Brandon

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 * **Hi, my name is Brandon**
 * Grade: 8**
 * Best Holiday: Christmas**
 * Birth Month: October**
 * Career Goals: None**
 * Favorite Band(s): Alot**
 * Favorite Food: pizza and adri (the love of my pathetic little life!!!)**
 * Favorite Munchies: chips**
 * Favorite soft drink: pepsi**
 * Favorite Subject: math**
 * Pet Peeve: selena gomez**
 * Pets: dogs,ginnypig**

 There once was a girl names Selena Gomez. Selena is a 16-year-old girl who lives in Texas. Iloveadri Selena Gomez has a mother named Miah Lampong, a father names Ivan Lampong, two brothers named Fongy Lampong and Brian Lampong and an awesome sister named Miley Cyrus. Selena is a singer and an actor for wizards of Waverly place. Miley is also a singer and an actor but Miley is a better singer and a better actor but she’s and actor for Hannah Montanah. So one day Selena says “Hey Miley how was your singing practice.” “My Singing practice was awesome” said Miley “How about yours?” “Oh mine was horrible as usual, I can never get it right.” Said Selena “Well that’s ok singing isn’t for everybody.” Said Miley “How about you show practice for wizards of Waverly place? Was that better?” “No, it was just as bad, they said that if I keep forgetting my lines and keep acting like everything is fake then I’ll be kicked off the show.” Said Selena Then Miley say’s “Oh well there’s alw….” “Miley, Selena get down here now.” Interrupted Miah “It’s time for dinner.” When Miley and Selena went down stairs to the kitchen, everybody was already sitting down starting to eat. So then Miley and Selena sat down and Miah said “So guy’s how was singing and show practice.” Said Miah “It was good” Said Miley “How bout you Selena.” Said Miah But Selena just keep looking at the food and eating slowly. “So im guessing not so great huh.” Said Miah Selena nodded her head “Well Selena” Said Miah “That’s ok just keep practicing and you’ll get there”

Questions for Peer Reviewers

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)? Very dull plot.....not much of a story to me.......just a conversation between miley and selena 2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed? There is no climax, tension or interest 3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions? the characters are liflelike. I liked how you used very well known characters 4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story? I think you should add a plot and a solution 5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author? you need to make a longer story and you need to have more of a plot, setting, and resolution

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)? ITS AMAZING!!! I LOVED IT SOO MUCH! IT IS INDEED VERY ORIGINAL. A suggestion is that you should finish it and make miley be the winner and makes Selena move out of the house. 2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed? There is alot of suspence. I wanna know what happens to selena and miley next! It's not so satisfying but if it was, i bet it would 3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions? The characters are life like, heck, they are real people. The characters are enjoyable especially miley! Yes we get a good discription, miley;s cool and selenas not 4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story? Yes, i can see exactly what it says 5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author? finish the story!!

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

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