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=SMS Group 14=

Introductions
Meet Brandon Meet Daniel

Story
Once upon a time, our world was filled with pollution and garbage. The earth was falling apart and ecosystems of plants and animals were dying. The world was in pandemonium as they tried to fix the massive problem. 3 kids from NYC//**;**// Robert, Monique, and Thomas, decided to band together to stop this crisis using all of their unique traits. Thomas is a musician and very creative. Monique is the smartest of the group, and Robert is a good public speaker and writer.
 * The Pollution Problem**

One day during school, Thomas talked to his friends Monique and Robert about the pollution issue. He had watched a show the previous day about the works of Al Gore to spread the word on global warming. Robert asked "What can we do to stop this?". Monique said that they could clean up the rivers, parks, and the environment. Robert suggested that cleaning the river was minor and that talking to the people about the problem would be helpful on a larger scale. Then, they could do events such as cleaning the parks and rivers. He also suggested to make a campaign and get others to join. Monique and Thomas exclaimed "What a great idea!". Now it was time for them to start helping the E arth.

The next day, Robert started to create a website for the campaign. Thomas told his friends about the project and got them to join the new “Campaign for a Better America” also called CBA. Monique went to City Hall to organize recoveries for the city. The assembled a council to vote on this. After many discussions, City Hall approved the idea and the group was pleased with the outcome. Then, they began to create an event to start cleaning the environment of New York City.

The first project was Monique's idea of cleaning out the parks. By the next week, they had a group of people ready to do this project. After many hours, they were finished and were happy with the outcome. After seeing what the small group did, others became interested in CBA. Their group became bigger. For the next few weeks, they had meeting of how to help more than just New York City. Their idea of helping the  Earth was a success.

Thomas suggested to ask the President directly but Monique strongly opposed it. She liked the idea but mentioned the odds would be very very slim for a response. Thomas said they should at least try because they had nothing to lose. After a month of waiting, they got a reply! The president gave them funding and told them about other leaders who also wanted to help the environment. By next week, everyone went to different parts of The United States and CBA helped the environment in every state. Thanks to the CBA, the United States was slowly having its many habitats restored and their plan to help the community and the country was a success.

Many years passed but their campaign stayed intact and was still growing. Their group was filled with so many people, they'd fill up all of Long Island. Their group  was a success and the program started to reach other countries. This is an example that three kids can make a difference in their community, city, state, country, or even the world.

By: Brandon Chan and Daniel Navarro 7-4

PEER REVIEW

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)? The plot of the story is original. I like how it is Earth Week. 2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed? The problems the characters face are important. It deals with real life problems. This week is Earth week so we are learning more abouth the Earth like the kids in the story. 3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions? The characters are some what life like. To improve upon this, try some dialogue. 4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story? In the next revision i would like to see more details. Describe the letter from the President. Also the City Hall. 5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author? There is not a lot of improvement needed. Just grammer. PEER REVIEW (group 2)

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)? **//I think that the plot is a little boring and not very interesting.//**

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed? **//There are no complications it is extremely boring there is only 1 problem and its boring there is no tension.//**

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions? **//They are not life like cause most kids don't want to just clean and we dont know enough about the characters there is not enough to the storeys.//**

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story? //**No i didnt hear or really expieriance i would change the plot to something more interesting that you could write about.**//

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author? **//The plot needs the most improvement and i think you should just write a new story.//**

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