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Story
Albert's Great Find

Once upon a time, on the hot planet of Shell, there lived the Shellites who were obsessed with two things and only two things, eggs and plants. The Shellites grew every plant grown to an alien. There were tall plants, short plants, long plants, fat plants, skinny plants, beautiful plants, ugly plants, and terrible-smelling plants. Also, the Shellites altered the growing stages of the plants to grow eggs, and only eggs.

Their obsession for eggs was crazy. They did everything with eggs. Also, it was so hot on the planet Shell that the Shellites were able to cook eggs on the sidewalk. Everything that they ate was eggs. For breakfast, they ate eggs of all forms, sunny-side up or down, scrambled eggs, egg whites or just egg yolks. For lunch, they ate egg salad. For dinner, they ate tons and tons of boiled eggs. The one problem was that they could not find a way to get rid of the egg shells. Then, there was Albert.

The Shellites were having two major problems on their planet, the first was that for some odd reason all of the plants started to die. The other problem was that the egg-shell compost heap was getting way to big. The mayor of the planet was now holding a competition to see who could find a way to get rid of the egg-shells in a safe manner The reward is 500,000 dollars. This is when the Shellites world was turned upside-down.

People had many different tactics in trying to g et rid of the shells. Some tried burning the shells, but the smell of the burnt shells was just to unbearable. Some Shellites tried to crush the shells, but the crushed shells just created another compost heap. Some tried tried to throw the shells in the lake. For the first week, it seemed like the perfect idea. As the mayor was about to give away the reward, he received disturbing news that the fish population was dangerously low. There seemed to be no way to get rid of the shells, but how wrong they were.

Albert's family really needed the money. Their house was falling apart at the seams. They needed a new roof, there was no hot water, and they could barely pay off their mortgage. If they were to win the prize, they would use the money to fix up the house and then donate the rest to charity.

One morning, while he was cooking his eggs on the sidewalk, he was feeling depressed. He had tried every tactic in attempting to get rid of the egg-shells, but nothing worked. Suddenly, a wind gust blew Albert's used egg-shell onto the soil next to the plant. He eventually decided to leave the shell right where it was. he went inside, and he turned on the family's small black-and-white TV. on it there was an urgent news report. “Now, adding to the terrible news, our planet's supply of eggs is running low due to the outburst of plants dying.” said the reporter, “We need a solution, AND FAST!!!!”

The next morning, Albert leaves his house for school in the morning and something catches his eye. He notices the plant where the egg-shell dropped yesterday now sprouted five new eggs. He thought that the egg-shells might help the plants grow. “I will conduct an experiment once I get home from school today,” He thought to himself.

After school, Albert rushed home. He couldn't wait to conduct the experiment. He took two plants, one of them had an egg-shell in the soil while the other plant had nothing but the cold, soft soil. The next day, he looked at the plants and the one without the s hells had drooped overnight, while the one with the egg-shell in the soil now grew seven new eggs! Once he wrote down the results, He rushed down to City Hall to tell the mayor.

The mayor was very, very happy that Albert found out the solution to both problems. He happily handed the money to Albert. Five years later, the compost heap was gone, there was no more egg shortages, and the plants were growing extremely well. Albert and his family were living in their newly-repaired house. They lived egg-celently ever after.

Written by: Sean and Daniel

PEER REVIEW

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?

PEER REVIEW (group 2)

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?

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