SO-Alexis+T.

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 * [[image:Madrid_and_Grandpa.jpg width="175" height="111"]] this is my horse he is my fav horse i call him buddy but his name is Madrid Introduction:[[image:cool_pic!!!!!!!.jpg width="240" height="153"]]**Hi my name is Alexis but I like to be called lexi! I love sports like football and horseback riding but I don't like to watch football. I love to show my horses Madrid and Bailey and that is my hobby. My favorite food is steak . My favorite TV show is Wizards of Waverly Place. I like to play my ps2, ds, and gameboys but my favorite game is rayman raving rabbits. I have not been to any different places other than MN where I was born and I still go there to visit family but now i live in Wisconsin. I want to go to college for a few different things but I have a lot of time to decide. My favorite animals are horses, and some sea animals. THAT'S ALL FOLKS!!!!!! Lexi roxz!!! LOL!!!!=====

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It was a gleaming sunny mourning on August 12th, 1988 in Settle, Washington to be precise. I was very exhausted. My parents were sending me to Paris, France because my mother was going to pursue her dream to become a marine biologist. While I was living with my grandmother. Which I think is very intelligent of her I am so proud to say that my mother was very bright to take care of me then pursue her dream. I am leaving at 11’o clock sharp in the automobile. I very much wish that I could be able to see my father before I have I have to say farewell and good luck! I have packed only the necessities such as dresses and petticoats and stockings. Mother insists that I take the suit case she packed for me which she will not tell me what is in the suitcase. The clock rang 10’o clock I hurried down the stairs for it was tea time. Father was not home but as I started to panic mother said he would be home in time to say farewell. I felt really joyful as I scrambled up the stairs to tell Mary my Nanny. I rushed into my room but she was not there. I scrambled to the library I found her in the Fancy books. “Oh, Mary I have just received the most joyful news!” “What is it?” “Father is coming home in time to say farewell!” “That is so wonderful! I shall see to finish the final dress I have started to make you!” Before she stepped out of the room she hesitated. Then she stepped back into the room. Mary waited and watched until every one was busy in their own worlds. She looked around as if to see if anyone was listening. “Rosie wait for 3 minutes then come to the attic I wish to show you something.” But before I could ask what she wanted to show me she walked briskly out the door and up the stairs. I could hear the faint foot steps as she walked up the winding stair case. I deiced to not wait I wanted to follow her even though I knew where she was going. I walked very slowly as I thought about what she would want to show me. I thought about all the possibilities, maybe it was a secret passage way, maybe it was a treasure of ours that she found and wanted to KEEP! If it was ours I surely could not let her keep it without mother or fathers approval. Maybe she found one of the mansions secrets. Father used to tell all of the mysteries of the mansion. My favorite was about Mr. Oriel some people said that he was a leporcon and he hid his pot of gold from the bottom of the rainbow under the floorboards in the attic. But he mysteriously disappeared... they searched and searched for him for a year but they never found him. Some say that he still lives in the mansion haunting it looking for his gold. I heard Mary talking to someone but I could not hear them just then I heard footsteps coming towards ME! I did not know whether to run or to keep walking I prayed and hoped it was Mary. Then I had a brilliant idea! I could quietly tiptoe down a few stairs and start walking up them again. Whoever was coming down the stairs was to far away to hear me so I quietly tiptoed down the stairs. When I turned around the footsteps stopped meanwhile I heard the front door open. FATHER! I was half way down the steps when I remembered I had forgotten about Mary! It was now thirty minutes past 10. Father could wait. I needed to see what Mary was talking about before I left. I scurried up the winding staircase. I had never been up on the 4th floor before there were so many rooms I did not know which one lead up to the attic. I looked in the first 10 rooms but as I got closer to the door labeled R I heard voices. I thought it was Mary’s voice I wanted to run but I could not stop staring at the door labeled R. Then I heard someone talking… to me! But I could not stop staring at that door. Then mysteriously I started walking to the next-door labeled E. Then I kept walking all the doors had letters on them first R than E-D-F-O-R-D I put them together Redford I thought but what does that mean? The doors had me in some kind of a trans. Just then Mary came up behind me I jumped. “You scared me Mary!” “Sorry Miss.” “It’s alright but what did you want to show me?” “Oh, I think you already found it Miss.” “What, what is it?” “Redford Miss.” “What?” I remembered the doors the letters spelled Redford but I did not know what it meant. “The doors Miss.” “Yes, Redford but what does it mean?” “Redford Oriel.” “The leporcon? But what is his name doing on the doors?” I looked at the letter D again it had 1 small word under it and locks on the door. I looked closely at the word it said Paris. That’s were I was going for the summer! “Mary do not all doors have locks on the inside?” “Yes, why Miss?” “Well, all the doors have locks on them but usually they are on the inside not on the outside. Unless WE ARE IN THE INSIDE! This means that there is an outside on the other side of the door!” “Good thinking Rosy!” “Thank You! Maybe he did not die maybe he lives in Paris at Redford valley!” “How do you know that miss?” “The R has Valley under it.” “I have to go it is almost 11’o clock and I have not said hello to father yet. I will see you at the end of summer. Farewell and good luck! Oh, and try to find out what is on the other side of the door.” “I shall miss you and I will try. Good luck finding Redford.” I hurried down the steps I could hear fathers low and loud voice. Today he sounded raspy perhaps he had a cold. When I came down the stairs father saw me he looked worried and walked away I still could hear his faint footsteps and his office door closing. I was shocked father knew I would want to see him if was as if he did not want to see me. I looked at mother she saw my curious but sad face. She walked away and told me I had to leave for Paris in 10 minutes. ===== ** To be Continued… ** the story kinda got messed up i am fixing it this weekend sry!! from: the writer

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