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Introductions
Meet Lexi Meet Ashley

Story
Beaches Become Cleaner Once upon a time, there was a girl named Michele, and a boy named Martin they were both 10 years old. They were siblings. Both loved to go to the beach,  but they hated all the pollution. They told their parents about it but , they didn't seem so concerned. Michele decided to tell the beach officers about the problem.  Both also, wanted to hang up flyer's to prevent pollution to the world and, marine life. It was the next day when they go to the beach and saw someone throw coke rings into the ocean. Michele ran up to him and told him that he could hurt the animals. After she told him he didn't look like he wanted to get the rings but. Michele made him. Michele and Martin were very concerned about all the problems that go on at beaches. That same day they went home to make their flyers and included words about the pollution and some pictures of marine life. That night, they went to hang up and distribute their flyers. Most people didn't look like they wanted anything to do with this issue. When they go to the beach early next morning, they saw a ton of garbage on the sand. Michele wasn't happy and,  her flyers haven't been been up long enough. She hoped they will eventually work. Martin had a feeling they were going to work, Michele doubted him. Martin and Michele tried to clean the beaches before anyone got there. A little while later their parents came.They wanted to help the cause because they noticed how much their kids wanted to help their beaches. Then a beach officer comes up to all of them and asked, “why are you cleaning up someone else's mess?” Martin then said, “ Well because we don't want the tide to bring all the trash into the ocean and, hurt the animals.” Then the officer said, “You guys are helping our environment a lot but,  if you want we can get a machine to clean instead of cleaning it by yourself. This machine is mechanical. It is faster than using your hands." They agreed to his idea. At the end of the week, their flyers worked and more and more people started volunteering to clean the beaches in the morning. The officers idea helped them a lot because now they didn't have to spend so much time, even though Michele and Martin wanted to. Now since their beach is clean maybe their ideas will travel to other beaches around the world. Michele and Martin hope it will continue on. A year later, Michele and Martin are still cleaning beaches. They are also going to other beaches around the world to help them get their environment clean. Now they're not just helping their beach and their marine life but also, helping others with their pollution problems.

By- Lexi and Ashley

PEER REVIEW

1. Think of plot—is it original? It's an interesting piece. (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)? The piece was interesting, however, there could have been more complications. Sometimes, it felt a little repetitive. Ex: There wasn't just trash being thrown into the ocean, but oil was being leaked into the ocean from waste dumps. Something like that. Make it more exciting! 2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed? There weren't enough complications to the story to make it tense. The idea was well thought out. However, there wasn't enough excitement. The resolution was a happy ending!

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions? We didn't know the characters in the story so we couldn't enjoy them more.

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story? Personally, I understand the noise and the sight and experience only because I've been to the beach before. If I hadn't been before I wouldn't have known what the experience of the beach would be like in this story. The story needs to have more descriptions of the beach.

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author? The grammar in the story needs to be improved, you need some more complications, your plot needs to be more clear, and the characters need to be more descriptive. These are the only things that need to be changed! Other than that... it was a great story!!! =)

PEER REVIEW (group 2)

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?

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