ISKL+Oliver

Introduction Oliver

"Welcome" said the man in a hoarse old voice. "Who are you" said Matthew. " I am the forecaster. leader of a world wide organization named the chairmen of prospect," said the man with the old hoarse voice says. "It has seemed that you are very skilled Mr. Jones"the old hoarse voice said. "How do you know my name? what going on?" said Matthew "Well, let me put this into easy words. work for us and you will survive if not, well that's another story"said the so called forecaster. "Your old past doesn't escape us. You have no choice. Join us,"the forecaster said in a more aggressive voice." "I have no choice. fine I accept your offer." said Matthew a few minuets later in a hall way... "You see Mr. Jones our company has soared every since its begin in 2008 now in the year 2999 our objectives are to sell weapons to high paying countries" said the forecaster "One of our greatest achievements is the animal chip. We can control animals with our main computer an example of this is our laser headed equipped sharks,"said the forecaster. "You mean sharks with lasers on there heads" said Matthew. "Precisely," said the forecaster as they walked into an room with a giant glass tank with five sharks with lasers. They walked into another room "Brett!" the forecaster yelled, the room was large and filled with weapons and technology, it was some kind of work shop. A voice came back. "Yes," Brett said, "Mr. Jones meet your weapon technician for your mission Brett Hartman" said the forecaster " What mission?" said Matthew "A mission that will take you to the outer regions of this universe and into the beyond. A mission where you might not survive "said the forecaster. "Now you must go to our secret space center over the oceans."** Matthew was as nervous about the mission as he could be. Matthew was planning on hiding so he could skip the mission. He decided that he would go hide in an outhouse. So, the day came when he was suppose to go on the mission and he went and hid. Suddenly, he hears "Matthew!" "Uh Oh its the man with the hoarse voice." Suddenly the man busts down the door of the outhouse and found Matthew.**Mathew thought fast he quickly smashed the side of the wooden room he ran down a long busy street the crowds were vast and large. Chairmen troops were closing in on Matthew he ran into a back alley "dead End" Matthew looked back as he saw the troops at the start of the alley. " We have you surrounded surrender or die" one of the troopers said. you could not see the troopers real body. amour was covering them including there head. Matthew said "you will never catch me" as he quickly jumped on to a dumpster which led to a ladder he climbed it and came to a window. he jumped through the window there was a shatter of glass Matthew got cut but he did not care for he was running for his life. he ran up a staircase and got to the roof he was cornered again. the troopers were back and there was a helicopter as well. Matthew ran and leap of the building. he grabbed on the railings at the bottom of the helicopter. he got up onto the cockpit of the helicopter and pushed out the pilot. he flew north west and reached the ocean then he kept on going. after a week or two he landed in a small town he went into a diner and the radio was playing //"welcome to the evening news. last week many countries have been taken over by a organization called the chairmen of prospect. they have taken over the pacific, Asia most of Europe, south America and half of north America. As the troops close in on the U.S some rebellious groups have formed the biggest of these groups is the the peoples rebellion of America or the P.R.A. .this rebellion's base is just outside Memphis,Tennessee. In other news 2 bodies have been found near a campsite. scientists believe that this is the work of trolls that have been terrorizing............."// Then Matthew got an idea "I Will go join P.R.A and fight the chairmen //of prospect and defeat them once and for all" matthew said.// the next five days have passed and Mtthew Found the P.R.A. It turned** out that the P.R.A was controled by a Trillionare and also run by a old army commander Named Fedarnando He controled the Spanish army in world War 4. Matthew Was On the Transiter Radio When he Heard Someone Transmiting a Message "Surrender or Die We have Taken over all of the U.S.A The last Stand will be at memphis.
 * In the great country of Australia a secret meeting is taking place at the center of town in Melbourne...the lights were dim and the room felt small. Matthew Jones was in a state of dizziness and confusion. All he could remember was walking down a street. Matthew could only see outlines because his eyesight was poor.

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