SO-Conner+E.

**Introduction:**
favorite food:pizza pets:2 dogs and some fish favorite things to do: play outside or on my computer brothers sisters:1 brother famliy: mom, dad, brother, me

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The Cast By: Connor Erwin I have a cast and I can’t do a lot of stuff. Here let me tell you how I got it. It all started when I when I was getting ready for baseball practice. Practice ran from 3:30-4:30. This was my first time to play baseball. The baseball field was amazing! The grass was green, very green. The diamond shape was perfect. Even the bases looked like they were never used, it was all so cool. Anyway back to the point. After the best time I ever had, playing baseball, I started for home. Then when I got home my cool, nice, sweet home with all my video games and my computer, I recuperated by playing a video game. At 5:30 I had to go to Basketball practice. My friend and me played one on one, like usual. I took a shot; it was going to be a good one. Yes, it’s going up and, and then he stuffed me. He had reached me just as I shot the ball into the air. The ball came down with an incredible force and sprained my finger. It was my middle finger. After that, we had a free throw contest. I won twice with my sprained finger! I got home and told my mom and dad all about my finger jam. So, they immediately put ice on it and wrapped it up. They taped it onto a splint, an old Popsicle stick, and taped my third and fourth fingers together. I did not have too much pain, and went to bed. When I got up the next day, I went to school. I kept my fingers taped and iced them down that night too! Finally, four days later, when my swelling had not gone down and I still did not have very much pain, my mom talked to my coach. It was right before practice and she wanted to know if I should play or go see a doctor. She asked if he thought I should get it seen by the doctor. He said I should. The next morning my mom called the nurse hotline, at 8:30. The nurse wanted to know all the details, like how long ago this happened, what had been done for the finger, how much pain I had and so on. She said to be on the safe side, I should have a doctor look at it. So I got to visit the doctor by 9:30. The doctor looked at my finger and had me get x-rays. When the x-ray results came in, it showed that my finger was fractured in 2 places! I got to go home and rest for a while. Then I got to go back at 1:00 and get a cast on! It was wrapped in a nice orange color. It was a very rough week. When that week was over I got more x-rays and my //fingers were still broken!// I got another cast but this one is //plaster//. It’s kind of hard, not as hard as the fiberglass one though. //The plaster cast looks like a 3year old made it//. It has to stay on for 3 more weeks. Now everyone is teasing me. Even my brother is teasing me. And so is my mom! I hate it. My brother calls me crimp or cripple. It makes me just want to //scream//. I can’t wait until this darn cast gets off my arm. I wish the three weeks would just fly by! So, there you have it. I started my day off beginning to play baseball on that beautiful diamond and ended up with a cast on my hand because of basketball.

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