SO-Sam+W.

**Introduction:**
My name is Sami, I have seven cats their names are Midnight, Mittens Mario, Smokey, Shadow, Tigger and Cody also have a turtle named crush. I collect model horses and I like to play outside.

**The Great Murder**
The Great Murder By: Sami Wojcik Dead. Roliver Schmitt was dead; the maid found him in the library of his great mansion home in Hamburg, his book was drenched in vodka imported from Russia. The police said when they were interviewed “Schmitt died a natural death.” But, Bill Riekap was smarter he thought, //why would Roliver Schmitt would die at age 48, its insane! I will figure out why. //The next day all over the world people would know that the multimillionaire died of a natural cause. The next day Bill found a news paper and turned to the page about the late multimillionaire Roliver Schmitt… // The late multimillionaire Roliver Schmitt // // By: Otto Jemson // // In Hamburg at 8:00 a.m. the police found Schmitt sopped in vodka looking at his records. It seems that the maid found him at 7:45 and didn’t call the station till 7:55. Know we interviewed some people about Schmitt and they said Schmitt would have know reason to commit….Continue Page A5 // Bill looked in the paper for page A5 but could not find it he tore apart the hole news paper, all of a sudden bill felt he was being watched like there was a hole burning right through him, he looked up, he **//was//** being watched there was a man in a black long over coat, the worst part he was wearing a monocle, them man was walking toward him Bill jumped off and ran, if this was a race Bill could have won by a mile. Bill thought of the first place he could hide as he ran past Burkhalters Drug Store, past Pansy’s Pantry and past Joes house, the man was still following him, then he was stuck in an alley way! The man caught up to him, Bill was breathing heavily and sweating, and while the man was not breathing hard OR sweating, he was trapped the only weapon was a block of concrete…. The next thing Bill knew he was in the hospital, with a cracked rib and a broken collar bone black and blue spots all over. The door opened and Bill jumped and relaxed to realize it was the morning nurse Gerta “do need to use the toiletten “? Toiletten is German for toilet. “Nein, danke.” (No thank you) he told the nurse she was about to leave when I said “wait! What about my parents where are they….” She looked nervous then she said “they are dead they died of a time bomb in the basement…” she trailed off looking at him sorrow in her eyes, “ I’m very sorry.” Then she left. He was stunned then he jumped up and dressed ran out of his room and was running around looking for a phone. Panting he ran to the nurses desk and asked “can I use the phone?” She looked up “of course you may. “ She said and handed Bill the phone. He picked the phone up. “Hello this is the operator how may I help you.” Bill answered “I need to call the Riekap house.” Their was a pause then the operator said “you wont reach their phone is disconnected.” Bill was getting fed up with this nonsense, “just connect me with the phone number all right,” the operator sounding annoyed said “anyone else you want to call” Bill thought. “Yes I want to call Brittany Anderson at the Anderson house” who would you like to call first” “Um yes my house than Brittany. Thank you.” Ring Ring the phone to his house was ringing. Then a voice said “I’m sorry we are not able to connect you with this phone call please hang up and try again.” A wave of frustration went over him and then he said, “Operator please connect me too the Anderson house thank you.” Again the phone rang some picked the phone up, “hello Brittany its Bill” bill heard sobbing in the background. “Bill” he heard a quaking trembling voice say “its Mary Jane, Brittany is dead, we found her in the pool with a bullet in her back” bill said trying to keep his voice even “its okay I’ll be right over, bye” Bill turned around and started walking but before he could do anything he heard a voice say” you are to sick to be out of bed Bill, come to your room” Bill he turned slowly he gasped it was the man with the monocle. “So Bill as you can see I have to kill you” said monocle man “if you want to know the reason I’ll tell you why Schmitt died and why I have to kill you, why Roliver Schmitt owed my organization money we waited for four years, when he didn’t pay we decided to kill him, and so since you got so close to nosey, you must say good bye to the world."

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1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

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5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?