ISKL+Laura

** Introduction:**
Include some or all of the following, as well as a link to your blog: first name, what you like to do in and out of school, favourites (food, sport, hobby, TV show, video game, etc.), places visited, future plans, claim to fame. 

Hey. My name's Laura. This is my page and profile. I love iskl. just like I love my supportive, lovable girls, Suzy, and Nat. I'll probably love music forever. I like where I live, *beverly heights*. Love msn & facebook. I'm mostly down to earth because of gravity. My favorite sports are probably basketball, and climbing. Basically my favorite classes are Drama, Art, and Health. PE is really fun too. I mostly like eating the spicy chicken here at school, and the pasta. TV.... I love watching friends, the simpsons, whose line is it anyways, American Idol, basically everything on star world. for my humanities/english i have a blog: http://lauraiskl.blogspot.com/  :P Laura.

**Paste your story here:**
Another rainy recess at the Torrance Elementary School. Opening yet another book about the Red Wolves Jim read to himself, “The red wolf is classified as a member of the order Carnivora (Carnivores) and is a member of the family Canidae. The red wolf is classified as a critically endangered species due to the estimation that its population consists of less than fifty mature red…” “Hey Jim! Come on, time for class!” Called his friend Amanda as she ran out the open doors of the library following the trail of laughter and talking to the classroom. As Jim caught up to Amanda she questioned him, “As usual reading about red wolves. How much information can you find out about them?” Jim shrugged, smiled and hurried into the classroom. A little later when the whole class was seated, Mrs. Fisher (their teacher) brought out a tall man, with the zoo uniform on, and a brown hat. Mrs. Fisher introduced him as, Mr. Collins from the endangered species rescue association. He stepped up to the front board, and paced back and forth. “For the past month we have been tracking down several red wolves, and over the months there has been severe change referring to they’re extinction. That’s where you guys, the very bright students, come in.” Jim raised his hand, “You mean the real red wolves? Classified as a member of the Canidae? The red wolves that are only said to be in a number of fifty?!” Mr. Collins looked at Jim with a wondrous glare, and then slowly nodded, “…Anyway that’s where you guys, the bright students come in, over a time period of five days you will be able to bring in money. We, the endangered species rescue association, have two highly important assignments. One, we found three little red wolf babies, and it would really help us if one of you sponsored money to help us buy their supplies, and what is needed for them to grow and develop to a healthy matured red wolf. To sponsor one red wolf would be $80. A visit to the facilities will also be included. Two, we would love if some of you just donated some money to help us track down even more wolves to know the most recent habitat and population. Thank you for your time, kids.” Jim turned to Amanda. “Wow! I want to sponsor one of those red wolves! I mean even then seeing one in real life, wouldn’t that just be-!” But then Amanda stopped him and reminded him that he spent his last money on the cancer research project. And the big grin on his face faded. As Jim slowly dragged his feet through the hallway as Amanda started grinning, “Jim! I think I know how I can help you! I‘ll be right back,” As she left Jim, who stood there with a confused look on his face. He just sat down on the bench, confused and waiting for Amanda to come back. A few minutes later, Amanda returned to Jim and handed him $80. Jim at first didn’t understand why she did this, but then he smiled, gave her a huge hug, and ran back into the classroom to sponsor one of the wolves. Finally, it was the day of the visit, and Jim was very incredibly happy. He rushed into the classroom, where there was already a line that was formed for the sponsors behind Mr. Collins. The trip ended up to be wonderful. Jim brought a camera and took many pictures. Amanda was happy to help and see Jim so joyful. And Jim, well he saw his red wolves, and got a chance to help them,

**Questions for Peer Reviewers**
(Think in terms of questions you would like to ask the author.)

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)? The plot is very original, and it was quite interesting, though I would say that you should describe the problem in the story more. 2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

Well the part at the beginning of the story when the teacher enters, instead of using brakets write"Their teacher Mrs.Fisher" or something like that. VVBrianne 5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?