SO-Cassidy+R.

**Introduction:**
Hi, my name is Cassidy Ruhland. My favorite sports are soccer and basketball.I play on a travling soccer and basketball team. I love the show __The Secret Life of The American Teenager__. My favorite food is cheesecake and strawberries! I love hanging out with my friends and going shopping! I have a ton of friends. I have visited a ton of places. I have visted Mexico, Florida, Ilinois, West Virginia, Colorado, South Dakota, Minnesota, and some other places. My all time favorite place that I visited is Mexico. It is a beautiful place. I love going on the computer. My favorite thing to do on the computer is going on my gmail. It is like an instant messaging where you can talk to people that you have in your contacts and you also can get mail. I love the series of __Twilight__! My favorite song is DON'T TRUST ME and THE REMEDY. I have a ton of other favorite songs too! My favorite movie is __1408__! I am also a very fast runner! :) During my free time I like to go on the computer, hang out with my friends, going shopping, and listening to music! I am in the middle row and the second one on your left!

Haunted Mansion By: Cassidy Ruhland It was a dark cold night and it was raining. Martha and Larry were going to a mansion. The mansion was massive and also very antect. The color of the mansion was extremely bright. The colors were hot pink, baby blue, and lime green. When Martha and Larry got to the mansion they were very shocked! “Whoa,” shouted Martha. “This place is gigantic!” “Yeah,” said Larry. “This place is awesome!” “Let’s go in and see what is inside,” commanded Larry. “Ok,” said Martha. They went inside to see the mansion. They were shocked how amazing the place was. The place had gigantic sliver doors, beautiful furniture, and gold flooring. “I want to stay in this place forever!” screamed Martha. “Me too!” said Larry. They thought the place would be scary because they had experiences before with mansions, but once they got in the mansion they didn’t see anything wrong with the place. “Let’s go in further,” screamed Larry. “Well I don’t know. It might get scary,” worried Martha. “It hasn’t been scary yet,” told Larry. “Yeah, but we had experiences before and I don’t want it to happen to us again!” told Martha. “That was a long time ago, now it is now, it won’t happen again,” shouted Larry. “Fine, I will go in, but not for that long!” shouted Martha. “Ok,” said Larry. Both of them went in further. When they went in further the place had huge glass windows and sliver flooring. Nothing was going wrong with them until they had this screaming noise! “Larry, let’s get out of here. This place is creeping me out!” screamed Martha. “I don’t hear a thing, nothing is wrong,” told Larry. “You can’t hear that screaming noise?” worried Martha. “No!” said Larry. “You’re crazy then!” shouted Martha. “Well you’re crazy, nothing is wrong with this place!” yelled Larry. “Just be quite, they might come closer to us!” worried Martha. “There is nobody in here!!” shouted Larry. “//NO!”// shouted Martha. “Come on a chicken!” shouted Larry. “I am not a chicken!” shouted Martha. “Fine, I will grab you!” shouted Larry. Larry grabbed Martha and they went in further. They got closer to the screaming noise because they could hear it better then where they were before. “Let’s get out of here!” screamed Martha. “NO!” shouted Larry. “You wanted to come here in the first place,” said Larry. “Fine,” told Martha. Soon they were starting to get hungry when, so they went in the kitchen and grabbed something to eat. Suddenly Martha and Larry heard a chain saw noise coming from somewhere. Martha got freaked out, but Larry didn’t as usual. “Can you hear that noise?” worried Martha. “Yea,” said Larry. “Let’s go then!” worried Martha. “//No!//” shouted Larry. “It is just a chain saw. Chain saws aren’t bad!” shouted Larry. “Haven’t you heard a chain saw before?” “Yes, but I HATE them!” shouted Martha. “They scare me!” “Why?” asked Larry. “Because they make a scary noise and I just hate them, so leave me alone!” shouted Martha. “Fine!” shouted Larry. Larry then saw this white thing fly across the room. He didn’t do anything. Martha then saw Larry and was asking Larry questions like, why are you looking that way? Is there something wrong? Larry was lying and was telling her he just was looking there because he wanted to. He didn’t want to tell her the truth because she would get freaked out and want to go home. Soon Larry was looking at the white thing again and Martha found out what it was. Martha freaked out. Martha said to herself, “I can do this, it is just a ghost. Ghost aren’t real; they are just make believe.” Martha wanted to go further with Larry because she knew she could do it. She wanted to come here in the first place, so she went with him. Martha believed in herself and went in further. They came to a library that was in the mansion. “Whoa, a library in a house, cool!” screamed Martha. “Yeah,” shouted Larry. “I am going to check out the book __Where the Red Fern Grows__,” shouted Larry. “Said Martha, “I am not going to check out any books. I have enough to read at my house.” “Ok,” said Larry. He went and grabbed his book when a strange hand. Larry didn’t know what to do. He also didn’t know who it was that grabbed his hand because when he looked to see who it was, the person wasn’t there. He could just feel the person grabbing his hand. All of a sudden the person that grabbed Larry’s hand started talking. “Hi Larry, I have come to get you!” shouted the person. “//THATTTT’S NICE!” SHOUTED LARRY.// “You should be scared you little boy!” she shouted. “I will haunt you tonight if you survive!” she laughed. “Ok,” said Larry. Larry then tried to pull away from the hand grabbing his hand because he wanted to get away from that person. He tried to pull his arm away, but he failed. The hand was grasping him securely and wouldn’t let go. She started talking again. Martha was freaked out and Larry didn’t really now where Martha was. “//HAHAHAHA!!//” shouted the person. “You can’t get passed me, you failed!” screamed the person. “Nobody can get passed me!” shouted the person. //“IIIIII// am sorry!” Larry said in a worried voice. Larry didn’t know what to do. He just sat there and wished that she would go away and leave him alone. Also know that he had stopped playing her game, if he was playing a game. Larry tried again to pull away, but he failed //AGAIN//. Larry was getting tried of the “game” she was playing and wanted her to let go right now. It was getting late and he was trapped with a person with his arm. He didn’t know where Martha was. He was hungry because they didn’t eat since Martha got freaked out and pulled Larry and herself out of the kitchen and didn’t want to go beck in the kitchen again because of the chain saw guy.

TO BE CONTUINED…

**Questions for Peer Reviewers**
(Think in terms of questions you would like to ask the author.)

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)? I love your story!!!! :-) i think you should add some stuff to make it more yours though-Katrina!!! 2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?I like how your story has a lot of dialogue!!!!!-Katrina!!!