HA-Georgia

I am in Year 7 at Hawkesdale P12 College. **
 * Hi my name is Georgia.

**Fav Colour: Green** Fav AFL team: Essendon ** **Fav hobbies: Netball** **I have an older brother and sister.** **Pets: 2 birds** **and a goat named Walter**
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 * Fav Holiday: Echuca

**The phone call arrived just as Jasmine was slipping on her favorite jacket. It was the news she didn’t want to hear. Without a second thought she headed straight for the airport.** **As Jasmine settled down for the long journey ahead she thought of the phone call she received before.**
 * “Get over here immediately. I need your help” Jasmine wasn’t sure what was waiting for her at the island but the next few hours would soon tell.**
 * When Jasmine arrived at Royale Island she headed straight to the hotel where her Mum was staying. On the phone Jasmine knew something was wrong, she could hear it in her voice.**
 * Opening the door to Mum’s room in the hotel Jasmine had no idea what to expect or what she was going to see. She slowly turned the door knob and took a step forward. In front of her eyes was her Mum unconscientious on the floor. It felt like her body had shut down. Jasmine couldn’t move at all. After some time to get over the shock of finding her Mum she pulled out her phone and called, worried about Mum 000.**
 * After the Ambulance drove away Jasmine rushed to my car and headed towards the hospital. The scary thing is that Mum never gets sick. It must have been the reason why she wanted me up here.**
 * Arriving at the hospital Jasmine went straight to the desk to find out which room Mum was in. It was obvious that her Mum wasn’t telling me everything but she wanted to find out.**
 * Walking in the hospital and seeing Mum hooked up to all the machines made me think, Mum and me haven’t exactly hung out together for a while.**
 * “Darling, I’ve got some news you need to hear. I’ve got.... Well I’m sick. I’ve known for a while.” Mum said, looking like she had just woken from the dead. Even though Jasmine suspected she was sick to hear those words come out of Mum’s mouth frightened her.**
 * After Jasmine’s Mum got discharged they went back to the hotel.**
 * “Sit down. We need to talk.” said her Mum. Jasmine wanted to avoid this little chat. Since her Mum kept her sickness from her Jasmine doesn’t trust her and doesn’t know what to believe anymore!**
 * Jasmine was completely ignoring her Mum. Jasmine kept thinking that maybe since her Mum was sick that she should spend some more time with her while she can. Jasmine hasn’t exactly been here for her Mum.**
 * After a long chat, Jasmine and her Mum decided that Jasmine would move to Royale Island and live with her Mum. They decided that they would enjoy life as much as they can together, side by side. **

Story Creation
In class, create your story based on your teacher's directions. good story very original it is a very creative story edited by Anna 1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)? the story was good but the plot wasn-t really concrete, but it wasn-t that bad. 2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed? The character looked serious but it fits with the part she was in. 3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions? Their is dialogue and their is also discussion from one character to another. 4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story? This story makes me see reality because these thing happen often. 5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author? I think the story is well but everything happens very quikly especially the first four lines.
 * Starting - March 15 (2009)**