Matt+B

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 * Hi, my name is Matt Bisesto **
 * Grade: 8**
 * Best Holiday: Christmas **
 * Birth Month: October **
 * Career Goals: GO to college **
 * Favorite Band(s): Maroon 5 **
 * Favorite Food: Pizza **
 * Favorite Munchies: Popcorn **
 * Favorite soft drink: Root Beer **
 * Favorite Subject: Math **
 * Pet Peeve: Using knuckles to play drums **
 * Pets: none **

One day after school Bill, Alex, and Louis went over Alex’s house to play X-Box. They were going to play Resident Evil 5. Alex was going to go online and play with Bjorn. Bill was going to the bathroom waiting for his turn. Louis was in Alex’s kitchen and eating the granola bars. When Alex was done playing Bjorn they went outside and rode their bikes around the neighborhood. When they went around the circle they saw a mysterious white van. They went back to Alex’s they got some equipment to go and spy on the people. At 10:00 they saw that someone was going to the window of Alex’s neighbors house. The people broke into the house and stole some food, money, and jewels. Louis was really upset because they stole the food. The next day in school they told everybody about the robbery last night, but nobody believed them.

After school they went back to Alex’s house and tried to get the crime on video. They waited until 10:00 to see them again, but they didn’t find them. Maybe that they were at another house, so they went around the neighborhood to see if the white van was there. They didn’t see anything so they went back to Alex’s house to play Madden 09. Later that night, when they were sleeping, another robbery occurred next to Alex’s house. There was a loud noise that woke up Louis. Louis heard it again. He went outside to see what was happening. He saw the white van. He went upstairs to wake up Bill and Alex, but they were sound asleep. It was too late. The van had disappeared from the house.

The next day we went to the store to buy weapons and traps. We bought a RPG, shotgun, and an UZI. We also bought traps like trip wires, giant net, walkie-talkies, time bombs, and smoke grenades.

That evening we heard the door open and foot steps. They opened the door quietly and walked in. They set off one of the trip wires and the smoke grenades set off. The smoke blinded them. Then the net captured only two of them. There were only three left. They were being more careful for every step they took. We shot out a warning shot. But they were prepared with weapons also. We set off the bomb so they would fall down to the next floor and we could take them out. We went down and we were ready to take action. We shot one person in the leg and the arm so they wouldn’t be able to shoot at us. Alex took the RPG and shot down the ceiling on the two guys to trap them under the concrete. They Louis went upstairs to call 911 and to get another Granola bar. We told the police what had happened and they identified who they were. They were recent convicts in jail that had broken out a couple of days earlier. They were experts on how to break into a house.

The next day everybody wanted to hang around us because we had caught convicts that the police were trying to catch. We were treated like heroes’. We were invited to a party that the president had planned. They were going to give us the Medal of Honor for what we have done. It was the best day of our lives.

Questions for Peer Reviewers 1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)? I think that the plot to this story was very interesting and yes, I thought it was creative. I think that the only suggestion I have for you is to keep writing stories. 2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed? The fact that Louis heard noises one night when no one else did I think added interest, I think it also made Louis feel alone because nobody was up to hear the noises too. There is a climax that satisfies me, the part where they capture the convicts. The resolution was satisfying too, getting to go to a party that the president planned, that is awesome. I think that how the kids at school were nice to them could have been added, did they give them things, did they get them out of trouble, stuff like that, but I like the story. 3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions ? I can honestly say that I like the characters, they seem to be the funny type. I do feel like they can be life-like. I think that you can explain a little more about Bjorn. I really don’t know who he is, I just know that he is in the story. 4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see // and //hear // and //experience // the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story? I think that I would like to see a little more description of what the characters look like. 5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author? Like I said before, the story could use a little more say of how the students treat them like heroes. I think that is the [place that needs more improvement.
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1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?