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Introductions
Meet Laura Meet Rachel

Helping Out   It was a warm day on a little island in the middle of the ocean. Alex was walking through a small village on the island when she saw a homeless child going through the garbage looking for something to eat. Alex felt bad for the child and was happy that she had a home and food. As she kept walking, she saw more people begging for money and something to eat. Adults, teenagers, and young children were going up to people walking by them begging. They were starving. Alex wanted to help, but she couldn't. She had to find a way to help them. When she went back to the hotel and told her parents what she had seen, they told her that they'll find a way to help as soon as they get home.   On the way home, Alex was thinking of ways she could help those people. The next day, she went to school and told her friend, Luke. She asked him if he had any ideas to help her help the people. Luke thought that maybe they could ask their principal if they could take all the left over food after lunch and make sandwiches. Then send them to those starving people on the island.

 The principal said it was a great idea and they should also try to raise money by having bake sales and funraisers. When they did the bake sale, it lasted about four weeks and they raised about $20,000. Alex and Luke sent the money to the island where it was given to the poor village Alex walked through. Every Friday, the school made sandwiches and sent them to the village. More and more kids at Alex and Luke's school wanted to help out different countries that needed food.

 When Alex went back to the village on vacation, she noticed that the people looked happier than they did when she first went there. The children were laughing and smiling instead of looking for food. The adults and teenagers were happy that they weren't begging for food and money. Alex was happy she was able to help them.

By: Rachel and Laura

PEER REVIEW

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?

PEER REVIEW (group 2)

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?

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