BF-Sam

Hello, my name is Sam Kuster. I live in Barcelona, as you already know, and I speak English, Spanish and Catalan. My favorite topics to study are history, geography and studying different languages. I simply adore reading, and playing a game called Diplomacy. I like to watch the stockmarket, economy, trade and politics rise and fall in an informative magazine called the The Economist. I also like studying World War 1 and 2, because I think it is important to know stuff about are past, and it is interesting as well.

Sincerely, Sam K.

Here is my story Note: People who like studying World War 2 will like this story.

D-Day Shots resounded when impacting the water. "Bathtub" boats carried thousands of men onto the beach. Dave, a British soldier, charged forward, and flung himself on the sandy beach, then fired his M-1 Garand rifle at the German blockhouses. Machine gun fire ripped his captain and half his squad apart, leaving him momentarily alone. As the Nazi cannons and artillery fired back, and more and more British men were running into mines, shouts of fear, surprise and anger filled the air. Dave spotted a medic trying to dig himself a foxhole, trying to escape the merciless sniper guns. The gun (Dave´s) broke down when the bullet got stuck in the barrel. He swore violently at the"cursed mechanism," and he tried to reload it, but failed as the gun got more jammed by the second. Muttering to himself, and trying to dodge the Germans´ heavy fire, he ran zigzaggedly up the beach. A grenade (possibly accidentaly lobbed at him by his fellow soldiers) exploded near him, to his left, and rubble and dust flew and wedged into his ear. Moaning and screaming in agony, he fell down, and yelled in endless and fire like pain. "AAAHHHH!" he cried, and brought his cut and scratched hands to his weeping face."You infernal bloody war! You bloody Nazis! You bloody murderers!" he screamed, and suddenly there was a new strength within him. He pulled the pin on a grenade, and ran up to a pillbox, and then, throwing the explosive with amazing aim, he let the grenade fly into the window of the pillbox. An explosion could be heard, but he didn´t waste time. He ran to the back of another pillbox, and heaved his weight against the already broken door. After it crashed down, he bayoneted the first German he saw, and then, Dave gripped his rifle by the end of it, and swung it at another adversary. The last German, an officer, pulled out a pistol with lightning speed and shot him in the shoulder.

Dave woke up with his head hurt. He groaned, rather loudly, and noticed a medic by his side. "Yer´ took a tumble, ba´ ther´, didn´t yer´?" " UUUUGGGG" was all Dave replied. He felt like his ribcage was torn into pieces, and his arms felt like liquid rubber. " That ain´t a respons´, and yer´ bett´r be thankin´me fer´ savin´ yer ´ life." "Thank... ,wait a (gasp) moment, what happened to ( oof) the German Pillbox?" "Eh? O´, that thing. We broke pas´ the whol´ line. Wer´ movin´ inlan´, toward...let me think...Caen? Yep, Caen. Ey´, don´t get up yet. Wer´ passin ´ out rum to add to our morale (he rolled the word around in his mouth). Mayb´ if yer injur´d, they´ll give yer an extra, ey´ ?" Dave didn´t answer. The medic was quiet after that. Dave decided to look at his surrondings. He was l aying on the beach, with a couple of other injured soldiers. " Where are the others" Dave asked, but the medic had left to go light a cigarette (he wasn´t allowed to smoke around the injured soldiers). Dave took out his own cigarette, and wen´t through his backback for a match. He found one, next to his rations. He lit the cigarette, then, as the hazy smoke wound around his head, he wondered how soon he would be back in the action. His squad was half dead, it was pointless to go back alone. He l ayed b ack down, and quietly smoked.

An hour later, the men who were only lightly injured were told to get into a jeep to catch up with the rest of the army. He had been given to flasks of rum (the medic was right), and he was ready to resume fighting the battle. After only 30 minutes, he saw a small town on fire. He was told to get off here, and to repel the Germans. With a sigh, he charged into battle, only to be shot straight in the chest 4 minutes later.

Epilouge: Dave survived the shot, but didn't resume fighting immediately, as he was sent to England to a hospital. By the time he recovered (which was fast), the Allies were moving through France and nearing Germany fast. He was sent back to France to plow West, but when that was done he had to stay and watch over that territory, instead of joining the troops marching into Germany.

The End

**Story and Content**
1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)? ya, i guess 2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed? yes good suspense 3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions? yes characters are possibley real 4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story? sorta 5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?
 * Starting - March 29 (2009):**

Story and Content
1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?
 * Starting - March 29 (2009):**
 * It is not original by itself, but a great interpretation of the World Wars (not clear which one.) I suggest you make it longer, cause it's missing details.**

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?
 * I don't see the suspense needed in this kind of stories, I find it a great start. It's missing the main problem, but that's ok. The resolution is good, too, and very interesting, indeed.**

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?
 * Yes, definitely, the characters are life-like. I love the characterization, I find it the best part of the story, and it makes it a great story. It's also very needed in thse stories.**

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story? **It lacks details and descriptions, but it's clear that with making it longer, it'd just fix it.**

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?
 * As I said, make it longer, with more description and details, otherwise, great story.**

Story and Content
1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?
 * Starting - March 29 (2009):**

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?