VV+Daniel+C

**Introduction:**
Hey! My name is Daniel. I know my story is a little long but it's good! I love outdoors, especially hunting. My favorite food is tacos and Mexican, My favorite sports are hunting, hockey, baseball and fishing, my favorite color is red, and I love Halo 1,2,3 (a videogame) and my favorite animal is anything in the dog family. Oh and if you want you could leave a comment on my blog! Bye!

The Hunted Hunter The bow string in his hand felt so good as it had been so long since his last hunt. He walked to his favorite hunting spot where he had his first buck fall to the ground many years earlier. Calvin set up his birch wood tree stand in the great Oak, patiently waiting for a deer to drink from the crystal clear pond that lay in front of him. An hour passes, and so does two doe’s, but no buck. Another half-hour goes by and his luck turns. Drinking from the pond, is the biggest buck he’s ever seen! He estimates that its rack must be 27cm by 27cm! He pulls his bow string back, with his lucky arrow notched in it. He fires! Bull’s eye! Right in the chest, but it doesn’t seem to slow it down! He jumps down to the dead grass, pursuing his buck. He shoots one more time, determined to get his lucky arrow back. It hits his left hip and the buck falls to the ground. The Buck was bigger close up. It was as big as a bear! Calvin takes his prized trophy back home to show his wife, Merissa. “Oh my!” she exclaims, while getting the tape measure. Look at it! That’s a four month breakfast, lunch, and dinner right there!” says Calvin. “I’ll have to take it to the butcher soon.” How big is its rack, Merissa?” “Its 28cm by 30cm” Merissa says with a grin. “Go get the meat, and get the horns mounted.” “I’m way ahead of you.” Calvin says, putting on his shoes.

Calvin and Merissa are very poor. Calvin hunts for food and money. They live in a small cabin 2 miles away from town. When he gets there, Paul the butcher is cutting some of the most amazing smelling meat he ever smelled. “How much for that slab of meat?” Calvin asks. “How much?” Paul chuckles. “Too much for a poor hunter. You came with your invisible catch I presume, or have you got something for me today?” Calvin drags in the buck. “No way! That is huge! Where did you find it?” “The Cray Forest. Took 2 shots too. One to the chest and one to the hips. How long will it take to get all the meat you can?” Calvin asks. “Too big for my shop. You’ll have to bring it to the city. It’s quite the drive.” Paul said “But I have no car! How am I going to get there?!” “You can take my old Chevy, and take some of this gas. That butcher doesn’t accept just any one. Tell him Paul sent you. He’ll let you in then.

“I wonder what’s going on back home, turn on the radio” she said. “Steve McMike with breaking news. A local hunter steals a red Chevy, from a butcher. Here’s Paul now. Can you tell us what happened, Paul? “Well this guy comes into my shop and drags in the biggest buck I’ve ever seen! He tells me to cut the meat, and I tell him to go to the city. Then he yells, “I’m poor! Give me your truck!” and he holds an arrow to my heart! He takes the keys and runs off with his wife.” Paul says. “What were their names?” Steve asks. “Calvin and Merissa” Paul says in a low voice.

“I knew he was a traitor! That little—” “Merissa!” Calvin interrupts. “We have to get to the city before we get caught!”

The next day was nerve racking. They were scared that the cops would find them. They were forced to sleep in the truck, with no pillow, blankets, or food. “Well how are we going to get to the butcher’s shop now? There are posters of us everywhere! Is that deer worth it?” Merissa asks. “ I think we should throw… wait, what am I thinking! You know what I’ll skin it myself.” Calvin says. The sound of sirens almost scared him to death.

“Oh no it’s the police!” shouted Calvin. “We have to tell them the truth!” says Merissa. “It’s worth a shot.” Says Calvin. They get out of the truck and walk toward the cop car. “It’s a lie! We didn’t steal the truck!” Shouts Calvin. “Do you have any proof?” says a tall cop. “Paul, may I see the security tape, please?” says one short cop. “Yes, of course.” He hands him the security tape. They watch it. Just as they suspected! It showed Paul giving them the keys to the truck! The cops also did a search of the shop and found carcasses of illegally hunted animals. Finally their long search was over. They caught the poacher they had been looking for. Calvin and Merissa received a $50 000 reward. “Paul, you’re under arrest!” As they pull him into the car. Calvin and Merissa walk home, thinking of what they would use the money for.

Questions for Peer Reviewers**
(Think in terms of questions you would like to ask the author.) ISKL Daniel B 1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)? It had a really creative idea and plot. The hunt described was really well, especially when he needs to fire 2 arrows to kill the buck. Maybe you could have described the last paragraph a bit more. It was a bit unclear.  2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed? It had great practical complications but it didn't really give off enough tension and suspense because I think it went quite quickly, it zoomed past the part when they were the hunted. It had heaps of interest and the climax was really good and descriptive. Maybe you could have made the resolution more meaty, it was a bit like you had to suddenly end it. 3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions? The characters are very life like and enjoyable. You packed great description of the characters into the dialogue. Calvin was described really well by the other characters talking to him. It also gives the impression that Calvin is very honest and it confirms it at the end. 4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story? The details help a lot to describe the story and whats happening but there wasn't much detail in the action- you could have described the hunt a bit better. 5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author? I think you could slow it down a little. It zoomed through it without staying on one thing for long. This is a good thing too- you don't get board and wait for it to end- but you also get confused about whats happening so maybe you can dwell on things a little bit longer but other wise, it was really well written!