SO-Ryu+V.

**Paste your story here:**
** Midnight Moon ** “It told me to sleep so it could suck my blood until a boy not so old or young who saved my life those ten years ago. Now I’m in my teen years just a sixteen year old girl oh I forgot to tell you that this school is privet one that only two groups go in the day class and night class. The night class only comes out at night to study that’s when all heck go’s loose many girls are fighting to get to the night class because their so cool and nice did I mention //hot// that’s because there all vampires in disguise so humans wouldn’t know there identity. Oh yeah my name is Yuki Cross I was adopted the day I came here by the head master of this school the boy who saved me is Jin Yaza and this is my partner Zero Yoshida a boy who’s parents died by a pure vampire”. Whoa ow that hurt” “Yuki can I help you” “Sure thanks for the help Jin” “Looks like you needed it these girls are pretty hard to get rid of huh well thanks for the help Yuki” “And I think you better leave Jin or somebody is going to get hurt” “Ok I’ll go see you later Yuki” jab jab jab “ow why did you do that you know were on a job here” “Yeah so” “Hey it’s not my problem that you like him.” “I like him because he’s sweet unlike you selfish monkey anyway it’s time for class dummy” “Yuki just because your on the discipline committee you can’t skip school” “sorry Mr.Yakata it won’t happen again hey yumi.” “Hey you know that if you keep being late you’ll get bad grades” “Yumi is my best and closest friend beside Zero and my foster father plus Jin too” “Yuki can you hear me hello well she’s in her zone again” “dad! I’m home were are you //no note or letter and no smell of food and there’s glass every were on the floor what happened?//” “I wonder if they did it no it can’t be as my father said it’s a burden we all have to carry. “ “You their stop by the order of the committee” “ huh? What do you want” “I should be asking you that “ “we were going to take some pictures of the night class” “this kind of thing is prohibited to school law so go now” “I can’t I’m hurt” who’s there” whoa watch it Yuki that Konia staff is deadly" "Kyo? To be continued...
 * By. Ryu Vang **

**Questions for Peer Reviewers**
(Think in terms of questions you would like to ask the author.)

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?