SG_Gonzalo+R.

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hi! my name is Gonzalo, I am 12 years old, I have two brothers called Franco and Mariano. My school is Saint George and I am in 8th grade. I like to practice sports and to listen music, also I like the videogames but I do not play a lot. I live in Surco in a department. My favorite food from Peru is Ceviche, a very delicious dish. Ilike to swim a lot, I was on a academy of swim but now I cant. This is how I am xD.=====

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__**The trip horribly perfect**__ The last year, Ben gathered all his family, his wife and his three boys: Max, John and David. Ben told his family that they were going to travel to a nice place called Tarma, a very wet and cold place. He also said that they were going with two more families. Joaquin was the father of one of the families, he had a wife called Cecilia and they had three girls: Danila Meliza and Ibana. The other family was Carlos's family, he also had a wife called Carmen and a nineteen-years-old boy called Renato. One week later they all started their journey to Tarma. In the way David started to feed sick, his eyes began to swell and he had fever so Erika remembered that before going to the trip she gave David a tablet for the altitude sickness. She realised that David was allergic to that tablet. Erika and Ben returned with David to Lima and Max and John went in Joaquin's car to Tarma and continued their journey. Ben said that he was going to join them the next day in Tarma. The others continued. Joaquin was driving normally and suddenly the car began to expulse smoke from the front part of the car. Joaquin started to go very fast because he thoght that he would find a petrol station or something like that near that place, but he didn’t find anything. He had to stop. Fortunately, Carlos knew a village near from there so Carlos went to that place. Then a mechanic repared the car but not very well because it failed again on their way to the village. Finally, they decided to go back to Lima and for the next day they would all go with another car to Tarma. The next day David felt better so he went with Ben and his wife to Tarma. Ben loaned his other car to Joaquin. Then on the way to Tarma the car that Ben loaned to Joaquin started to fail and Carmen began to feel sick, she had a very strong headache, then Carlos' car failed and everybody decided that with so much problems they should stay in Lima and go to a club called “El Country Club El Bosque” They wanted to stay there for four days but there were no bungalows. Ben knew a hotel near to the club so they stayed there four days. It was not the end they hope but stay in that hotel was their only chance to have fun. END =====

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