CI-Kirklan



1001 Flat Tales Project

My Name: Kirklan Wilson My Age:13 My Hometown: Pueblo, Colorado My Hobbies: Playing on my laptop, reading My Favorites: Food- pasta, sport- baseball, T.V show- deadliest catch Other things you should know about me: I have two dogs, one little brother, I am in 7th grade, I am the oldest child in my family, I love the southern California beach, I live in Pueblo Colorado

Kirklan Wilson In the city of San Diego California, there lived a boy named Bailey. Bailey was very intelligent. Bailey had brown hair with blonde highlights. Bailey also has a nice tan. He had a friend named Zach. Zach wasn’t very intelligent but he liked to surf. Zach had blonde hair with bright blonde highlights. Zach also had a nice tan.Bailey also surfed. Every day they would go surfing. The waves were great and the two were having a wonderful time. One day when the two went surfing, they heard a ships horn. After they heard the horn, they got a text from their ships captain saying that they need to report to the ship as soon as possible.Bailey and Zach were radio men and fighter pilots on an aircraft carrier called the U.S.S. Midway. They were called out to find some missing ships. The entire crew of the Midway boards and the ship leaves. The radiomen have the names of the missing ships and the radio frequency that the missing ships use. The missing ships were held hostage by pirates. After five days of sailing, the Midway arrives at the scene of the missing ships capture. The Midway called the Kittyhawk, which is the ship that is on the mission with them. The two ships are within 10 meters of each other. Some of the fighter and a special radar plane pilots are told to go take to the skies and look to see if they find anything that looks like a missing ship. The special radar planes send a radar signal to the ship that way the ships can tell their planes were to go to find those unidentified floating objects. The two ships send a team of airplanes. One team from the Kittyhawk, and one team from the Midway. The team that had Bailey and Zach went the same direction. the direction that they were flying was straight toward the location of the ships that were missing. Once the two teams arrive to the hostage ship location, they radio in the location. The teams land and use their radios to say that the fee has been paid and that the people are to stay on the ships. They also said that two ships are going to come and pick up the ships that have been taken hostage. Once the ships have been notified to come pick up the other ships, the pilots use their mad brains to win in a trivia of the history of the united states. The hostage holders are so confused they have a headache. The headache is so bad, the hostage holders go and take a long, long nap. When they wake up, they are in a brig on a ship. The hostage ships are free and will never be held hostage again. When the two ships return to San Diego, the villains are given a personal escort by the navy and army to Washington D.C. where the villains will be held at the supreme court to a fair trial. After the trial, they went to see president Obama and his new friend. After they chatted mister president and played with his new dog, they flew back to San Diego and went to this place called In’ n’ out burger to get a wonderful burger and fries.
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1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) YES What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?
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2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? YES Is there a climax that satisfies you? SURE Is the resolution satisfying? YEAS What could be added or changed? NOTHINqq

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? KIND OF. Are characters likable and enjoyable? YES. Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions? SORT OF

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? YES What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story? I dnt Know

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? THE LENGTH i quess What suggestions do you have for the author? NOTHING

Technical Details
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The Alien King's Decision
1. On the level of story-telling: if you were the King (or the aliens), would you allow this story-teller to live another day? If no,why not?
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2. Be specific, try not to merely write, " this was good", instead explain what was good about it and why.

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