SO-Heidi+C.

My name is Heidi Chellman. My favorite subjects in school is Art and Social Studies. Some hobbies of mine are gymnastics, diving, and swimming. I like most junk foods I have a real sweet tooth. I like to watch scary movies. Some of my favorite video games is Terok, Guitar Hero, and Lair. In the future I want to be a professional gymnast. (In the Olympics) I'm getting closer to my goal.

** A Camping Fear ** It all started at school on a sunny day during 7th period. The sun was shining through the windows and was hitting my face. An annoying girl named Stephanie was blabbing on and on about camping and how she just got back from Arizona. The teacher Mrs. Nibler decided it would be a good idea to go camping for a field trip for the whole class. We decided to take a vote of course; Bobby hated camping so he voted for NO. But everybody else in the class voted for YES. The next day Mrs. Nibler came into the class room and was all excited. She had found some paragraphs off the internet on some campgrounds we could visit and some activities we could do there. “We could go to Yellowstone or we could go to a place around Niagara Falls,” said Mrs. Nibler, “We’re going to vote later on in class.” During resource the whole class talked about the camping trip and that we were going to go to a campground right next to Niagara Falls. Everyone was excited except for Bobby. Nobody knew my secret about camping, and the reason I hate camping. “When I was about 7 years old I was going camping at a campground in Colorado and I went swimming in a lake right next to are campsite and a man was out there he was wearing blue and green swim trunks and he started to drown me and my mother were out eating at a diner in Denver Colorado. When we got back, the ambulance was surrounding the scene. The police were there also. The policeman came up to us and told us that a man had died and he was wearing blue and green swim trunks. “Do you two know who this man happened to be?” Asked the police officer “No,” we both replied.” Bobby remembered. The bell rang and he had to go to second period. During resource he went over to his best friend Ronny. “Hey Ronny, I don’t like to go camping,” explained Bobby. Bobby told Ronny about his terrible experience. Ronny replied in a sarcastic way “Dude that is so scary I think I’m going to stay home that day or maybe even leave the country.” The end of the year was coming up and he still didn’t know what to do about the camping trip with his whole class at the end of the year. Twenty three days later the end of the school day finally came to Pulowski’s Middle School. Bobby was close to crying really hard. Ronny wasn’t being a real friend because he was telling everybody about Bobby’s camping secret and he was making fun of him. The bus was at the school and the chaperones were helping by loading the buses with the packed lunch boxes and the luggage. The bus was loaded with luggage. Finally the bus took off. They were on their way to the campground and rounding a sharp corner when everyone heard a noise. The bus driver, Sarah, yelled to everyone, "The bus is going to shut down we are out of gas, and there is no gas station around here, so we're going to have to hike there. We are pretty close, just like three miles away." "Oh no," Bobby repliped in a scared and shaky voice," we're gonna die!" "No we won't you fool," said Ronny. Everybody helped onload the bus with all of the luggage. "Ok everyone, we're going to start walking up the hill and when we get to the cite we can take naps and be sorta lazy," Mrs. Nibler.
 * By: Heidi Chellman **

**Questions for Peer Reviewers**
__//** hey heidi i luv your story its the most best story eva-♥kyli- aka your besty kyli♥ ♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥☻☺ **//__ Heidi the story is really intrusting and your Intro. is amazing nice goal i hope you achive it.~Kyrah ♥♥♥☺

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