DM-Grant+M

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Hi my name is Grant I'm a 13 year old boy from Canada. I am very short but one of the elders in the class. I have four brothers. I also have one sister.My favorite sport is soccer. I have a dog named Abby. My favorite subject is Phy.ed My favorite food is spaghettie and my favorite drink is Pepsi,What's yours?

My Story

It was a normal school day and I was doing the usual, eating breakfast, brushing my teeth and changing into fresh clothes. I walked out into the beaming sun. I walk to school every morning because my sister takes the car and my mom takes the van. A strange man with a hunch motioned me to follow him. Well normally I don't interact with strangers but there was just something about him. I followed him into a alley (which was a bad idea on my part), and then suddenly he turned around holding a gun! I stood my heart beating like an indian drum.in defense I grabbed the first thing I saw to throw at him, which in this case was a water bottle, but when it hit him he froze up. Instantly he fell to my feet... Dead! I noticed somthing strange coming out of his sleeve, It was a tentacle! As I ran home I thought. Did I kill this man or beast, am I a murderer, could I go to jail, what would my family think, but this was only the beginning of the end of the world.

A week has passed nobody knew my true cruelty, but the news has been talking about stories close to mine.Like a octopus that was found in a mans washing machine and was dead after the rinse cycle.and a another dead one cloging a rinse pipe. I noticed a pattern: the water bottle, the rinse cycle, and a sink pipe all had to do with water. Then suddenly the T.V changed channels by it's self and there on the television was a alien with tentacles similar to the one I saw. He said he is declaring war on our planet because they need to migrate to a better planet because theres is to small. I knew that I had there weakness and lots of it on planet earth. He said that he is going to drive his entire army in a giant U.F.O.

I had an idea but it was risky he wants a human sacrifice I have to meet him at the legislature so i went with a super soaker tucked behind my back. He lead me up the spaceship to a cell but right when he was about to lock the door I sprayed him with the super soaker he fell to the ground. I waited a while until the spaceship was over the pacific and thats when I left my cell. I zigzgged my way through hallways and doors until I found the cockpit I sprayed the pilot he also fell to the ground, and took control of the controls I set a new course for the ocean and left the controls. Then something caught my eye a jet pack I put it on jumped out the door and flew to my home.

I made it there in about four hours and went inside.Nobody ever found out about my heroic actions, but nobody would believe me, but I now know what my reason in life was and I'm happy with that.

Your story is really, really good. It's interesting and keeps my attention. There were a lot of good verbs and adjectives. My one suggestion is that you work on your punctuation because there are some mistakes.