ISKL+Rahul

**Introduction:**
Include some or all of the following, as well as a link to your blog: first name, what you like to do in and out of school, favorites (food, sport, hobby, TV show, video game, etc.), places visited, future plans, claim to fame.

Hi my name is Rahul, but I prefer to be called Raul. I like playing soccer, basketball, tennis, and badminton. But my favorite is soccer. I support Manchester United, what about you? It better be Manchester United or Liverpool. I'm from Russia and Nepal. You probably don't know where Nepal is, but everyone knows where Russia is. Russia borders many countries. Like China, Finland, Norway, Mongolia, Kazakhstan, Azerbaijan, Georgia, Latvia, Ukraine, Belarus and Estonia. Russia is huge. Oh! And my favorite soccer player is Cristiano Ronaldo, what about you? And I'm funny.

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 * Paste your story here:Endangered Animals Once a boy called Dmitri was walking in the dark forests of Siberia. The forests were full of snow. As Dmitri walked through the forest, he heard loud sounds of owls. He slowly walked past a tree that was coated in thick, white snow. Because a hiding bear was hungry, it jumped out from behind a tree and began his attack. The heavy brown bear pounced on Dmitri, but somehow the bear never got to even touch Dmitri. Dmitri opened his glittery blue eyes and looked around. He looked to his right and saw a young Siberian tiger fighting a huge Brown bear. The tiger needed help. Dmitri ran into the fight, and he amazingly made the bear scared. The bear scurried through the snow, tripping a few times. After an hour or so of sitting and playing with the tiger, tiger hunters arrived. Both men had a long gold gun. Dmitri hid behind a tree with the tiger in his stiff arms. He listened carefully to the men, but he didn’t understand them, “Hey Bill, did you here that?” The bigger and stronger man spoke. “Yeah Frank, I heard that all right, but where do you think it’s coming from?” Bill whispered in his Australian accent. The little boy grew tiered of standing there, so he started to run. Dmitri ran past the trees holding on the baby tiger. But then Bill raised his gun and pulled the trigger. Instead of hitting the tiger, the bullet dug into Dmitri’s flesh. He looked like he was dead. The next day Dmitri opened his eyes and found himself in a hospital. He asked the nurses what happened to the baby tiger and they told him two big men with guns took him. Dmitri started crying, and cried for a long time. At midnight when all was silent he creeped out of the hospital. By morning he reached the place where all the tigers are held. He saw hundreds, but he recognised his tiger. The Frank walked in and spotted Dmitri and chased until he caught him. Luckily Dmitri knew a little bit of English, “Yoo, know, vee should let oll of these animalz go, how vood you feel eef you ver een heez position,” Dmitri shouted in a Russian accent. Frank felt angry, but did nothing. He threw Dmitri out of the door, and thought about what Dmitri said. That afternoon the people that were in the organization had a big meeting. Straight after the meeting Frank grabbed his coat and ran out into the blizzard to find Dmitri. He found him crying in a tree. Frank crawled into the tree and told me to follow him. Both, Dmitri and Frank, quickly crawled out and we tried to walk through the “snow storm” but Dmitri couldn’t. Dmitri fell and didn’t move. Soon, he was covered in snow. Luckily Frank used his muscled arms to move the snow. And very quickly did both of them get to the building. And there on the floor sat my tiger. The tiger grew a lot and Dmitri missed him. He led him out the door and told him to be free in the forest. Just as I stepped outside, all the tigers that were caught were running free into the forest.**=====

**Questions for Peer Reviewers**
(Think in terms of questions you would like to ask the author.) Hey Raul. Thats what you like to be called right? anyways, Its really cool that your from Russia and Nepal. My family is from Ukraine so we have simalar heritage. 1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)? I think this is a really creative story. The idea of a boy finding a tiger is so cool and it has. I understod what happened but it could have been more discreptive. One thing that I would like to know is more on imagry. 2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed? Hunters. The idea is unexpected but a good twist. When Dmitri gets shot I was suprized. It was very suspencencefull and I really wanted to know what happened. It was a little repetative and it could be a little longer to be more descreptive. I really wanted to know more on things like what was the forest like? is the forest near his house? is someone in his family at the hospital with him? How did he find the place were they kept the animals?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions? I did not find out alot about Dmitri. All I know is he is a boy and he got shot. I would like to know more on who he is like does he have family? Why was he in the forest? the story has such great potensional and its just lacking in details.

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story? I can imaging what it looks liek but I can hear it. What do the charecters look like?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?