SO-Lauren+A.

Hi, my name is Lauren. The things I like to do outside of school is to play with my puppy, hang out with my friends, watch movies, and play volleyball. My favorite food is Macaroni and Cheese. My favorite sport is Volleyball. My favorite hobby is scrapbooking and I kind of like fishing. My favorite TV show is The Secret Life of the American Teenager and my favorite video game is Guitar Hero World Tour. I also love to watch scary movies! These ones are not scary but I love them, they are Disturbia and Taken! I have visited a lot of places like the Bahamas, Florida, Washington D.C., California, Minnesota, Arizona, Disney World, Missouri, and much more. Also my best friends are Sami, Selena, Heidi, and Delaney.

** The Missing Cell Phone ** By: Lauren Ashley One early Monday morning, Karlee’s parents dropped her off at North Woods Elementary School at 7:30 am. North Woods is a tall, big building that is has redish brownish brick, and is two stories tall. She was outside in the cold talking with her friends who were all in 5th grade, Judy, Vanessa, Emily, and this guy she has never seen before named Creg. Karlee is a cheerful girl, she has a lot of friends and she is very obnoxious. She is also tall, skinny, she has blonde hair, and is tan. Then there is Judy who is curious and is the most selfish girl Karlee has ever met. She is average height, dead pale, brown hair, and she is great at soccer. Also, there is Vanessa who is calm and shy. She is short, kind of in between tan and pale, and she has dark brown hair. Her other best friend is Emily who is hyper, outgoing, and spoiled. She is tall, skinny, tan, and is a volleyball player. Then there is Creg who is shy and nice. Now he has ghost white hair which is ear length, he is not short but not tall, and he has bright blue eyes. Soon, Karlee and her friends heard the bell ring, they all swiftly walked back inside. But, finally Karlee realized that she forgot her bag which is hot pink, decorated with orange flowers outside by the big oak tree. She started to spri0nt outside. Vanessa asked quietly, “Where are you going?” “I have to go outside and get my bag, because I left it by the tree!” she exclaimed. Finally Karlee got her bag and ran as fast as she could to her locker to put her bag away. She got to class, and sat there board to death through the rest of the hour. At 11:30 am Karlee and her friends got to lunch and she kept hearing this noise going on and off seconds every 5 seconds. She could not figure it out. Karlee thought through it and realized it sounded exactly like her cell phone ring when she receives text messages. “Hey,” Karlee asked confused looking around, “do any of you guys hear that sound?” Vanessa whispered, “Yeah, I do. I wonder where it is coming from.” Karlee kept chewing slowly still with that noise going through her head the whole lunch hour. It was the end of the school day. Karlee went to her locker to get her bag and go home. She got her bag and went outside to call her mother Ella. She looked for 5 long minutes for her cell phone, but couldn’t find it. Karlee started to freak out! She went back to her locker to check, until she saw her friends. “Have you seen my cell phone anywhere, or where I left it?” Karlee asked really worried. “Um,” Judy wondered with a smirk on her face, “the last place I saw it was in your bag when we were outside.” Karlee kept looking around. But she still could not find it. Karlee started to think who was with her when she was outside. She knew that all of her friends were there but she couldn’t remember who that other guy was. “Who was that guy who was with us this morning?” Karlee asked upset. Emily replied jumping around, “Oh, his name was Creg Walse.” Karlee thought for a while. Then she thought that she didn’t know Creg very well, and that he was very shy. So she didn’t think that it could be him. Finally, she got an idea of who it was. But she wasn’t totally sure. She thought it was Judy because she is a selfish girl and would do that to anyone even if it was her friend. “Hey,” Karlee asked suspiciously, “are you sure you don’t know where my cell phone went?” “No!” Judy hollered in a snotty voice, giving her a glare. Karlee used Vanessa’s cell phone to call her mom at 3:00 pm. Karlee’s mom came to pick her up in a silver escalade when Karlee said very angrily, “Someone stole my cell phone!” “Well, when we get home we will call the phone service and see if they can track them down,” Karlee’s mom said trying to calm her down. “There is no need to worry,” Karlee’s mother said calmly. When they got home they called the phone service and no one answered. Karlee tried to be calm but could not hold back her anger. Karlee’s mom started to stay, “Ok, Ok, just calm down. We will be fine, just settle down you don’t need to get upset about the whole thing. We will figure this out. We will just have to try again in about an hour, and then they might answer. It might have been just a bad time to call.” Karlee stomped up to her room the angriest she has ever been. She couldn’t believe that someone stole her cell phone. She flopped on her bed and dug her face into her pillow. 10 minutes later she was dead asleep. Soon Karlee’s mom came upstairs to wake her up so they could call the phone service. The phone was ringing and ringing. Karlee was staring at her mom the whole time saying to herself please pick up, pleasing pick up. Her mom turned around, “They did not answer,” her mom saw Karlee’s disappointment on her face, “I am sorry we will just have to go to the store and get a new one, there is nothing we can do about it.” Karlee could not get to sleep she was so angry. She could never trust anyone anymore. She had no idea why anyone would do such a thing. But finally she fell asleep and woke up in the morning, didn’t say one word to her mom. The whole car ride was silence. She went to school day after day. It was almost the last day of the quarter. Soon she thought about the words her mother said. “There was nothing we can do about it.” So she thought about it more, and followed it. She tried to forget about the whole thing, but didn’t quite succeed. It was the last day of the quarter. She was bummed the whole entire day. Her friends saw her sad but they couldn’t do anything to cheer her up. It was the end of the day and she went home laid in her bed and just thought about the whole happening. Her eyes were shut but she wasn’t completely asleep when she heard the phone ring and she jumped out of her bed terrified. She took a big breath and walked down stairs to get the phone. “Hey, this is Vanessa. I was just wondering if you wanted to come to my house since Judy and Emily are coming over for a sleepover. Would you like to come? You have been very sad lately I just thought this might cheer you up,” Vanessa said very quiet. “Um,” Karlee was thinking about it, “Sure. I will be over at about 7:00.” Vanessa replied, “Alright sounds great! Glad you can come. Bye.” Karlee went up to her room and packed what she needed. It was 6:55; she started to walk over there. Soon she was there and they were having a blast! She loved sleepovers! She went home the next day and forgot about the whole thing. Karlee went back to school. It was study time and instead of study time the whole class went to their lockers to clean them out. She just had to get out her sweater that was there for like 6 weeks. She picked it up put it around her waist, and started from the bottom all the way to the top to check to make sure she got everything. She was shocked to see her cell phone was right on the top shelf. She let out a huge scream. It was the end of the day and she was so excited to tell her mom everything. They were both so happy. She was so glad she didn’t have to get a new phone. She went to bed right away and slept like a baby.

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