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 * __Introduce yourself__ . Hi there! My name is Maria Claudia, I am 14 years old, I like to dance, watch t.v and also stay on the computer for hours. I love hamsters and I like playing football hehe! My favourite food is Aguadito de Pallares, my birthday is the first of July! Well, I hope you like my story . bye =) **=====

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**__ Publish your story COMA __** Now, I can hear a pip, pip, pip ... very slowly and the beating of my heart, beat, beat by who? Mmm ... Now, I begin to remember. It was a summer afternoon where I first saw you, you were in the same park where I woke up. He brought a pole position with a blue and white stripes mounted skate that you seemed to be more intense and deep love. I watched, I needed no more, it was love at first sight. I never dared to approach, much less talk. I was a teenager and lacked maturity, hated being in my house, spending time with my family, everything sucked, everything but you. I go and see everything that was wanted, loved you in silence, but always thought that you never set me. Time passed, both grew up. Still frequenting the park, I was reading while you skate mounted, still love you. One day we were in the park and began to rain very hard (something unusual in Lima) you approached me first and told me "Take my jacket, you will get sick", such was the phrase most special of my life. you were called Matthew, the most beautiful name around the world to me. Accompanied me to my house and asked me if I would be in the park tomorrow. We became very close friends and confidants. It was a dark autumn evening in which we said goodbye, you crossed the road to go to your house, I suddenly saw a light and suddenly everything went dark, I heard cries, I felt tears fall but could not do or say anything. How I feel today? I remain in darkness, which does not seem to fade. But I still remember you. I hope to see you wake up one day and laugh and listen to mourn no more. =====

** __Questions for Peer Reviewers__ **
(Think in terms of questions you would like to ask the author.) 1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?