ISKL+Aidan+H

**Introduction:**
Include some or all of the following, as well as a link to your blog: first name, what you like to do in and out of school, favorites (food, sport, hobby, TV show, video game, etc.), places visited, future plans, claim to fame.

 HI My name is Aidan Hawksby when I'm at home I just play games on my laptop and look up things on Youtube. Favorite food is milk chocolate, my favorite TV show is Naruto and my favorite video game is Armies Of Galenor (not sure if I spelt that right). My blog URL is http://www.blahblahblah-aidan.blogspot.com/.

**Paste your story here:**
I ran through the alley, thinking he could be anywhere. I heard a gun shot and dived behind a trash can. Once I heard the bullet hit the ground I started running again. I heard another gunshot. This time I quickly looked around and saw the only place I could go was inside a building. I ran towards the door and dove in. As I laid there on the floor panting, I started to think about why this had happened. I remembered that it all started a few weeks ago when I was at my house arguing with my friend.

It was just a regular day when suddenly my friend barged through the door. He looked as angry as a bull about to charge. He stormed right up to me I said “Hi Bob” and asked “What is this?” and held up a piece of paper. “Ummm a piece of paper I guess” I replied “That’s right Bill, but what’s on the piece of paper!!!!!!!!!!!!!” he screamed. “Ummm words” I replied “. Do you know what the words are?” he asked Rage was swelling in him like a monster merges from the sea. “No I don’t” I replied. “It says right here Dear Bob, I hate to tell you this but you’re a little too over-reactive so I don’t want to be your friend anymore. Sorry. From Bill”, he said Since when have I ever over-reacted?” Bob asked “Well there’s the time you beat up someone for stealing you’re seat when the tickets were sold out to that concert. You didn’t need to beat up the ticket sales men. Oh and just now look how you are acting,” I replied. “Grrr I’ll kill you someday Bill I’ll kill you for rejecting me. **//__I’ll KILL YOU__//**” he yelled as he stormed off. Man those last words will probably haunt me for the rest of my life. And now it might not be that long a life! The next couple of days I tried to relax. One day though I chose to go out for dinner. I was tired of hiding. It was the worst choice of my life. I was happily enjoying my chicken corn soup when I heard a window smash. Following I heard someone jump in through the window and say “I’ve come for you Bill you will finally die ahahahahahahhahahaha” The voice was eerie in a crazy way and I knew who that voice belonged too. I ran for the door and made the exit just as a bullet shot through the door. I ran and ran and ran and that’s pretty much what’s happened so far. Now I was puffing and waiting in an abandoned building.

I screamed as I heard someone barge through the door. I was relieved to find it was only the police with Bob in handcuffs trying to bite his hands off so he could escape. “We’ve been after you Raging Robert for a couple of murders. Thought you could hide out in the suburbs did you? Pretend to live a normal life?” It was over! I was safe. Well at least until Bob gets let out of prison in 21 years or so.

**Questions for Peer Reviewers**
(Think in terms of questions you would like to ask the author.)

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?