SO-Tim+B.

**Introduction:**
My name is Tim Black I love to play sports and love animals. I have 6 people in my family. l also have a dog named Tessa. I hate it when people act like they're the coolest person in the world. I love pizza and ribs. I am in 6th grade. I am 12 years old. I have Mrs. Hawkenson every morning second period. My favorite video game is Call of Duty. I am hoping to become a scientist. If I do not become a scientist I would like to be a professional sports player or a marine in the army.

**Paste your story here:**
** The Hiking/Camping Trip. ** By: Tim Black “Are we there yet? I’m tired of being in the car,” asked my annoying brother. “We’ll get there when we get there.” I said. I was going to explode if it weren’t for my friends Peter and Austin. “I can’t wait to get on the trail,” I said. “Mom I have to go to the bathroom.” Wow can he get any more annoying I thought. “My brother just likes to check out bathrooms,” We all laughed at that. “Only three miles to go,” I told my friends. Once we got there no more of my brother it’s going to be just my friends and me. We’re going to go hiking, go swimming, watch the stars, and sleep outside. “It’s so nice out isn’t it I mean there’s not a cloud in the sky,” Said my friend Peter. “We’re here guys isn’t it awesome,” said Austin. “I can’t believe we get to go camping here. After the hike up to a good camping spot we set up our tents Peter needed help. I am free of my brother, I thought. “What are we going to do first,” I asked. “I say we make our way to the lake I mean it’s the perfect time it’s three’ clock,” peter said. “I heard there was a rope swing somewhere.” “Rope swing I’m in,” Austin said. “I’ll go change. “All right we’ll go,” I said. When we got to the lake we met a boy named Patrick. He said his parent’s let him stay at the camping spot for a week each year. “So why are you guys here,” he asked us. “Our parent’s finally agreed that we could go camping alone and we chose to camp here,” we told him. “So you get to come here every year?” we asked him. “Yeah my parents think it’s great I like to be outdoors.” “Do you like rope swings?” “That’s the reason we came down here.” For the rest of the day we were swimming. After swimming we all went back to the camping area. Patrick’s tent was huge and he had food in his tent instead of his cooler. After seeing everyone’s tents we sat by a fire I made and told ghost stories it looked like Patrick was going to wet his pants. The next day we went to the top of a huge hill and started screaming. When we were going back down we found some tasty looking berries. To be contiued.

**Questions for Peer Reviewers**
(Think in terms of questions you would like to ask the author.)

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author ? I love how you talk about Patrick. haha! nice job!!!!!!!!!!! - Jordan Hey tim! Nice start to the story! - Cole