ISKL+Joonatan

**Introduction:**
Include some or all of the following, as well as a link to your blog: first name, what you like to do in and out of school, favourites (food, sport, hobby, TV show, video game, etc.), places visited, future plans, claim to fame.

Hi! I'm Joonatan but you can pronounce it more like Yawnathan. I like teh tarik but in fact I am against drinking coffee for reasons like caffeine. Caffeine is bad. Of course drinks like Coke have caffeine but those drinks taste good, especially Coke. Coke is my favorite drink. I also like to call myself Dimitri Tsugovz and yes, that is a Russian name and I am from Finland so Russia is our border country. Here in International school of Kuala Lumpur Malaysia, I have a Russian friend and he is Russian and I'm Finnish. My favorite sport is Soccer because I am quite skilled in it. My other favorite sport is Badminton because I like it and I am quite good at it. And my third favorite sport is Baseball, I like hitting the up-coming ball. I like a lot of junk food but my favorite dish is Fish 'n' Chips. Favorite TV Shows: The Simpsons and Slam Ball. I also play computer and PS2 games but I'm not a nerd.

**Paste your story here:**
There was once a small city (now though that city is all in ruins) right on the border of Kyrgyzstan and Tadzhikistan called Pori. And in this particular city there lived 2 good friends called Farrokh Bomi Bulsara and Mike. Their favorite sport was to play bowling and they had scheduled that they would play it every Wednesday, Friday and Saturday night. So now you would probably describe these 2 persons to be normal, going around with other bunch of normal people but in fact not just that they both drank about 5 glasses of beer every single time they went bowling but they also had a drug problem. In this city, Pori, there was this one secret illegal-drug store (so secret that the police couldn’t even find it) held by few mysterious gangsters with Colt45s. In the age of 17, Farrokh and Mike were walking around the city and then suddenly they passed that illegal-drug store without knowing and one of those gangsters came out and offered them “candy”. And that’s exactly how they’re drug addiction started. Now our 2 little friends are 25 years old, living almost a normal life. But one day, Mike happened to crash his car in to a tree while speeding. Unbelievably Mike survived with only couple of scratches even though the ambulance crew found him unconscious. But did he really survive, is he dead or not? The doctors found out that he had gone into a coma that would last about one month. Phew, what a relief, at least he survived. After the one month in big dreams Mike returned back to reality and this world but the news for him wasn’t that good. His friend, Farrokh, had died for an unexplainable reason. He was found dead from the alley near by one week ago. On the way back to home Mike was wondering: “It must have been the drugs, but how could it be if I used to be the one who always bought the double-dose of those and I’m not dead yet. If I could just know what happened while I was in coma. At his door to home Mike pulled his rusty keys from his pocket, stuck it in the door lock, turned it, took the key out of the lock, opened the door and saw something shocking. He dropped the keys on the floor with a look of shock. Mike saw a note on his dinner table and quickly ran to it and read it:

Yo Whazhup Homeslice! We shot your friend cause’ he refused to buy drugs with an excuse that you’d be in coma and we didn’t believe him Sincerely, Your good ol’ Mysterious Gangstaz!

Mike was so shocked and sad. What he did then was that he decided to quit taking drugs and never go back to that stupid store again because he would die anyways. And so Mike spent his next hard and long week suffering in his bed watching TV. He hadn’t realized that quitting something would be that hard. Incredibly after 3 more days his quitting process was done. Now he was totally normal but still in a sorrow because of Farrokh’s death. “What can I do?” Mike thought “Do I just have to get to this poor life now? No wait a second!” Mike came up with this bestest idea ever. He went to tell the local police the secret location of this drug store since Mike knew it and would never return there again. He would also have a piece of evidence: the note that the gangsters gave. And so the mysterious gangsters were arrested and next day’s headline was: Pori’s drug problem solved! Mike had saved the city and lived rest of his life lonely but happily.

**Questions for Peer Reviewers**
(Think in terms of questions you would like to ask the author.)

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)? i suggest that you explane how the police arested the gangster and who the gangster was

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?