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My name is Megan Anderson, I like to play soccer and hockey, yes i play hockey and read, my favorite: food is strawberrys, sport is hockey, hobbyis rock collecting, tv show is M.A.S.H., video game is mario cart double dash

Mom’s Birthday Present and the Pumpkin Pie Incident by megan anderson
This is the story about our dog, Blaze and the Pumpkin Pie Incident on my Mom’s birthday. The night before my mom’s birthday, my family –Jill my mom, Eric my dad, and Darren my brother, and me Megan, had made two pans of delicious, melodious, thick crust less pumpkin pie, the pan sizes were: 9”*13” and a 9” diameter*1 1/4” deep. We ate all of the pumpkin pie from the 9*1 1/4 pan. “Dad,” I said, “Remember to put the pie in the fridge tonight” He answered, irritated, “Yes, Megan” The next morning when I got up, I was the only one up, in the house, so I laid down and watched some TV... after about a hour, I was not paying attention to the time, my dad woke-up “Finally” I said “somebody is up. Did you remember to put the pie in the fridge last night, Dad?” “Yes”, he said very irritated, “I did”, he said walking into the kitchen knowing very well he left it on the stove. “Dad?” “What Megan?” “Could we eat some of the pie before Mom and Darren get up?”

to be continued...

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