SO-Shania+M.

**Introduction:**
My name is Shania, I am 12 years old. I live in Eleva/Cleghorn Wisconsin I have a younger brother named Austin, he is nine. I also have a puppy that is 12 weeks old, she is a Shi Tzu Maltese mix. And I have a teddy bear hamster named Nibbles. Also at my grandparents house I keep my 5 horses Scamper, Jet, Smokey-Joe, Chocolate-Drop, and Sugar. Scamper and Jet are quarter horses and the rest are miniature. Along with the horses at my grandparents I keep my goat, Sophie that I show at the 4-H fair, there are other goats that are not mine but I use them for goat tying. When I am not with my pets you would problibly find me at the mall, Cleghorn park, or at a friends house. 

**Paste your story here:**
**Diggers Lake** By: Shania Saydee Larson and her father Dave went to the old abandoned farm house in Eleva; it has white chipped off paint, and a small worn down deck. Down the hill from the old house is an old, shaky red barn, nothing is in it, no one knows why. But when you touch it at all it shakes. Next to the barn there is a lake; the lake has a thin green layer of algae, and a brown darkness, and hidden in it are small fish. Saydee was walking bare foot down the dull gravel road, with her fishing pole in hand. Once she reaches the lake she sits down in the warm sand and flew the line out in the middle of the lake; Sitting there thinking of when her father will be back from hunting. Minuets later she heard a faint noise of a truck coming, Saydee thought it was her dad, but it wasn’t, it was his truck but when the door opened a tall, blonde haired guy jumped out, and walked up to Saydee and told her that she needed to come with him. Saydee worried, jumped in to the truck and asked who the tall, blonde haired guy was. He said that his name was Jesse and he had to take Saydee to foster care and didn’t say anymore after that. Once they arrived she met a woman named Sally which was the same first name as her mom’s, she told Saydee that her dad had died because someone shot him while he was hunting but they don’t know who or why. Sally asked what had happened to her mother, Saydee said that one day her mom was outside and then she never came back in, so she had been living with her dad ever since. Sally paused for she knew who Saydee was. Sally got a new last name when she married Scott Forestella, (that is why she had run away) everyone in Eleva thought that she died. Sally had to keep this a secret from Saydee until she can trust her. So Sally had to adopt her, she is after all her //real// daughter. In about a month or so Sally officially became Saydee’s Foster mom (and of course her real mom) every thing was going fine except for they couldn’t find her fathers will. One day came a knock on the door Sally answered and the tall, blonde haired man said that Saydee could go in to her dads’ house to get her things. So Sally and Saydee jumped in the car and drove off to the old farm house. When they arrived Saydee ran up to her room and started to put her things in a box, but then she saw in her closet a small story book, one of her favorites, she opened it and out fell her dads hidden will. She quickly ran downstairs and gave it to Sally; Sally opened it and read a couple listings which involved Saydee. Sally told Saydee to hurry up packing her things and then they would show this to the office. They got to the office and she gave it to the woman there, it says that Saydee gets the farm, his truck, and everything else. Since Saydee wasn’t able to drive yet She shared them part way with her step mom, so her step mom sold her house and car and just lived in the old white farm house. They lived there for many years all the way until Saydee’s 18th birthday Steve and sally both agreed to let Saydee have the farm house and the truck her dad owned. And then they would move into a smaller house. Years passed as they lived that way. Until one day sally was missing they had a search crew come to their house they found her in a closet dead, because she stabbed herself and in her hand there was a note it read:

‘Saydee, I am sorry for not telling you before but, I am your real mother, I wasn’t captured and taken away to die I ran away because I liked some one else (Scott Forestella) right when they announced me dead we went to Las Vegas and got married. I am very sorry I didn’t tell you this before. The guilt is now eating me alive so…” Saydee was standing there staring at the message and reading it over twice to make sure she read it right, but sure enough she did. And now Saydee will have to live the rest of her life with no real father, no real mother, but a guy who had ruined it all for her family, also years later they found out who shot Dave, and sure enough it was Scott Forestella. So not only was he responsible for killing her father but partly her mother too. No real father, no real mother, just a guy who ruined it all.

**Questions for Peer Reviewers**
(Think in terms of questions you would like to ask the author.)

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author? Hey Shania, Great Story but i think i need more details.