VV+Brianne

**Introduction:**
Hello my name's Brianne and I'm big into technology. Most enjoyed food is spagetti and I love music. I also enjoy writing. An example of my wriring is at The Chef's Lounge. media type="custom" key="3649539"

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Why is it so Hard? Some people don’t care about our habitat. All the garbage getting left behind on the forest floor. Our rare and unique plants and flowers are getting ripped away from their roots. The way our habitat is being cleared away to make new buildings for homes and business. By the way, my name is Chippi the Chipmunk.

One day a long time ago in the middle of a scorching summer day near Vernon. A boat repair shop owner was walking through the daffodil filled forest with a client. The man’s name was Mike Dante. He had removed three forests just for business. I had overheard him whisper that he had blue prints to destroy the forest. Then he started to speak louder like he was proud. He claimed to have the largest and best construction Organization on his side.

The news had me shocked! I scampered back to my tree were my family lived. My family laughed as hard as they could. As I moped around the forest I heard a deafening noise like a lion’s roar. Soon enough I saw the bob cats and large machines.

It felt like an earthquake was shaking our forest. All of a sudden a woman named Lisa Sadell leaped in front of the giant thing. My family and other animals of the forest watched in horror as the vehicle’s engines roared. We hid in the nearby cave until dawn. We crawled to where we watched before but nothing was demolished. Lisa slowly sneaked over and picked me up. She whispered “You’re lucky. If I hadn’t come your forest would have been wiped away like a speck of dust.” I nudged as if I were to say thank you.

So I find myself asking, why is it so hard to live trying to run way from troubles? I ask myself this question every day. If you were in this situation, what would you do?

**Questions for Peer Reviewers**
(Think in terms of questions you would like to ask the author.)

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)? The story did a good job of getting a point across. The story had some good detail but could have been longer. 2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed? There is good suspense and conflict but it was unrealistic that the lady came out of nowhere to stop the construction. 3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions? Chipmunks can't talk bu to make your story work that had to happen so thats ok. You can get the personalities of the characters pretty easily. 4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?