Bobby+J

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 * Hi, my name is Bobby Johnson **
 * Grade: 8th**
 * Best Holiday: Christmas **
 * Birth Month: January **
 * Career Goals: Make Money **
 * Favorite Band(s): S.O.A.D **
 * Favorite Food: Pizza **
 * Favorite Munchies: ???? **
 * Favorite soft drink: Sprite **
 * Favorite Subject: Social Studies **
 * Pet Peeve: ???? **
 * Pets: Ferrets **

Ben Buja met up with Sal on 43rd street. A car pulled up and the window rolled down. It was Tom! Tom had a bunch of children in the back of his car along with his wife. Tom got out of the car and Ben started beating him up and Sal took his money. Tom's wife screamed and ran away leaving the children and the car. Ben took the wheel and Sal took care of the children. The sound of sirens screeched through the air. The chase was on!

The cops were on the boys tail. Ben knew how to drive even though he was 14 but Sal was kind of scared. They pulled into a gas station and got out of the car. They ran into the gas station and waited. The cops went by so they thought the cost was clear, but it wasn’t. Tom was right there all scarred and beaten up.

The car ride to the police station was long. Tom was driving them there. He said that he was going to sue the boys for 1 million dollars. The boys had no where near that much money so they jumped out of the car. Tom didn’t know they jumped because he was pre-occupied with what he was doing. The boys got up and ran away into the desert.

The two boys never found their way out of the desert. As for Tom, he is still driving the open roads.

The end.

Questions for Peer Reviewers

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)? It was different then other stories and people don't usually write about this. You should make the story longer. 2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed? There is some suspense but not really any because it doesn't tell what happened to the rest of the people and stuff. There isn't a climax because the problem isn't that big.

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions? I think the people are life like. In this story the characters aren't enjoyable because everyone begin cased. There was no dialogue and no disscussion between the characters.

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story? <span style="color: rgb(255, 0, 255);">From the people in the story you can feel the anger. More description about the characters.

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author? <span style="color: rgb(255, 0, 255);">You could add more details and the conflict could be longer. You could tell more about the other characters.

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author? The plot could be improved

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?Type in the content of your new page here.