Gabriella

**Siblings: one older brother named Gianmarco and a younger brother named Lorenzo** Feel free to upload your podcast or a picture if you like.
 * Hi, my name is Gabriella. **
 * Grade: 8**
 * Best Holiday: I don't celebrate holidays **
 * Birth Month: April **
 * Career Goals: i want to study cosmotology in high school and then go to college **
 * Favorite Band(s): All American Rejects **
 * Favorite Food: Anything Italian **
 * Favorite Munchies: Kettle corn **
 * Favorite soft drink: Rootbeer floats **
 * Favorite Subject: Social Studies and Gym **
 * Pet Peeve: Anything that annoys me (like my little brother bothering me) **
 * Pets: A dachshund named Rocco **

Gabriella Marrese Computers 8 27 March 2009

Sparkie the dog

Maddie was sitting at her computer during class not knowing what to write. How could she think of a story when all that was on her mind was her dog. Sparkie was in the hospital. Last night after he ate he stopped breathing and they had to rush him to the vets. After getting there they realized his stomach was twisted and he needed a surgery that would cost 3,000 dollars, when Maddie heard this she was really sad because she didn’t know if her parents where able to afford it.

“HELLO!” Carla said flailing her arms up and down. Obviously she’s been doing this awhile because she looks a little annoyed.

What!!! Oh My God Carla what do you want?

“ Well I wanted to tell you a story, guess what happened today.”

I don’t know, what?

“ Well the-

I don’t care I have to finish this story and find away to get 2,000 dollars for Sparkies surgery cause my parents are only going to pay 1,000 dollars.

“That’s what its about, I was like talking to Mark the other day and he said there’s gonna be a fair at the school in a week and there’s one booth short if you have any ideas. And so I knew I had to think of something, so when you called me yesterday and told me about Sparkie I called him when I hung up with you. And he said they could do a booth for dogs with games and stuff and all the money will go to Sparkies’ surgery.”

OMG are you serious, you’re the best friend in the whole world!!!

“Thank you I know, you owe me lol. So now we have to tell him what the theme is and when we’re painting it and setting up, what games there’s gonna be, you know all the details.”

I gave her the biggest hug and then finished writing my story. It turned out really good and I got a 90 on it. That night she came over so we could get everything together. When she finally got to my house we ate dinner and then got down to work. In the end we decided that the booth would be called “Pick a Pooch.” The game would kind of be a memory game with different dog pictures and the contestants would have to pick the picture of the right dogs or they loose. It would only cost $5 and you would get 2 chances. It’s a timed game, and your challenging another person; the first person to finish the whole puzzle with get a stuffed animal.

Time went by really fast since then and before we knew it, it was time for the fair. We got everything set up and people were starting to come. By the time the fair was over we made $1500. I was upset we couldn’t get the rest of the money but my dad decided I worked hard enough and gave me the rest of the money.

Two months later ……

"Sparkie I’m so glad your okay".

He just got out of surgery and he was recovering really well.

** THE END **

Questions for Peer Reviewers I love this story it has a happy ending and i'm glad sparkie lives. good job! -Adri

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?