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Story
The Lonely Soldier Boy There once was a normal family consisting of one boy named Tom, his father and his mother living happily together. But when a war started in their country, the father was forced to go to fight in the army. The son was left alone with his mother. One day, the family received a letter that the boy's father was shot dead. The son was very sad at the loss of his father. When the son headed over to city graveyard he visited his dad's grave. Once he found it he placed his dad's gun and flowers on it. He took out a pocket Bible and placed it on top of the stone and started to cry. He started to walk slowly thinking about the life ahead of him. Alone. Sad. He couldn't stand it. But then he got an idea. He would join the army and take his father's place! He ran home to tell his mother what he would do. His mother didn't really want him to be that kind of person. When the son asked his mother whether he could join the army or not she said that she think about it. When Tom came home from school he realized it was his birthday! He ran to his mother and asked her if he could join the army when he was old enough. She said thought for a moment and then said that it was a good idea for him to take part in it as long as he was fighting for his country. Every year he would get a piece of the army uniform. For his 13th birthday he got a pair of army pants. For his 14th birthday he got an army shirt. For his 15th birthday he got an army helmet. For his 16th birthday he got army protective gear. For his 17th birthday he got army gloves. For his 18th birthday he got a real army musket. He was so surprised and glad that he could take part in the war. An army official appeared at the door of Tom's house to take him to the campground. He said goodbye to his family and got in the car and left. On his way he thought about what it would be ,joining the army. A few hours passed and they arrived at the camp. When he got out he was greeted by his fellow roommates. When he walked into his tent he was surprised at the mess in it. He left the tent to go to his first training session. It was more intense then he imagined. They made him run across fields and carry equipment. He wasn't used to this kind of exercise and was hard for him to keep up. A few weeks passed and he was finally able to join the actual army team. The officials sent him to the war grounds. Tom lasted for a about a year or two until one day he didn't come back. His unit didn't see what had happened to him. People started think that he was captured by the enemy. Tom might not have fought for the longest time, but he fought for his country and for his freedom.

PEER REVIEW

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)? It is good! It needs to be more detailed! 2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed? It was a little sad, but it does need more suspense. Make them 3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions? I think that the mom should love the son more and I also think that they are too unemotional! Other then that they are great! 4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story? I think it needs a little more detail! I was a little lost throughout the story! I figured it out but it took a while! 5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author? I think the most area of the most improvement would need to be the parts where the people died! It was good! PEER REVIEW (group 2)

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?

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