DM-Jacob+H

Grade:8** **Siblings: one sister** I like playing hockey and volleyball. I like to watch tv and my favorite show is seinfeld and two and a half men. My favorite hockey team is the New Jersey Devils. In the future i would like to become a surgeon or play in the NHL but my biggest goal is to play for team Canada. My favorite hockey player is Martin Brodeur and Zack Parise. Feel free to upload your podcast or a picture if you like.
 * Hi, my name is Jacob
 * Best Holiday: My birthday **
 * Birth Month: january **
 * Career Goals: become a surgeon **
 * Favorite Band(s): don't have one **
 * Favorite Food: salad,steak,chicken **
 * Favorite Munchies: chips **
 * Favorite soft drink: rootbeer **
 * Favorite Subject: social studies **
 * Pet Peeve: people touching my hair **
 * Pets: one dog **

I was positive I wanted to do it but now that it was the time I was having second thoughts, but I had everything ready and planned out so I knew it was time to take off on my expedition across the arctic by dogsled.

Before I knew it I was in the air and still thinking why am I doing this when a yell came from the front of the plane I quickly got up to see what was happening and to my dismay the pilot was having a heart attack. Now being a doctor I knew what to do in these situations so told the co-pilot to control the plane as I helped the pilot. I got him all fixed up and we continued on. An hour later we arrived and I unpacked and boarded my sled..... my journey was about to officially begin.

It was my first encounter with the beast I knew would make my expedition dangerous ..... the polar bears. I had done my research on them and found out their hunting patterns I knew to watch out during the day so I brought a torch to scare them off, so I blew some fire onto to the torch and waved it around, to my surprise nothing happened, so it was time for plan be throwing rocks and this time I wasn't so surprised to see them only get madder so I knew I had only two options run and take cover or shoot them with the protection rifle I had. In the end I decided to run and save my ammo which worked out fine but threw me way off course and as I sat by the fire I thought to myself this has got to be the worst thing thats going to happen to me but, little did I know the worst was yet to come.

It hit me so hard, I knew the dangers of them but wasn't expecting it to happen to me, one minute I was sitting by the fire and the next I was buried in snow and my dogs were nowhere to be seen. I have seen avalanches happen before but from afar and out of danger but now I know how all the victims I have treated really felt. The only part of my body not completly covered in snow was luckily my head but other than that everything else was useless.

Three hours passed by then three turned into four and four turned into five and I was still in the same position I had been in, just sitting there wondering if I was on track for the plane to see me or not and if my dogs were okay but more importantly if I would ever get out.

I was freezing to death and was almost certain I would die right here in this big pile of snow when all of a sudden I saw my dogs, so in my desperate attempt to stay alive I got their attention so I could grab the rope for emergencies and they came. After I had the rope clinched in my mouth I got them to pull and after about ten minutes I had an arm free, then after another ten minutes my second arm was free, and 30 minutes later I was out of the snow!

I was so happy I was freed that I didn't think of how I was going to get home. I had nothing to tell time on because I lost my watch and I didn't have my map. So once again and for the last time I sat there wondering what to do now.

EPILOGUE:

A plane saw George and landed, George boarded it and flew to the nearest hospital because after being buried in the snow for 6 hours his fingers and toes became frost bitten. After getting all fixed up he retured home to his family and told them his great survival story which was posted on the front page of every newspaper in Canada.

Questions for Peer Reviewers

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author? .