SG_Valeria+F.

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 * __Introduce yourself__ hi everybody !! My name is Valeria Fernandez !!! I am 12 years old, i like to play basketball , and I love to sing and to act . **=====

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 * I  would like to be a great singer and actress. I love the animals, Also I play very well the flute and I am learning to play the piano. I love the animals .I like to go out with my friends, to go to the cinema, to go to the beach, etc. I have two brothers the oldest one that has 16 years and the youngest who is 11 years old . thanks for reading :D ... :) . **=====

===__ The darkness and the death __ === **One day in the darkness and gloom there was a haunted mansion in which an elder lived, but he was not any elder, he was a very rare and suspicious person because when a person was entering to the mansion** **was remaining hours with the elder until** ** nevermore it was going out ** **, The story says that the elder was a killer because he was putting articles in the door of the mansion that said: "We need an assistant, we pay very well" When every person entered to the mansion, the elder was very nice to the person, later he waited for a good moment in his office, and then he returned with a knife in his hands and killed the person, now the elder had already died, the mansion was left and nobody entered there. A man called Frankie, who just moved into his new house near the mansion, was very satisfied, but he observed the horrible mansion that was at the corner, he had the curiosity to know what was inside there, then he entered, he observed, and he saw several corpses ,Nobody wise that there were corpses , in the centre of the corpses there was a blanket, he raised the blanket and he saw another corpse, in the corpse there was a heart that was shining, Frankie was confused, he touched the heart and took it to his house. In the night, the he was sleeping when the elder appeared and said to him: "I am going to kill you!" Frankie was scared so he took a knife and stubbed it to the elder. The elder did a great shout and died. The man try to calm down, and the heart was convert in ash, the ash belong to the elder. The elder didn't return to kill people anymore, now the mansion is a mall.**
 * By: Valeria Fernández Quiroz . =D **

** __Questions for Peer Reviewers__ **
(Think in terms of questions you would like to ask the author.) 1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?