Anthony+D

**Siblilings: Why?** Feel free to upload your podcast or a picture if you like.
 * Hi, my name is tony **
 * Grade: 8**
 * Best Holiday: Christmas **
 * Birth Month: January **
 * Career Goals: ? **
 * Favorite Band(s): ? **
 * Favorite Food: Tacos and speggeti **
 * Favorite Munchies: **
 * Favorite soft drink: **
 * Favorite Subject: SS **
 * Pet Peeve: ? **
 * Pets: none **


 * I remember it like it was yesterday even though it was 40 years ago. The day started out normal, five am, 5 mile run around the brisk air base in northern italy it was a routine summer day. I was ready for another routine work out, breakfast, repairs to my equipment and maneuvers over the northern part of Germany. It was all routine until it was too late when I saw the flashing strobes and the beeping blasting in my ear. I remember calling in “Two missles in bound”, Brandon was covering my six until a huge fire ball erupted into the sky. I was scared but I continued to try to evade the missles while with standing the stomach knotting g-forces. That’s when it was too late, I pulled the cord as I blasted out of the jet, but thank god I had that tiny little micro chip, they weren’t going to get it with out killing me and I was not going to let that happen with out putting up a fight.**


 * My parachute deployed as I came to a stop in the sky and my seat dropped down on top of a cliff some where on a large mountain. I saw brandon’s flares as I floated to the ground it was peaceful but not for long as I landed on the field next to a dense forest.**


 * “Brandon you okay’’**
 * “No, my leg”**
 * “Shhh, you hear that”**
 * “humvees or tanks, lets get out of here”**
 * “I’ll carry you”**


 * Lets get to that forest cm’on Just stay down and we’ll be ok.**
 * “I think my radio is on top of that mountain”**
 * As I looked up I noticed the huge mountains looming over our heads going beond the treetops.**


 * We should have never gone to see what that glimmer of light was we were over restricted air space.**
 * “Just stay down and be quiet ill tend to your leg when we get to the top of this hill”.**
 * “okay”**
 * “Lets head up to the top of those rocks”scared and I didn’t really know what to do or where to go I just wanted to get to the top of that mountain. A couple of hours passed before we got to the top of the hill, it was like a secluted cliff. It was nice and peaceful but just knowing how many people were out there looking for us but not to save us**
 * The pictures we took were so gory and messed up there would be another war.**


 * Brandon and I sat there as I tended to his leg with a small medical kit, night was falling and we needed shelter. We found a small cave over night we took two hour shifts. An hour into my first shift I looked out into the darkness and I saw a woman and a young boy holding hands but I knew I was helusinating as they walked out into the darkness.**
 * I woke Brandon up and gave him our pistol. I fell asleep, it felt like the second I fell asleep I woke up again hearing the blasting of rifles echoing throughout the forest. I looked up and saw four men shooting at Brandon, but it was too late he lay there motionless. The men were amused as they searched him for the chip that held the photos but they could not find it because I had it. They said something in german but I didn’t know what they said but they were mad as they walked out into the forest.**


 * As I walked out of the cave I saw a man laying on the ground, Brandon must have shot one of them. There was a rifle laying next to his body so I took it.**

I stepped out side as the cool spring breeze hit me walking out the door and threw the ball to Johnny. His hair ruffeled in the wind as he got ready to hit the ball. He waited for the pitch and then BOOM…**
 * I was running through the forest not knowing where I was going all I saw was the mountain looming over the treetops. I needed to find shelter it was an hour until I finally found a small cave I laied there terrorfied as I dosed into sleep…**
 * “Daddy, daddy” yelled Johnny.**
 * “Yeah Johnny” I replied**
 * “Can we go play baseball” he said eagerly.**
 * “All right give me five minutes” I said.**
 * “Can you get my mit, its in the garage” I told jim.**
 * “Okay” he said.
 * It was all over.**
 * I woke and a bullet slammed against the rock next to me as little pieces of rock shattered every where.**
 * I was running, I didn’t know where but I was trying to get away they knew where I was. I needed to get to that mountain or I would be killed.**


 * It took me hours to get to the top but I finally got to the top where my radio sat there waiting for me. I radioed back to base, they told me to wait for a chopper to come. It took about 45 minutes for the chopper to get to the mountain. As I hopped in I gave the chip to Sargent Olivera as he called base as I told them about the pictures. **

Questions for Peer Reviewers

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?