Joe+L

**Siblings: One brother - Christian One sister- Nikki** Feel free to upload your podcast or a picture if you like.
 * Hi, my name is Joseph Lovecchio **
 * Grade: 8th**
 * Best Holiday: Christmas **
 * Birth Month: March **
 * Career Goals: Become a professional athlete **
 * Favorite Band(s): None **
 * Favorite Food: Pasta **
 * Favorite Munchies: Cookies **
 * Favorite soft drink: None **
 * Favorite Subject: Italian **
 * Pet Peeve: My brother **
 * Pets: Two cats **

One day Jim is at work in the town hall. He is going to stop by the police station and school before he goes home for the day. On the way to the school, his cell phone rings. He knows it is against the law to talk on his phone while driving so he doesn’t bother to pick up the phone. He gets to the school and checks his phone to see who called him. It says his wife called him. He starts to worry because his wife never calls him during the day. He calls her back as soon as he gets out of his car, and a person with a different voice than his wife’s picks up. He says, “ Who is this?” “The doctor,” he says. “Your wife had a heart attack and is in the hospital.” Immediately Jim hangs up the phone and jumps in his car. When he gets to the hospital, he sprints up to his wife’s room. He sees her through the window, and the doctor comes out of the room. He says, “She is in critical condition. I don’t know how much longer she will last.” Jim starts to feel dizzy and falls to the floor.

He wakes up and there are three doctors surrounding him. One comes up to him and says, “Sorry, but your wife didn’t make it.” He doesn’t say anything and goes back to sleep. The next day he wakes up and gets to go home. He opens his door and already doesn’t feel right. His dog greets him at the door. He starts to cry and pet his dog. “I’m sorry but mommy is gone,” Jim said to his dog. The dog doesn’t no what is going on and continues to stand there.

Later that day the phone rings, and it is Jim’s friend Mike. He said he heard about his loss and asks him to play golf the next day. Jim had golf clubs but had never used them and never played golf. Jim agrees because he wants to do anything.

The next day he meets Mike and his friend Joe at the golf course. They are at the first hole and Mike and Joe hit first. Its Jim’s turn and he says, “ I’ve never played before so don’t make fun of me.” He walks up to hit. He winds up and smacks the ball onto the green on his first hit. No one said anything. Then they said, “Are you sure you’ve never played golf in your life?” “No, never.” They believed him because he never lies, so they go on to play the rest of the holes. When they are done Jim finished with an amazing score. They checked to see the record for the course, and they saw that Jim beat the record.

After golfing they went out to eat and someone walked up to their table. He said that he saw Jim play and he thought he could play professional. He said to come to the next tournament and play. He said he would and the guy walked away.

The next weekend at the golf tournament, Jim is a partner with the best golfer playing that day, Travis Putter. Jim introduced himself and Travis said he was glad to be golfing with him. They play all 18 holes and Travis came in first. Jim being his first time out came in 35 out of 70 people. That’s halfway said Jim’s friend Mike.

The next tournament Jim came in tenth, then fifth, than second and stayed there until the championship round. Before the tournament, Jim was being interviewed. They asked him why he was playing golf. He said for his wife. Travis was watching this interview with his brother Rich who was his caddie as well. Travis said he was going to bring up Jim’s past with his wife to make him lose. Rich thought and knew that was wrong and wanted to stop his brother, but he didn’t no how. He figured he could leave his brother no matter how much he loved him and become Jim’s caddie considering he didn’t have one because he wanted to carry his own bag. Then he would help Jim win the tournament for his wife.

When the tournament started, Travis was looking for his brother for hours. He saw him with Jim and wondered why he would do that. He got another caddie, and continued to play his game. In the end, the score was tied and there was a sudden death hole. As they get to the tee, Travis said something about Jim’s wife. Jim thought that he wouldn’t be able to play the hole but Rich encouraged him and the crowd joined and Jim played the hole. In the end, JIM WON!! He donated all the money from all the tournaments to people who survived heart attacks, or people who are suffering from a heart attack now.

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1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

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