BradleyW

hi im bradley but I like brad more my faveret football team is bulldogs. I live in tabor vic. I have1 cat named tiger. I love food. pizza is the best. I like to run. hi brad my name is Ben. My real name is Benjamin but all my friends call me Ben. i also like to run. I have one dog named Will. do you live in the big city part of Victoria or do you live in the outback part? My favorite football team (if you mean American football) is the Browns. My favorite soccer team is Sparta Praha It is a Czech team. I am partnered up with you. I also love pizza. I live in Barcelona Spain. I used to live in the USA. i was born in Boardman Ohio. after 7 years i moved to twinsberg Ohio. that is close to Cleveland Ohio.

Back when I was lost in a forest with no one or any thing all I had was a box of matchers and a pencil sharpener no food or drinks. But one morning I got the sharpener and a sick about a meter long and I sharpened one end of it and made a spire out of it and killed food as I needed it so I would survive an till someone Found me. To me it was a Holliday peace and quiet no one there to annoy me it was heaven But I missed my family and friends I was sad and lonely. I then herd a car it was dark so instantly I looked forb head lights I got my hops up for nathing

**Story and Content **
**BFIS Ben Starting - March 29 (2009):** 1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)? There is no plot  2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed? there are no characters and there is no problem

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions? the character is almost nonexistent there is no details about the character and no dialogue

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story? i can sort of imagen it but there is not enough details to see the picture clearly

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?

the story in general needs improvement the story is not finished and check your spelling and grammar.