Courtney

**Favorite Actor/Actress: Kellan Lutz, Nikki Reed, and Taylor Lautner ** **Siblings: Only child **
 * Hi, my name is Courtney **
 * Grade: 7th grade **
 * Best Holiday: My Birthday **
 * Birth Month: August **
 * Career Goals: To become a Writer or Teacher **
 * Favorite Band(s): Paramore, Fall Out Boys, Danity Kane **
 * <span style="color: rgb(181,33,142);">Favorite Subject: English ** <span style="color: rgb(181,33,142);">
 * <span style="color: rgb(181,33,142);">Favorite Food:Pasta **<span style="color: rgb(181,33,142);">
 * <span style="color: rgb(181,33,142);">Favorite Snack: Doritos **<span style="color: rgb(181,33,142);">
 * <span style="color: rgb(181,33,142);">Pet Peeve: Annoying people **<span style="color: rgb(181,33,142);">
 * <span style="color: rgb(181,33,142);">Pets: 1 dog 4 Fish **<span style="color: rgb(181,33,142);">


 * <span style="color: rgb(13,156,242);">The Spirit Of Death **

The Olympia indians were traveling to their Spring time hunting grounds. They had returned to these holy grounds for numerous years. There was never a competition in this area, they were left to them selves. But when the Olympians did find a threat they were well prepared. Their chief, Sanwaga had lead them to defeat the Tucheshe, Bannate’s, and the Panateko’s, three of the four enemy tribes of the tribe. The only other tribe was only known as a legend to the group, they were not shore the Impalonos did exist. Legend told of Pale fasted carnivorous who spoke a native tongue were said to come and diminish the powerful tribe. But none of the Olympians truly believed the folklore and thought that if it these stories were true their warrior chief would would protect them. Sanwaga held brutal training sessions and fierce competitions to insure his warriors skills. He called these contests olympicas after his tribe. A group of water collectors of the tribe one day spotted British general Alex and his expedition. Seeing their pale faces and weapon-trey the group thought that these were the men of the Impalono legends. The Group quickly fled to the hunting grounds without being seen by the explorers. The tribe was frantic, women crying, and children shouting as their faith full leader lead their troops to their finale battle. The warriors raised their spears and bow n’ arrows to the pale faced beings. Sanwaga ordered fire as the arrows shoot arrows killing off few pale faced and was followed by another. The Olympians started out winning ,the explorers were unprepared for the attack and were scrambling to load their rifles. But General Alex was ready h spotted Sanwaga and fired, leaving the warriors hope less for defeat. Two of the 50 odd warriors escaped running to the village fast but some of the explorers had followed, killing of majority of the tribe and taking the rest as slaves. The Olympian hunting ground was left unharmed for many years with Sanwaga’s spirit haunting the area looking for revenge on to the Pale faces. In 1805 a group American settlers came to the land ,blood still stand the trees and weapons lied about but the settlers thought the land would be perfect for farms. But they were beyond wrong.

It had been a cold winter and the settlers were losing all faith in finding fertile lands. They had been searching this northern land months but everything was a swampy marsh. “ Just up ahead I think it will be perfect” Jonathan Thomas, the leader of the party, said. “ You have said that every hundred miles!” said Peter Williamson “Well this time I know it will be true.” said Jonathan as Peter muttered something under His breath. “ We shouldn’t be here any way!!” Shouted Mary Jones. “This is Native Territory, why do none of you realize that we could be attacked any minute.” “ Would some one shout the crazy up!” said some men. “ No. She is right.” Jonathan said loudly. “ Men You see an indian you shoot!!” And he laughed so loud you could pick him out from all the others. Mary began to say something but the men silenced her and continued to laugh. “ Look! It’s perfect. I say we settle here.” Said Peter interrupting the laughter. In front of them was a large land area with beautiful plants and lush grasses. “ Huh, seems all right ! What’s that over their?” Jonathan said. The settlers clustered around what looked like a wooden spear. “ I told you.” Mary said. “ Any minute the Natives will come out and kill us all.” “ No. This spear is more than 20 years old they are probably long gone by now. We stay here!” Jonathan said. The men cheered and began to look around finding more spears and other weapons. “ They were fighting us,” said Williamson. “there British rifles.” “Toughs could be American rifles, they are not ours.” said Jonathan. “ American rifles with the British flag!!” shouted Mary. “ Hush up crazy!” said Jonathan with a bright laugh and he began to put a search party together to look for food. A fierce wind began to blow and some men thought they heard someone chanting but the man said it was lack of food. But they continued to hear the chanting and it began to sound nearer and nearer. Jonathan party got back and was missing four members who he said were out looking for fish. the next day another search group went out to look for the missing men they had not come back. A small group had left to sell crops that had been grown to villages. Currently they had sent back 200 pounds. “ Did you hear that?” Mary asked “No there was nothing to hear!” said Jonathan “ Well I heard something to. I think we should leave the men have not come back yet something must have gone a miss.” said Peter “ NO way! Do you see the cash were making off of this land settlements are paying big for the crops we sent with the last of the groups. We could make money off of this land and start up a trade with Britain.” Jonathan barked. A that moment the wind howled and sounded more like chanting again. Mary went off to worry in the cottage that had been built and Jonathan went to plan ways of making more money. Peter began a search for food alone. “ Huh. Berries this close to camp how did the men not find these and come back.” Their at the foot of the bush was the trade baskets given to the men to collect food there was blood on it. “ Someone must be hurt .” There was a trail of blood that lead to a dead end in the middle of a meadow. Then the wind began to make a chanting sound like they heard so many times. THen off in a tree carved in the bossel wood was the name Olympian tribal grounds. Peter lightly touched the wood and then heard a loud snapping sound like someone breaking a leg. Then in one short moment Peter put the story together all in his head. The British guns, the blood, and the chanting sounds. Quickly Peter rushed back to the village he quickly went to Mary and told her what he though had occurred. Mary realized that this must be true and began to look at her books to see what might help them survive. Jonathan walked to go talk to Peter. “ I’m going to go out hunting you and the crazy stay here will ya.” Jonathan said. “ What you can’t leave here you’ll die!” “ You and the crazy have been spending to much time together. I am taking the rest of the men with me.” And with that he left. Days passed and Jonathan did not return. Peter knew he was dead with the rest of the men. Mary Jane came rushing out of the house. “I know what we need to do!” she said. “What?” “ We must send the spirit back to its grave so it can live once more.” “Spirit? What? I thought we were dealing with a tribe looking for revenge.” “ No were dealing with the worlds once most powerful cheif of the Olympian tribe!” “ Impossible” At that moment the wind blew and seemed to say something but neither one could under stand it. Then a tree split and followed by another. “QUICKLY” Mary said grabbing a large jar full half way with candle wax.” Chant this she said as the wind blew hard on their face and she tossed him a book. “ Marcanto, Olyimpia, Sayconto, Ohoh,chale uh no,” Peter began to chant. Mary light the jar and threw it into the canter of the falling trees. Each tree began to light on fire and the center was a huge blaze. It looked like a large flower and then a wave of purple soared above the flames. It had a face that was covered in blood and it began to spin and roll as it was sucked into the flamed jar. The spirit screamed something and the jar shut it self with Sanwaga trapped inside.

The story has been passed from generations and has stayed with the American town till now as I shared it with you. The jar of Sanwaga's angered spirit was thrown into the ocean and continues to float around the globe haunting the towns it goes to until someone brave as Mary comes again. And what happened to Mary you might be wondering well, she married Peter. The two had four children to whom they shared this story. The story ended here passed from each generation ending with myself. But I 'll continue the tradition and keep this story with me until the day I pass. So live to tell and tell to live.

Questions for Peer Reviewers

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)? <span style="color: rgb(25,0,255);">i think that the plot is original and also creative, i liked the names also it was interesting when Sanwaga went into the jar.

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?<span style="color: rgb(0,0,255);">yes there are when Jonathan went to get food and he never came back and there is a good climax where the spirit was attacking. I think that the resolution is good when Sanwaga was trapped in the jar. <span style="color: rgb(58,0,255);">how the story was passed on through the generations.

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions? <span style="color: rgb(23,0,255);">i can get alot from the characters by thier action and what they say and i can tell that the author likes adventure and mystery stories <span style="color: rgb(57,58,249);">and some of the dialog was complicating.

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story? <span style="color: rgb(0,0,255);">there was alot of description in the story and i felt like i was part of the story but when there was all the dialog i got a little confused with what was happening. <span style="color: rgb(0,0,255);">in the next version of the story i hope to see the part with the dialog not so complicating and also a little more detail like write as if your in the story.

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author? <span style="color: rgb(29,10,230);">again, i think the part where all the dialog needs some improvement, the story is great but you could make it a little less complicatin <span style="color: rgb(0,0,0);"><span style="color: rgb(0,0,0);">__<span style="color: rgb(29,10,230);">g. __

HI I was hoping you could tell me what exactly made the dialog confusing? Thank you for your advise! - Court. A.

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?