ISKL+Tina,+Ameera

Introduction Tina and Ameera

 Shock and fear struck me as the alien chief pointed his green and purple unclipped finger at me. "Your turn," he remarked. The time has finally come and it was my turn to save my country, Ethiopia. As the thought occured to me for the last time I felt like my heart did a triple flip in my throat. My three best friends, Fionna, Alex, Sam gazed at me as if they were looking straight into my future and my countries fate. They had not yet had a turn to face the aliens and their chief, smirking at their every word in disgust as they read. "Tina, go ahead and tell a story to the alien", Ameera whispered. "OK I'll try", I sighed. She was the only one who spoke. The others were too paralyzed with fear to take pity on me. As I walked into the alien's peach black space craft, with one lamp over-head an abandoned desk chair in the center of the room as its only source of light. As I entered the aliens looked at me as if I were the ugliest creature they had ever seen. But I don't think that they had ever looked in the mirror before because of their ugliness, so I ignored the weird faces they were making at me. I started with a big breath and wept, " This is a true story and please don't destroy my country!! It has been there since the beginning of time, it would just be a waste destroying an ancient and powerful (past tense) place. I came from Ethiopia and would love it to stay like that. In Ethiopia there are only two different kinds of religions, 60% of the people are Christians and 40% are Muslims but, we ALL live in PEACE facing our differences. As there are different religions there are different tribes. Ethiopia has about eighty-three tribes that are peaceful and all have their own different language and cultures, but know I'm going to tell you about the tribe that I grew up in, The Amhara tribe. The Amharah tribe speaks and writes a language called Amharic the writing consists of 56 letters which are hard to learn and memorize. In the Amharah tribe we mostly eat traditional food called Injura. Injura is made of a grain called teaf that only grows in the farms of Ethiopia. As all the countries in the world, we also have our traditional cloth. It is usually and traditionally a long dress for women with black or brown amazing hand made embroidery that takes, about a year to make. for the men the Amhara tribe has short sleeved t-shirts and and shorts. As beautiful as this cloth are we only wear them on special occasions like weddings, traditional holidays, (Christmas) or to church. The next thing I would like to talk about is how unique my country is. For example: Ethiopia has a completely different calender, different seasons, different years, and different number of days in a month. Now in my country it is the year 2001 while on the "European calender" it is 2009. and as you know the new year in the "European calender" is on January 1 while ours is in September 11. How extraordinary right? Well I hope You adored my story and don't destroy my country. As my thin and limp legs speed walked out of the Alien surroundings  with regret in my eyes I squealed to Fionna, who was next in line, "You have to win their heart, if they have one." Fiona walked to the aliens. She stood with fear in front of them sweat dripping from her red curls, but decided that the best way to save her country, America was to tell them a story. She started off with her voice quivering, " Once upon a time there was a princess who lived in a far away land. She was very unhappy because her father had just died and she lived with a stepmother and two mean stepsisters. One day she was taking a walk. On her way to the market when a carriage passes by and she falls into a ditch. The carriage stops and the prince comes out and helps her up. She is very flattered and you can tell that he likes her a lot but she has no interest because she knows that she could never be with him because she is a servant. He then asks for her name and she gives it to him true fully . Three days later, she got a letter in the mail from the prince asking her to come to the ball. Her stepmother <span style="color: rgb(0, 159, 255);">immediately snatches it from her and says that only the two <span style="color: rgb(0, 159, 255);">stepsister may go and she must stay at home and do piles of chores. The princess worked very hard and very fast because she wanted the prince more than anything. She then <span style="color: rgb(0, 159, 255);">finished all of her chores by 9:30, but she did not have a dress.

<span style="color: rgb(255, 0, 234);"> <span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; color: rgb(255, 0, 234);">Fiona's fairy came to her and brought her a beautiful, flowing dress. Fiona put the dress on and it was a perfect fit. She then realized that she did not have a ride. Outside there sat a pumpkin in her driveway. The fairy then pointed her wand to the pumpkin and said <span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; color: rgb(0, 159, 255);">"abracadabra" <span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; color: rgb(255, 0, 234);"> and the pumpkin turned into a beautiful white carriage pulled by two horses. <span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; color: rgb(153, 0, 255);">Before she set <span style="color: rgb(0, 159, 255);">off to the ball though, Fiona's fairy made her promise that she would have to get back before twelve or else everything magical will disappear and turn into their natural form. On that thought Fiona <span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; color: rgb(255, 0, 234);"> was <span style="color: rgb(0, 159, 255);">off to the ball. When she arrived to the ball her beautiful date was waiting for her. They danced all night and almost lost track of time <span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; color: rgb(153, 0, 255);">because that's when she gazed at the grand father clock at the corner of the room indicating 15 minutes to twelve. <span style="color: rgb(255, 0, 234);">At that moment she said "I am sorry" to the prince and ran out the door, leaving one of her crystal shoes behind on the steps. The prince ran after her with her shoe but was too late. Meanwhile her step sisters were getting punch and thought they saw her but realized it was impossible. <span style="color: rgb(153, 0, 255);">Since she was at home scrubbing the stair case floor.

<span style="color: rgb(153, 0, 255);"> Fionna got into the carriage and went back to the house. By the time she got there the <span style="color: rgb(0, 159, 255);">carriage had turned into the <span style="color: rgb(0, 159, 255);">pumpkin it once was, and her dress was no longer beautiful or elegant, it was simple, torn and dirty. A few minutes later Fionna's stepmother and stepsisters came in all angry at that beautiful woman that danced with the prince all night. They talked about how they much more beautiful they would have looked dancing with the prince insted of her. While they chattered interupting each other, Fionna sat silently in the corner thinking about the prince and how her miserable life would continue with out seeing him ever again. But the next day when she woke up something magical happened. Fionna found the Prince in the main room. He and his soldiers have been searching the city looking for the girl who fit in those slippers perfectly. They had put the slippers on every maiden in the house but could find non who could fit in it. So this was the last house and it meant the last chance of finding that girl who fit perfectly in the Prince's heart. Hearing this the Stepmother brought her to daughters out. First went the younger daughters feet, but the slippers were too big. Then the elder sister went, but as usual her feet were too big, she couldn't even squeeze them in. As the final search was concluded the prince said in an exausted and hurt voice, " Are you sure there aren't any other maidens in the house." " Yes!" replied the stepmother sharply. But at that moment Fionna rushed into the room and fell on the ground, she couldn't let this apportunity pas by. The Prince looked at her as she was his last hope and let her try the slippers. To his, and everyones around him's, surprise they fit on her feet as if they were meant for her. The Prince pulled her of the ground and and look deep into her eyes and finally realized that she was the one, the one he would marry as the King, his father, would ask him to choose someone to marry. And she was clearly the one. So after that day THEY LIVED HAPPILY EVER AFTER. Fiona backed away swiftly as if they would blast, with a BANG, her out of sight right there. So she finished her story with, " I hope you loved that fairy tale as it always makes kids and grown-ups happy. And this is the way things would be like if you don't distroy our country. Then she rushed out and left in such a hurry she forgot to wish her friend Alex good luck, who would face the Alien masters next.

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Discussion between 2 groups <span style="color: rgb(0, 255, 0);">Dear friends from Memphis: You have to continue the story on where ever you are from, this is our part of it but we have decided to do it on Ethiopia. Hope You Like IT!!!!!Thanxs <span style="color: rgb(198, 21, 21);"> I think we are supposed to be writing the same story together. We will bring our story to the turning point, and then can you guys write the resolution? And we did not like the names so we changed them. Thanks! <span style="color: rgb(153, 0, 255);">Yah, I guess you are write. When you told us to "Write the resolution," did you mean finishing the story of cinderella or end the whole wikispace story? I changed a few sentences in the story, if you don't mind to make it easier for us to add on. And if you want to add or change any thing, please feel free to do so.

PEER REVIEW (Saint Michael)

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)? <span style="color: rgb(0, 159, 255);">the plot isnt that original because it is like cinderella. it was somewhat intersesting to me... 2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed? <span style="color: rgb(0, 159, 255);">there are not that many problems. But you fixed the problems and made it a happy ending. 3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions? <span style="color: rgb(0, 159, 255);">you didnt write what the characters looked like so we would know. You only gave us the name and some information about them. 4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story? <span style="color: rgb(0, 159, 255);">I kinda do but you have to explain it alittle more. 5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author? <span style="color: rgb(0, 159, 255);">I think you should try to look over what you mispelled.