Jacel

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 * Hi, my name is Jacel. **
 * Grade: 8**
 * Best Holiday: Christmas. **
 * Birth Month: March. **
 * Career Goals: Pharmasist. **
 * Favorite Band(s): Tokio Hotel, The Academy Is..., The Cab. **
 * Favorite Food: Grilled Cheese. **
 * Favorite Munchies: Oreo's. **
 * Favorite soft drink: Dr. Pepper. **
 * Favorite Subject: Math and Spanish. **
 * Pet Peeve: Jonas Brothers. **
 * Pets: No Pets. **

One day there was a boy named Panic. Every one made fun of him because he was such a loser! So the next day he went to the doctors and got himself checked out. The doctor said he needed to run a mile everyday because he needed to build up his stamina and get fit for soccer. So everyday he went running from 5 PM to 7 PM. By the third day he had lost 5 pounds with running, exercising and dieting. His legs started to ache with a sensation that he took pride in. On one of his runs, he saw a pretty girl that he instantly fell in love with. This girl had long brown hair and Panic didn’t know who she was, so he assumed that she was new. Everyday, he looked forward to seeing that girl again. He would daydream about actually talking to the girl. Sadly enough, every time he saw her, his confidence slowly went away, and he speeds up his pace. On the first day of school, Panic met a friend. His friend’s name is Thortan, but he told Panic to call his Disco. Disco and Panic met at first period Language Arts. They share the same interest in books, so they quickly had something to talk about. Panic and Disco had most of their classes together, except for Chemistry. They both loved sports, both of their favorites was soccer and they liked the same thing. It would seem very scary that these two people took interest in the same thing. They were like long lost twins, although they didn’t look anything alike. Panic, tall and lean, had brown hair, like the kind that skater guys have. Since Disco is new, all of the girls in the school were instantly intrigued with him. Since Panic hung out with Disco, he became popular as well. Ever since they met,they became inseperable.

8 YEARS LATER. Panic and Disco are still friends, but they don't talk as much, since they are so busy with work and such. Disco is busy with a family of his own, while Panic is sill single and not really paying attention, just focusing on his work. He lives alone in a big apartment in New York City, while Disco lives in the suburbs of New York. "Panic!!!11!!! I think you need to forge about that girl you saw running. You don't even know her." Disco said to Panic while they were out in the city, visiting various bars. "What are you talking about? I'm not thinking about any girl." "Yeah, okay." "Well Panic, I think I should head back home. I don't want to come home to a grumpy Martha." "Alright. I'll see you tomorrow." Panic and Disco said their goodbyes. The next morning, Panic wakes up to go to work. He was tired from last night, so he took a longer time getting ready. When he looked at the clock, he relizd he was running late. He ran out of the apartment and he started walking to work. When he got there, there was a meeting. Panic wondered what it was about. When Panic went into the room, there was a new girl. "Hello Everyone! I would like to welcome our newest employee, Lily Lola." Everyone said their hello's and welcome's. The all of a sudden, Panic realized why the girl looked so familiar. She was the girl who he saw when he was running. He got all nervous. He walked back to his cubicle and started to work. All of a sudden he saw

Questions for Peer Reviewers  I think it's a great begining but it needs more...maybe talk about what happens to panic at the disco years later. - Adri

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)? It is very original. It has no problems. 2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed? Yes. It seems that the main character has a little bit too much on his plate. 3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions? Yes. 4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story? Yes. I'd like to see Panic involved with the girl more.

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author? Keep up the good work.

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?