DM-Riley+K

Hi, my name is Riley, I am in grade seven. I have brown curley hair my favorite sport is basketball. I play in bantam Y-League. My favorite basketball team is the lakers. My favorite players are Pau Gasol and Kobe Bryant. My favorite food is lobster. I love seafood. My favorite subject is phys-ed. I have a brother named Cameron. He is really annoying. I have a cat named Hobbes. He is a grey tabby. He is grey with black stripes.

The Magic Ball 

 Once upon a time there was a 12 year old boy named Riley. He was the star point guard on his school basketball team. One day he went to his local sports store, which was called Sport Chek, to buy a basketball. He sauntered down the aisle, and finally came to an orange Spalding TF-1000 basketball. He took it up to the counter and handed the sales clerk the cash needed for the basketball. The clerk passed him back the correct change, and sent him off. Riley ran all the way home. As soon as Riley reached his house he went in his driveway and got ready for the first shot with his brand knew basketball. Riley felt the ball in his hands he felt the TF grip and the cool knew feel of a fresh basketball, and then he took the shot it had a perfect ark. He swooshed it. He tried another shot. It was perfect again. He tried another and another and another. All were perfect swooshes. This puzzled Riley He had never done so good while he was just playing around at his house. Riley had marked where the three point line was on his driveway, so he stepped back to where the line was and took a jump shot, he swooshed it again. The next day Riley had to go to an early morning basketball gam e. Since he had done so good with his knew ball the other night, Riley decided to bring the ball to his game. When he got there he asked his coach if they could use his ball for the game. "I don't suppose why not", replied his coach. When they started the game, the center for Riley's team Phillup tapped the ball back to Riley. Riley deeked by everyone on the other team, and scored with a right handed lay-up. Riley was constantly deeking around people, and scoring for the rest of the game. The next day Riley took his ball to the NBA hall of fame and sold to them for ten thousand dollars. After that Riley continued to play basketball, and found that it was not the ball that him so good. It was just him believing in himself, and thinking that the ball would make him good. From that day on Riley continued to dominate in basketball. At the age of twenty Riley entered the NBA. In rileys first year of professional basketball he won rookie of the year, in his second he won MVP. He lived happily for the rest of his life. THE END

ALyssa=)

What you have so far is really good, it is detailed and the character is developed well so far. Good job!  Bobbi :)

i think the story is good so far the plot is good I cant wait to read the r est!!! But, I think you could be more fluent with your story! but the story is still __REALLY__ good!!!