Bobby+M

Type in the content of your new page here.Welcome to your first wiki lesson, using this wiki you will collaborate with at least between spring and summer - a unicyclist wobbles through the park **Grade:8th** **Siblings: An older sister named Jackie ** Bobby Medori Period I Ms. Cronk/ Mrs. Winner **From Heaven ** Hi I was Fez Kardastian. I was 15 and I Lived in Beverly Hills in a mansion with my mom Kim Kardashian and my nanny Linda. Since my father is not in the picture I had no man to look up too. The only man I had in my life is my neighbor who is also 15who name is Nate he is the only kid who looks at me for who I am and not because I am Kim Kardashians son he was like family to me. My Nanny home schools me because there is too much drama in the school being a celebrity’s son. The one thing I don’t tell anyone is that I am a part time Soldier who is with a few of my friends Iesha and Manquan and 15 other people from around the Country. I go every Tuesday and Thursday nights to a warehouse in Malibu. All of us hate the Terrorist and are planning an attack on their leader. We don’t like this Terrorist group who hates Americans because this Last Month we had an idea why how we can attack him Manquan came up to me with an idea he said “ since my Dad is the General of the Army of the US why don’t I just steal his key to the vault where has some bombs and machine guns “ everyone loved he idea because the leader had a speech next week and we could attack then and plant a bomb under the podium the night before.
 * Best Holiday: 4/20 jk **
 * Birth Month:November **
 * Career Goals: Fireman **
 * Favorite Band(s): Singer- Jadakiss and Mayday Parade **
 * Favorite Food: Pizza **
 * Favorite Munchies: Popcorn **
 * Favorite soft drink: Orange Juice **
 * Favorite Subject: Gym **
 * Pet Peeve: When people Step on my Sneakers **
 * Pets: 2 Cats **

It felt like a heartbeat and the night was already here Manquan stole his dads key when his dad was sleeping and we were on are way to plant the bomb and we did it successfully. For the rest of the night we camped out in are cars in the middle off in the tundra.

The next morning I was shaking because I was so nervous. When we were on are way to the town he had his speech in we saw helicopters on top of us and we got nervous. Manquan assured everybody would be fine. About 10 minutes up the road we saw a roadblock. The Army of Russia said “Step out of the vehicle with your hands up”. We all started to panic and didn’t know what to do. We decided that we were going to all charge out at once with are guns and attack them because we had better guns all they had were pistols. We all rushed out on three we started to fire. Some of us were getting shot as we left the vehicle. But most of use made it. Then we took cover by using the side of a building. As we started shooting we were killing a lot of there men. We had the edge. Until the army threw tear gas. We all went blind and couldn’t see and they all came up to use and shot us until we were dead. The last thing I remember when I was alive was all he pain that my fellow terrorists were going threw trying to stand up for what they believed. Now I am telling this story from heaven telling you if you believe in something make it shown and stand up for what you believe in and I no that I died for something I believe in so I am happy about that.

Questions for Peer Reviewers

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

Yes, but it is very complicated,

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

Yes, it satisfies be becasue it is a very extreme situation

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

Theres not many characters, but me myself have met the main character online while i was gaming. And the other character, Kim Kardashian is a big celebrity

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

Id like to see more action during the fighting.

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?

The ending. Make it longer.

~Damon~