SO-Kaylene+B.

Introduction:My name is Kaylene Bachman. I live in Eau Claire, WI. I love horses, animals and spending time outside. I also like to spend time with my 2 cats and my dog. I like to spend time with my friends. I also love to read. My favorite food is Ice Cream and my favorite book series are Warriors and Gaurdians of Ga'hoole. media type="custom" key="3654549" width="259" height="335"this is a voki i made of my dog izzy

Something New By: Kaylene Bachman

I woke up in my bed this morning, only not in my old, comfy house, but in a stranger house, who felt like it had swallowed me up into a dark cave. I just moved to this town, and I know I won’t fit in. I know I shouldn’t act like this, but I have always been the girl who is left out, and never noticed. And nobody else knows how that feels. Today was the first day at school. (For everyone, not just me). I am in 6th grade now, and I walk down the halls along with everybody else. Everyone is minding their own buisness. I see some happy people who are talking in huge groups, and I see a lot of tired people. I think this is the first time those people had to get up at 6:00 A.M. this morning. After school, I go to the apple orchard. I know that the apples may not be completely ripe yet, but I just love being outdoors. I do have my own horse, but today I cannot see her because the people who live where we keep her, are doing riding lessons today. But my mom called me and told me to come home and do my homework. So, I drive with my mom back to “our house”. Today at school something happened, something I haven’t felt in a while, and I think it was something good. As I was sitting in class, The teacher was talking about something, I think it was weather, but I couldn’t hear it that good, a girl said to me “Are you the new student here?” I shyly replied, “Um, yeah. I think so…” “Well, I’m Bethany.” “Nice to meet you,” I said. She asked me, “What is your name?” “I’m Kate.” “It’s nice to meet you. I’m just wondering, Do you like horses?” A little surprised, I said “Uh, yeah,” “That’s cool. Maybe we could go riding sometime,” Bethany said. “Sure. That sounds fun.” I replied. When the bell rang, she said “Seeya later,” “Okay.” I said. I quietly thought to myself, That this might be the start of a beautiful friendship. When I got home from school that day, I tell my mom all about it, and she says “Maybe you and Bethany could go riding sometime, maybe even this weekend or the next one,” “Sounds great!” I say excitedly. I think I might have a great friend! And just because I had a new friend, I started to feel better about everything, like my house and school. If you have a good friend, you can feel better. On the coming Saturday, I went out to the local riding center to ride horses with Bethany. I brought my horse, Blaze, and she borrowed a horse from the center named Patch. We started on a trail by a pond for a while when Bethany said, “This is actually really fun! I have never rode on this trail before,” “Yeah this is fun,” I replied “I have been on this trail before, and I think it goes right past the apple orchard, so maybe we can stop there to rest.” “Sounds great,” she said. So we rode on. We saw lots of beautiful wildlife. We saw some squirrels and we even spotted some deer on the hill. We finally stopped at the apple orchard to rest awhile. There was another small pond there, so the horses took a drink. I patted Blaze, and I noticed Bethany was stroking Patch. She always seemed to have a thing for horses, just like me. I finally said, “I don’t know why, but I like it here a lot. I just started coming here, and I don’t know why, but it makes me feel better about problems that I have.” She said, “Yeah, me too. I used to come here all the time after my Grandma passed away. When I felt sad and I missed her, I would come here.” I didn’t know how we could have that much in common. But we sat there and enjoyed every minute of that beautiful day. I smiled. I was finally happy with something new.

To be continued…

**Questions for Peer Reviewers**
(Think in terms of questions you would like to ask the author.)

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?


 * 1.- The history is creative, I dont have suggestions. (Valeria Fernandez) **

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed? **2.- Well, there is so much tension the characters unfold  quietly. Maybe something more of emotion.(Valeria Fernandez) **

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?  ==**3.- the characters are natural in real life.** (Valeria Fernandez)  ==

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

 ==**4.- I would like that characters have more experiences.(Valeria Fernandez)** ==

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author? **5.- Give young people lessons and learn from the experiences of the characters.I dont have suggestions in that area.(Valeria Fernandez) **