SO-Selena+K.

Hi, my name is Selena and my favorite subject at school is science. When I come home from school I take care of my pets. I have five pets, there names are Lily, Blue Bell, Lilac, Walter, and Teddy. I take Walter and Teddy (my dogs) for walks everyday. My cats (Lily, Blue Bell, and Lilac) are persian kittens, they need to be brushed everyday. My favorite sport is soccer, my teams name is Twisters. I also have a soccer goal in my back yard and parctice everyday. I like to ice skate and swim too. My favorite video game is Rock Band for the Wii and Mario Kart. I have visited Florida, California, Texas, and more. When I get older I want to be a vet, because I love to be around animals. One weekend my family and I went to our cabin, which is close to Hayward. My little cousin Aniesa was with and we couldn’t wait to get out and explore the woods. My cabin is yellow and when you open the wooden door it squeaks. The cabin is surrounded by huge oaks and animals that live around our cabin. When we get out of the car we walk around ready to explore the sites and sounds. My little cousin Aniesa was with and we couldn’t wait to get out and explore the woods. The drive was long and boring. In our car it was crowded because of my family and all of our belongings. We brought coolers, and bags with a kit if clothes. When we finally reached our cabin me and my cousin hopped out of the car and ran on the fallen branches and twigs, to get onto the tractor. I drove the tractor and Aniesa sat in the back with the wagon. We went over rocks and sticks which snapped when the machine rode over it. My family was unpacking all of our stuff and me and Aniesa rode through the lively woods. In the woods there was green lush grass and trees, there were so beautiful! The vegetation was beautiful and there were flowers along the trail. They brightened the small trail. We saw spectacular sites like different species of birds and animals. When Aniesa and I were in the woods we were going down a steep hill and looked down towards the bottom and we saw something huge! I stopped the tractor and turned it off, I wanted to see what it was. Me and Aniesa looked and saw that there was a huge black bear sitting down eating ants from an ant hill! The bear didn’t move and we were really scared, we didn’t know if the bear was going to attack us and we figured if we ran it would chase us. I told Aniesa to keep quit and we watched the bear for a few minutes. Then suddenly the bear started to stand up, me and Aniesa thought it was going to come towards us so I jumped out of the tractor and grabbed Aniesa from the trailer and we ran! Aniesa could barley keep up and we thought the bear would chase us so we ran even faster. On the way Aniesa started to scream and yell and when we finally reached the cabin everyone came running out saying what’s wrong with you guys? Aniesa and I were out of breath, is all we said was, “bear, bear, there’s a bear in the woods!” Everyone said “where’s the tractor?” Aniesa and I looked at each other and said “it’s in the woods!” My uncle and dad headed into the woods, me and Aniesa were right behind them. There we found the tractor right where we left it, in the middle of the trail. The bear was gone! Out of site! We looked along distance away but we couldn’t find it. We walked down to where the bear had sat. All around there were huge bear tracks it was really cool to see! Now we headed back to our cabin. We were still overwhelmed that we had seen a bear and we were that close to it! My mom and aunt said “you’re lucky that the bear didn’t eat you guys.” Aniesa and I looked at each other and thought about it and we were shocked to think if that would have happened. After that it was dark. My family and I sat around the camp fire toasting marshmallows. It was blazing orange and reds and it crackled into the night. I was wondering if the bear was still around. I asked if the bear lived around our cabin and my family said it was probably passing through. After the campfire we went inside and went to bed. We couldn’t wait till tomorrow when we would get to go fishing and raspberry picking. In the morning we were still looking for the bear. We picked berries and had buckets full to the top. They were extremely messy but we had a great time picking them. Now after eating many berries we went to my other uncles cabin. His cabin is on a lake. When we were there we went fishing we caught perch, bass, croppies, ect. Fishing was really fun! After fishing we went back to my cabin and had another camp fire. Since we had so many berries we made pies on the fire and roasted marshmallows. It was really dark and there was a whole bunch of bright, twinkling, shiny, stars in the sky. We went out to the meadow and looked at the stars for along time then it started to get chilly so we went inside and watched movies. We had woken up because of the pounding of rain slamming against the roof. Now we couldn’t go outside. It was really boring inside. Aniesa and I just waited until the sun shined through the windows so we could go outside. Finally the sun showed through the curtains! Me and Aniesa ran outside and we each grabbed a bucket so we could collect worms for fishing. After a little bit, we had our pales to the full to the top. Collecting worms was really fun and then we went fishing with what we had collected. We fished for ever trying to get rid of the worms. Finally it was getting dark and we still had a full pale left and we dumped them out for the birds. In the morning we woke up to the chirping of birds and the beautiful songs that they sing. We grabbed our binoculars and looked at each unique bird! Now it is Sunday and it is time to go home. We packed all of our things and loaded it all up in the car then we locked up the cabin and drove home. The ride was really long and boring just like always. We all had a great time at the cabin! When we finally reached Eau Claire we had to drop my cousins off and we told them that they could just call us any time and we could go to the cabin. I could not wait till next time!
 * The Cabin**
 * By: Selena Kent**

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