Nick+C

FAVORITE SPORT: I love Baseball. football **Siblings: 1 older brother** Feel free to upload your podcast or a picture if you like.
 * **Hi, my name is: Nicky C **
 * Grade: 7th**
 * Best Holiday: x-mas **
 * Birth Month: July 2nd **
 * Career Goals: to play major league baseball or miner league baseball **
 * Favorite things to do: playing with my friends, spending time with my family **
 * Favorite Food: pasta **
 * Favorite Munchies: a lot of snacks **
 * Favorite drinks: sprite, milk, water, gatorad **
 * Favorite Subject: Gym **
 * Pet Peeve: school 65% of the time. **

Please Copy and Paste your story here Berry Bonds: Was a baseball player for the Pittsburg Pirates and for the San Francisco Giants. Four years ago he was caught using steroids. His agent was locked up for two years for injecting Bonds with steroids. For the past three years Bonds has been lying to congress. Barry Bonds friends Jose Conseco, Mark McGwire, Rafael Palmeiro, and Megel Tejada were all caught with using steroids. They all lied to congress; Megel Tejada is currently still playing baseball and might be going to jail for the possession of steroids and of kocain. Megel Tejada said “I wasn’t going to use the kocain”. Barry Bonds is band from getting inducted in the National Baseball Hall Of Fame because of the use of steroids. Mark McGwire, and Jose Conseco are also band from getting into the National Baseball Hall Of Fame because the use of steroids.

Questions for Peer Reviewers

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?  I understad the point of your story its pretty original, i dont think that anyone else thought of the use of steroids and then connected it to famous baseball players ruining their carers. That's probably because you like baseball to though..I think that your plot is good, well thought through. but the way that you tell it, i mean, it doesn't really tell a story, it just states the facts. It was like the background evidence of the actual story. It's actually interesting to me, because I actually like baseball. In terms of plot you should explain the storyline more. 2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed? I think that your story needs more problems. Maybe what happens before and after he is discovered with steroids. Maybe go more into his thoughts. Tell the reader what hes thinking...or feeling. Maybe even tell more of when or where he was when he was caught. other then that i think that your story explains the clear problems of what the characters face during the story.

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions? I don't think that you really show a lot of details in the characters. You tell us that Berry Bonds is a player for the Pittsburg Pirates and the San Fransisco Giants. But you should go into more detail about him.

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story? Imagery Details.. I can maybe picture Berry & his friends infront of congress, and banning him. Saying that hes a baseball player hes probably not a small, timid, weak guy. So that gave me a little bit of an imagery picture. Describe him more, and his friends. Maybe you can get an image through their actions, what they say, what they do. I mean yes they all took steroids. But maybe you could tell us how they took them, and then put some information in that. 5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author? I think that your plot is a good idea. But just work on your ideas, content, and details. So basically work on how you tell the story. It had alot of good information, maybe just show that information through some other things that you can add to the story.

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1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author? ||