SG_Paulo+A.

**__Introduce yourself__ **
====Hi, my name is Paulo I am 13 years old... I study in the Saint Geroges school, I have one brother named gabriel...I like to eat, sleep...and make some sports...but most sleep,I like to play some videogames with friends and listen music my favorite videogame is==== dOfUs Or Counter - Strike o_O


 * THE BURNED VILLAGE....

One day a boy named Marco decided to accompany a friend to his house, returning to his home he got lost in a dense fog and he got in a strange place. Everything was dark and desolate, it seemed that the village was abandoned.

After Marco met a man who was distracted looking at the ground, Marco said to him "You know what had happened to the people here?" and the man said "Strange things happened here. One day something happen and all the village burnt out because of a strange power coming from a strange man in this village. This man was different from all the others, he had strange powers. He said that he wanted revenge"

Marco asked the man why he was there and the man said that he was just going there to remember her mother's death, then a horrible thing like a monster that had no shape appeared and Marco ran away and said to the man to come with him and Marco went away but he got lost in a big park, it was like a labyrinth, hours later he got out the labyrinth, Marco took a tube he found and hit the monster in the head.

Marco met the man again and took him to a safe place. Marco didn't know what to do to kill the monster so he tried to hit the monster in the head with the tube. Marco run to the monster, Marco jumped and hit the monster in the head, and the monster scratched Marco's chest. The monster fell on the ground because the monster tripped over and Marco hit the monster again. The monster looked like if he was dead and the man approached and helped the Marco, then the fog dissapeared and Marco never accompany his friend again and he learned never to go to places that you don't know.

END

Paulo Alarco

**__Questions for Peer Reviewers__ **
(Think in terms of questions you would like to ask the author.) 1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?