ISKL+Sarah+S.

**Introduction:**
Include some or all of the following, as well as a link to your blog: first name, what you like to do in and out of school, favourites (food, sport, hobby, TV show, video game, etc.), places visited, future plans, claim to fame.

 **Hello my name is Sarah and I am Malaysian, I lived in Malaysia for 1year and was born in Singapore but only stayed there for 2months. I lived in Singapore, Amsterdam, Hong- Kong, Vancouver, and now here; I have one older brother. My favorite food is Pizza (margarita), and I hate olives ** . 
 *  My favorite video game is Guitar Hero World tour; ** **and i love Nintendo Wii. ** **I love Swimming and Dogs. ****My favorite movie shows are... Ugly Betty and the Simpsons.**

**Paste your story here:**
“Come on Lily!!! We are going to be late for the snorkeling expedition!” I shouted. It was our first snorkeling trip in Pulau Perhentian Kecil and I was really excited. From our hotel I could hear the sounds of the waves crashing against the rocks and the birds singing in the trees.

When we were both ready, we went down to the beach and got our snorkeling stuff packed and onto the boat… “Welcome girls to the PPK snorkeling adventure. We hope you will enjoy your time here in sea and if you need any help please don’t hesitate to ask me,” said the guide, as we were all putting on our fins and mask. “Will we see any sea turtles?” I asked the guide. “Maybe, Isabel, but very few because they are nearly an endangered species,” she replied, as the boat came to a halt in the middle of the ocean near a small lighthouse. “Is this where we will be snorkeling?” Lily asked as she was dipping her feet into the water; “of course not! This is where we will be fishing for lunch!” Said the guide as she slowly took out a big net. We were fishing for a few hours when suddenly the boat driver screamed and shouted; “There. Out there. There it is!” All of us ran to the side of the boat where the boat driver was pointing and we saw this small green animal that looked like a turtle and a few other fishes around it. “What is he pointing at? A big fish? A shark? What?” Lily and I whispered because we saw a poor little turtle who didn’t look that strong swimming along the boat. From the corner of my eye, I saw the guide holding out a net and reaching out to the side of the boat. “You can’t kill a small innocent creature like that, it didn’t do anything to you.” I screamed at the guide and boat driver.

“What are you going to do about it, little girl?” Said the guide while she was swinging the net down into the water at the direction the sea turtle was swimming to. I didn’t want to see the turtle get hurt or worse, die and thought I would be too late to safe it if I don’t do anything instantly. So I jumped in and pulled it away; it struggled and looked like it wanted to bite me, but then after a while it slowly followed me and we slowly swam out to the other side of the boat. From there, Lily helped me up onto the boat and once my foot left the water, the driver immediately started the engine and the boat sped off at the speed of light. “What about the turtle?” Lily squirmed as we could just see a little dot bopping up and down in the water. “I put my hair-tie on it’s flipper so whenever we see a turtle just look at it’s flipper and besides, the hair-tie has my name on it.” I said with a big smile on my face but then suddenly I saw the boat driver and the guide put their snorkling stuff on and jumped off the boat. We waited and waited for them to surface but minutes passed into hours and we still didn’t see the boat driver and the guide. We decided we had no choice but to leave the spot and with teamwork; both Lily and me took the boat back to the pier. We reported the incident to the local police. We later learned that that was the last time anyone saw the guide and her boat driver and now, Lily and I own a turtle sanctuary not too far off Pulau Perhentian Kecil where we have 68 turtles safe at home with a bunch of their friends.

**Questions for Peer Reviewers**
(Think in terms of questions you would like to ask the author.)

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?