SO-David+E.

**Introduction:**
My name is David. My gender is ♂. That is also the symbol for Mars, named after the greek god of war. My favorite things to do are to invite friends over to my house, juggle, and play on the computer. My favorite school subject is probably Math. My favorite game is definately World Of Warcraft, which is the best game ever made. What I want to do when I become an adult is probably making games for more kids to enjoy. I wish to possibly join the Blizzard Team and help make patches and expansions on WoW.

** The Printing Errors **** By: David Everson **
Jason Nelverson, who never knew any clue what would happen the next day, was sleeping heavily. Meanwhile Jason Neverson, a CIA agent, was about to go on a mission, but the CIA didn’t have records of him. There was a printing error in their printers that an “l” appeared after the “e” in Neverson. Instead, it showed that Jason Nelverson had been a CIA agent for six years, and needed to go on a mission… but he was late.

The 12 year old boy was in his //ordinary// school, turning in //ordinary// homework, but something that was about to happen was //extraordinary//. His math class had a substitute teacher, who wanted to see him at lunch. When he got back to the classroom, CIA agents tumbled in and kidnapped Jason fluently. He never got a chance to scream…. The stun effect was ending, and Jason woke up on a chair with unknown faces staring at him. “How did you get into our system and change the records?” a muscular man with a black tie on said. “It’s impossible that a kid like you could do that!” Jason started to say something, but he was too confused to think of anything to say. Instead, the agents asked him further. “I said, “How did you get into our system and change the records?” and you never answered me! How did you make our files say you are a CIA agent?” Jason looked over at the digital clock on the desk to his left. “I don’t know what you’re talking about… wow, it’s already five o’clock?” “No, that clock needs to be fixed. It’s six o’clock, now.” “You made me miss my history test! Thank you, but now I might not be able to take it.” We’ll have that arranged, but since you refused to tell us, we’ll refuse to let you go. You’re staying with us, so follow us to the room you’ll be staying at.” So he followed… and followed… and followed. He began to wonder if he would ever get there. It seemed like hours, but finally he got to his room with a clock saying, “6:33,” and he grew tired. He couldn’t imagine what just happened. CIA agents kidnapped him and said he was an agent! How could this have happened? He needed to find out. Jason snuck out of his room and followed a hallway to his right, when he heard an alarm go off. He wasn’t sure what had happened, but he didn’t want to stay and find out. He quickly shot out of the hallway the way he came but couldn’t find his door. It was gone! In place was a book shelf that he thought was more to the left. It had moved. He had gotten out of his room just in time to not be stuck inside. What were they trying to do? He thought he heard someone coming around the hallway so he ran through the nearest door he could find. The door was stuck. He couldn’t get it open. The footsteps began to sound louder, and louder, and louder. He finally got the door open and…? The door was the way out! Lucky, he found it. He wasn’t sure what to do. If he ran away they could catch him and question him more. If he stayed they might let him go and leave him be. If he spied around he could either get caught for more questioning or find out what they wanted from him. Jason did not want to stay in this place. It seemed impossible that this could have happened. He wanted to get out and get away from this place, but something was telling him to stay and find out what they wanted. He decided...

Jason’s mother had orange hair, unlike his, which was black. His mother was wearing plain black pants and shirt. She was worried that Jason never got home, so she called the police, who directed her to the Missing Person’s Line. They directed her back to the police, so she gave up doing that. Instead, she called her neighbors, hung pictures on trees saying, “Missing child, please call the number below if you see him,” and even yelled through the street. It was, as it seemed, hopeless. There were no calls about Jason, but there were calls for help from Jason, himself. He wanted to escape but no one would ever let him. Jason chose to leave the CIA Headquarters, but got caught while a walker thought he saw Jason’s face before. His name was Frank Carlson. He was the oldest person in the block, Jason thought, but he was younger than you would normally think. He had to call the number when he found it at the tree on the side of his house past his yard. Jason’s mother came to Jason’s rescue. She got them to think that they misprinted someone’s name. They did, and figured it out. Jason was safe, at last. Printing errors were found and Jason //Neverson// was put back into business. The only problem was that the mission was never finished. Something bad was going to happen in the United States, But no one would know….

**Questions for Peer Reviewers**
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1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

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