SO-Shane+M.

**Introduction:**
Hi, my name is Shane McNulty, I like to play football and basketball and baseball for my free time. My favorite subject in school is probably like gym or something. I hate most subjects because they are just so so boring and ya. I like BBQ boneless chicken wings and Dr. Pepper for a drink. Two years ago I went to somewhere in Mexico for spring break. It was so fun!! This year I went to Punta Cana, Dominican Republic for a vacation, it was sweet. I have a PS3 and play Call of Duty 4 on the weekends. I like the show The Office, down below is Dwight K. Schrute.

**Paste your story here:**
The Crazy Panda By: Shane McNulty One late afternoon there was a panda in the middle of a jungle in China, his name was Alfredo, he was just eating bamboo and lazily sitting there, nothing else to do. His mother and father abandoned him because he was so lazy. He sits there by a tree, sad and wanting a family one day. He also has a crazy temper sometimes, especially when people or other animals pick on him. He would turn all red in the face and start growling and act all crazy and really he wouldn’t hurt anything. So all of a sudden he gets up and wonders the jungle looking for another panda in sight, there wasn’t anyone that he could see, he said, “maybe tomorrow.” So tomorrow comes and again there is no one in sight. “It’s not normal that there is no other panda in the whole jungle,” said Alfredo. Alfredo sets out on a journey to find some parents; there is food and water all around him so he doesn’t have to worry much. He walks for days trying to see a living soul in sight but no, there is none, not even any birds flying and chirping in the trees and in the air. He is getting madder and madder, he thinks this is a joke and everyone just left him for fun, but he doesn’t like it, he wants to know what is going on, NOW!!! He finally meets someone in the jungle, he is now happy!!! So he goes up to the panda and says if he knows any adult pandas. He says, “nope, sorry dude.” Alfredo says back to him, “ugh, I need to find parents, NOW!!!” The panda left to go eat bamboo. Alfredo wanted to give up, he thought he was hopeless and could never ever find any parents that care for him. All of a sudden two panda parents come into sight. He is happy for once in his life. Now my life isn’t ruined forever. So the pandas come and run into Alfredo, Alfredo introduces himself and stuff. The other pandas paid no attention to Alfredo, the parent pandas said, “Hey watch it! Get out of our way, now!” Alfredo stopped talking up a storm and said, “What do you mean, I was just trying to be nice.” They left before he could say that. He started crying and for sure is life has now ended.

To Be Continued…

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2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

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