the story that needs improvement are the characters. They are just too flat and unrealistic. ** 

PEER REVIEW (group 2)

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?

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