SO-Laura+J.

**Introduction: **
Hey, my name is Laura. I am a sixth grader that goes to South Middle School and is 12 years old. I was born on September 20th 1996. I just moved to Eau Claire, Wisconsin at the end of the summer. Sense than you couldn't belive how many new friends that I have made. I have one brother that is 14 years old. I live with my mom, my dad, and my brother. My favorite subject in school would have to be Math. Outside of school I love to hang out with friends on the weekend and I also love to go to the mall and shop (I like to spend money). I love to go on vacations with my family, some of the places that I have been to are Florida, California, Montana, Wyoming, Wisconsin Dells, Alabama, Tennesse, Utah, Las Vegas, South Dakota, North Dakota, Michigan, Iowa, Chicago, Kentucky, Indiana, Ohio and many more. I think that I want to be a second grade teacher when i grow up. My favorite food is salads. My favorite store is Hollister which i go to every weekend about. My favorite color is blue which I am wearing right now. My favorite place to be is in my room(even though it is super messy). My favorite sport is vollyball and tennis (I am bad at both sports though). My favorite hobby is hanging out with my friends.

** Haunted Maze ** It was a gloomy windy day, when Jackie wanted to go to the Halloween Fair. She couldn’t go with her Mom because she had to watch her little sisters and go to the grocery store. So, she decided to ask her friend Janette; she goes to school with her and almost every weekend they hangout. “Hey Mom, can I go to the Halloween Fair with Janette?” Jackie asked. “Sure, you can call her,” answered Jackie’s Mom. Jackie dialed Janette’s number and asked, “Hey, do you want to go to the Halloween Fair with me? I hear that they have a really cool maze.” “Yeah, but I will have to let my Mom known,” Janette said. “Ok, what time do you want to go?” “I think right after lunch will be good.” “So, meet there at about noon?” “Yeah, sounds good. See you there! Bye.” “Bye.” After Jackie ate lunch, she went to the Halloween Fair. Five minutes later Janette arrived and they decided to do the maze first. When they got to the entrance, nobody was there. So, they decided to ask a girl that was selling flashlights nearby the cotton candy stand. “Hello, can we go in the maze?” Janette asked. “Um my name is Kelly, and I hear that it is haunted, so you might not want to go into there,” Kelly said. “Why is it haunted?” asked Jackie and Janette at the same time. “It was about two years ago when this man went in at night, it was very windy, raining hard, and all of the corn stock was starting to fall apart. Did I mention that he never came out until a month later?! When he did come back he said that he saw a ghost that had long arms and legs that swayed back and forth. He also heard a lot of noises that sounded like it was going to come after him. Then finally he tried to get out of the maze when he actually saw the ghost.” “Let’s go home I don’t really want to go in the maze anymore,” Janette said. Jackie told Janette, “Come on it will be fun and we can try to solve the mystery like we used to do when we were really little. Our parents would make stuff up and almost every time we would figure it out,” “Fine but if I hear anything that is scary, or see anything that is scary, we are coming right back out here where it is safe.” “Sounds good to me, but, if you do run out like a little baby, I am going to stay in the maze and check it out even more.” “That is fine with me. But, if I get lost, I am coming back to get you and we will both try to find our way out.” “Ok, let’s go in,” Jackie said. When they went in it was fine at first, but after about 10 minutes they found a foot print in the dirt with a flashlight next to it. Their first thought was that Kelly might have done something to that man that she was talking about before. “Hey Jackie, why would Kelly want to scare people away from the maze?” “I don’t know, but, maybe she wanted people to go next to the maze so people would buy flashlights. Then she would tell them that story and make it so they would have wasted their money on a flashlight for no reason.” “That could be true and she did kind of make a mad face when we said we were going in the maze.” “Lets put this in a bag and when we get out of here we could see if there are any fingerprints on them.” “How are we going to get Kelly’s fingerprints to see if they are hers?” “We could buy one of her flashlights because she will touch the flashlight and get her fingerprints from that.” “Let’s go get that now and get out of here.” “You are such a chicken.” “Whatever. Come on let’s go.” When they got out of the maze they asked Kelly for a flashlight and went back to Jackie’s house to see if the fingerprints were Kelly’s. It turned out that the fingerprints weren’t Kelly’s. “Now what do we do now that we know that the fingerprints aren’t Kelly’s,” Janette said. “We could ask her who the other employs are that work around this area or come over here a lot and ask them questions.” “I am free tomorrow; do you want to do that then?” “Sure do you think I can sleepover so that we can get going early in the morning?” “Let me ask my Mom but I think it will be alright.” “Hey, Mom, do you think that Jackie can spend the night?” “I think that would be okay.” “Thanks, Mom.” “You’re welcome.” “Do you want to call your Mom to see if you can spend the night, Jackie?” “Sure.” Jackie called her mom and her mom said that she could spend the night. The two girls kept the flashlight that had the fingerprints on it to compare it with other fingerprints from other people when they get there fingerprints. The next morning Jackie and Janette got up early so that they could get to the fair early. When they got there Kelly wasn’t there yet so they decided to go in the maze and take another look at things. They went to the same place that they went to the day before and found that the foot print was gone. “Hey, look the footprint is gone!” said Jackie. “I wonder what happened to it.” Janette asked. “Let’s go see if Kelly is here and ask her if she saw anyone come in here yesterday after we left.” They went to find Kelly to ask her if anyone went in the maze after they left. Kelly said that there was one person that went in the maze and that was Kayla, who is in charge of the maze along with Alyssa, which was Kayla’s twin sister. They also sell the tickets for the maze, that Jackie and Janette had run into the day before when they bought the tickets for the maze. So, they went to the ticket booth to see if Kayla and Alyssa were there. The ticket booth was really run down and looked like an old shack that had been through a really bad storm, it had a small radio that was playing country music that Jackie and Janette both hated. “Hello are you Kayla,” asked Janette. “No, I am Alyssa, but do you want me to get Kayla for you?” “Sure”, said Jackie, “And I was wondering if we could get two tickets to go into the maze?” “I will let Kayla take care of that when you talk to her.” Jackie said. “That sounds good, thanks.” “Hello I am Kayla, Alyssa said that you wanted to talk to me.” “Yes we did. We were wondering why you went in the maze after we left the maze?” “That is because every time somebody goes into the maze and then comes out again we have to check if everything is in place and that nothing is destroyed.” “Ok thanks, and can we get two tickets to the maze.” “Yeah that will be $14.00.” Janette and Jackie each gave Kayla $7.00 and went to the maze. The maze was empty so they went to different places that they didn’t go to the first time that they were there. The first place they went to was the very back right corner of the maze and found nothing. So, they went to the left back corner and found spilled slushy with a cup that said, “Cassidy’s slushy shop.” “Isn’t that shop outside of this corner of the maze,” Jackie said. “Yeah I think that it is open by now. Do you want to go and ask her some questions about why the cup was here,” Janette replied. “Sure, but wait, if it wasn’t soaked into the dirt then it must have just been spilled a little while ago.” Janette said, “That is true, but let’s go.” They went to Cassidy’s slushy shop and asked her about the spilt slushy. “I went in the maze for a little while because the shop didn’t open for another half hour. I just wanted to look around in there because I had never been in there before. I accidentally dropped my slushy cause I thought that I heard voices in the maze and started running out of the there,” Cassidy said, “but I swear that that was the only thing that I was doing in the maze.” “Did you happen to recognize the voices that you heard,” Janette asked. Cassidy replied, “It sounded like they were girls, but I am not quite sure.” “Ok, it might be Kayla and Alyssa then. Thank you so much for all of the help, Cassidy,” Jackie said. “Yeah let’s go and see if Kayla or Alyssa went into the maze after we left.” Janette and Jackie went to the ticket booth and saw that Kayla and Alyssa were both still there. They decided to ask Kayla and Alyssa if they went in the maze after they left. Kayla said, “We didn’t see anyone go in the maze so we didn’t look for any damage to the maze.” “Well, what were you doing in that time?” asked Jackie. “I was taking the maze money and putting it in a safe place,” Kayla said. “Was that safe place in the fairgrounds?” “Yes I was only gone for about 10 minutes.” “Ok that was all that we needed to know, thanks.” After about 2 days they found out that Kayla and Alyssa did haunt the maze because they wanted to get money from the maze and keep customers from going in the maze so that they can take the day off and go do other things when they were still getting paid for working each day. They didn’t have to worry about anyone going in the maze so when they heard that Janette and Jackie went in the maze they had to go back to work so it would seem like they were working each day. Then finally Kelly told Jackie and Janette that Kayla and Alyssa didn’t show up after they stopped coming to the maze. Janette and Jackie told the fair organizer and owner that Alyssa and Kayla were haunting the maze and haven’t been working that much, so they both got fired from the job and had to give all of the money back to the fair owner. Janette and Jackie got offered Kayla and Alyssa’s job and accepted it and they also together got to keep $200 for solving the mystery of The Haunted Maze.
 * By: Laura Jacobson **

**Questions for Peer Reviewers**
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