SO-Amy+S.

**  Introduction:**
Hi! My name is Amy! I made a really awsome movie about me, but i couldn't figure out how to post it :(. But thats okay, because I can tell you about me in this little box! :) I am a six grader at South Mittle School in Eau Claire WI. I enjoy playing soccer, riding my bike and taking my dog for walks. My faviort food is tacos, but my faviort desert is brownies and ice cream. I spend alot of time out side and enjoy wrighting storys! I can't wait to read storys from around the world, and hope that you enjoy mine, about a penguin and his dream of flight!

See ya! Amy

PS. please wright well, i don't want earth to be smushed by aliens!

Larry Tries To Fly By Amy Schiefelbein Larry was a penguin. He had always been a penguin. He had never not been a penguin. He was a small penguin, with really big eyes, a large beak, small flippers, and a funny attitude. But he had always loved being a penguin, until one bitter cold winter day in the arctic. Larry was playing Marco Polar with his slightly odd and rebellious friend Wallie when a large amazing snowy owl flew over there heads. Larry watched in aw as she flew with graceful wing flaps. She went so fast, so peacefully, Larry almost fainted with joy. But as fast as she appeared, the owl flew away into the bitter arctic world. “What was that” asked Larry, still full shock and aw. “Oh, snap out of it Larry, it’s just an owl!” Responded Wallie in an annoyed tone. “It was so beautiful, how did it do that?” Asked Larry, head still filled with amazement. “What?” Asked Wallie, still annoyed “it just flew around, and you’re a penguin, you can’t fly, its impossible!” Usually whatever Wallie said went, but Larry was determent to fly and with a little help, he was sure that he could, so he planed to learn how to fly, because a penguin is a bird, and birds can fly, so why can't Larry? Two days later, it was the first time it had stopped snowing for about six months. Larry met Wallie by the fish and slop bargain shop as usually, but today Larry had a little more on his mind then playing a simple every day boring old game. “Wallie, me and you are going to learn to fly” said Larry looking at the sky with high hopes. “Whoa, take it easy there Larry” Said Wallie, almost laughing his head clean off, “I thought I already told you, PENGUINS CAN’T FLY!” “Most penguins can’t fly, but I bet we can!!” arguer Larry Soon, Larry had convinced Wallie to help him learn to fly; they got into intense planning to learn to how to fly. “Okay,” said Wallie “how did the owl fly?” She had big wing that she flapped.” Said Larry cheerily, remembering to breath-taking experience. “Okay,” said Wallie “we need wings.” “Then we will get wings!” said Larry already having a plan. The next day, it had warmed up even more. Larry and Wallie ran from there igloos and ran (or wattled) he went so fast he almost ran over Wallie “Larry, Stop!” Larry stop and skated on the ice for a few seconds. “So”, Said Wallie, “what are we looking for?” “You will see” Said Larry, with a mischievous grin on his face, “you’ll see” to the edge of the water. “Look!” said Larry, so existed he almost fainted “there here!” Sure enough, two large, green palm tree leafs had washed up onto the unforgiving arctic shore. “There’s only two, though” Wallie pointed out “who will use them first?” “Can I, please” asked Larry, picking up the leaves, “PLEASE!!” “Well… ok” said Wallie a bit sad that he couldn’t try the leafs out first. Larry let out a squeak of excitement and grabbed the leafs and ran on to about a 10 foot tall cliff. “Here, I will try here first” exclaimed Larry, “there is a large snow bank at the bottom, so if I fall, it wont hurt.” “good idea” said Wallie” then you wont hurt your self. The two penguins climbed up the steep hill. “Ready… set… JUMP! Larry top jumped his highest jump, he flapped the leaves as hard as he could, for s second or to he hovered, but a gripping pain caught his arms, his arms became very, very tired, he begin to plummet to the ground, 10 feet away, he landed head first in the snow bank. “Whoa!” shouted Wallie “are you ok” Larry jumped out of the snow bank “just fine” he said “I wish the flying attempt would have worked, though.” “Will think of something else” Said Wallie, confidence in his voice. Sure enough, the next day the two were at it again. “Hmmm” said Wallie, pondering over what they would next “Wait!” Said Wallie “I got it, I know how were gunna fly!” “What who were how!” said Larry “oh you scared me but never mind how are we going to fly?” “Look” exclaimed Wallie, pointing at a drawing in the ice. The drawing was of a large triangle, it had a bar to hang on to about half way on it, and looked like it might actually work, what Wallie drew was a picture of a hang glider. “how in the world are we going to make that!” asked Larry, pointing at Wallie’s drawing of a hang glider “we can try, we can always try.” The next day it was Wallie that almost ran over Larry “Larry, I know how we are going to make the thing I drew” “Okay, spit it out” “ok, well me go to the kite store, bye the biggest kite you can buy, and then use the rods and cloth to make it!” That’s a great idea” said Larry “lets go” The kite store didn’t open for about an hour, so Wallie made a plan that showed were all the rods and kite were going to be positioned. “That’s it, I got it.” He said when the plan was done. Larry and Wallie were the first people at the kite store “hello” said the manager “how may I help you boys?” “we need the biggest kite you got!” yelled Larry “oh boy, let me take a look” said the manager “what about this?” Larry looked at Wallie for approval ‘That’s perfect!” yelled Wallie. Wired, thought Larry, That kite looks just like the triangle on in Wallie’s drawing, Larry asked Wallie about it “weird yes but a lot of kites look like this, Larry” was Wallie’s answer. They bought the kite and ran to the ice berg they had mad many years ago as a hide out, there, Larry watched in ah as Wallie but the kite together. “Its perfect!” yelled Larry. Prefect it was, the final thing looked like a replica of Wallie’s drawing. "ureka!" it will work!" yelled Wallie "Lets go try it out, its my turn to try Larry!"Wallie grabed the kite thing and ran past the store,down the street, through the kite shop, and up the small cliff. "this is misson control station, we are clear for flight, over" Said Larry, pretending to pick up a wakie-talkie "over" said Wallie, doing the same. "3...2...1... lift off!" yelled Larry "jummmmmmmmmmmp!" Wallie took to the sky and ** To be continued and edited :) **

**Questions for Peer Reviewers**
(Think in terms of questions you would like to ask the author.)

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?

From Shania: I like Larry the penguin he is cool! jummmmmmmmmmmmp! fun! TTYL FINISH UR STORY!!!!!!!!!!!!