BF-Joe

HI I am Joseph but my friends call me Joe. And soem people think i am short. I like coffee. My favorite type of food is Indian. My friends are Ben, Oskar, Arel, Sophia, Silke, Sam, Sam, and Kristen. I love to play vedio games and my favorite animal is a cougar. My favorite school i have been to has to be Dolfino school in New jersey. hi this trevor i have 3 sisters.

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My story

the 4 monks of the jungle

"Marrucho come on wake up we have to go to school"

"But it´s summer" cried Marrucho

"we have Martial Arts class" stated Yaguma

" Fine" said Marrucho in such a drowsey town Yaguma yawned. Yaguma and Marrucho then wen´t to

Hayato´s house to wake him up, but when they arrived he was up and ready to go. The boys then decided

to rudly wake up Kiyomi. Then befor anyone could blink Kiyomi charged through the door at such an

amazing speed that she managed to topple over Hayato and slammed in to the wall on the other side of the

house. We were the best of friends me (Yaguma) am a pupil of the great master of ninjitsu. Hayato is the

master to the pupil of the great master of thi-chi. Marrucho is the pupil to the great master of kung-fu. Kiyomi

(the only girl in our group) is the pupil to the great master of karate who many people thought was evil, his

names is Crono. On their way to school they decided to stop at a temple to pray. After all today was the

day of the martial arts exames. In the exames all of the students were parred upto fight the winner

becomes a master and get their own pupil, but the loser has to go through the 10 years of trainig all over

again, so you would expect they would be nervous. "Hay look at those" stated Hayato " wow there so

coool" said Marrucho in a sarcastic tone. " They´re just rocks" said Yaguma " someone touch it " said

Kiyomi "fine" said Marrucho. As Marrucho crept closer so did eveyone else, and eventually they all were

touching the 4 rocks that sat on the statue. Then instentely they all vanished. When they oppened there

eye´s they noticed they were not in Japan anymore. After they walked around for a little bit " yes we are

definetly not in Japan anymore" said Marrucho in a rather odd tone of voice as if he was a profesor wich

everyone by now knows he isn't so lets carry on with the story. After he finished talking it was silent, to

silent. They heard a noise coming from the bushes. Suddenly Yaguma jumped into the trees "wait up"

cried Kiyomi. Marrucho and Hayato stood there waiting to fight. Right befor they were abou to charge

Yaguma came down from the trees and stopped them dead in their trakes. "It's just a gorilla" said Yaguma

with a sigh of relife. As the Ggorilla entered it looked very familiar and it atacked. As they all jumped to

safety in the trees it followed. In less then a second the gorilla changed into Crono.

" Why" cried Kiyomi " Because i failled the first of my many exames and i won't let kids get it on there

first try to become masters" cried Crono in a tone as if he was giving them a lecture on his life.

Quickly and swiftly the kids charged at crono with fury and anger in hearts and souls, but that wasn't

enough for with a single hand gester Crono knocked them all down plimiting 10,000ft. to the floor. Almost

instantly they landed on their backs with a great THUMP. Crono then teleported back to Japan." is he gone"

whispered Hayato "yes" said Kiyomi. They all let out a sigh of relief. The 4 friends then limped to the

nearest cave to rest. " what do these thing even do" cried Hayato. Suddenly ,but not instently they all turned

into animals. Hayato turned into a tiger, Kiyomi turned into a crane, Marrucho turned into a panther, and

Yaguma turned into a monkey.

As the four changed they were magically healed. "This is so cool!" cried

Hayato. " Lets fight back" cried Marrucho, but Kiyomi and Yaguma were already off after Crono. But all

they could find in every direction was a dead end." what " yelled Yaguma. As he yelled he pounched the

wall with fustration, then it shatter and in its place stood four boulders shapped like a monkey,a tiger, a

crane, and a panther.They soon relized the rocks they found earlier would be able to fit. As they placed the

rocks in the slots they then began to change back to humans. " Bravo Bravo indead" Said someone to

far away to see.

Instantly the forest changed into a stadium." Bravo" said the master of kung-fu."what just happened" cried

Kiyomi " you all pass with flying colors" Said the master of ninjitsu." but how" asked Hayato." you wouldn't

guess how many students go to the templ eto pray so we decided to make the exames this year on instinct

not strength" stated the master of ninjitsu. " so we brought the exames to the temple" said the Head Master

" because Crono tried to kill you it proved he was evil " said the Head Master " I would have gotten away

with it too if it wasn't for you kids" cried Crono. For the next weak the new Masters were selebrating.

" for all the work they had done we grant them with there first students and pets" said the Head Master. The

students were animals there was a monkey, a crane, a tiger, and a panther. This will also be oyur pets. That is how they became the 4 MONKS OF THE JUNGLE.

. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?

. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?

. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author? "Marrucho come on wake up we have to go to school"

"But it´s summer" cried Marrucho

"we have Martial Arts class" stated Yaguma

" Fine" said Marrucho in such a drowsey town Yaguma yawned. Yaguma and Marrucho then wen´t to

Hayato´s house to wake him up, but when they arrived he was up and ready to go. The boys then decided

to rudly wake up Kiyomi. Then befor anyone could blink Kiyomi charged through the door at such an

amazing speed that she managed to topple over Hayato and slammed in to the wall on the other side of the

house. We were the best of friends me (Yaguma) am a pupil of the great master of ninjitsu. Hayato is the

master to the pupil of the great master of thi-chi. Marrucho is the pupil to the great master of kung-fu. Kiyomi

(the only girl in our group) is the pupil to the great master of karate who many people thought was evil, his

names is Crono. On their way to school they decided to stop at a temple to pray. After all today was the

day of the martial arts exames. In the exames all of the students were parred upto fight the winner

becomes a master and get their own pupil, but the loser has to go through the 10 years of trainig all over

again, so you would expect they would be nervous. "Hay look at those" stated Hayato " wow there so

coool" said Marrucho in a sarcastic tone. " They´re just rocks" said Yaguma " someone touch it " said

Kiyomi "fine" said Marrucho. As Marrucho crept closer so did eveyone else, and eventually they all were

touching the 4 rocks that sat on the statue. Then instentely they all vanished. When they oppened there

eye´s they noticed they were not in Japan anymore. After they walked around for a little bit " yes we are

definetly not in Japan anymore" said Marrucho in a rather odd tone of voice as if he was a profesor wich

everyone by now knows he isn't so lets carry on with the story. After he finished talking it was silent, to

silent. They heard a noise coming from the bushes. Suddenly Yaguma jumped into the trees "wait up"

cried Kiyomi. Marrucho and Hayato stood there waiting to fight. Right befor they were abou to charge

Yaguma came down from the trees and stopped them dead in their trakes. "It's just a gorilla" said Yaguma

with a sigh of relife. As the Ggorilla entered it looked very familiar and it atacked. As they all jumped to

safety in the trees it followed. In less then a second the gorilla changed into Crono.

"Why" cried Kiyomi " Because i failled the first of my many exames and i won't let kids get it on there

first try to become masters" cried Crono in a tone as if he was giving them a lecture on his life.

Quickly and swiftly the kids charged at crono with fury and anger in hearts and souls, but that wasn't

enough for with a single hand gester Crono knocked them all down plimiting 10,000ft. to the floor. Almost

instantly they landed on their backs with a great THUMP. Crono then teleported back to Japan." is he gone"

whispered Hayato "yes" said Kiyomi. They all let out a sigh of relief. The 4 friends then limped to the

nearest cave to rest. " what do these thing even do" cried Hayato. Suddenly ,but not instently they all turned

into animals. Hayato turned into a tiger, Kiyomi turned into a crane, Marrucho turned into a panther, and

Yaguma turned into a monkey.

As the four changed they were magically healed. "This is so cool!" cried

Hayato. " Lets fight back" cried Marrucho, but Kiyomi and Yaguma were already off after Crono. But all

they could find in every direction was a dead end." what " yelled Yaguma. As he yelled he pounched the

wall with fustration, then it shatter and in its place stood four boulders shapped like a monkey,a tiger, a

crane, and a panther.They soon relized the rocks they found earlier would be able to fit. As they placed the

rocks in the slots they then began to change back to humans. " Bravo Bravo indead" Said someone to

far away to see.

Instantly the forest changed into a stadium." Bravo" said the master of kung-fu."what just happened" cried

Kiyomi " you all pass with flying colors" Said the master of ninjitsu." but how" asked Hayato." you wouldn't

guess how many students go to the templ eto pray so we decided to make the exames this year on instinct

not strength" stated the master of ninjitsu. " so we brought the exames to the temple" said the Head Master

" because Crono tried to kill you it proved he was evil " said the Head Master " I would have gotten away

with it too if it wasn't for you kids" cried Crono. For the next weak the new Masters were selebrating.

" for all the work they had done we grant them with there first students and pets" said the Head Master. The

students were animals there was a monkey, a crane, a tiger, and a panther. This will also be oyur pets. That is how they became the 4 MONKS OF THE JUNGLE. "Marrucho come on wake up we have to go to school"

"But it´s summer" cried Marrucho

"we have Martial Arts class" stated Yaguma

" Fine" said Marrucho in such a drowsey town Yaguma yawned. Yaguma and Marrucho then wen´t to

Hayato´s house to wake him up, but when they arrived he was up and ready to go. The boys then decided

to rudly wake up Kiyomi. Then befor anyone could blink Kiyomi charged through the door at such an

amazing speed that she managed to topple over Hayato and slammed in to the wall on the other side of the

house. We were the best of friends me (Yaguma) am a pupil of the great master of ninjitsu. Hayato is the

master to the pupil of the great master of thi-chi. Marrucho is the pupil to the great master of kung-fu. Kiyomi

(the only girl in our group) is the pupil to the great master of karate who many people thought was evil, his

names is Crono. On their way to school they decided to stop at a temple to pray. After all today was the

day of the martial arts exames. In the exames all of the students were parred upto fight the winner

becomes a master and get their own pupil, but the loser has to go through the 10 years of trainig all over

again, so you would expect they would be nervous. "Hay look at those" stated Hayato " wow there so

coool" said Marrucho in a sarcastic tone. " They´re just rocks" said Yaguma " someone touch it " said

Kiyomi "fine" said Marrucho. As Marrucho crept closer so did eveyone else, and eventually they all were

touching the 4 rocks that sat on the statue. Then instentely they all vanished. When they oppened there

eye´s they noticed they were not in Japan anymore. After they walked around for a little bit " yes we are

definetly not in Japan anymore" said Marrucho in a rather odd tone of voice as if he was a profesor wich

everyone by now knows he isn't so lets carry on with the story. After he finished talking it was silent, to

silent. They heard a noise coming from the bushes. Suddenly Yaguma jumped into the trees "wait up"

cried Kiyomi. Marrucho and Hayato stood there waiting to fight. Right befor they were abou to charge

Yaguma came down from the trees and stopped them dead in their trakes. "It's just a gorilla" said Yaguma

with a sigh of relife. As the Ggorilla entered it looked very familiar and it atacked. As they all jumped to

safety in the trees it followed. In less then a second the gorilla changed into Crono.

"Why" cried Kiyomi " Because i failled the first of my many exames and i won't let kids get it on there

first try to become masters" cried Crono in a tone as if he was giving them a lecture on his life.

Quickly and swiftly the kids charged at crono with fury and anger in hearts and souls, but that wasn't

enough for with a single hand gester Crono knocked them all down plimiting 10,000ft. to the floor. Almost

instantly they landed on their backs with a great THUMP. Crono then teleported back to Japan." is he gone"

whispered Hayato "yes" said Kiyomi. They all let out a sigh of relief. The 4 friends then limped to the

nearest cave to rest. " what do these thing even do" cried Hayato. Suddenly ,but not instently they all turned

into animals. Hayato turned into a tiger, Kiyomi turned into a crane, Marrucho turned into a panther, and

Yaguma turned into a monkey.

As the four changed they were magically healed. "This is so cool!" cried

Hayato. " Lets fight back" cried Marrucho, but Kiyomi and Yaguma were already off after Crono. But all

they could find in every direction was a dead end." what " yelled Yaguma. As he yelled he pounched the

wall with fustration, then it shatter and in its place stood four boulders shapped like a monkey,a tiger, a

crane, and a panther.They soon relized the rocks they found earlier would be able to fit. As they placed the

rocks in the slots they then began to change back to humans. " Bravo Bravo indead" Said someone to

far away to see.

Instantly the forest changed into a stadium." Bravo" said the master of kung-fu."what just happened" cried

Kiyomi " you all pass with flying colors" Said the master of ninjitsu." but how" asked Hayato." you wouldn't

guess how many students go to the templ eto pray so we decided to make the exames this year on instinct

not strength" stated the master of ninjitsu. " so we brought the exames to the temple" said the Head Master

" because Crono tried to kill you it proved he was evil " said the Head Master " I would have gotten away

with it too if it wasn't for you kids" cried Crono. For the next weak the new Masters were selebrating.

" for all the work they had done we grant them with there first students and pets" said the Head Master. The

students were animals there was a monkey, a crane, a tiger, and a panther. This will also be oyur pets. That is how they became the 4 MONKS OF THE JUNGLE. those are the corrections i did so farr - jackie good sotry but you die bad luck

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