VV+Mitchell

**Paste your story here:**
The Evil Cake Not long ago a kid had a birthday party a very fun birthday with games, food and pop but when the time came for the cake. The kid’s mom forgot she didn’t buy a cake so Mom went out to buy a cake at Fire Mold Cake! Mom got the first cake she saw it was called delicious and evil cake. And it only cost $666 Dollars, she didn’t care it was really overpriced she bought it anyways. When she brought it back and everyone cheered and stopped playing pin the tail on the iguana. And Mom quickly got the candles. Then she noticed the cake was gone and so was The Kid. Mom and Dad went up to the kid’s room expecting the kid to see him eating the cake. But it was the other way around. The cake had huge sharp fangs and eyes as bright as the sun, when Dad saw the cake he grabbed his shotgun and aimed for the cake but the evil cake jumped into the air somehow and ate Dad and his shotgun. So it was up to Mom, when Mom was thinking the cake jumped at Mom but she dodged the cake and ran to the kitchen and grabbed a fork and pointed it at the cake. The Evil Cake just laid there and laughed. The Mom lunged at the cake and started eating and eating. But ten years later Mom died of cakeitisoliphia some rare disease that you get when you eat too much evil cake. And now people now know never to buy overpriced cake, especially if it’s evil.

**Questions for Peer Reviewers**
(Think in terms of questions you would like to ask the author.)

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?