BF-Silvia

Hi my name is Silvia This is like the 4th time I right my intro because it has been erased like a thousand times. Well, I am silvia and I am 12 years old. My Best friend is called Ona, we-ve been bff since 1st grade. My favorite clor is pink, and my favorite food is japanese food. I love skiing. In winter I ski in the snow and in the summer I water-ski, It's great!!!!! I have a big sister. My hobby is... SHOPPING! Well I don't really like sports, so... I am not very flexible and not very sporty. My favorite celebrities are; Miley Cyrus and Selena Gomez!!! I love abercrombiie, dcshoes... That type of stuff. Well since it's the fourth time i right this I know perfectly what to say! My favorite place to:go is U.S.A) Bye-Bye Silvi a This is me in the top anna in the right down in the floor is ona my bff and the one in red hair is merel. me and my best friend ona me in the right!!! My Story Paris to London


 * Los Angeles 2009, Paris Kingfisher, fashion designer**

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theree once was Paris, Beautiful, Pretty... Everbody liked her because she looked like an absoulute barbie doll! Even her friends liked her becuase she was rich, she owned> a limousine, a jet, a mansion, she could have everything she wanted. Well so Paris... she loved being rich and everything but someday she would like to have a real family, and kids... but she can never find her real love. Because everybody liked her the way her outside looked like and how much money she had. One day she figured out that she could become ugly and see if the people liked her the way she was. So she went shopping to the worst and ugliest store in the city, turned her hair black and got the worst glasses. She was HORRIBLE!! She stayed horriblke for a couple of weeks and nobody recognized her, oh and don-t let me forget she had also changed her nam to London Gomelie. When she went to talk to her OLD friends nobody recognized her (of course). After she went to them and said,"Hi, my name is London". All the girls ignored her and her last boyfriend too. She was astonished of how stupid her friends were. "Exusme, I-m going to the cinema today do you want to come?" London asked her old best friend Rosie "You wish, don-t let anyone see me with you, go, go" said Rosie. London was... was she didn-t even believe it. One day she went to get her coffee to Starbucks (as normal) and she bumped into a man called Alex, London accedently threw all her coffee over all his shirt. While she was cleaning the coffe off him Alex asked London out. London was astonished of how Alex could ask her Londo super ugly out. There first date was awsome so......After 3 months London told Alex that she was Paris he understood soo, 4 years later they had 2 girls and 3 boys THEY LIVED HAPPILY EVER AFTER =====

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)? I really liked your story. i thought it wasvery original! =DDD

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed? I thought her compliactions sshe faced were orginal, and really life like. but i dont think someone would chanmge them self. but other than that it was really good.

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions? Paris/London was a pretty original charater.

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story? You could really picture, and understnad the story.

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author? i dont think anything really needs improvment. but just add a little more deatail. other than that GREATT JOBB =DDDD

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?