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 * Introduction:** Hi my name is Kyrah i am 11. My favorite subject Science and English. In my free time i like to go camping with my friends and family and spending time with them . My hobbys are Soccer which i played for 3 1/2 years and Basketball that i still love and played for 1 1/2 my gerzy for my team was Bright Yellow. My favorite food is Pizza.=====

 The Case Of The Stolen Groceries! By: Kyrah Hager  It was a dark night in Los Angeles. There was a paper flowing down the street when Craig went to Target to get some groceries. Craig said, "What do I need?" The store clerk in aisle 7. Said, "Can I help you?" Craig said, "NO I AM FINE." Craig thought to himself. Since he had no money and needed food, he decided to steal some groceries. He was sticking food in is clothes it include ketchup, banana, apples, soda, there was also a banana squished in his shirt it felt gushy, slimy, and just nasty. There was a tube of Pillsbury dough dropped out of Craig’s sleeve and exploded and a fat guy slipped on the dough. The fat guy got up and said “why did you do that huh punk?” The store clerk saw Craig stealing and called the police. Craig stole about $100.00 worth of groceries. The cops came the store; the clerk was asked some questions about the stolen groceries. The cops said, "What hair color does he have?" The clerk said, "Brownish Blonde." "What was he wearing?" The clerk thought a few minutes and said, "White shirt and dark jeans." The next day after the incident it was Craig’s birthday. He was turning 30. For his birthday he went out for gas and meets a girl named Carrie; she looked like she was 29 or 30 she was wearing a pink shirt with blue jeans. Craig started talking to her and they exchanged phone numbers. A few weeks went by, still Carrie never called. Craig was wondering what happened to her so he called her that night and she never answered her phone. Craig found out her address and went over there. Nobody answered Craig was frightened with the chills. What do you think happened to Carrie? A month went by, Craig finally found Carrie in a hotel it wasn’t a nice hotel it there was one bed and rotten couches it was gross. Carrie lost her job and her house so she had to get a hotel room until she found a job and gets some money. Craig and Carrie make a perfect couple because they both fell on hard times. A year went by, Craig and Carrie decided to move to Las Vegas. They both got jobs at Home Suite. One night after work Craig decided to go and gamble. This was Craig’s lucky night. He hit the jackpot of 2,000,000!! Craig was very excited to tell Carrie about the incident when he stole those groceries, and started to think about what he was going to do with the money. Then he remembered the grocery store he stole from. Carrie and Craig returned to Los Angeles, went back to the grocery store, gave them a check for $500,000 and donated $450.00 to a homeless shelter. After that whole incident they moved to Miami, Florida and started a family after nine months they had a child it was a boy named it Tom. They were hoping for a girl next time so they could see what it was like to have a boy and a girl to see if they get along. Four years later Tom is now four years old and Carrie is pregnant again with a girl Carrie and Craig were so exited to have a girl and see how those two get along together. Carrie is at Miami, Florida Hospital in room 5124. It is on the top floor she was nervous to be up there cause she is afraid of heights. 12:30 the baby is here her name is Elizabeth they were so exited that she was alive to see the world. Elizabeth was wherein a bright pink outfit it looked so cute. 10 years later Tom was 14 and Elizabeth was 10 years old; Tom had a girlfriend or someone he liked. Elizabeth liked a guy named Travis in her mind she thought he was so, so, so cute but Tom thought he was kind of weird. From the parent’s point of view they thought Elizabeth was too young to start having crushes or boyfriends. 20 years later now Tom is 34 and he has a wife and 2 children named Tomas and Alexis. Elizabeth is now 30 and she is married and they have 1 child named Maggie.



**Questions for Peer Reviewers**
kyrah i love your introducchion and i love your story even more sweets (Think in terms of questions you would like to ask the author.)

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?