SO-Bryce+R.

**Introduction:**
Hello, my name is Bryce Rasmussen. Sports: Hockey, baseball, football, and golf for fun. Instruments: Percussion and Guitar My favorite vacation spots are Arizona, Ireland, Utah, and I've always wanted to go to Barbados.

**Paste your story here:**
The Baseball Game By Bryce Rasmussen

Have you ever got the chance to sit in the box seats at a baseball game? You may not get to see the whole field but at least you are right by all of the players. One day, my friends and I were searching on the internet for baseball game tickets. We couldn’t find any that weren’t all ready sold. Then after looking for what seemed like ages; we found four open box seat tickets. We bought them with my mom’s credit card. I was waked by my friends shaking me as if I were a maraca. I asked them how they got in the house. Charles discreetly said, “Hurry it’s about time to leave for the game!” I saw that the window was open and that answered my question. I quickly sprang out of bed, got dressed, and ran out into the car. When we sat down in our box seats, the game started with the Star Spangled Banner. The baseball stadium was filled with thousands of people. The sky was blue with a couple of wispy clouds. The grass was cut perfectly as if you took a ruler to each one and cut each one the same exact length. The first pitch came like a rocket. I heard thump and then the ump yell “strike.” The next pitch was a change up, the batter swung and crack, the ball went flying like an eagle at full speed. It went up, up, up, and it plummeted down short and was caught easily. Some people cheered for the opposing team’s catch, some people sighed. From our seats you could see the infield perfectly but the outfield was a little difficult to spot. The beginning of the game went fast. Strike after strike with a couple of pop ups and a few ground balls. The seventh inning came very fast. The score was two to zero. Charles, Adam, Will, and I wanted something exciting to happen. The first batter went down ugly, he didn’t swing once. The next batter hit a line drive to the short stop. It was too fast and the short stop dropped it. The next batter was the best hitter on the team (the D.H.). He launched the ball out of the stadium! Now it was getting exciting. The game was tied, two to two. Turns out his bat broke so he trotted over and gave it to us. It was the final inning of the game and it was still tied. The opposing team kept hitting line drives and ground balls to the outfield. They had two men on base. The next batter was strong and huge. He hit a fly ball into the outfield. The left outfielder sprinted as hard as he could, he dove, and it looked as if he caught it but no. It was just about an inch from going into the front pocket of his glove. The batter ran all the way to the third base; the other two scored. Then the pitcher struck the next two batters out. Then the huge guy on third base started to steel home when the pitcher wasn’t looking. The pitcher quickly turned around and launched it; it looked like it was smoking. It arrived at the catcher in one second. He caught it and whipped it down to tag the runner. He got him questionably but he got him. It was so loud you couldn’t even hear a jet fly by. Now we were up to bat. We got one guy on base by a walk. The game was full of intensity. The pitcher and the batter were sweating pools. The batter struck out. The pitcher was extremely nervous, he walked the next batter. They called in a new pitcher from the bull pin. This pitcher was accurate but not to fast. We got two people on base. One of our best hitters was up. The first two pitches were very fast but were balls. Then the next pitch was right in his wheelhouse. He cranked it high up, way over the fence and one of the fans caught it. It was the loudest crowd I have ever heard. The whole entire stadium was filled with excitement. My friends and I were shouting at the top of our lungs. Since we were in the box seats we were able to jump out onto the field and go congratulate the home team. Too bad it was just there first game of spring training.

**Questions for Peer Reviewers**
(Think in terms of questions you would like to ask the author.)

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author ? Bryce, I liked how you used your moms credit card to buy the Tickets!!! Great Job! ! - Jordan Great story bryce! Loved how you explained things. - Cole Hey Bryce, loved the story. - shelby